Hello Samii, I am privileged to offer a review of your story.
What I like: - it is a very touching story about parents and children and how easy adults can injure a child. A good reminder to all of us to take special care with them.
Some suggestions: The translation from Spanish to English is good enough for me to understand the story. But some more help with translation is needed.
Hello, I am pleased to offer a review on this piece. I absolutely loved this. What a hoot!. People who love cats (me) or those who don't will both get a kick out of this. Very cute piece. This is wonderful! please write more.
Hello, I am privileged to offer a review of your piece. As a children's adventure story I think it is very good. You do an amazing job of setting the scene and the characters. You don't have a lot of description and yet I see it all very well in my minds eye. This is key for children. They want to "see" it all but they may not wade through long descriptions.
Also the story moves along at a good clip. With interesting new things happening continually. As a well illustrated children's book I think it would be grand.
The only thing I might change, and this is purely my individual opinion and should not be taken as criticism. Rather than the desire for a "new" mum and dad, I think I would have the children hold out hope for a reformed mum and dashing new hero of a dad.
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