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Review of Footprints  
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi ♥Hooves♥ ,

I have the pleasure of reviewing your piece as it falls before mine in the I Write in 2020 forum.

I have read your poem over several times over the last 24 hours. My brain is feeling foggy and I have put off doing the review because I am feeling rather cognitively challenged.

Overall, I like the poem and its rhythm and flow,but I can't seem to wrap my mind around the meaning. I have a feeling it is based on our current situation, but I am unsure. I apologize for my blundering. Your poem deserves a better review than I can currently give at this time. But I need to get this done before the end of the day today.

My favourite lines:
I am drawn in by the first first. Intrigued.
In the second verse, I enjoyed these lines:
"Our feet fell in line with what they demanded
and we counted on fairness
they also tended to reward the faithful rather than the compliant"

I wish you all the luck in the contest. I think it is a strong contender. Keep writing and thank you for sharing.


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Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Sumojo ,

Having just read and reviewed your first assignment, I decided to make yours my first review for the second set of assignments.

You handled the assignment quite well. I feel the build up between Milly and Marcus to be gentle, but also passionate. Their relationship is deepening, but I can still see Milly holding back just enough to make Marcus a little off balance, Just enough to make it intriguing.

You also show Milly's life as she has exams and Marcus's care of her. I also love her pet name for him.

They seem to hav gotten to know each other quite well. I look forward to see how their relationship develops.


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Review of To Stand  
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi intuey of House Lannister ,

I have the pleasure of reviewing your poem as it falls before mine in the I Write in 2020 forum.

I really like this poem. And the contest is not one I am familiar with, but would love to enter in the future. *BigSmile*.

I am not sure if this follows any particular form, but I like the way it flows. I also like the italicized lines that stand out and add punch. The last line isn't, but it could be to add even more effect.

The only think that really caught me up was 'short wiring my brain' I would think short circuiting my brain, but that's just me - and it has the same syllables as wiring.

I like the sensory aspects of these lines:
"Feeling around in the dark
My fingers land in the sticky web
Of piled up crumpled hopes"

I love this personification of sunlight:
"Sunlight fights to creep
through the cracked window"

I also love this bit:
"Determination floods my soul
Now is the time to breakout
Of this life-sucking prison
No more traveling through
Your dark passages of pain"

Well done.
I am curious which prompt you used for your piece.
Thank you for sharing your piece. Keep writing! Stay safe and healthy.

I wish you well in the contest.


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Review of Prohibition  
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Mastiff ,

I have the pleasure of reviewing your piece as it falls before mine in the I Write in 2020 forum.

I quite liked this piece and it is very current to our times. I especially liked the first four lines. I am lucky that my mother and I live together. We have shared many a good laugh. I feel for those who are living alone or are in families that are facing stress being stuck together all the time. I am also grateful that I have two cats. They are not very good at practicing social distance, but that is okay because they only see us.

I can relate to the last lines. I have never really considered how often I touch my own face.

I had not realized this was an acrostic until I noted the link at the bottom and then looked back up to see the acrostic part - well done!

I think this poem will resonate with a lot of people. It really is hard to keep your distance.

Keep safe and healthy. Thank you for sharing your work and good luck in the contest. I hope to get in on it as well this month.


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Review of Date Night  
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Angelica- House Florent B & W ,

Hey, we are taking this wonderful class together and I wanted to give you my impressions of your story.

Your characters sound interesting. You play their name off of what they want to be when they grow up. Braille is an interesting name.

You told most of your story instead of showing it. The dialogue was good, but I wanted to get to know these characters and see their first date. Consider delving into it to explore what happens and see where it goes. Evoke the senses. I got a tiny glimpse, but I wanted more.

Don't be afraid to use the 1500 words. My problem is I overwrite... and I had to cut about half my piece. (It's still too long!!!)


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Review of Nerdfest  
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Odessa Molinari ,

I have the pleasure of reviewing your piece of flash fiction. It falls before my entry in the I Write in 2020 forum.

As I read this I expected him to get some toilet paper added to his 'nerdy' movie choices. *Bigsmile* But that probably would have been the expected choice, so go for you.

I did wonder if taking the Swiss army knife from his batpack was meant, but given the nerdiness of these three guys, it's probably right on track and not supposed to be a backpack after all.

