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Review of Email  
Rated: E | (4.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
not bad actually, I certainly know the feeling. good poem.


SUGGESTIONS:
line structure. there is something about the line structure that bothers me, perhaps if you experiment a bit. may be bring it all together as one thought, no line breaks I mean. Or spaces between the lines.


WHAT I LIKED MOST:
you speak and convey a universal truth.


SUMMARY:
good first draft.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
don't know why, but something about this poem reminds me of the desert.


SUGGESTIONS:
this poem feels unfinished to me.


WHAT I LIKED MOST:
the rhyme scheme.


SUMMARY:
great first draft.

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Review of Child's Play  
Rated: E | (4.5)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

Overall Impressions:
I thought you did a great job in comparing the youth to the old. This is diffidently the circle of life.


Suggestions:
This is just me, but I was not crazy about the colors.


What I Liked Most:
How you transitioned to childhood to youth.


Summary:
Great job>

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Review of I Tried  
Rated: E | (3.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
sounds like you can't do anything right. Sounds more like the apology poem.


SUGGESTIONS:
Again, I would elaborate a bit more.


WHAT I LIKED MOST:
you are starting with a good concept, just take it a little further.


SUMMARY:
Again, first good draft.

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Rated: E | (3.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
This sounds to me like someone getting up in the morning with a bad hangover. Not that I have not been there before myself, of course I could be wrong. There seems to be, including myself at times, poems written about how much we dislike our selves. I think, as a poet we slowly start to change and become more positive.


SUGGESTIONS:
perhaps being more explicit about what you do not like about yourself.


WHAT I LIKED MOST:
The Anaphora at the beginnings of lines.


SUMMARY:
good first draft.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
I know about pain and how frustrating it can be trying to explain this to doctors who claim I am med seeking. I thought you did a great job with this poem.


SUGGESTIONS:
none.


WHAT I LIKED MOST:
i thought the poem flowed very well, and I loved the rhyme scheme - nothing seemed forced.


SUMMARY:
BRAVO!

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Review of I WISH, I WISH  
Rated: E | (5.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
it never occurred to me that you did not celebrate thanksgiving in Australia. You made me quite hungry just reading this wonderful poem, and I would say that you have a better grasp of what thanksgiving is all about then some of the people here.


SUGGESTIONS:
None.


WHAT I LIKED MOST:
your mouth watering description of food.


SUMMARY:
Bravo!

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Review of Morning Dream  
Rated: E | (5.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Very interesting, and thought provoking work of art. My first impression though, is that the rain is good for the picnic as well, because it will help grow the food in the garden that we will eat during the picnics to comes.


SUGGESTIONS:
none


WHAT I LIKED MOST:
does he begin to awaken, or does he choose to awaken, this is the thought that crosses my mind - again, thought provoking.


SUMMARY:

Masterfully done.

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Review of All Alone  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Unfinished. This feels like a poem that needs to say more. I know that many poets write for themselves, but I just think I would have enjoyed it more if I knew what was going on.


SUGGESTIONS:
Tell us more.


WHAT I LIKED MOST:
The couplet stanzas work here. You used good enjambment, end-stop, and caesura.


SUMMARY:
Good start...


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Review of rebirth  
Rated: E | (3.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
running from a lover, or someone you did not want to meet. You have escaped from someone or something and are running for safety or even your life.


SUGGESTIONS:
this, to me, seems a little convoluted, as if I am walking into the middle of something. I think you meant sole, not souls, when speaking of the bottom of your feet.


WHAT I LIKED MOST:
Your writing seems to have a certain edginess about it that I like, I just feel you need to bring it together.


SUMMARY:
Great first draft...


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Review of For the Birds  
Rated: E | (1.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Wow, if you dislike poetry so much why did you even try to write a poem about how much you dislike it. This poem seems more like a slam on poetry than anything else.


SUGGESTIONS:
none


WHAT I LIKED MOST:
nothing.


SUMMARY:

nice try.

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Review of obstacle  
Rated: E | (4.5)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Wow, that sounds like a familiar scenario.I think I've done that more times than I can count, and you made a poem out of it.


SUGGESTIONS:
None


WHAT I LIKED MOST:
Your honesty, and you seem to have a knack for visualization.


SUMMARY:
good little poem.


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Review of untitled  
Rated: E | (3.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
my first impression is that I am not sure what this is about. Of course, you do not have to understand poetry to appreciate it.


