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Review of Home  
Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hello Val

I found your item "Home in the Read and Review tool and thought I'd leave you with my notes.

I found the story a little hard to follow, but I really liked the style and the prose. The imagery was also fantastic, and well-suited to the overall dark (but hopeful) tone of the piece. I really appreciated what you did here, and I'm glad this is one I stumbled across.

Thank you so much for sharing, and I hope that I get to read more of your work in the future.

Sincerely

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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

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Hello Jaiam ,

I found your item "SILENT LIE THE GUNS! in the Read and Review feature. I thought it was really done, the way that you personified the guns while also illustrating the trauma of war and the historical significance of the battle.

I don't know much about form/meter in poems, but I know that the presentation was beautiful and the words flowed nicely into one another when read aloud.

Thank you so much for sharing, I hope I get to read more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,


-Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello!

I found this randomly through the Read and Review tool and thought it was really interesting. I don't know much about poetry or sports, but I can say it was really different to see a piece like this that combined bowling advice and prose!

Thank you for sharing this piece, it is one of the more unique things I've read on the site (even if I doubt I'll get a chance to put any of these tips into practice.)

All the best,



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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hello again!

This piece also came up in the Read and Review tool.

It has been my favorite of the Blake stories I've read this far. This one didn't need any additional context, and I found it the most comedic thus far.

I think if this is a style you're really interested in, it might help to present them as proper scripts? That could be an interesting experiment and a cool way to learn more about screenwriting.

Still though, I can tell you're having fun with them and I hope that there are plenty more!

All the best,

-Cat


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Review of Oh Deborah  
Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (4.0)

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Hello Spiritual Dawning

I found this randomly through the Read and Review tool and thought it was really interesting. It's not usually the sort of poem that I would read on my own, but I can appreciate all the care and attention that went into it.

There was one couplet that sort of took me out of it though:

There never will be another woman like you
Oh Deborah, I offer to you, the golden shoe


I thought maybe there'd be an explanation as to what the golden shoe meant, but there never was. Is this an expression that I'm just not aware of? If it's something you just wrote to fit the rhyme scheme, I think it's a couplet you can take out comfortably? It doesn't fit the tone as well, and you use the golden imagery later on in a different couplet.

Other than that one spot, I thought the poem was great. Poetry is a difficult craft, but your dedication to it is admirable.

Thank you for sharing your work with us, and I hope I get to read more from you in the future.

Sincerely,


-Cat


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Review of My Nephew  
Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)

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Hello Nada Philippe (a.k.a: R.H.N)

I found your item "My Nephew through the Read and Review tool.

I think you have great characters and an interesting set up to a story. It also looks like you might have done this as a contest entry, and I know how hard it can be to work in certain words naturally.

The one suggestion I have is maybe to slow this piece down. The plot is great, but the pacing felt very rushed, and a little too convenient. I'd love to see the ghost struggling more to come to terms with her death, and face more obstacles in finding someone that can help her.

Other than that, I think it was good, and I hope it's an idea you revisit later down the line.

All the best

-Cat


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Review of Mississippi  
Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello again!

This is another piece that was suggested to me randomly by the Read and Review tool, but I also thought it was great! Your style of writing is so vivid, and I really felt like I was there experiencing the hopes and lows of Mississippi as you imagined it.

Thank you for sharing this piece. I'm always happy to read your work.

Sincerely,


-Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello Beholden ,

I found your item "The Hermit Tries Again randomly through the Read and Review feature, and thought that I would drop in to leave my thoughts. I thought this was a cute, albeit somewhat sad story about Amilcar's trial and error with meditating in a particular spot.

From the description it sounds like there may be more of these stories, and I hope I get the chance to read them soon!

The fact that you were able to get a full cycle of trial and error with such a low wordcount is really impressive.

Well done!

-Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello Sum1 ,

Your selfie came up randomly through the Read and Review feature! There wasn't much reading involved, and I didn't know that images could actually come up in the Read and Review tool lol, but I wanted to just say I thought this is a fun item. I think it's cool that you included the date and location it was taken in, as well as a fun geography fact.

Thanks for sharing this with us, and I hope you had fun in Key West!

All the best,

-Cat


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Review of Nature Rules  
Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello jamisonbrown

I found your item "Nature Rules through the Read and Review tool and really enjoyed it!