I wish you luck in the contest and tip my hat to you as you used this concept of the panademic for good. One thing about this time of concern, is its ability to create great ideas in the mind of creatives like us.

Use your powers for good my friend and keep writing to maintain your sanity. I wish you good health. Write on!


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "March 10, 2020" 
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi ridinghhood-p.boutilier ,

I have the pleasure of reviewing your short poem as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2020 Forum. Keep in mind I am not a professional so any comments I make are as an amateur. Please keep in mind your poem is your own and my comments are only suggestions.

You have 13 lines of free verse.

I can feel the worry in your words. I included a poem in my poetry blog written by Justin Farley. It is called The Fight - A Poem about Conquering Fear. You may find some comfort in his words. I know, I did.

I love the image of the 'crown askew' I like the personification of panic ripping and roaring.
I like that you want help, but that you are also willing to help. That shows the reader theier is hope within your concerns. You will be just fine.


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Review of Chloride  
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi flyfishercacher ,
I have the good fortune to read and review your article about Chloride NM as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2020 forum. I apologize for not getting to this review sooner. I has been a rather hectic week.
I quite liked your article. It was very personable. I did not see any selling or grammar concerns, but I was more interested in the tale you had to tell than the errors. The story was engaging and held me. I learn a little something about a part of your country I would not have considered. New Mexico interests me, not sure why exactly, but there are a couple of writers who have spent some time living there and they intrigue me. I think place has a way of influencing a person. Your article resonated with me because of that aspect.
I wish you luck in the contest and thank you for sharing your story here. I enjoyed reading it.
Happy writing and reviewing.


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "December 24, 2019" 
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi ridinghhood-p.boutilier ,
Happy New Year's Eve to you. I wish you all the best in the new year... and new decade!
I have the pleasure of reviewing your wee poem as it is in the I Write 2019 forum and I was told I could review anyone I wished in order to complete my entry for this week. I am sadly behind, but I believe with this last entry I can call myself done.
I enjoyed the poem. It got me thinking about the logistics of the actual birth of baby Jesus. Something makes me think Joseph would not be dour. As the only person around to help, I am sure God made him more than capable guiding him through the process. I also think that Mary would have been granted some leniency given that she was bringing the Son of God into the world... and she was a virgin. That is just my thought on the situation. Either way, I am glad she took on the 'mission' and gave birth to our Saviour.
I hope you had a most excellent Christmas and holiday season.
May your 2020 be as productive or more as you continue to write and share your work.


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Review of Pretty Ugly Words  
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi IceSkatingSugarCube

I have the pleasure of reviewing your wee poem, a soledad as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2019 forum.
I quite liked this wee little poem and I think you followed the form quite well. I also appreciate the Notes section of your entry. It is always good to have quick access to the form right there to behold.
I loved the Christmas theme and the coziness of the piece. In encompasses the feelings of the season and lets the reader know this family gets along very well. i think you have done an admirable job.
Thank you for sharing.


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Review of Pretty Ugly Words  
for entry "Cold Nights--Aquarian" 
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi IceSkatingSugarCube ,

I'm 💙 Carly . I am doing this review as part of my commitment to I Write in 2019 and "Poetic Exploration" .

I have chose to review your poem as my second review for this week.

It is important to remember that I am not a professional. I am simply one who wishes to learn and grow in my own poetic voice. To do that, I practice my own creations and review the creations of others so that my knowledge can be furthered. That said, I want you to consider my opinion as merely that... your poem is ultimately your creation. Please feel free to use or disregard my advise as you see fit.

Overall Impression:

This is a decadent little poem so warm and cozy within the blankets on a cold winter night.

Form:

This is an Aquarian form and I love that you have included the details in the notes section at the bottom of your piece - that way I learn as I review. Always a great touch. Thank you.

Techniques:

The chosen words bring the imagery to life and I can feel the coziness within the scene you depict.

Favourite Lines:

The whole thing is lovely, but i especially like the first two lines:
"Cold nights
Wrapped in blankets."
Tonight is one of those nights here and I am appreciating the fact that i also have a fire place. *BigSmile*

Suggestions:

I see no grammar or spelling concerns.

Additional Comments:

Good luck in the contest.

Thank you for sharing your poem. I enjoyed reading it. I look forward to reading more of your work. Do keep writing.



