Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: This is the first item in your port. Comedy with a funny title and E rating. I have to give it a read.
Character and Scene Development: There were only two characters grabbing my attention, but both of them were well rounded. There was something to like in each of them and a whole lot of crazy in for good measure. The scene was laid out so that I could easily follow what was happening and why.
What needs your attention: Thank you for having a flawless piece. There were no oopsies or boo boos that I saw. The only thing of note is that anytime you bring alcohol into the scene (champagne) it automatically is 13+.
Of Plot and pacing: The nasty critic who is full of himself gets bested by an actor. The story followed a logical progression from the critic’s first sniper volley to getting his clock cleaned by the young ingénue.
What part I liked best: Always love a strong leading lady.
Overall impression: This story embraced all the core competencies, all of the senses were honored and highlighted. That is really great.
These are just my insights. Do what you know is right.
You are a fabulous author. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: I chose this story because the story promised to be an action drama one. The E rating was a plus. I am not a fan of other for a genre selection. I suggest Contest entry, action/adventure, and crime.
Character / Scene Development / Plot /pacing: I can just see this naughty kid skulking around trying to right a wrong. You presented the character quite vividly while simultaneously taking us on a trip through his friend’s house.
I can just imagine the look of disappointment in the mother’s eyes. It was good to end it there, because my imagination is now primed to go in about a 1000 different directions on what could possibly happen next.
What part I liked best: I felt every emotion Jim was experiencing, it’s good to see he has a moral compass after all.
Overall impression: I know how torturous it must be to edit a story down to 300 words. Every word choice has to be perfect. I would like to see what got let on the cutting room floor. I hope this story was in the winner’s circle. It deserves it.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen again by me, Ms. Cheri, one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: I saw this title and the award, I had to give it a read. It sounds really awesome. It helps that the genres and rating are in the range I prefer.
Of Character and Scene Development: Just by your descriptions, I think I would like Tex – and I know I would love the relationship you have with your daughter. I got the scenes layed out with just enough detail to keep the story tracking seamlessly.
Of Plot and pacing: It is interesting that you were able to do a build, arc, and conclusion for each date, and each date had its own cadence.
What part I liked best: Your litany of all the things you love about being single is priceless. Your line about jogging up and down the walls at the coffee shop had me laughing out loud.
Overall impression: You are such a good sport. If I were single, I would let your daughter fix me up. I know you were not impressed, but even in the tongue-in-cheek telling, I think I would really like the guys she is exposing you to. Congrats on the award.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: I see this story has a ribbon from Writer’s Cramp. The teaser hints that this story may not have a happy ending. But with the genre and E rating, I know it should fall within the range of things I am drawn to.
Of Character and Scene Development: It is interesting that the main character is an animal. As soon as you said Calumet Farms, I knew I was in for something special. All of the senses were brought alive in this story to really highlight the crazy nasty things we get away with if we call it a pagent or race or something else that is considered glorious.
Of Plot and pacing: The story arced correctly and the pacing was spot on.
What part I liked best: By telling this story from a horse’s perspective, it only serves to highlight the messes we humans make with children. Not everyone exploits the young, but those that do really do it with a vengeance.
Overall impression: I am already a fan of your works. I am pleased that you presented another fabulous story. Your author’s voice shines in this type of story.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen again by me, Ms. Cheri, one of the sly foxes.
INTEREST GENERATING STUFF:
What an awesome title and teaser. I love E ratings and romance anything. This promises to be a fantastic read for me.
IMAGERY:
This was sufficiently vague as to leave me wondering if the seeker of romance was male or female. The imagery of a romance via telephone tag is quite unique. Things like this must have been based on real events.
WHAT DID NOT WORK FOR ME:
The one thing I did not like is that at the end, the brush off was attributed to be ugly, fat or spoiled, rather just being done with the game or being scared to follow through. I know you were trying to be funny, it just did not land that way for me. I loved it right up to the last four lines. Those last four lines could be eliminated and you would have a stronger piece. JMO
RHYMING & RHYTHM:
The rhyming was there, the cadence or rhythm was fluid when needed and disjointed when necessary. I can see you chose the rhyme scheme well and worked hard to make it work.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Overall this was a fun little read. These are just my opinions. Go with your gut and what you like to do.
Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen again by me, Ms. Cheri, one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: The title right away told me that this would be a story that we all dream about getting. That and it being in the genres and rating range that I like, I had to stop by and give it a read.
Character and Scene Development: Both were abbreviated and rushed. If this was intentional to show a woman living on the fly, it worked. I like stories showcasing a strong person overcoming obstacles and winning. I would like to see this expanded and the gaps filled. And I realize that it may not be possible to do that.
