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Review of FOREVER  
Review by Meg
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Rated: E | (4.5)
"It(')s inevitable and relentless march forward is meaningless to me." There should be an apostrophe where indicated.
"I do not eat or sleep(,) yet I am aware." I feel like there should be a comma where indicated.
Well, this is written very well.
You have great diction, structure, and flow.
I really loved reading this.
Good job, and keep writing.

-Meg

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Review of Quiet House  
Review by Meg
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The title and description are both perfect and creative.
You have great flow, diction, dialog, and structure.
This is clearly filled with emotion. It's sad and slightly depressing.
This was short, sweet, and easy to read.
Many people can relate to something like this.
There weren't any grammar or spelling mistakes that came to my attention.
I enjoyed reading this very much.
Thanks for sharing.
Good job, and keep writing.

-Meg

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Review of Temperance  
Review by Meg
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Rated: E | (4.0)
"Lest" in the second line in the second couplet shouldn't be capitalized.
The very last sentence of the poem should have a period at the end.
I also believe there is a few missing commas at the end of the first lines in some of the couplets.
However, you have great flow, structure, and diction.
As well as great rhythm.
The title is perfect.
Overall, I liked this a lot.
Good job, and keep writing.

-Meg

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Review by Meg
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Second paragraph, right at the end, you write:
"John had read of his getting awarded a British War Medal. a few years back."
I'm not sure if that first period is supposed to be a comma? Or if "a" is supposed to be capatalized.
I read this but with difficulty. It is littered with mistakes.
You should start a new paragraphy everytime someone else starts to talk.
You should really watch for run on sentences, and comma placement.
Anyway, if you edit this, send an email my way.
I would love to reread it, because this sounds like it could be a very interesting story!
Keep writing.

-Meg

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Review by Meg
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The title and description are perfect.
You have great structure and flow.
Also, great diction and emotion.
There weren't any errors that I could see.
My favorite line, well lines were:
"Memories live on in photographs
no reminders; flames reduce all to ash."
That line really stood out to me, but I'm not sure why.
Anyway, I really enjoyed this.
Good job and keep writing.

-Meg

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Review by Meg
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Rated: E | (4.5)
In the first sentence, I believe that comma should be a period.
At times, I'm not sure who is talking.
This story gave me chills.
The title and description are perfect.
You did such a great job developing the characters.
Great diction, and use of dialog.
The relationships are perfect, and realistic.
Is this fiction?
Anyway, this is an amazing story.
Good job, and keep writing.

-Meg

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Review by Meg
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
My favorite line: " My sweet girl has fought like Rocky.." That was the best similie ever.
That and, "Noni leave like a butterfly gently lifts from a leaf..."
This story literally gave me chills.
It's written so well. You had me right at the first sentence, all the way til the end.
I love how you ended it with that last sentence.
You have great diction and flow.
This was truly an amazing story.
Good job, and keep writing.

-Meg

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Review of Is Today The Day  
Review by Meg
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First, in the title, there should really be a question mark at the end.
In the second sentence, I don't think you need the "so" right before "desired."
You pay great attention to detail.
At first, I was a little confused with what she was talking about.
However, the secretary gave it away.
I really enjoyed reading this.
It was short and sweet.
Good job, and keep writing.

-Meg

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Review of A Clown's Tears  
Review by Meg
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The title and the description are perfect.
You develope your characters very well.
You pay great attention to detail.
You have great diction, flow, and structure.
There aren't any errors that I can see.
I enjoyed reading this very much.
Good job and keep writing.

-Megs

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Review by Meg
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is written well.
Great use of dialog and diction.
You have great structure.
There are no errors or anything that I can see.
The title and description are perfect and creative.
Overall, I really enjoyed reading this.
Good job, and keep writing.

-Megs

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Review by Meg
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is written very well.
The title and the description are perfect.
Very creative.
I usually don't like reading screenplays, but this one is good.
You develop the characters well.
Great diction.
This is very interesting.
Good job and keep writing.

-Megs

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Review by Meg
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is written well.
The title is perfect and the description is straight forward.
My dad loves bowling, so I loved to read this.
You have great diction and flow.
The structure is good and there are no errors of any sort that I can see.
Good job, and keep writing

-Megs

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Review by Meg
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The title is a little weird, but the description is good.
I don't really know what to think of this.
There aren't any grammatical or conventional errors that I see.
This was very mysterious.
I didn't like it a whole lot, but that may just be my preference getting in the way.
Good job and keep writing.