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Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tinker ,

I'm 💙 Carly . I am doing this review as part of my commitment to I write in 2019 and "Poetic Exploration" .

I have the pleasure of reviewing your piece as it falls before my week's entry for the I Write in 2019 forum.

It is important to remember that I am not a professional. I am simply one who wishes to learn and grow in my own poetic voice. To do that, I practice my own creations and review the creations of others so that my knowledge can be furthered. That said, I want you to consider my opinion as merely that... your poem is ultimately your creation. Please feel free to use or disregard my advise as you see fit.

Overall Impression:

In my muddled NaNoWriMo brain I loved the opportunity to read you poetry. I also love the witchy topic and tie in to Macbeth. I started this review yesterday, but it was too late in the day for me to even make sense of my own thinking let alone try to make sense of a poem. So I left it until the new day to try again.

Form:

The Gemstone is a 32 line composition divided into four Octaves (8 line stanzas), contrived by Lisa Morris, writing as Streambed on the Allpoetry website. The rhyme scheme is ababccba, with each stanza following the same pattern using different rhymes. Lines 2, 4, and 7 are written in iambic trimeter, and the others are all written in iambic tetrameter,
My brain is not sure if it can follow this. I find as I read it, it does make some rhythmic changes and I am assuming that that is the iambic trimester and iambic tetrameter going on. I think you follow the rhyming pattern, but the first octave was a bit off to my liking. I'm sure if I read it aloud it would be better. All the others work for me.


Techniques:

You employ enjambment to give the poem flow.

Favourite Lines:

Regarding Macbeth - I loved how you worked this in:
"Ambitions drove his moral code,
he withered into sin.
He let his noble heart erode
to gain himself a win."

I also loved this ending:
"Instead, let's care for those in pain,
give aid to victims of the rain,
and boost up those who'd climb.
Ignore the witches' brew and bloom."


Suggestions:

I see no spelling or grammar concerns.

Additional Comments:

I think this is an excellent example.

Thank you for sharing your poem. I enjoyed reading it. I look forward to reading more of your work. Do keep writing.



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Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Neva,

Love the new handle - Snow Vampire.

I picked your hallowe'en poem as my extra review for this week and I was not disappointed. It made me smile and appreciate the joy of this monthly season - Hallowe'en.
My favourite verses are the first three. They seem to flow as they tell their tale of the Great Zombie Pumpkin, but the last stanza does not flow as well. the first two lines do, but the last two don't make it for me. I am not sure what the issue is. I could just be me. There is just something that sets it apart. I keep wanting to read the 'very' as 'overly" which sounds better to me... but may not work with you syllable count.

I wish you all the best in the contest and wish you all the fun October has to offer - Spookilicious Delights.


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for entry "Wonder" 
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tinker ,

I'm 💙 Carly . I am doing this review as part of WDC 19th Birthday Celebration and it is part of I Writer in 2019.

*CakeB**BalloonB**PartyHatB* A WDC 19th B'Day Celebration Review... HAPPY BIRTHDAY WDC *CakeB**BalloonB**PartyHatB*


It is important to remember that I am not a professional. I am simply one who wishes to learn and grow in my own poetic voice. To do that, I practice my own creations and review the creations of others so that my knowledge can be furthered. That said, I want you to consider my opinion as merely that... your poem is ultimately your creation. Please feel free to use or disregard my advice as you see fit.


Overall Impression:

Such a lovely poem to read on a night so much like the one you portray.
you employ alliteration - 'this evening's stillness Remnants of summer wane'

Form:

This is a free verse poem.

Techniques:

You employ enjambment to give the poem its flow from one line to the next.

Favourite Lines:

Where do I begin... I love the sensory aspects of this poem. The 'cricket serenade', 'cool fingers of air' 'skim my limbs'. I can see those brilliant constellations and it makes me want to breath in the cool, fresh clean air.
I see the plane and like how you included it by only calling it a 'string of blinking red and blue lights'.
I also love the contrast of 'staring in wonder' at the stars versus 'do they wonder who might be down here watching?'

Suggestions:

I see no grammar or spelling concerns.
I believe you have done a good job with your punctuation - though this is a weak area for me.

Additional Comments:

I like how you let the Poet's Place Discussion help you craft your poem and then you entered a contest. Well done. I wish you luck in the contest. It is a winning entry to me.