SUGGESTIONS:
I am not sure what or where you are going with your metaphor or simile. I would try to be more clear on what you are trying to express, of course, it could be me.


WHAT I LIKED MOST:
The intensity.


SUMMARY:
A very good first draft.


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Rated: 18+ | (2.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Rather depressing, but writing poetry does not mean writing about joy and happiness, it is about what we feel, and putting that on paper.


SUGGESTIONS:
I would double check your grammar.


WHAT I LIKED MOST:

The anaphora used in the beginning lines.

SUMMARY:
Not bad for a first draft.


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Review of The Rose  
Rated: E | (5.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

Overall Impressions:
I thought this was a beautifully written poem, that touches the heart and soul. This could be a parent to a child, or God to His creations. Wonderful.


Suggestions:
I could be wrong on this, but in line five, I think it should be "rage" not "rages"


What I Liked Most:
The poem as a whole.


Summary:
BRAVO!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

Overall Impressions:
Is it not amazing, that the rich, at times, tip less than the poor and struggling. Perhaps that is because we (the poor) know what it is to suffer and are more apt to share what little we have to help people who struggle like ourselves. I thought this poem was wonderful.


Suggestions:
I have none.


What I Liked Most:
I thought you did a great job with the visual aspect of this work of art. I was in the cafe. I could feel the atmosphere.


Summary:
Bravo!

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Review of Mrs Hobb's 100th  
Rated: E | (4.5)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

Overall Impressions:
An enjoyable read from start to finish. Quatrains with no rhyme, though I did catch some internal rhyme. i would define this as structured free verse. Good job.


Suggestions:
Not really: I thought you used good enjambement, caesura, and end stop. Written very well.


What I Liked Most:

Stanza five.

Summary:
Great job!

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Review of Broken Wings  
Rated: E | (5.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

Overall Impressions:
WOW, very visceral and real. This is a very visual poem. I could see in my minds eye, this poor, homeless woman. You brought this woman to life along with the poem.


Suggestions:

NONE>

What I Liked Most:
I think the way you worked your punctuation here worked very well. A lot of enjambement, and caesura all in the right places. It really brought the poem alive.


Summary:
Masterfully written. God bless, and keep writing...

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Review of Were I a poet  
Rated: E | (5.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

Overall Impressions:
My response to your poem is: You are a poet, with the soul of a poet, and heart of a poet. Great metaphor. And you have expressed the joy of life. Please, keep writing poetry.


Suggestions:
For this poem, I have none.


What I Liked Most:
You use very few words, and expressed your feelings masterfully.


Summary:
BRAVO!!!

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

Overall Impressions:
Sherri, I love your poetry. I always get a little excited before I read your work - you are that good. This poem flows masterfully. You are excellent at using certain poetic devices, and here your repetend works very well, "the shadows." You truly have the heart and soul of a poet. We are fortunate to have you on this site. A magnificent piece of writing.


Suggestions:
Let's see: NONE.


What I Liked Most:
The rhyming cadence is wonderful.


Summary:
This deserves a BRAVO! AUTHOR! BRAVO!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

Overall Impressions:
wonderfully funny. I thought the poem flowed very well, and the rhyme was spot on. Great job.


Suggestions:
I would not change a word.


What I Liked Most:
hard to pick which stanza or thought I liked the best. Lets just say the poem as a whole.


Summary:
BRAVO! AUTHOR! BRAVO!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

Overall Impressions:
I thought the poem flowed pretty well. i would consider this poem a rhyming prose poem. It tell us a story. Good job.


Suggestions:
The only suggestion I would make would be to shorten the lines a bit. I think this would help the flow even more.


What I Liked Most:
I loved that last stanza, it made me smile.


Summary:
Very well done.

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.

Overall Impressions:
Great poem about what lies underneath. I know what it is like to feel the blackness inside and have to pretend, for the sake of others, that it does not exists. I thought you did a great job conveying this.


Suggestions:
none


What I Liked Most:
The poem as a whole, but stanza three stands out for me.


Summary:
BRAVO!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I consider this poem to be magnificent. What a wonderful job you've done here. My favorite stanza (they all touch my heart) is the third. Powerful, and sentimental. And it is written in a strict 7-6-7-6 format. Amazing. I enjoyed this read completely. God bless and keep writing.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I do believe this is the first acrostic I have read of yours. Not only is this an acrostic, but written in quantitative meter as well - pentameter. Excellent. You speak of Gods mercy and his love, always worth reading about. You are obviously a very spiritual man. I say BRAVO! God bless and keep writing...
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