This was great! I enjoyed reading the conversation between your friends and you about the supposed downfalls of WDC. However, as a fellow WDC-er, I must say I disagree with their point of view. This was a bit on the humorous side as well. Keep up the great writing, and pay no mind to the non-WDCers!
Wow! What a powerful poem. You capture the essence of a soldier, fate unknown until the very end. This tribute to the "Unknown Soldier" is stunning. It is well written. The rhythm, flow and dialogue all work together in unison. Keep up the wonderful writing!
This was well written, and tells the story of not being able to come up with something to write. Your rhythm and flow were great, and the rhyme worked out well. I have written from time to time about not being able to come up with anything good to write, but you captured that extremely well in this. Keep up the great writing!
This was very well written. It was easy to read but packed with useful information and examples. I loved reading the different types of endings. The advice you give in this short article, along with examples given - it's very good. I really needed this advice. Keep up the great writing.
Okay, the ending of this was just plain out freaky. But I loved it. I enjoyed reading about this mirror and how Doris came to own it. My only suggestion is to add something that shows where Doris went when she fell "into" the mirror - I was expecting shattered glass all over the place, but nope. Great job on this. Keep up the great writing!
This was a beautiful tribute to a lost love. The rhythm and flow were spot-on. I felt the joy when you fell in love at the beginning of this poem, and I could feel the heartache and sorrow as I read through this. You did a wonderful job of expressing yourself in this. Great job. Keep up the great writing!
As I was reading this, it took on two different meanings for me - I'm not sure if this was intentional or not, but either way, it worked well. The first was an old, faded piece of clothing. But then my mind (as if often does) wandered and made me think about life and how we can feel like this sometimes. This was beautifully done. Keep up the great writing!
Okay, I know this was from 2013, but I loved it anyway! I love how you have a system to divide up your time, and the rewards for achieving your goals. I only wish I had the self-discipline to do something like this. This was also well-written, and I saw no issues that needed to be addressed. Keep up the great writing!
What a beautiful letter to your mom. I love the way you intertwined the fact that you knew your mom wasn't perfect, but that you loved her and as you got older, you understood. I'm sure your mom is proud of who you have become. I saw nothing in this that needed to be addressed. It flowed well, and it kept me wanting to read more. Keep up the great writing!
There is a deep message in this poem. You did a wonderful job of describing what you live each and every day. My favorite part is the line, "Hate must truly die." This hit home for me - hate needs to be dead. I saw no issues with this poem. The rhythm and flow were spot on, and your rhyme worked out really great. Keep up the great writing.
This had a great rhythm and flow to it. I enjoyed reading this poem. I could feel the cold of winter, see the frost in the air and see blankets of snow outside a window. Great job. You have a knack for painting pictures with your words. Keep up the wonderful writing!
This was a very interesting quiz. I did worse than I thought I would, but the questions you asked are awesome....really gets a person thinking. Thanks for a much-needed review and lesson in the real Christmas. Keep on educating all of us and keep writing!
This was very well written. The rhythm and flow were spot-on. I love the imagery you used - I could see in my mind all of the beautiful pictures you painted with your words. I love the way you used the alphabet to start each line in this poem! Keep up the great writing!
This was a very good poem on the problem of motion sickness that often comes with riding a ferris wheel. The rhythm and flow worked really well, and I could feel the motion sickness from the pit of my stomach as I read. Great job on this - keep up the wonderful writing!
This was a beautiful tribute to the soldiers who fight day in and day out - whether on foreign soil or back here at home. I loved the rhythm and flow of this, and the rhyme really worked well. Throughout this poem, you make one thing clear - the price these soldiers pay proves over and over that these freedoms we enjoy are not free. Very well done! Keep up the great writing!
This was well-written. I could picture the couple arguing, riding in the car through a desolate town. The scene at the cemetery intrigued me. This story did leave me wondering how Kimberly died. Other than that, you did a wonderful job painting a picture of the scene with your words. Keep writing!
I love this! You have sprinkled in humor as you "instruct" other men in how to get along with their wives. The rhythm and flow were spot-on. I love how "she lets me say, Yes, dear" is the last line of the poem - it adds a final bit of humor. Great job and keep up the wonderful writing!
What a poem full of memories and wisdom. Your rhythm and flow were spot-on. I enjoyed reading about how things "used to be." It's kinda sad that your poem has such a true ring to it about greed. I love the ending, though. Great job - Keep up the great writing!
This was a beautiful picture painted with words. You did an excellent job with this. I saw no issues with rhythm and flow. I can actually see the sun setting through barren trees and casting a blue light on the snow. Great job - keep up the wonderful writing!
I love this! I love how you relate revision to a doctor who can see the broken bones. Yes, revision is necessary - but not necessarily evil, and you point this out very well in this. I love how you mention the reviews here on WDC as well...and how you mention that an error that is found by an outsider is not a slap in the face but an opportunity to look again with a fresh perspective. Keep up the great writing!
I loved reading this. The rhythm and flow were spot-on. I could actually picture the flowers floating and smell the aroma of fresh spring blooms. Great job! I could see barren branches bursting with life. I love how you added information about the form and the meanings of the words in the last stanza...for those of us who are unfamiliar with forms and don't have a vast vocabulary, this definitely helped. Keep up the great writing!
This was a very informative article, and very well-written. You make so many good points about what one can do when they are anxious. I have used many of these techniques. I only have one suggestion. I would suggest that you make the font bigger - a point size of 12 or higher - the fact that the text was so small did make this a bit difficult for my older eyes to read. Other than that, great job and keep up the wonderful writing!
This was an interesting poem. The rhythm and flow were great. I could actually envision someone plucking hairs out one by one. You did a great job painting a picture with your words. I enjoyed reading this. Keep up the wonderful writing. One tip - if this is based on truth, after you get done plucking, try using a coconut-oil based body lotion to help your skin. Write on,
The rhythm and flow of this poem is wonderful. The rhyme scheme works well and helps the flow. I can feel the love for this person as I read through this. You paint a beautiful picture with your words. You really did a great job on this poem. Keep up the wonderful writing!
What a wonderful tribute to the heroes of war that never get noticed! So many times we only see the ones who are on the front lines, but your poem highlights that there are those who are needed behind the scenes. Your rhythm and flow were spot-on, and I enjoyed reading this! Keep up the great writing!
Rhoswen
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