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Review of Sacrifice  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello This is the first Review in your "Invalid Item party.


My Thoughts: This is a great story. It has the feel of a prologue to me.

My Favorite Part: Would have to be the first scene . it just seems to have more effort put into it.

My Suggestions: Would be to put some more detail in to the second scene especially around the fairy queen.

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Review of Edge  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello warriormom This is the third and final Review in your "Invalid Item party.

My Thoughts: this is again a great poem.

My Favorite Part: the first stanza i just thought that it was more poetic.

My Suggestions: sorry but as with the other two I have no way to improve this.

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Review of Absence of Time  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello warriormom This is the second Review in your "Invalid Item party.



My Thoughts: My friend in this poem you have reached the perfection that you search for. And yes the flow did mimic the ebb and flow of the waves.

My Favorite Part: It would have to be the middle to stanza's but only barely.

My Suggestions: I have none again this is truly perfection.

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Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E
Hello warriormom This is the first Review in your "Invalid Item party.


My Thoughts: This is a great story. It is impossible to be perfectly honest as a friend once told me one can not never tell a lie I know he has bad grammar. but anyway I do understand your drive for perfection . although being the first born son in a group of 6 I never had the attention problem. I have always striven for perfection because if your not going to do something right then what is the point in doing it at all.

My Favorite Part: I honestly can't pick one part that's better than another part.

My Suggestions: I have none great job.

Write On!!



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Review of PERFECT GIFTS  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello dogpack:saving 4 premium: DWG This is the third and final Review in your "Invalid Item party.

My Thoughts: This is a great piece, witch makes me wonder how it got such a low rating. The only thing I could figure out is that people must be lowering the rating because it is advertising your raffle.

My Favorite Part: I can't pick one part that's better than the other.

My Suggestions: Would be to work on your flow it was a little choppy.

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Review of To Write A Poem  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello dogpack:saving 4 premium: DWG This is the second Review in your "Invalid Itemparty.


My Thoughts: this is a great poem. I have seen a lot of poems about writing a style of poetry but this is the first one I have seen on the righting of poetry as a hole.

My Favorite Part: Would have to be how well you made what you feel go in to this piece.

My Suggestions: would be to work on your flow. the one word line's are what harm it this time.

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Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello dogpack:saving 4 premium: DWG This is the first Review in your "Invalid Item party.


My Thoughts:this is a great piece. I can't believe that writing poetry is the challenge for you that you say it is, not after reading this.

My Favorite Part: would have to be the last two stanza's i thought that they where the most poetically written.

My Suggestions: your flow needs a little work on stanza two but other than that I found nothing.

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Review of Blinded Measures  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse This is the third and final Review in your "Invalid Item party.


My Thoughts: this is a great poem.

My Favorite Part: I can't decided there's not one part that's better than the other.

My Suggestions: Again sorry but I have no way to improve this.

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Review of Stuck Inside  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse This is the second Review in your "Invalid Itemparty.

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My Thoughts: this is a great poem.

My Favorite Part: would have to be the first two stanza's.

My Suggestions: Your flow needs work on the last stanza and "admiration" doesn't rhyme with "in"

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Review of A SCARY IMAGE  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse This is the first Review in your "Invalid Item

My Thoughts: This is a great poem how people have became more relied on pills to do things than we are relied opon our themselves.

My Favorite Part: Would have to be the final stanza.

My Suggestions: Sorry but I have no way to improve this piece.

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Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello sunnystarr This is the first out of six Reviews in your "Invalid Item party.


My Thoughts: This is a great poem, your visual was amazing I could actually see the rosebuds.

My Favorite Part: Would have to be the second stanza.

My Suggestions: You need to work on your flow in the first stanza It gets a little choppy at times.

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Review of Stake Deal  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ This is the third and final Review in your "Invalid Item party


My Thoughts: this is a good poem, although I never though of poker players as merchants.

My Favorite Part: with lune's there just isn't enough space to choose from.

My Suggestions: I have none great job.

