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Review of My Father's Hands  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a beautiful tribute to your father. The rhythm and flow worked very well together. I really felt the love in this poem. Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of Trapped  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed reading this. Rhythm and flow seemed alright. I have felt this way (in fact, am feeling it now with a poem I am working on.) Keep up the great writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of Crazy in Love  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was beautiful - and you are right in your intro - even those who are ill can love! Great job! I really enjoyed this! I didn't see any issues with rhythm or flow. Keep writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of January 1, 2017  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
"I all that I meet, all year, far and near."

This sentence didn't make sense to me. Was wondering if you meant to say "In all that I meet, all year, far and near."

Other than that, the flow and rhythm and rhyme of this poem work very well. I enjoyed reading this, and you impart a very important lesson of January 1 being only a date, and what's important is what we do with the spirit of the new year.

Keep up the wonderful writing,

B.M. Ray
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Review of Tickle Torture  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
The rhythm and flow of this poem work beautifully together with the rhyme. I remember those days of being tortured by my brothers...Fond memories now that I am older. Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of The Jester  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is sad and tragic. It drew me in - I wanted to keep reading. Your imagery, your thoughts painted a picture in my mind. Wonderfully written. Thank you for sharing!

B.M. Ray
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was beautiful! I love the ending. Rhythm, flow and rhyme all worked together to make this an easy poem to read. And, I'm sure we can all relate to having to get a gift for someone we deem less than desirable. I love the way this shows how God can work through our circumstances to restore what we thought was lost forever. Keep up the great writing!

B.M. Ray
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this! I believe this may be one of the best ones I've read yet. Rhythm and flow are perfect. Rhyme works really well. I could actually picture the scene as if I was the one looking out the windowpane. Keep up all the wonderful writing! As long as you write, I will read!

B.M. Ray
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Review of Missing  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is sad. I could feel the despair as I read this. Rhythm and flow seem to go together really well. Great job. Keep up writing!

B.M. Ray
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for entry "Dear Me (2017)
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I love this! You have so much planned out and even a plan on how you will accomplish those goals! Great job!

B.M. Ray
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Review of The Toymaker  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I could actually picture this scene taking place. You did very well on this, and you paint a beautiful picture with your words. I enjoyed this piece, and did not see anything that needed to be addressed or that distracted from this writing. Keep up the great writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of Among The Poplars  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was beautiful! I could really picture the scene and feel the air as I read through this. The rhythm and flow were perfect (as usual with your poetry.) You painted a beautiful picture with your words, and I could see the poplars. Great job and keep writing! I look forward to reading more!

B.M. Ray
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Review of Letter To GOD  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this! This was well written. I saw no grammatical, punctuation or spelling issues that would distract from the message of this. Your heartfelt prayers are so well thought out and I know that God heard your heart when you wrote this. God bless you, thank you for sharing and keep up the wonderful writing!
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Review of Sin  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I love the way you have laid out the sins in this poem! The rhythm and flow as well as the rhyme scheme do well together in this piece! Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of " Creation "  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This may be short, but it is beautiful. Nothing here needs to change at all! I love the way you eloquently put that God's works are all around us - they are! This captures that so well. And when we truly look, we will see His hand in everything. I also love the image you put with this poem - it truly reflects the work of His hands. Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of Daffodil Dreams  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was short and sweet, but I could see the beauty you describe. The rhythm, flow and rhyme worked very well together. You definitely have a talent for being able to paint a picture with your words. I truly enjoy reading your works. Keep up the wonderful writing and I will keep reading!

B.M. Ray
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Review of The Promise  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
The horrors of this world are real, and you capture that so well in this piece. I cried as I read it. The pain, the horror. It's sad that many of us do not think of the suffering in other parts of the world while we are yet so blessed. The only suggestion that I have is to go over and double check your paragraph spacing and make sure that they are all equal. Other than that, this is a beautifully written journal of the truth of what others in Zimbabwe are suffering on a daily basis. Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love the message of this poem. The rhythm and flow work really well and I could truly sense the emotions in this poem. Great job! Keep up the wonderful writing and I look forward to reading more of your works!

B.M. Ray
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This flowed really well. The rhyme scheme worked out beautifully. I only have one suggestion...and as we know, it's just a suggestion...In the 3rd stanza, you write:

"shade's where, I want to be," Should there really be a comma after the word "where?" I believe it threw off the rhythm of that stanza just a bit.

Other than that, you did really great. I could actually sense the heat and the incoming storm.

Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of Fish Breath Gum  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I absolutely love this! It was hilarious, but I bet if someone could actually invent this product, they would make a killing! And the very last part about Kathy turning and asking her mom about that hot date with the bad breath? That was priceless! I saw no grammatical, punctuation or spelling issues that needed to be addressed. Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of My Beloved  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Beautiful poem! I loved reading this. I only have one suggestion, and it's just that...a suggestion from an amateur poet.

"At Once I stopped my lamentations; I felt His love on me;" Does the O in the word once need to be capitalized for some reason?

Other than that, the rhythm and flow of this piece was great and the emotion you portray is felt all throughout.

Keep up the wonderful writing and God bless!

B.M. Ray
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Review of Slipped Away  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was short and sweet. Your words painted a picture in my mind. The rhythm and flow worked great together. I really enjoyed reading this. I could feel the emotion as I read this poem. I love reading your poems! Keep up the wonderful writing! I will keep reading!

B.M. Ray
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Review of The Keep  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Beautifully written. The rhythm, the flow and the rhyme all work together wonderfully to make this poem easy to read. The imagery again painted a picture with your words. I could also relate to the darkness this poem relates. Great job - keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of " The Ceiling "  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your imagery is beautiful. You definitely paint a picture with your words. The rhythm and flow, as well as rhyme work wonderfully together, to make this an easy read. I enjoyed this, and as well, I could relate to the emotion behind this poem. Keep up the wonderful writing - I look forward to reading even more.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed reading this. It was well-written, and I saw no grammatical, spelling or punctuation issues that detract from this piece. You mention that you didn't realize that the fortune could have meant your luck going from good to better. What did you mean by this? An explanation of this might help here. I can relate to not putting much stock in the fortunes in fortune cookies, but I also admire the fact that it wasn't the fortune itself that ruined your outlook, but rather the fact that you overlooked God's blessings after reading it. Sometimes we do that more than we should. Keep up the great writing and Happy New Year!

B.M. Ray
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