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Review by LindaJune2000
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
I am a cat lover so decided to read tis article. However, I found it extremely confusing. First, your sentences run together and make no sense. Second, you have a number of misspelled words, including hear for here (2nd paragraph, 1st line), which for witch (2nd paragraph, 3rd line), seen for scene (3rd paragraph, 3rd line), and on bored for onboard (last paragraph, last line).

If you clean up those issues, it will be a decent article.


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Review of powerballin'  
Review by LindaJune2000
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
We all have our dreams! I for one would get my adult son out on his own, especially since I am about two years away from retiring and will not have the funds to continue to support him when I do.

I would be happy with 500,000, after taxes. I could do so much with that amount along.

I could pay off my house, fix it up (the interior needs lots of TLC) or tear it down and rebuild or just sell it and purchase a different house. I could establish a nice financial fund for my future needs.

And so many more things.

The one thing I would like best is having a safe place for my kitties to go outside and play so dogs and other wild animals won't harm them.

Good luck with all your dreams.
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Review by LindaJune2000
Rated: E | (2.5)
Tina you have chosen a good thought provoking topic. However, the way you have put it together is kind of jumbled. I find that many of the sentences lack form or don't read well. For example : Investing in our renewable energy sources are clean, affordable. This part of the sentence needs to be rewritten. Also, much of the second paragraph doesn't seem to fit the topic you have chosen. Since I am not familiar with your reference materials I can't say how much you are verbalizing.

This is a good topic, a topic that needs to be explored further. In fact I would love to use more renewable resources myself, but much of it is cost prohibitive.


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