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Review Style
I like to read novels and biographies, so if I can review them at the same time, why not. My ratings are usually at the high end because I think if someone has taken the time and effort to write a large piece, it is an achievement. The review will give the opportunity to flag up typographic errors. I do not mark down ratings for these errors because they are easily fixed.
Favorite Item Types
Rhyming Verse. Novels and short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Non-rhyming poetry.
I will not review...
Erotica, Vampire and Wolf stories. Their stories are all very samey to me.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another good chapter. More information is given and I find it confusing sometimes, although I think I am managing to keep on top of it.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An interesting part, but a different part. No action but an explanation very well put by the author without becoming an information dump. There is an explanation between three of them and I thought I would lose track of it but I managed to understand what was being revealed, just. I do like the way the action is portrayed in the story but it is good to have a break from it, like this, now and then.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A very clever and well-thought-out part. The way Chamian spoke to the Queen and later the demon made for very good reading as her character had to act in a different manor to both of them. I can't see how she can be of help to the demon, given his potential enemies, but I am sure it will happen and will be a thumping good read.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A different thread to the story takes us to a queen unsure of herself. The chapter is light-hearted and almost comical in places as Charmian talks down to her. At the end, the action returns as we see a fight between two creatures. Another entertaining read with no errors or typo's noticed.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a chapter this is. I am used to the action and suspense but this one is brimming with all kinds of actions that kept me in suspense or even worried. Charmian is devasted by the news but things get worse as she appears to be abducted. A great piece to the serial and a skilfully handled end hook ensuring that the reader has to read the next part..
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Review of Part 52: Standoff  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A lot of action and a bit of a disaster at the end as Tal falls. Although I enjoyed this part, I had to read some of it twice as I was not sure who was doing what, but that could have just been a lack of attention on my part. The story makes me feel for the characters and I am hoping Tal is okay and really need to find out.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good and interesting chapter and like a true serial part leaves the reader with unanswered questions. All such questions probably answered as we progress through the serial parts. This part also has a lot of action and ends with the usual good hook. No errors or typo's noticed.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I think this is one of the best parts. The thought I had earlier that most of them seem to be stories within a story still holds. The story seems to ring true given the category it is in and the suspension of disbelief works, perhaps with a bit of overtime though. Great chapter/part and hook.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Action and suspense returns with this part. Our heroine and her demon friend are pursued by a creature, probably the same one from the previous part. The writing is of the same high standard as we have seen since the start. The interest is held and the hook at the end again prompts me to read on.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
After the interim. I suppose that the interim is the poem that proceeds the main text, sort of like an interlude at the cinema maybe. In any case, it is a good poem to start off with. Charmain sets off on one of her visits and is confronted by another strange creature, but the creature does not attack and goes off. I am sure we have not seen the last of it. A good interesting part.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A long but relaxing part. Still remains interesting and keeps the theme, I think, of a story within a story. Lots of friends in this part and no eneimies apart from the GeeBee. I still don't understand why she risked her life for the nasty evil creature, but it will perhaps come clearer later. Again I noticed no errors or typo's.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An interesting but strange chapter. I am still enjoying your story very much.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another well-written and interesting part. This is marked as a serial and now I expect as a serial there will be good hooks at the end of each part. I have not been disappointed in that respect. I can't really understand why Charmian wants to save such a despicable creature as Augwak, maybe it's just the kind-hearted way she is, or maybe it is the only way to save Pomiere. Sad she has lost her demon companion Sikt but I am sure it will return.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I still think SW is the demon, but maybe the manitou would have sensed that.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Still holding my interest and I am pleased that I'm not even halfway through. Lots more to come.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another interesting part to the story. Is Antoine about to become a GeeBee, I wonder?
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
So we have an antelope hunting a lion situation. Her friends have abandoned her, it seems. Like before is this a test or some training? Risky, but she must have something neither she nor I have not realised. Likewise, neither her nor the female demon can be killed or the story would probably end. I can't imagine what happens next, but I will sure read on to find out.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well. she certainly seems to be in trouble now. I can't see why Moon Wolf stopped the other from helping her, but maybe that is how he sees part of her training. Pity the GeeBee looks like surviving the demon's attack, but I am sure he will get his comeuppance later on. The hook at the end, this time is massive and I am sure something substantial is about to happen. Or maybe not but she will of course survive. Excellent story telling.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another good chapter. I expected the teacher, Moon Wolf, to be a bit more fierce but he seems laid back. I wonder why Charmian was warned against Justin as he seems all right. There again nothing remains normal in this strange land so anything can turn. It all makes for a good deal of suspense and there is certainly a lot in this story. Very well thought out with no noticeable errors or typo's. A good end hook, as I have come to expect.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Brilliant. I can't wait to see where this is leading.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A surprise for the reader. But this is a story full of them which shows your talent at keeping the reader, me, interested.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am enjoying your story immensely. Every part though fitting together also can stand alone. Your end hooks are brilliant and prompt me to carry on every time.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another entertaining chapter that moves forward and gives a well-written account of the discussion to send Charmian off to see Moon Wolf.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The story continues at a nice pace with more from the unborn dream creatures. I miss the friendly GeeBee in this chapter, my favorite at the moment. I like that Charmian sneaks into the meeting only to be instantly discovered. How will they react, or more so, how will she react because they banned females from the meeting?
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good chapter that gives the reader a well-timed break from the action. A pleasant read with Charmian giving X a new name. Looking back I think the girl looking over the wounded Manitou earlier could be the one mistaken for the mother Demon. It's a thought, although I could be wrong. No errors or typo's noticed.
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