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Review of The Living  
Review by Chai Cuppy
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
GROSS!!! But you have great imagery and diction. :)
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Review of Game Gods  
Review by Chai Cuppy
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like the line "Avenging angel unleashes everything"
This totally describes gaming perfectly! I also like how random it is, but it still has a common idea of video games to it. I think you could still add more to it, but other than that, this is an awesome poem!
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Review of Too Late  
Review by Chai Cuppy
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
This is a pretty good poem, but I think it has potential for you to do even more with it.
The way you have spaced the lines gets a bit confusing, and using the word 'and' in the beginning of a sentance can make the line seem a bit repetitive and unfinished.
I like how you describe living life to the fullest, and I like the sad tone to the beginning. Right now it seems un finished, but I think if you edited some of the lines to make the ideas flow better together, and if you fixed the spacing, then this would make an awesome poem.
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