I'm a big fan of haiku anyway, but I also loved the personification of nature here though, and the kingdom allusion that you were able to include. It's not often I see a metaphor that grand worked up into 17 syllables, but you did an incredible job and painted quite the picture.

Thank you for sharing this piece, I hope I get to read more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,

-Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello Lou-Here By His Grace

I found your item "New Orleans Street Lights randomly through the read and review tool and thought that it was great. It's not the sort of thing that I usually read, but I think you really nailed the sense of restlessness, and the atmosphere of the scene depicted.

There was also an emotional component, especially in the last stanza, that just made the New Orleans scene hit all the harder.

Thank you for sharing this, and I hope I get to read more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,

-Cat


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Review of Last Gasp  
Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello Jimminycritic ,

This was a fantastic piece!

I like that you kept the context of the poem vague, while still letting the emotion really shine through. Something about it resonates, even though it doesn't paint a good picture.

To me, that's a mark of an exceptional poet.

Thank you so much for sharing this poem with us on the site.

Sincerely,


-Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello Igor Skoglund

I found this randomly through the Read and Review tool, and it really resonated with me. Poetry is such a good way to express gothic vibes, and that's something I think you did splendidly in this piece.

It's definitely one for all the graveyard loving creeps like myself.

Thank you so much for sharing.

Sincerely


-Cat


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Review of Passing of Summer  
Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello Jace !

I found this randomly through the Read and Review tool and really enjoyed it.

I could live in the heat all year round and be happy, but I liked how you expressed the longing for the season change. It didn't feel like a complaint, so much as it felt like a little window into your life. In that regard I thought it was very well executed, and it helped put me in your shoes to understand the relief of autumn in a way that might not have registered otherwise.

Thanks for sharing this piece!


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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello!

I found this piece in the Read and Review tool, and it definitely struck home.

Being a woman is hard, and it feels like there is never a right answer for us sometimes.

I hope that writing this piece was cathartic, because sometimes just sharing those feelings and knowing that you're not alone is all that it takes to feel better.

All the best,

-Cat


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Review of Vampire Love  
Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)

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Hello!

This came up in the WdC Read and Review tool, and I'm a sucker (pardon the pun) for a good vampire poem.

I think you did a great job incorporating the words naturally, and you created a vivid piece about this fantastically monstrous couple. Great job as always *HeartBl*

Thanks for sharing with us.

All the best,

-Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (5.0)

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*Cat2*          INTRODUCTION:           *Cat2*


Hello EveForward ,

Thank you so much to linking me to your item "The Trashscarf Tales for review.

*HeartBl*           WHAT I LIKED:          *HeartBl*


*HeartBl* Originality:

I like how original the world seems. I know that might sound a little silly because it is based off of a tabletop gaming character (and it's probably not a novel concept to base a fantasy story off of a tabletop character in the first place -- haven't we all done this at some point?) but I think your character is original, and you seem to be taking his story in a really unique direction.

I read a lot of tabletop inspired stories with the same archetype characters (no shade, I've also written a lot of tabletop stories with those same archetype characters) but Trashscarf feels very fresh and that impresses me a lot.

*HeartBl* Setting/Exposition:

Part of this is helped along by how detailed the setting is, and how smoothly you've worked the exposition of the world into the actions we see Trashscarf taking in the present. It's easy to digest, but it also gives us a lot of information about the world.

*HeartBl* End:

One final point, I do really love the ominous tone at the end where you hint at more being on the horizon. Very well done, perfect concluding note to the chapter!


*X*           MY SUGGESTIONS:          *X*


I do just have one suggestion about the style that I think would make it a little easier to read, and it is as follows:

*X* Long Sentences Elaboration on what to look for and or fix

Your sentences meander quite a bit in this. Often, I think this is intentional as it casts the long, vivid descriptions that are so typical of the high fantasy genre. I do think you could reel it in a little bit however, letting the metaphors pick up more of the weight.

For example, your opening sentence:

The sun slowly sank seaward, settling like a broody hen into a nest of gold and pink clouds, far out across the water.


This is informative, it's scene-setting, and it's beautiful, with vivid imagery. But I think it could stop directly after the word clouds to really let all of the metaphor sink in before reminding us of where this is happening.




*Cat*           CONCLUSION:           *Cat*


All in all, I thought this was great. I hope that you continue to work on the project, because I think this is something with a lot of promise.

