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Poetry, short story, and novels or novella reviews, but will review anything. I need the experience.
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for entry "Chapter Three" 
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi BIG BAD WOLF is hopping You are being reviewed by a member of The Paper Doll Gang!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: This chapter confused me just a bit, but was good. I think that Jack was tricking Jacob, but I can't be sure. I guess I will have to read on some more to fully understand this chapter. You did great with the punctuation, spelling, etc... It is perfect like all of the others. You are very good a getting that sort of thing down on paper correctly, which is not always an easy feat. It seems like no time at all has lapsed in this chapter. Like it took minutes for this chapter to run its course while the others took hours to days. Sometimes it does play out that way, but I wasn't sure if you knew that or not.

*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. It was reflective and felt a little dishonest towards the end. Like he was setting his cousin up for something. Doesn't make me like him any less because he has his reasons, but I wish I had that inside information.

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: You caused me to wonder and speculate.

*Flowery* Favorite part:"Oh but I am buddy," Jack said, with a chuckle. "This was how I played it for her."
He played the music for her the way she liked it no matter what others thought and I admire him for that. She would surely hear it and know that he was around and still loves her.

*ThumbsUp*Overall: I would recommend this to others

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.


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for entry "Chapter Two" 
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: It is getting even more interesting. I can't wait to move to the next chapter. I am sorry about it taking so long to move this far. I have been a little swamped, but I will make progress from here on out. This story is one that has caught my interest and has held it to be sure. .

*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. It was full of intrigue and suspicions.

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: I am getting excited about the big things that are about to happen in the book. The characters are so interesting and their skill level is so interesting as well. I can just imagine how they will battle it out.

*Flowery* Favorite part:"You boys don't know what you have here do you?" he asked. "Well let me tell you, this young man is a Witch Doctor."
A witch doctor! Well, you have it all in here don't you. This makes it just that much more interesting and to find out Jack's daughter is magical as well, but doesn't know it. I can just imagine what she would do if she found out. What she would do to her captor. I think I know what I would do to mine.

*ThumbsUp*Overall: I would recommend this to others

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see this problem. So what is the Matter. Matter is capitalized in the middle of a sentence.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there! "Gasp!" Hi Lynda Miller You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang and for the Auction for Rebecca's Contest Bank! *Blush*

*FlowerT* Personal Impression: It could have been a poem, yet it was too long for a poem, but it read like one. I loved it. It was from the butterflies perspective and it was sweet and honest. How long does a butterfly live anyway? I was hoping this would tell me, but it didn't.

*FlowerR*Tone & Mood: Happiness and joy. The butterfly was not a sad one even though it would soon die. It loved every second of life it had available. If humans were more like butterflies...

*FlowerP* Emotional Impact: This brought me joy because I love lady bugs and butterflies. They are my favorite in the animal kingdom. It brought me joy and happiness and understanding.

*Flowery* Favorite part: My, look at all the worms. They're so colorful in their green and white stripes. They don't know they will become a beautiful butterfly like me. They are ravenous and eating all of the milkweed leaves. You go little ones!

This is my favorite part because she speaks of the life that comes after hers and she is happy for them. Some of us are sad about the life that has to live in this world behind us, but butterflies don't know how bad the world is unless it affects their world as well and I am sure it doesn't unless we have destroyed their habitat.

and stuffed the cat in there.

*FlowerV* Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.

*Flowerw* Thanks for sharing this item! I love reviewing things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this poem. Please keep on writing more poems just like this!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there! "Gasp!" Hi Lynda Miller You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang and for the Auction for Rebecca's Contest Bank! *Blush*

*FlowerT* Personal Impression: Real good thyme scheme and flow. I like the way it flows down the page and finishes with a big bang, with him capturing the curious cat. Cats are curious by nature and you showed that in your poem. I think you captured it beautifully.

*FlowerR*Tone & Mood: It has a musical tone to it. Like it is a song and dance that you are humming along to and it has a nice big ending to it. I like songs like that or songs with a nice quiet ending. Either is nice for me and you did a great job with this little poem.