What needs your attention: first bookAn "A" in Friendshipwould [you deleted the spaces when you added the italic coding]
He told her thaat if she needed anything, [typo]
thr same road [typo]
The punctuation needs to be gone over again.
What part I liked best: You had a story to tell that fit the word prompts perfectly. I like that your main character had a brain, was strong, and did not have to depend on anything to “make it.”
Overall impression: You did better than I could ever hope to do with those prompts. Good job.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: As I scrolled through your port, the title grabbed my eye. Call me whackydoodle but I am seriously drawn to funny stories about mice.
Character and Scene Development: Even though this is a flash fiction piece, the character presented as calm, fun and accepting. Keeping the scene simple and left to the reader’s imagination was a good idea.
What needs your attention: as i saw three mice [capitalize I]
Since you mentioned the cellphone in the story, it would have been cute to have a picture of mice feasting on grapefruit as the avatar picture. JMO. Not having one does not detract from the story.
What part I liked best: The main character kept her cool when confronted by mice. Now me? I would have screamed and had heart palpitations with just one, and probably dropped something. Really? Hey, it happened that’s how I know how I would have reacted. And I would have had the Clorox out sanitizing everything in sight. If the husband wants me to clean all he has to do is suggest mice were there and everything is gone over in minute detail.
Overall impression: I seriously liked your story. I hope you got a good response in your contest.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen again by me, Ms. Cheri, one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: This title and teaser in the comedy folder? Had to stop by for my much needed giggle for the day.
Character and Scene Development: I wasn’t looking for any. A comedy depends more on timing than anything else. So you laid out the game plan, and then every once in a while you would slide a little descriptives of what you were experiencing, and that’s all I needed.
What needs your attention: missed a couple commas, which falls in that ‘who cares’ category.
Plot and pacing: Dang, that was perfect comedic timing and tongue-in-cheek asides.
What part I liked best: “Honey, I can explain.” Dang, it must be a laugh riot at your house. I lied. I was laughing out loud at the glider chair and you wishing to embraced by the angels that you could so clearly see.
Overall impression: I laughed so hard, I have tears in my eyes. So glad you did not kill yourself, that would have been the tragic. Did you ever have to host Thanksgiving after that? Congrats on the award.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: Okay, I am already a fan your writing, so I am hanging out in your comedy folder because I need a good laugh. It’s hard to pass up your advice on anything, and then it had this blue ribbon, I am expecting great things with this read.
What part I liked best: I am so happy you went editorial on this. You did not need to ping on any of the core competencies. It is such a relief to just kick back and be silly.
What needs your attention: You put a question mark after the first question. Was that intentional?
unemlovement line [typo]
-Raul Lopez, Fort Worth, TX. Well, Randy, [oops, who’s Randy and where did Raul go? Loved the answer, though!]
Overall impression: Most of this thingy had me rolling my eyes and saying, “Oh, for pity’s sake” or “What the heck?” Just one great big laugh track the whole way through. Congrats on the award, it is well deserved.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen again by me, Ms. Cheri, of the sly foxes.
INTEREST GENERATING STUFF:
The teaser got me. Coupled with the title, it looks to be a poem that satisfies the voyeur in me. Then I see horror genre and now I’m wondering how a horror poem is even conceived. This should be good. MIGHT NEED ATTENTION:
I can’t tell if this is image based or not. The photo link is no longer working. Nevertheless, slicing a guy’s throat is 18+ at least. JMO. If the moderators are okay with it, who am I to say otherwise?
IMAGERY:
You are good. The whole thing presents clearly. I see a young man who answers a siren’s song and takes the bait offered. He enters the dance to be the next willing victim for black widow.
RHYMING & RHYTHM:
Your writer’s voice shines through in every word you pick and every cadence you deliver.
Even though some of the verse are clumsy, it is about a 100x better than anything I could do.
Ending the verses the same way it started is a good idea. It brings all events full circle, and again she waits.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The thoughts and ideas that trip through your brain are amazing. Thank you for allowing me to take a peek at your port and learn a thing or two.
Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: let’s face it, anything with the word sin in it, is going to grab attention. Adult romance with a 13+ fit within the scope of my genre preference and what I can stand via rating protocol.
Character and Scene Development: This is a very simply presented capture of that one moment in time when you know you screwed up and you just don’t care.
What needs attention: I don’t think I’d want a 13 year old to see this seen. I really think it should bump up a bit, but if the moderators are okay with it, who am I to disagree. I did not see any overt errors or boo-boos.
What part I liked best: You have a very bold unapologetic writer’s voice. You go to those places that most people are too intimidated to go.
