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Review by Geoff Cain
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow! This is really good! You could be the next Tom Clancy or Ian Fleming! The only reason I gave you a 4.5 was because you have some grammar and spelling errors. Other than that, excellent job!
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Review by Geoff Cain
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is written well; however, I would recommend
developing the characters a bit more (this can
probably be accomplished by making the story
longer). By doing this, the reader would become
emotionally involved with them and their death
would be more meaningful.

Also, you have too much dialogue. Try to add some
imagery and description. This will create a more
convincing atmosphere.

The action and dialogue are excellent as they are,
however.

This is a good story. You should write more like
this.
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Review by Geoff Cain
Rated: E | (5.0)
All I can say is, hilarious!
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