*FlowerP* Emotional Impact: It didn't so much as bring out emotion as it brought out the curious nature in all of us. Cats bring that out in us and this is about a curious cat. Of course it would lend itself to our curious nature.

*Flowery* Favorite part: I picked this because this is where the curious cat gets his for being so curious. It is a perfect ending to such a cute and musical poem.
He then took off his black hat

and stuffed the cat in there.

*FlowerV* Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi Lynda Miller You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang and for your winning bid at the Partner Up Benefit Auction!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: I am so happy that I read this piece because I am writing a war piece and needed some help. You just provided that encouragement and help without realizing it. You did a great job with dialogue and characterizations. You made them come alive on the page and feel real and that is what we strive for as writers. It is a short piece, but it doesn't have to be a long piece to make that happen. You have tremendous skill at writing and should be proud of yourself. I don't see a lot of short stories in your port though and you should have several with your skill at writing them.

*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. It was action packed. Exciting and Captivating.

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: I felt for the men and women over there. I was fearful for them and felt sorrow at their deaths. My son was in the military for a while and it is never easy to lose those young men and women to war.

*Flowery* Favorite part: I picked this part because it contained the American flag. I am a patriot and I love my country. I believe in the USA and our people. When you wrote about our flag on that tank I felt pride.

The Sargent ran to the scope and peered out. The tank had advanced far enough where he could see the United States flag waving in the air. Before he could say another word the tank stopped. Everyone held their breath. You could have heard a pin drop it was so quiet. They watched as the top opened.

*ThumbsUp*Overall: I would recommend this to others

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi Lynda Miller You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang and I am reviewing this piece because you won your bid in the Partner Up Benefit Auction!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: I was a little shocked at the turn of events. I was expecting a cute story about some kids getting into trouble about throwing eggs and I get murder instead. You did an excellent job of leading up to the moment of surprise, giving little clues that I see now as clear as day. I saw them before and questioned them and even wondered if his mother was in the can, but it really surprised me. He seemed like such a nice guy, but nice guys kill all the time don't they?

This was written well and you had strong characters with good, strong, and easy to follow dialogue. I never got confused or lost in the reading of the story. You could expand this story with more of a back story if you so chose to do that and it would still be great, but it is great the way it is as well, so that is up to you. I would like it either way.


*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. It had an easy going flow and mood. They seemed laid back and in a good mood. Deception was a major factor in the story though.

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: You caused me to think harder on clues given during a story. I read a book and try to think about what is being said or done and how that will impact the ending. This story is a prime example of needing to do that to figure out what is going on before you get to the end or you will be surprised.

*Flowery* Favorite part: I picked this because this is where she realizes the situation she is in and what her fate will be. Before you get to the next sentence in the story you know what will happen to her.
"Your mo...mo..mother!”

*ThumbsUp*Overall: I would recommend this to others

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.


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Review of Ricky  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi Kotaro } You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: The mentally unstable are a special set of people with special needs and this woman sure seemed to fit the bill. You can't tell that at first though that there is anything wrong because they just might be people that walk to the beat of their own drum, so to speak. You did a great job bringing her illness to life through the communication with a bird. It wasn't degrading in the way that you wrote it and I am thankful for that. I am bipolar, so mental illness is close to my heart and that is one reason I wanted to read this piece. It does, sometimes, end in blood shed though and that is the ugly truth of it.

I disagreed with your listing it under horror and scary at first because it didn't seem to fall under that category, but now that I have reread it, I believe it should go there because this situation is scary and when it happens, in real life, it will be a horror.

*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. It was scary and horrifying. The true cases like this are unsettling.

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: You caused me to wonder and speculate at first and then I started to figure it out towards the end. She had an illness.

*Flowery* Favorite part: Laura’s lawyer put the letter down and picked up the report from forensic. He reread the sentence stating the scent on Dave’s shirt was the same as the cologne on their bedroom dresser. He never found who had left the cage at their door, and neither could anyone ever get that parakeet to utter a word.


*ThumbsUp*Overall: I would recommend this to others

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.