-Megs

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Review of Monster  
Review by Meg
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Minor mistake in the third paragraph. You hould have the word "the" before hospital. And I think the "is" after the word hospital is supposed to be "was?"
At first, this story is sad and touching.
Then, it gets pretty messed up.
The title is perfetc, and the description is interesting.
This was written pretty well.
Good job and keep writing.

-Megs

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Review of Black Rose  
Review by Meg
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
The title is very creative, and the description is perfect. That's what drew me in to read this.
"Ow!" should be in quotation marks, as I just wrote it.
Is it supposed to stop at the?
Your ideas are clear. I think you have a little trouble wording sentences.
For example, the sentence after ow seems to just have too much in it. It sounds funny.
I dont think you need the part about "casually twiddling" the rose in your hand.
Great diction.
Good job and keep writing.
I hope I was able to help.

-Megs

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Review of Nine Years Old  
Review by Meg
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The title is perfect.
The description is creative. That's what drew me in to read this.
You have great flow and structure.
This is sad, and clearly filled with emotion.
I like how you had the last word of the first & third and second & fourth lines be the same.
Good job & keep writing.

-Megs

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Review of The Photograph  
Review by Meg
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
In the third paragraph, you say, "He asked our address..."
It would probably read better if you said, "He asked for our address..."
You jump around a lot, making it confusing.
However, enough with the bad and on to the good.
The title is very creative. It's perfect for this story.
There is clearly a lot of emotion.
Great diction and flow.
You start strong and end strong, keeping it interesting.
Good job and keep writing.

-Megs

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Review of Moments of Gold  
Review by Meg
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is such a cute story.
Who knew you could learn so much from babies?
Well this was written well, and the pictures really give you a visual of what's going on.
You're title is perfect, and your description is creative.
Thank you for sharing theses Moments of Gold.
I enjoyed reading this.

-Megs

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Review by Meg
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Title - Perfect
Description - Interesting
Diction - Not too simple.
This is clearly emotion filled.
You start strong and end strong. You kept me interested.
You have flow.
This is written very well. There are no errors that I see.
Good job and keep writing.

-Megs

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Review of The Chase  
Review by Meg
Rated: E | (4.5)
The title is perfect, and the description is interesting.
You start strong, and end strong, making me want to keep reading.
I didn't get bored.
Great diction and flow.
There is great emotion and detail.
No errors of any sort that I can see.
I enjoyed this.
Good job and keep writing.

-Megs
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Review of Bumble Boy  
Review by Meg
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
The title is creative, while the description is interesting. This is actually what drew me in to read ths story.

You start strong and end strong, keeping it interesting.

Great diction and use of dialog.

Overall, I liked this.

Good job and keep writing.

-Megs
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Review of A Love Poem  
Review by Meg
Rated: E | (4.0)
I feel like there should be a period after the second line in each stanza, as well as a comma after the first and third line of each stanza.

However, this made me laugh.
It was written very well, aside from what I've already pointed out.
I don't think I've ever seen a mad lib in poem form, so kudos to you.
This is very creative, and interesting.
Good job and keep writing.

-Morgan
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Review by Meg
Rated: E | (4.5)
Title and description are interesting.

Thanks for the background information.

This is written well. You start strong and end strong, making me want to keep reading.

I can sense some emotion.

Overall, I liked it.

Good job and keep writing.

-Morgan
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Review of Blue Orchid  
Review by Meg
Rated: E | (5.0)
The title is very creative.

The description is what drew me in to read this. It's perfect.

Great diction. You use words with such meaning and depth. You start strong and finish strong.

You pay very close attention to detail.

This is written well.

Overall, I enjoyed it.

Good job and keep writing.

-Morgan
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Review by Meg
Rated: E | (4.0)
Title - Interesting

Description - Straight forward

Emotion - Clearly happy, and uplifting. This is a nice change, considering most poems these days are depressing.

Diction - Great. You use simple language, but you still add words in with a deeper meaning (dapper, treasured, doting).

Suggestions - If you're going to make the stanzas into sentences, I wouldn't have capatalized the first word of every line. I would have left it as this:

A sporty young man
looking dapper and clean,
while his most treasured woman
is so shapely and lean.

Notice that only the first word of the sentence is capatalized?

Overall - I really enjoyed this poem. Good job & keep writing! I hope I helped.

-Morgan
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