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I like to read novels and biographies, so if I can review them at the same time, why not. My ratings are usually at the high end because I think if someone has taken the time and effort to write a large piece, it is an achievement. The review will give the opportunity to flag up typographic errors. I do not mark down ratings for these errors because they are easily fixed.
Favorite Item Types
Rhyming Verse. Novels and short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Non-rhyming poetry.
I will not review...
Erotica, Vampire and Wolf stories. Their stories are all very samey to me.
Public Reviews
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Review of Coffee Spuddle  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A well constructed and entertaining piece. Should have been placed higher, I think.
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Review of Meet Olivia Berns  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.0)
You need to make sure that you remove the spaces before the end punctuation marks (bright face ,). “wondering by“ might be better as wondering while. Also, “gazing at the desk window” is confusing, maybe re-write or clarify. I would put Anne after, on her way. I am not sure that dumblessly is a word whereas dumbly is. “as milk with cute cat eyes” maybe replace the “with” to “her”? If you go into edit you can make the text bigger which looks better on the page. Chapter 1 is small for a chapter and I feel that you can combine chapters 1 and 2 into one chapter. The story seems interesting and will prompt some people to read on to see what happens on the trip. Well done with this. You have made a good start to the tale.
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Review of Rainbow Magic  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well done with this interesting and well-crafted poem.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
So I come to the end of this epic story and what an action-packed adventure it has been. It also broke from the action sometimes and told parts that were more homely and a bit emotional. The writing was of a high standard throughout and I can't remember noticing any errors or typo's. Many of the end hooks were a great prompt to tempt the reader onto the next chapter. I was confused a couple of times but only minor hiccups and reading on would always remove the confused thoughts. Fantasy is not my favorite category but I was quite happy to read this story. What led me to this story in the first place? Mainly the notes at the end: "This item is NOT looking for literary critique". Also, "I am NOT seeking publication". I can relate to the second part as I gave up on seeking publication years ago. I remember when I used to pay to have my novels professionally read, one of the readers told me that I am not writing to the rules and conventions. And I should do so, alternately, I can just write what I like, but with very little chance of publication. I went for the, write what I like, option. Anyway, back to the story. I wondered if I would have the staying power to read all 110 chapters/parts. But it was not a problem and my interest was kept up throughout. Very well done to the author and thanks for giving me the enjoyment of visiting Manitou Island.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Nearly there and what a good read it has been on my journey around the island with Charmian.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another action-packed chapter full of suspense as we near the end of the story. The young heroine, Charmian, get power and help from others as she battles with Ocryana. Although seemingly weakened, Ocryana, makes it to her goal. Charmian is on her tail as she tries to stop her from destroying the island. The hook at the end ensures the reader want's to find out how Charmian and her friends stop her. As usual, we have a well-written part with no noticeable errors or typo's.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A great battle rages against Ocryana as many join Charmian in the fight but the demon always come out on top despite her injuries. A fantatic action packed part.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good well-written chapter moving us on. The hook at the end is of the usual good standard shown in many of the parts. This ensures the reader, who has come this far in the story, will certainly want to find out how Charmian gets on with her latest and perhaps most dangerous confrontation.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
All the little stories within the story as the dreams are revealed. Chepi remains my favorite character and the evil GeeBee the most unpopular, who should be executed. It seems that the demon, Ocryana, turns up at the end of the chapter which is a good reason to get on and read the next.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
All the creatures are meeting up at the crack but without the Native Indians and the French people. Is there a reason why they have been left out? I still don't see why anyone would want to save the murderous GeeBees. Another good well-written chapter with no errors or typo's noticed.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Things seem to be going to plan for Charmian. It's a pity though that she can't wipe out those nasty GeeBees. That other nasty, Mitchi, even seems to be of help. I don't know what has happened with Ocryx. He went away with Charmian but has left Shadow Water behind for some reason.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good read with a break from the fighting. I like the character Chepi and feel that she adds a bit of humor to the story. It is evident that there are a few problems still ahead and some serious work to be done to save the island. Drake is playing more of an active part, which is a good addition.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm taking most of it in, although I am a bit with Drake over it all.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I enjoyed this chapter. Not only did it give us a break from the action but it filled in a lot of back story. We learn about how the island was set up for the dreamspinner and a few questions are answered. The writing is of the usual high quality that I have come to expect.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This could be the end of the island. But we know it is not because there are a few more chapters to go yet. Still, it makes me wonder what has happened and what are the consequences?
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This could be the end of the island. But we know it is not because there are a few more chapters to go yet. Still, it makes me wonder what has happened and what are the consequences? I am curious to find out how she overcomes this latest disaster. Well written with no errors noticed.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ocryx seems to have regained his composure. I can't see why he didn't kill the female demon, other than it might be the end of the story. All will be explained later, I suppose.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An action-packed chapter with plenty of suspense. Despite my comment in the previous part, Charmian played a big part in the battle and used quite a lot of her newfound powers. A gripping end where an unknown force turns up. Could be one of many but I can only find out who by reading on. As usual, no typo's or errors noticed.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Although another interesting part, I am puzzled how this young girl survives so many attacks by the demons who are obviously a lot stronger than her. I also think she should have developed her powers a bit earlies as it seemed that she is mostly getting saved by others. Hopefully, she will become a stronger character in her own right very soon.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good chapter with a break from the action for a while. Lots of thoughts as to how things are working are explained to the heroine as well as the reader. I can not even guess why the jewel thing is important but that shows a skill from the author. Equally, as we near the end I know there will be a showdown of sorts, but I have no idea how it will pan out or what the exact result will be. Must read on as Charmian is approached by the young female demon.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An action-packed chapter where the she-demon, Ocryana, attacks MoonWolf and Charmian. Moon wolf does not fair very well and it seems as if he is dead. Charmian masters the powers that have been given her and sees of Ocryana. Although there are a few parts to go yet, it seems as if things are building up to the final showdown. No faults noticed.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good chapter where we learn a bit more about events, not just in the past, but also in the present. The rainbow was always important but now we find it has a lot more to do with things ahead. Another threat appears at the end of the chapter to keep the reader's interest. No errors or typo's noticed.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An epic battle starts with Charmian winding up both of her enemies. Firstly with attacks against her and then against each other. An exciting and well-written read with one of the enemies being killed and the other wounded so Charmian can escape. The end hook is also good as we wonder who is firing arrows at the friends. As usual, I spotted no errors or typo's.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another action-packed part with Charmian managing to escape being killed by her ability to wind up her enemies.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Just when I thought it could not get any better. The suspense towards the end of this chapter is amazing. A brilliant piece of writing and where I have felt slightly confused at some of the earlier parts, this is crystal clear. The start is also good as we see the decline of the demon's spirit. But at the end, how will she deal with Mitchi who she has sought out and confronted?
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