|It's a nice story. The dialogue feels pretty natural and you pace it well. You also do well with introducing the scene and the characters. I enjoy stories with a little philosophical discussion, much like Mary and Peter had about the Mary's of history. I do wonder though if the story would have more of a kick if you cut out the Simon part.“You can call me Simon, but most everyone calls me Pete. It’s a long story that one, from way before you were born.” The second he said this, my brain guessed that if she wasn't dead, she was close to it. For those who don't know a lot about Christianity, it probably wouldn't be such a dead giveaway, but you never know who your reader will be. I also wonder if you could insert a little more fear/anxiety into Mary when Pete says certain things. For example, “I know the history of every living being. Call it an occupational hazard, if you will.” Maybe after--'I blinked, not understanding what Pete meant by his statement.' You could add something like, 'My eyes darted around me again, is this man possibly insane? If I called for help, would anyone hear me?' Then maybe she is reassured by his eyes or something and decides he might be a librarian, an eccentric librarian. Anyway, it was a good read. Thank you.