Thanks for sharing it with me.

All the best,


-Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello!

I know this is an older item but it came up through my Read and Review tool, so I just wanted to leave you with my thoughts.

I loved that you shared your experience and outlined some of the books you collected about the craft. That's always such an important thing to share.

Usually I prefer online resources, and learning directly from other writers who can spare the time to share their experiences with me so that I can ask more specific questions, but I absolutely adored the idea of having a craft library of nonfiction books about writing. The only two I've read are "On Writing" by Stephen King and "Mouthful of Air" by Anthony Burgess (which is more about language that writing, but I found it very instructional.)

This is something that I'll be thinking about incorporating into my own improvement as a writer thanks to your piece, so I just wanted to thank you for that.

I hope your own library has gotten larger in the years since you've written this.

All the best,



-Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello again!

This is another piece that popped up on my radar through the Read and Review tool.

I thought you did a great job characterizing the inner child for this piece, and there was a lot of emotion despite how short the entry is.

I also appreciated the footnote context about why you did this piece and it's journey overall.

Thank you so much for sharing and I hope I get to read more from you in the future!

All the best,

-Cat


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Review of The Only Way Out  
Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello!

It's been a long time since I've gotten to review one of your pieces, so I was delighted to see this come up in the Read and Review tool.

It was especially fantastic since I'm a big fan of the song that this was based off of!

I really liked the end. It's hard to do a drabble that has a twist, but you have managed to pull it off and I think that's awesome. It has a good character with a dark motivation and there's a good sense of emotion at the end of it.

All the way around I thought this was fantastic.

Thank you so much for sharing.

Sincerely,

-Cat


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Review of Failed love story  
Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)

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Hello soliloquy

I found your item "Failed love story in the Read and Review thread.

There's a lot of emotion in this piece, and I think the set up is good.

I was a little confused as to what this was, you have it in the personal section but I'm not sure if it's fiction or nonfiction. Either way, I feel like there was definitely some context missing. The piece feels a little rushed, and seems to skim past some pretty important things.

Taking time to set up your characters and introduce everyone would help the emotional impact of this ring a lot truer. And maybe explaining/showing the events instead of jumping past them would help us feel more sympathy for the narrator who admits to breaking this boy once before, but then tries to sabotage his longterm relationship.

I hope this advice was helpful, and that you continue working on this piece and with other writing projects.

All the best,

-Cat


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Review of Bath Time  
Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello!

I found this through the Read and Review tool, and thought that it was really cute.

I like the way that you split it up into two parts to keep it short and simple, illustrating that Delilah, despite her experience, is not any more equipped to handle their cat than Adonis was.

This was a fun story, and I am glad to have read it.

Thanks for sharing your work with us on the site, and I hope that you keep it up!

All the best

-Cat


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Review of Starlight and you  
Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello Whoami

I found this poem through the Read and Review tool and I was really impressed with how you put this piece together.

The fact that you did this for the writer's cramp is all the more impressive because I know how hard those can be, but you did a fantastic job. It's clean, it has good imagery, and I hope that you won your first time entering.

Either way, you should be really proud of what you created here.

All the best,



-Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: E | (3.5)

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Hello!

You actually just showed up in my Read and Review again.

This is much easier to review! The situation was (slightly) easier to understand without the context of who these characters are in relation to one another, and I liked that you explained in the description that they're your OCs. That gives me something to work with.

One thing I've noticed is that you're describing these scenes as "articles" but I think "scripts" might be a more accurate word?

This scene (up until it's final line) is easier to grasp for an outside audience and the dialogue between these two seems to make more sense. I also like that Blake has some more characterization here, I feel like the audience got a good feel for who he is.

I hope you keep writing, and I hope this helped some.

All the best,


-Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello thewishingfountain

I found your item "How to Play Pretend (Prologue) in the Read and Review thread and thought that it was a great start to a longer project. (Which I believe is how this is intended to be read.)

Though prologues are usually longer than this (and I think there's plenty of opportunity to expand this if you wanted to) you did the important things. You set the stage, introduced the characters, the upcoming themes of the book, and included an interesting hook that makes the reader want to keep reading.

Honestly I'm impressed you were able to do all this in such a short amount of time.

I hope that you keep working on the project and that I get to read more of in the future.

Until then, all the best!




-Cat


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