I love this poem. It was a pleasant read. You are a fantastic writer. I enjoy reading your work.
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I am breathless. This is so beautiful that it stirred emotions in me and brought tears. This poem takes me on a journey of reevaluating potential, destiny, and self.
It is so perfectly written and completely serves its purpose of the write. The message is stands out in "front of your face" as reality sets in.
You really did a super fantastic job. I have to admit that I read it twice. Awesome.
My favorite part:
What if we take that clay or wood that is us, and take a seat
at the whittler's chair, or the potter's wheel,
and claim the life God gave us here?
If we learn to take ownership of the "me",
perhaps, we could finally become the whittlers
of our own destiny.
Keep your pen to the paper and produce more of the same. God bless.
Good bless you and your gift of love "Jack". I am so glad that God sent his protective angels to surround you and Jack through your pregnancy and even now. He knows our needs and he always provide us with what we need. May God continue to bless you in your journey in life.
Wow, I got so involved in the message in the poem, that I forgot to review (lol). Anyways, it is perfect! I enjoyed the warm story, it touched my heart. God bless.
What a wonderfully sad tribute to your siblings. The emotions can be felt in the reading of each line. Nicely written with few words. You did a great job and God bless you.
Countrymom - it has been a while since I reviewed your port and then I stumbled upon this beautiful poem about the early morning rain. It is so a fantastic read.
My favorite part:
The rivers rise as the rain falls down, some swear
that the droughts won't come but I don't really care.
I have had enough of the troubles, grief and pain -
May the sunshine replace the early morning rain.
Great job. One small blemish you may want to fix:
and got a good glimpse of what mud season's about/
I am thinking this is a typo, but If not I would take out the slash and insert a period.
Thanks for sharing with us and God bless you in your journey in life.
Excellent. This poem had me basking in the morning sun. It actually took me away, I could see the bird, cat, squirrel and the apple trees. Your descriptive writing of this poem is amazing.
Overall read: excellent
My favorite part:
How content we all feel on this spring day.
The serenity drowns out all of the urban noises that surround us.
And how divine is that.
This is a modern miracle.
Thank you so much for sharing and I look forward to reading more of your work. God bless.
Great poem. I love how you conveyed a positive and much needed message for others to think about. Very well written. May God continue to bless you as you continue to write to change people lives for the good.
I Obleo - Wow this prayer brought tears to my eyes. I could feel the fathers love so deeply in my spirit and also feel his pain. God really gave you a wonderful prayer to write to share with a lot of people during their loss. God bless for this prayer.
I like this poem, it was very peaceful and tranquil to me. It actually sings to me in a calming manner. I think you did a great job in writing this piece. Thanks so much for sharing with us and Write On.
Awesome page. I found two spelling errors that you may want to correct. 1) acknoledge (change to 'acknowledge') 2)generousity (change to 'generosity').
I tried to post the rose and it did not work for me. Am I doing something wrong? Have a great day and God bless.
Beautiful pictures. I am sure that you enjoyed yourself in this beautiful country. I would love to visit. Thanks so much for sharing these with us and God bless you.
I read your poem but did not want to rate it, I thought that it deserves a higher rating than I can give, due to the many spelling errors. I think you have written a beautiful piece here that deserves higher ratings than it will receive without corrections. There are a lot of mispelled words and I would take out all of the the dot liters (.......) and format because they are a distraction to the read. (A high rating is a 5 and a 3 rating is a low rating which indicates a need for improvement.) I think your poem would receive a higher rating if you make changes to it. The message is awesome and many readers will be able to relate. You can run spell check on your document when you post.
This is so beautiful. While reading this poem,it actually took me away into the skies. You did an excellent job with this piece. Content, flow, rythmn is awesome. Makes me want to read more. May God continue to bless you as you continue to write to help others in their journey in life.
I love this poem. A perfect description of friendships in my past. While reading this poem, I began to reflect on past friendship and then the good memories. Thanks so much for sharing this wonderful piece with us. May God continue to bless you as you continue to write to help others.
What a powerful poem to write to your children while you still live. This is awesome. Great poem and I am sure that your children will cherish it for years to come. Thanks for sharing this one with us and may God continue to bless you each day in your journey of life as you continue to show your children much love.
Excellent! I enjoyed from beginning to the end. The structure and entire write was excellent. No suggestions needed as you did a great job in writing this piece. Thanks for sharing with us and May God continue to bless you to write to change people lives for the good.
This is a very deep and true poem that really need to be read by a lot of people. I love how you wrote on every aspect of the subject. You really did a fantastic job. No suggestion or correction needed. This piece is perfect. Thanks for sharing with us and Write on. God bless as you continue to write to change people lives for the good.
TyKam
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