Thank you for sharing your poem. I enjoyed reading it. I look forward to reading more of your work. Do keep writing.



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Review of Attitude Changes  
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Mastiff .
My name is 💙 Carly and I am doing this review on behalf of "I Write In 2019"  [E].
I have just read your short story "Attitude Changes" , which I found when I posted my own entry in the I Write in 2019 forum and wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please remember that I am not a professional and my opinions and thoughts are only meant to help you. Take what you can use and disregard anything you do not feel suits you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. The piece is ultimately yours and that must be honoured.


Overall Impressions:
Interesting story. i found myself drawn in almost from the very beginning. At first I was a little daunted by the length of the piece, but once i got into it, the length din't continue to bother me.
I love the adventurous aspect of the story. I was as taken in as Ruby.


Characters:
Ruby and her benefactor, Thomas.
Ruby was well defined. I got a real sense of her life and the staleness of it.
The strange caller (Thomas) was a mystery and I found I was still curious about him at the end.


Setting:
Being stuck in a traffic jam during rush hour was described well. I felt the desolation Ruby felt as she went about her life.
I followed her along on her adventure and the pacing was handled smoothly.


Plot:
Interesting... having read the Show, Don't Tell guidelines:
Ruby is annoyed to be in stop-and-go rush hour traffic.
She angrily rejects a call--or calls--from an unknown number on her mobile phone.
A mysterious person in the vehicle in front of her holds up a sign that says, "Answer the phone."
The phone rings, Ruby answers, and her life forever changes.

I got the sense that you did the first and last aspects, but did not incorporate the two middle ones. I am not sure if they were required, but I did not miss them.
I think you handled the situation outlined for you with good pacing and I feel you did a good job showing and not telling the reader what was happening.

I just hope not including the middle two aspects doesn't compromise your chances for winning.

Favourite Part:
I liked that Ruby took a chance... at each and every choice point she considered and went for it. I applaud her.


Suggestions:
I only found two wee slip ups:
'wonderful jobs' I believe should be wonderful job.
'Pretty bad." She relied' - I think you meant replied.


Additional Comments:
I quite liked this story and I wish you luck in winning. I think is definitely a worthy, fun piece.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!

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Review of The Old Tower  
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hi Mastiff ,

I have the pleasure of reviewing your short flash fiction piece as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2019 forum.
I was curious what the prompt was for this and had to do some checking to see it was an older entry. I found it - Prompt for 6/4 - Write a story that includes the words: law, rock, glass. All of those were used and integrated well into the piece, but I thought one of the rules is to highlight those words in some way.

Overall, it was a good wee story... but I was a little confused near the end... I am assuming the office worker was asking the boys not to piss down the pipe that is "cut off above my office" I think it would have been stronger to just leave that part out or say 'it runs into my office and leaves puddles.'

Beyond that i felt it was an interesting tale and worthy of a fun read.

Happy writing.


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "June 24, 2019" 
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi ridinghhood-p.boutilier ,

I am back to add another review to this because I watched a bit of the news last night and found out what you meant by kids in cages. No it makes more sense and I do really like what you managed to get across in your 22 syllables.


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "June 24, 2019" 
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hi ridinghhood-p.boutilier ,

It's 💙 Carly and I am having the pleasure of reviewing your 24 syllable poem because it comes before mine in the I Write In 2019 forum.

I am having a very dim day... I had to look up the word exurb... but then, I did know what paradigm is.

I did a quick check of syllable counts on https://syllablecounter.net/count and they only gave it 22 syllables. When I first counted out on my fingers I got 23. I have found the use of this syllable counter to be invaluable when it comes to this wonderful contest.

It all makes sense to me until the last line - "kids in cages". I am not up on american politics, but I know enough to dislike 'he who cannot be named' without gagging... So, being Canadian, I apologize for not getting it. Maybe when I am not so tired... but a little clarity for this poor soul would be kindness.

I like your use of the tarot cards. I am toying with the idea of buying some, since I can't find the set I bought years ago and have misplaced. I think they are excellent for helping you find a prompt.. and getting you thinking about all sorts of things.


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Review of Summer Splendor  
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi IceSkatingSugarCube ,
I am 💙 Carly and I have the pleasure of reviewing your poem as it falls bfore mine in the I Write in 2019 forum.