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for entry "Chapter One" 
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Very interesting turn of events we have here. When you said you had a weird western I never thought it would be like this, but what an imagination you have and it is so well written. I am impressed.

The running dialog is good and easily understood and follow. The tools of the trade are found in the 1800's, so that is a plus, plus you have the tools that they have specially designed for the specific creatures that they are. It is all one great big special package.

You have a good start here. I can't wait to get into the rest of it and finish the rest of the chapters. I did wonder how the kids didn't recognize their own father though. That threw me just a bit, but they were traumatized, so that explains it and he was in another form.

I like that you are getting your point across without a lot of garbage language in it. A lot of writers these days, that I have noticed, use filler language (curse words, trash talk) to get more word count and to make their characters more expressive, but you have been able to make your characters expressive without all that and for that I have to give you a pat on that back and, if I could, six stars.
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Review of The Last Request  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi Lynda Miller } You are being reviewed by an ex-newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: Anything could happen in that little frame of words and it sure did here. I was expecting something completely different. I am glad I chose to review this piece because it is that something different that I like so much. It held my interest and showed great imagination. When he spoke about the bible he had me fooled. I thought he was a godly man, but he was a satanic man. He was following the laws of Satan out of the bible or was it a satanic bible? The story was not clear on that. I liked the story and it could be an even longer story if you so chose for it to be, but it is just fine the way it is. I really enjoyed it. It got the wheels in my head turning.

*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. It was deceitful and full of hate that he lead you to believe was love and acceptance. It really showed that you have what it takes to make it in today's world of writing. I am impressed.

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: You caused me to wonder and speculate. That is what we strive for as writers.

*Flowery* Favorite part: "You will be castrated from life today and no more ladies have to fear you," the Warden said.

*ThumbsUp*Overall: I would recommend this to others

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.


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Review of Why me?  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi Lynda Miller } You are being reviewed by an ex-newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: What a sad situation to find yourself in as a little boy trying to make friends. I know what he is talking about though because I had a team of girls pick on me for no other reason other than I was just the one that walked in the room. It ended in violence and I was the victor and that is the only reason it ended. I was scared to death though and I thought I'd be killed, so I fought back with all I had in me and won the fight. They went on to terrorize others, but left me and my friends alone for the rest of high school.

*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. Terror, pure terror is what this poor child faced and it showed through in your writing. I felt for the boy and wanted to do something to stop bullying once and for all.

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: You caused me to want to do something. A call to action. That is one thing we strive for as writers.

*Flowery* Favorite part: I was only trying to say Thanks in my own way.

*ThumbsUp*Overall: I would recommend this to others

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.


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Review of Freezing Cold  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Due to the piece being edited I have rereviewed the piece and have given it five starts. Way to go!
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Review of Freezing Cold  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi BIG BAD WOLF is hopping } You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: I think I'd throw the guy in as well. I don't think I could sit in ice cold water and freeze even to raise funds. The guy wanting to raise the funds should, at least, be in the water. I was expecting more of a life and death conversation. Like they were stuck in the wilderness and their boat sank or their four wheelers sank and they just had each other and were waiting on a team to come rescue them, but what you wrote was pretty funny.

*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. It was funny and I needed some fun in my life today. Thanks

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: Not much of an emotional impact per se', but I did laugh at the guy that got thrown in at the end.

*Flowery* Favorite part: Moments later, Joe and the others walked out, with their boss still screaming at them.


*ThumbsUp*Overall: I would recommend this to others

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. The only problem I saw was when you used what for want in this sentence.
“Why do you what to do that?” Joe asked.

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Review of Five Minutes  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi BIG BAD WOLF is hopping } You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: Anything could happen in that little frame of words and it did with yours. I know I say that a lot, but it so true with your story. I was blown away at the talent I read here today. Your imagination is off the charts. I am impressed. The five minutes and then death giving him more than the five minutes was touching. It wasn't an evil death then. It was just death. A fact that we all face. Even God sends a death angel down to take us ya know. I hate to think about it, but it happens and you did a great job of telling the story.