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Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is the second Review in your "Invalid Item party

This is a great piece. your flow on the second stanza was off I would try to find a way to cut down on the amount of syllables.
Your imagery was great and i enjoyed the comedic value of the piece great job

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Review of One Word  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello LdyPhoenix This is the third and final review in your "Invalid Item party

My Thoughts: this is an interesting story about the struggles that someone can go though trying to say what they feel.

My Favorite Part: the first part it was the best written of the hole story.

My Suggestions: i have none great job.

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Review of Black and White  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello LdyPhoenix this is the second review in your "Invalid Item party

My Thoughts: This was a great piece. you made where you stand on the matter of race very clear.

My Favorite Part: Would have to be the first stanza it had the best flow and was the most poetic.

My Suggestions: On the third stanza your flow fell in its quality . i would break the last line into to different lines to fix your flow.

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Review of What You Wish For  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello LdyPhoenix this is the first review in your "Invalid Item

My Thoughts: This is a great piece, it has the feel of a prologue and I wish it was .

My Favorite Part: Would have to be when the mask took over Lucian.

My Suggestions: Would be to put some more detail in to the mask's.

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Review of Seeing Clearly  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Sticktalker This is the third and last Review in your "Invalid Item Party
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My Thoughts: this is a great story. and brown can look like purple who new.

My Favorite Part: would have to be the way he reacted when he could see out of his new eye again.

My Suggestions: i have none sorry.

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Review by wolf knight
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Sticktalker This is the second Review in your "Invalid Item Party
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My Thoughts: this is a interesting story. your imagination shines though clear in this piece.

My Favorite Part: is the scene in-between the boy and the rabbit.

My Suggestions: it needs just the slightest more detail in the decryption of the rabbit.

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Review of The Tick Tock Cat  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Sticktalker This is the first Review in your "Invalid Item party

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My Thoughts: are that one Katrina is one of the oddest cat i have ever heard of. and Two i have to read your story on you trying to walk a cat.

My Favorite Part: would have to be the part about Katrina and pink balloons.

My Suggestions: i have none, great job.

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Review by wolf knight
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Happy Spring This is the third and final Review in your "Invalid Item party


My Thoughts: this is a great story. your imagery was magnificent

My Favorite Part: would have to be what a fire flower turned out to be

My Suggestions: i have none. great job.

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Review of He Sits  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Turtle ~ KanyáthƐko:wa:h

My Thoughts: this is a great story, you really made the old man seem real. and i agree with the first idea of why he sits there.

My Favorite Part: the hole thing i can't pick any part of this that is better then any other part.

My Suggestions: i have none, great job.
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Review of defeat  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello lee

this is a great poem and while I don't agree with the idea that defeat is something that harms,after all without defeat we can never learn. You don't learn anything through winning. You made your point very clear and you wrote a perfect poem.
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Review of Knights at Night  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello john33xyz

My Thoughts: this is a great poem your frustration at the knights really came out in this piece. your need to get away from realty at the beginning provides a nice contrast to the need for realty at the end.

My Favorite Part: would have to be the third stanza the naive idea that being Surrounded by beauty would protect anyone from a here Surrounded by beauty knight.

My Suggestions: Your flow on stanza 8 and 12 needs some work.

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Review by wolf knight
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello Prosperous Snow Valentine

My Thoughts: Is that this is a interesting idea for a poem, normally when you think Halloween poems you think of all the different common costumes not a poem that just focus's on one or two. you stuck to your poem form well.

My Favorite Part: would have to be the werewolves of course I have been obsessed with werewolves for five years so that's not surprising.

My Suggestions: your flow could use some help on the first quatrain but other than that great job.

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Review of Dinner Out  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Jeff

My Thoughts: Are that the lady's taste buds are shot, the waiter was trying to cover up that the food was bad and the three hundred fifty dollars I have no idea why they got three hundred fifty dollars.

My Favorite Part: was the fact that when the food sucked she wanted to go back when she never wanted to go back to the good restaurant

My Suggestions: their is only one thing that I found that might be wrong. I don't think there are any three hundred fifty dollar bills.

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