This was beautifully written. The rhythm and flow work together very well, and the imagery and use of words really put together the emotion of this poem. I really enjoyed reading this and do not have any suggestions for improvement. Keep up the great writing!
I love this! The ending is awesome. The descriptions - well, let's just say I felt like I was right there in that Ford Escape with you! I love the twist of your wife's affections being taken by Burt, but Burt isn't human. This was well-written and easy to read and picture exactly what's going on...Keep up the great writing!
I love the rhythm and flow of this poem. The rhythm and rhyme scheme work well together. I love poems that speak of love and in this poem, you can definitely feel the love that you are trying to express. Great job on this poem and keep up the wonderful writing.
"One day this man didn't disagreed with a comment I made and became very verbal about it."
This sentence tripped me up...did he disagree with a comment you made and become verbal or did he agree with your comment?
Other than that, I believe this was a well-written piece about how our past can affect us after many years. While my dad wasn't an alcoholic, he was very abusive - and boy has that affected me over the years - and it's been 25 years!
Thank you for being willing to share your experience.
B.M. Ray
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