*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. It was reflective and honest. It showed tenderness, compassion, thoughtfulness, relief, determination, sadness, all kinds of feelings were mixed into this tone and mood. I can't place my finger on just one that I can say made the cut above the rest. They all played a role in making it happen. It revealed a lot in a few words.

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: You caused me to wonder and speculate. That is what we strive for as writers. I say this sometimes to, but I mean it more today than I normally mean it. You made me think of my own mortality and what death will do when my time here on earth is over and done with. If he will show mercy and give me just five more minutes to say goodbye.

*Flowery* Favorite part:
“Very well. Your five minutes was up anyways.”

*ThumbsUp*Overall: I would recommend this to others

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.


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Review of The Paper  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi Liam } You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: Anything could happen in that little frame of words and it sure did in this piece. I am impressed with your imagination. I have heard of talking cars, dogs, horses, and even sponge's, but not writing paper. I found your story interesting and a page turner for sure. You could go on with this, you know, and make a long story out of the journey of this paper. It would be most interesting indeed. I'd read it.

*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. He was just about running out of hope when this man appears with this note card that changed his life. It lead him to the love of his life. It gave him hope and I am sure he was appreciative of this card by then. So, the tone and mood was one of hope, thankfulness, appreciation, and glee at receiving all that he could hope for in his life that ever matters to a person. At least to me that is the case.

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: I wondered and speculated right along with him. I didn't see what this note card could do that could change his life. It could not bring him money, fame, or education, so what is there that is left that this card could do. Now I know what it can do. It can change your life in every way that you can imagine. Every best way you can imagine. I was cheering this man on. I was happy for him and was wondering when his time with the card would end and I see that it finally had to end. At least he got his everything first.

*Flowery* Favorite part:Over the next thirty years, he frequently checked the paper in the box – it was always blank. He and Laura raised three healthy children, two daughters and a son. They were happy and prosperous.


*ThumbsUp*Overall: I would recommend this to others

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.


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Review of LED BY A STAR  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there! "Gasp!" Hi SHERRI GIBSON }You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang! Also this is a gift review from your friend ~WhoMe???~ *Blush*

*FlowerT* Personal Impression: I feel so blessed to have read this. I have to thank ~WhoMe???~ for sending me over here to review your work because it has been a spiritually lifting experience. You understand the concept of Jesus' birth and are very talented to be able to put it into words like that. I believe you did a fabulous job.

*FlowerR*Tone & Mood: It is an excitable mood because this is what you would read to children or adults for Christmas. The tone is similar as well. Both excitable and wth a little melancholy mixed in.

*FlowerP* Emotional Impact: Poems are suppose to bring out emotion and yours brought out such emotion in me remembering my Saviors birth and having it told like that. I love the Lord, Jesus with all my heart and soul, so this is just up my ally to read. I felt awe, and wonder. Excitement and a bit of melancholy as well reading this. Thanks for writing it. .

*Flowery* Favorite part:of the Son they knew born to be King,

*FlowerV* Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.

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Review of Creativity  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there! "Gasp!" Hi Rayyna }You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang! *Blush*

*FlowerT* Personal Impression: Great piece of work. I enjoyed it and I learned some new words today and I always enjoy learning new words. You did a great job putting this together and it flowed nicely. Your imagination is beautiful. You showed what it takes for a writer to write a piece of work. It show imagery which I love to see in a piece.

*FlowerR*Tone & Mood: The mood seem to be reflecting upon something. Maybe your own writing or that of a peer. The tone is witty and a little melancholy.

e:FlowerP} Emotional Impact: Poems are suppose to bring out emotion and yours did for me. It brought a need to write and make it count for something. I feel like writing something beautiful and sharing it with the world. Thank you.

*Flowery* Favorite part:
It is a cornucopia of whispers that spark with interest

*FlowerV* Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.

*Flowerw* Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this poem. Please keep on writing more poems just like this!


