Your poetry still takes me away. It has been a while since I have been on the site, but it is great to come back to something as beautiful as you wrote. The flow was awesome, content captivating and of course the style, punctuation were great. Thanks so much for sharing this wonderful piece. It is good to know that you are still excelling to many levels in your writing and as always i look forward to reading more. May God continue to bless you toperfect your craft.
Although this poem is lacking something, I truely felt the love in your words and love is the key to all things. It started off okay but I think for me having the I could have never imagined was too much redundacy. Maybe try changing the words around or adding different words to describe what happened in that relationship might help. I have to give you props "for the heart" that was felt in your words.
This was quite a creative poem with great imagination. You have a very creative imaginery gift of writing poetry. I love how you captured every detail of the goose chase. The rhyme was good, the flow was excellent, the content was amazing and the poem was entertaining. Thanks so much for sharing your portfolio with me. This reader enjoyed what I've read so far and I do plan to return to your port again. God bless.
This is so beautiful. This reader can really feel a presence as the details are unfolded in your poem. Great creativity, great flow, great rhyme, and great content. You really did an excellent job with this one. Bravo.
Interesting piece you wrote here. May it was too short and when I started to feel the rhythmn the read was over. But it was okay. Thanks for sharing with us.
This is so beautifully written. Very heartfelt to this reader. The flow was flawless and this reader could find no errors. Thanks so much for sharing this heartfelt poem.
Nice flow and rhyming scheme. Short and to the point. I found no errors in this poem. The content is good and the message is well received at the end. Great job and please do write-on.
Golden memories spoke volumes to me. It certainly showed your heart for your brother. I am sorry for the pain and suffering he went through but the love you wrote about was very powerful and I am sure he felt it. My heart feels your pain but your brother felt your love.
Very deep poem. This reader could feel the pain that the author so cleverly wrote about. An excellent write with much thought.The flow was smooth and the contents kept me wanting to read more. You are an excellent writer and I think this one may be my favorite so far.
Awesome. I an a volunteer in a nursing home as well and every word that you wrote in describing them is truth. On August 6, I will start to read my poetry to them. You should think about doing the same. I am sure they will enjoy.
I so enjoyed reading your poem. For this reader it reminded me that there is someone out in the world that really cares. Keep the pen to the paper. God bless you
The poem is so touching and beautifully written, it touched my heart. I found it to be flawless and therefore, I have no suggestions for improvement. No grammar or spelling issues. Just perfect.
Thank you Countrymom for sharing this wonderfully written piece of art with us and I look forward to reading more of your work.
I am so sorry to hear about your sister. The little angel is resting with her father. You wrote such wonderfully and caring words that described a true love for her for her short visit here on earth. The poem had no errors and of course I have no suggestion for improvement, because this reader finds "Sorrowful Window" to be a perfect write. WRITE ON. Thanks for sharing.
My, my, what a wonderful and beautiful poem/prayer. I could feel the sincerity of the author's plea for guidance. The flow was flawless, the rhythm was great for this reader and the contents were so dynamic that I feel this poem/prayer should be shared with many as it will help to change people lives for the good.
God bless you and may you continue to write more of the same that will be a blessing for others.
This was written with truth. Every words comes from our Father in Heaven. I thank you so much for sharing such awesome truth and look forward to reading more of your awesome work.
This is my second time reading this poem and it is beautifully written every time I read it. The flow is excellent and this reader can see that the author took time to carefully choose her words. I did not find any errors and would not suggest changing a thing. Great write and WRITE ON.
This was a beautiful story in a poem that I so enjoyed. Every line flowed for me until we got to this one:
She was confused and unsatisfied but did as she was told
One suggestion, if you take out and unsatisfied, I think the flow would be excellent. For this reader, if omitted it would only add to your poem and then it would receive the 5 stars this poem deserves. I would re-rate the poem. Of course this is only a suggestion and the decision is yours afterall it is your WRITE. Very beautifully written, I could visualize every line.
Amen, Amen, Amen. Wow this testimony was such a blessing. As we all face our iniquities, you have certainly stood firm and faithful to God to show the way to break generational curses of which we had nothing to do with. I thank you for this testimony that will no doubt bless others as it has definitely blessed me.
Nice love poem that I enjoyed. Kind of long, but nevertheless nice. The flow and contents for this reader was good. There was only one typo that I saw needed to be fixed: space between at and least.
How precious this poem is and a tribute to your dog. I could actually visualize the events as they unfolded in your poem. Very well written and I could actually connect to the love you have for your puppy. God bless you and I look forward to reading more of your awesome poetry.
My, My I really enjoyed this poem. You certainly used a lot of creativity in your description of "the end " and with great consolation at the end "the promised land". With no corrections or suggestions to share, I must thank you for sharing this one with us and I look forward to reading more of your work. Keep the pen to the paper.
Daizy Wow this took my mind away. I could visually see everything this author wrote about and it was such a peaceful description. You really used your imagination and took your creativity to another level beyond how most people see things happening. I so enjoyed this peice and look forward to reading more of your awesome writings. It has been a while since I been on the site and it is certainly a warm welcome to see that you are still at your best. God bless.
Wow, what a beautiful love story. The first date is one you never forget and the one that you put your best of everything forward to impress. It certainly worked in your case and I love the ending with marriage. May God continue to bless you with many more years of marriage to share an expression of love.
This poem is very, very deep. It took my mind away to thoughts and feelings that have not surfaced for quite some time. Thank you so much for sharing this deep well written piece with us and I look forward to reading more of your writes.
My fav part:
Today is the day I leave my brain.
I am going to the sky to visit the rain.
It ends with so much peace and tranquil thoughts.
Keep your pen to the paper.
This is very deep, heartfelt poem that full of love. I love how you included the dog and your family was close and loving in God eyes. Family is everything. Wow, very well written.
God bless
TyKam
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