|Captivating story. I really like the flow – the description of the beach, the slow building of suspense, venturing into the storm, the death scene, and moving to the calm serene conclusion.
The introductory paragraphs provide a good description of the setting, and makes the reader feel part of the beach.
I picked out a few specifics that caught my attention; I hope it is of some value. Well done, I certainly enjoyed it – keep it up.
This is a powerful and descriptive paragraph with good analogies: “As most writers will attest, there are times when the words just won't come. At those times the writer stands with his nose to a brick wall and all attempts to press forward results only in a bloodied nose. Some writers claim the ‘muse' has left them--hogwash! Dan contended there was no such thing as a ‘muse' on which to blame one's non-production. He believed his lack of inspiration to be more like a forest fire where all the available fuel has been gobbled up by the greedy flames--totally exhausted and barren. Sometimes the words were simply gone—all used up. To get them back required a new source of words. To Dan this meant a new environment--new inspiration. As a result, he came to this seaside paradise to find new words.”
The following passage feels out of place, and inconsistent with the rest of the powerful writing; as if it were part of a real estate brochure. Also it converts to the present tense making it feel more out of place.“The open area concept includes a small but complete kitchen and breakfast nook and spacious living area. A hallway off of the living area led to the two bedrooms and bathrooms.”
Perhaps an overuse of adverbs: quickly (several times), instantly (several times), rhythmically, unusually, apparently, casually, alternately, simply, noticeably, cautiously, etc. I try to avoid adverbs if possible and see if I can find a stronger and more precise verb.
“The next few days were spent in a fervor of creativity” I try to avoid the passive voice.
There were some places where the words used appeared weak, relative to the surrounding strong writing: “he was a bit perturbed”; “his voice became a tad bit more serious”