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Review of Botttomless souls  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there! "Gasp!" Hi Lourtney }You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang! *Blush*

*FlowerT* Personal Impression: You have made this interesting. I like the design of it. It reads well and it has a great story to tell. You did a great job with this piece. There are some issues with flow a little bit, but not much. I would read it aloud to myself and then you will see what I am talking about. It can trip you up if you are not careful. You may not be able to tell it since it is your work, but to a reader that has never seen it before it can be tricky.

*FlowerR*Tone & Mood: Definitely a warning mood through out. It is shouting at you to pay attention. I like the mood and tone of this piece. I paid attention.

*FlowerP* Emotional Impact: Poems are suppose to bring out emotion and this one brought out emotion. Not like the tears overflowing kind of emotion, but a heart pounding kind of emotion that gets your attention. It is a good piece.

*Flowery* Favorite part:only violence, war and hatred surround

*FlowerV* Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see a couple of problems with spelling. Like sould should be soul and mistake should be mistakes.

*Flowerw* Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this poem. Please keep on writing more poems just like this!


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Review of Wintertide  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi there! "Gasp!" Hi Brendan }You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang! *Blush*

*FlowerT* Personal Impression: Definitely a suffering lover here. I got tongue twisted a couple of times and I think you are missing a couple of commas, but other than that you did a great job with it. It flows great and sounds great. It is a sorrowful poem that will bring out emotion in people. A few things to consider here: A sorrow unyielding shrouds my torn heart. ( I think it would sound better if you switch around sorrow and unyielding) Our winter arrives, not a moment to late (should be, too)

*FlowerR*Tone & Mood: Sorrowful, mournful, sad, suffering soul. You kept this theme up through out, so that is good. You didn't yo yo with your mood and tone.

*FlowerP* Emotional Impact: Poems are suppose to bring out emotion and yours brought out sadness and sorrow.

*Flowery* Favorite part:Love once potent can no longer be found

*FlowerV* Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I noted the problems I saw above.

*Flowerw* Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this poem. Please keep on writing more poems just like this!


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi Belial } You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: I enjoyed reading this and I am now curious. I am curious to know what denomination this falls under or what religion it falls under. Who is Azima, Qingu, Samael, Hromi, Daba, and Aeshma? Where do they come from and how are they being used. This would be much more interesting if it were explained a bit. It is interesting in and of itself, but most people are not going to know squat about it and, as writers, we are naturally curious people. We have a need to know about stuff like this. I am sure you will get a lot of reviews for this item. I could not resist, but I felt disappointed because there was no explanations for any of it.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi Arktic-Rage } You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: Anything could happen in that little frame of words and it sure did in your story. I feel like I've just been to an auction and I've bought something priceless. This story is going places. I love it. It has some issues with getting the reader a little mixed up in a couple of places, but it is a great story and you have a great hook. I would tear into this thing and not let go of it until you have a good solid story out of it, maybe even a book. There is something about strangers meeting like that and helping each other heal.

*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. It was reflective and honest. It revealed a lot in a few words.

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: You caused me to wonder and speculate. That is what we strive for as writers.

*Flowery* Favorite part:His name slipped off her tongue like honey.

“Shepard…”

*ThumbsUp*Overall: I would recommend this to others

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.


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Review of All about a dog  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi vallath007 } You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: What an endearing story. I loved it. What it lacked in the beginning was a hook. I was a little bored with it and it only hooked me middle part ways when you introduced your dog. I think you could shrink down that bit about the family to one short paragraph and make the rest about the dog. Put in more stories about the dog.

*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. It was funny and quirky. It revealed a lot in a few words.

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: You caused me to oooh and awe at that puppy and the family. That is what we strive for as writers.

*Flowery* Favorite part:With Berry around there was never a dull moment in their life anymore.


Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this.There are errors there and you can say it out loud to yourself and pick up most of them. I normally list them, but yours are so simple that you will be able to pick them up. If you don't see it just let me know and I'll list them for you.