This is a new style for me... apparently Welsh poetic styles are all the rage this week - this is the second one I have done. *Bigsmile*

I appreciate the fact that you included a dropnote with the poetic form's guidelines. That was very helpful and considerate.

I felt you did a lovely job capturing the essence of summer fun. I believe you held to the rhyming pattern and the syllable counts. I see no spelling or grammatical concerns or issues.

I wish you all the best in the contest!


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Review of Honing the Craft  
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tinker ,
This is a poetic form I am unfamiliar with, but I really like it. It seems quite challenging. The rhyming pattern is intriguing - Line 1 and Line 2 at the end, then again in the middle of Line 3. I think you do an excellent job of using rhymes that are fresh. Well done.
I like the poems message - which I interpret as a dancer finding that age is beginning to challenge their body in ways that youth did not. As I age I find I can relate to the body not being as "quick and strong, with time has mellowed" That is a nice way to put it. One does not need to be a dancer to feel the aging come into your life.
Thank you for sharing your words.


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Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hi ruwth ,

It's 💙 Carly and I have the pleasure of reviewing you tiny piece. Interesting contest - 140 characters. I popped this into a couple of counters and one claimed 32 words, 115 characters (without spaces) and 146 characters (with spaces). So I would say it falls within the guidelines of the contest.
A story in 149 characters seems a bit extreme, but doable. I need to read a few more of these to see if a story emerges or simply a tweet of happenings. I liked yours and I wish you well in the contest.

I enjoyed the author's notes you provided. They are thought provoking.


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "May 8, 2019" 
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi ridinghhood-p.boutilier ,

I'm 💙 Carly and I have the pleasure of review your entry to the I Write In 2019 forum. I hadn't realized we could use blog posts... but then again is it a lovely poem. I appreciate the author's notes at the bottom of your poem as they helped a great deal. I had not heard of Baba Yaga or her cat before. It sounds like something I may want to look into in the future.
I also looked up the #metoo movement. Thank you for that as well.
I like the idea of using Tarot Cards to give you inspiration for your blog - it always amazes me what can come from a prompt of that nature.

I enjoyed the poem - it was simple, yet profound in its essence. I really liked the little pictures you wove into the piece to keep it light considering the topic of saving innocent girls. Thank you for sharing.


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Review of The Wood Nymph  
Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ken!
I have the plesure of reviewing your piece for the I Write In 2019 Challenge as it comes before mine in the forum.
I find myself mesmerized by the potency and perfection of your lyrical poetry. Absolutely beautiful. I could see the wood Nymph awakening. I love how you wound the description within the poem's magic.It drew me in as much as her creation did. Lovely.
Your rhymes are fresh within the traditional quatrain frame. The poem takes on a life of its own as you paint the brush strokes of her creation... and her time to sleep once again.
I take my hat off to you. Another beauty.
I also appreciate the information at the bottom of your poem.
I wish you luck in the contest... I am hoping to entry that contest as well, but you have set the bar very high as always. Thank you so much for sharing your work! It is always a pleasure to read.


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Review by 💙 Carly
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Detective
I am 💙 Carly and I have the privileged of reviewing your poem as it falls before mine on the I Write In 2019.
I love the images you bring to the piece - the birds and the warming sun. Those are things I love about April, but I can see where it is the cruelest month in that it is slow to warm up... and snow is not out of the forecast. Last year we had one ice storm that closed the schools - it was the only school closer day for the whole year! It was two weeks into the month and I have friends who live farther north and they were snowed in the last weekend of April. So I would say the unexpected nature of the month causes it to be 'cruel'. We want the warmth of spring... but it is not coming as fast as we would like.
I think your poem is quite beautiful. I wish you good luck in the contest.


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Review of Oregon  
Review by 💙 Carly
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Mastiff

I am Carly and I have the pleasure of reviewing your piece as it falls before mine in the I Write in 2019 forum.

I see you have entered the Verdant Poetry contest as well. I am also pleased to see you did 3 poems. I am not sure if that is the way of things, but I did two and called it a pair of lady slippers. So I am glad to see you went with more as well.

I wasn't familiar with this form and I am still not certain if I carried it off correctly. Three short lines with internal rhymes...I see some internal rhymes within your poem, but not in every line. Then I wasn't sure if each of your three parts were separate parts of the poem. I am even more confused about this form. So I am not sure what to say... I like your poem and I wish you the best in the contest.


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