Well we are kindred spirits I feel - writing from breast cancer then to passion... and I think you have some comedy mixed in too for good measure. hahaha I will check in a sec!
This is steamy without being too raunchy, but could be longer perhaps. The first sentence needs a question mark, I had to read the last line a couple of times to get it to flow, may it has an extra word or two.
Thanks for sharing
cheers
judy
Very powerful poem. Well written with a lot of emotion. I liked ...we may be many, but we walk as one... nice imagery.
fyi..Couple of typos, fights s/b fight's
faces should be capitalized
My sister died of breast cancer, so this hit home for me.
blessings
judy
Well I can not refrain from adding myself to your long list.
Just the other night while in bed and on my laptop, probably while mucking around on this site, I was hot, so dropped one leg off the side. The cord brushed my leg. Needless to say, I scared myself and then concurrently, my poor dog!
I tucked that leg right back in.
Thanks for the chuckle
blessings
judy
Even here in Canada this day still shocks our memory. We all remember where we were 'when'.
I am brought right back to my senses with your heartfelt words.
Only one typo... second to last line, should be 'who'.
Thanks for the reminder to live each moment.
Blessings
judy
What a sweet poem.
I love it when you say... noone's around to appreciate the lack of sound.
A few technos.... you end most of the lines with a comma. Perhaps look to see where there should be more periods. And once you capitalize Stars and once you don't. And you capitalized Beautiful and Bright. So check those too.
Otherwise, light and makes me want to go out now and look up.
Blessings
judy
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