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Review of Yours and Mine  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there! "Gasp!" Hi Chloe Lynam }You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang! *Blush*

*FlowerT* Personal Impression: My first impression was that it is a nice, sweet poem about love. Then I seen these references to the devil and his power over this love and how his power is more powerful than your love is. I don't know if you meant for it to come across that way, but it does. I see that you, maybe, meant for your love to be more powerful than the devil. Isn't that what we all want? I do. If this is the case you might want to rework some of the words like:

the love we share
the burdens we bear
cannot ever compare
to the devil's snare

Into something like:

The love we share
The burdens we bear
The devil's snare
Will never impair

*FlowerR*Tone & Mood: Your tone seemed witty and light, yet serious. Your mood was sentimental and had a hint of sorrowfulness to it due to the devil's schemes.

*FlowerP* Emotional Impact: A little wistful and makes you happy then sad due to the devil's schemes. It worries you. It is a rollercoaster of emotions, but poems are suppose to bring out emotion..

*Flowery* Favorite part:this love so fair
for our souls sake

*FlowerV* Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems other than nothing is capitalized, but you may have set it up that way on purpose for emphasis. Poems are set up In all manner of ways to bring out their beauty and you did a great job with this one.

*Flowerw* Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this poem. Please keep on writing more poems just like this!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there! "Gasp!" Hi AngieM }You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang! *Blush*

*FlowerT* Personal Impression: I loved it. It is a beautiful poem about love. I can't tell you if you wrote it just right, but I can tell you that it sounded great. The rhyme and timing on it sounds great and the rhythm has a nice beat to it.

*FlowerR*Tone & Mood: It has a fanciful mood to it and a light and cheerful tone to it. I enjoyed it very much.

*FlowerP* Emotional Impact: It made me smile and made me happy. It has a lively tune to it, so it makes me feel good. Poems are suppose to bring out emotion.

*Flowery* Favorite part:Molded by God's hands from clay to birth.

*FlowerV* Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.

*Flowerw* Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this poem. Please keep on writing more poems just like this!


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Review of High Seas  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi there! "Gasp!" Hi Brian Thomas }You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang! *Blush*

*FlowerT* Personal Impression: It sounds more like musical lyrics than poetry to me, but poetry can be lyrics. I think you did a great job on it. You have a rollercoaster of emotion in it. You are down on your luck, but you have high hopes.

*FlowerR*Tone & Mood: Your tone is a matter-of-a-fact kind of tone. You are not being too sad about it like most people would be or dramatic like others, but you are just being a matter-of-a-fact about it all.

*FlowerP* Emotional Impact: It is matter-of-a-fact, but it is emotional to the reader. The reader feels your pain even if you want to be macho and not cry about it. No one wants to cry about their situation, so don't feel bad about that. Poems are suppose to bring out emotion so be proud of that.

*Flowery* Favorite part:Now I see the shore, our family's out there standing.

*FlowerV* Grammar/Punctuation: The grammar is rough English. It is in no way polished English. I don't think the poem would be what it is if you changed it though. Good job..

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi there! *PoseyR* "Gasp!" Hi GeminiGem of House Lannister } You are being reviewed by a newbie and a member of The Paper Doll Gang!*Blush*

*ThumbsUp*Personal Impression: What a wonderful story of love that lasted through the good times and the bad. I hated reading how the families would not accept the others choice of bride and groom. That still happens so much these days and it isn't fair because you can't help who you fall in love with.

*ThumbsUp* Tone & Mood: Great tone and mood. It was reflective and honest. It revealed a lot in a few words. You wrote very smoothly with no hiccups. The mood you set was nostalgic and a little melancholy. You did a great job.

*ThumbsUp* Emotional Impact: You caused me awe and ooh over the pictures and the love story. That is what we strive for as writers, to get readers interested enough to become active in the book. They can cheer you on, boo you, or become a character themselves by putting themselves in the place of one of your characters. I like it when that happens.

*Flowery* Favorite part: When they both became American citizens. I do wish she would have kept her real name though. It is beautiful.

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see no problems.

*ThumbsUp*Summary: You did a great job putting this together. I loved it and I know your grandparents have to love this tribute to them. Thank you for sharing it.

*ThumbsUp*Overall: I would recommend this to others

*PoseyP*Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this story. It opened up my mind and caused me to think harder about certain aspects of life.

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