Overall impression: I am so very impressed with your work. You have a new fan. These are just my opines. I hope you can find something useful in them.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen again by me, Ms. Cheri, of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: The first attraction is always the way the title marries with the teaser. It is rare that a dark story should be in the 13+ range. My curiosity is piqued.
Character and Scene Development: You have an interesting style of introducing the players in your story through your main character. Your main characters seem to have the complete three dimensions that I like. Even in this story, the scenes are introduced through the speaking of the main character.
What needs your attention: All the bases were covered, with nice and clean punctuation and grammar. If there is anything it would be that I don’t see how a confession from a serial murderer can be 13+. The storytelling was well within the 13+ range, but my church lady pucker was noticeable when I realize this was a confessional from a serial killer. Plot and pacing: This was perfect. The story arced in the right place and it is structurally sound.
What part I liked best: Your author’s voice is very clear. Your ideas are unique and well presented.
Overall impression: I am very impressed with the eloquent way you present a story. Everything seemed effortless and flawless.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: An awardicon is always a draw. I am expecting an exceptional gangster story, a little on the dark side. The ratings are in the range of what I prefer and genre is what I what I am mysteriously drawn to.
Character and Scene Development: I only got to see the tertiary characters through Kate’s eyes, I got to see all three dimensions of Kate’s personality. Delivery the scenes through verbal instructions was a nice touch to ease the reader into the nuances of each story transition.
Plot and pacing: The story is complete and well-paced. I was completely blind-sided by the twist at the end. That was wonderful.
What part I liked best: I like the mystery vibe going on, especially the Russian who made the initial contact. I don’t know why European accents seem to carry a bit more of the sinister.
Overall impression: You did an exceptional job with this story. I am so impressed. You have a new fan.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen again by me, Ms. Cheri, one of the sly foxes.
INTEREST GENERATING STUFF:
The title and teaser of this poem are the first things to catch my attention. The genre and rating are appropriate. I chose this more out of curiosity than anything else. I am snoopy. Every once in a while we need reminders of those passionate times or to peek at someone else’s heavy breathing.
IMAGERY:
Your word choice and placement was perfect for the image you wanted to achieve. You caught the essence of those fast and furious romances that move too fast. The image of two intense and demanding personalities is quite vivid in this piece. I can see how they would suffocate each other.
RHYMING & RHYTHM:
I did not see any rhyming, but I did see a whole lot of action. The cadence moved quickly in relation to the action in the poem and then died just like the romance.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:
It takes a lot of guts to filet your heart and put it out there for others to judge. Thank you for sharing your gift. You deserve all the stars you are getting.
Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: Okay, me and picture prompts don’t work. The nod to Marie Antoinette and a comedy, I had to see what direction you were moving in.
Character and Scene Development: When you have a short piece, I am happy that you went strong on the characters and left a lot of the scenes to the imagination.
Plot and pacing: The plot is a little far fetched, but so suits the picture prompt. The pacing kept us moving through from the length of the story.
What part I liked best: Cherries are my favorite too. I can see stress whittling the weight down. This reminds me of an episode of Major Crimes, they had a bride to be scene like this and it was hilarious.
Overall impression: I like your work. I too work in the legal field, and this site is a place where I get away from the legalese. I like that you do not put any legal jargon in and do not use too much of your career creep into your stories.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen again by me, Ms. Cheri, one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: Honestly, I wanted to see how you could turn a horror story to an E rating. I am intrigued. The title and the teaser were appropriate for the genres and the rating. It shows that you do not need gore and vampires to have a scary experience.
Character and Scene Development: I can see a disheveled man wandering around trying to figure things out in an unfamiliar time and place. I see a man who leads a boring life, looking for some level of excitement only to see that it is too late. That’s how it landed, whether that was the intent or not, I don’t know.
Plot and pacing: Presenting this scene in slow motion and then real time was brilliant to get that out of sync point across.
What part I liked best: I could see perfectly the moment the main character realized he was out of time and how disheartening that must have been. That happens to all of us at different points in life, and this little snapshot in time just kind of captures that emotion perfectly.
Overall impression: This was a short piece and I thank you for delivering a brilliant scary story in an E rating. I was skeptical, I’m thankful to be proved wrong.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen againg by me, Ms. Cheri, of the sly foxes.
INTEREST GENERATING STUFF:
Poetry is not my first love, or anything that I see myself as particularly good at. I may not be the best judge of good poetry, but I know what I like. I see this is your first attempt and it is quite good. I don’t read folklore much, I appreciate that you gave a nod to a genre that is not familiar to me.
IMAGERY:
I think all writers go through the nightmare of a muse how has gone MIA, and then the poetic splendor that arises when the muse deems it appropriate to return to the center.
RHYMING & RHYTHM:
So you had some pretty awesome rhyme schemes going on. Some of the rhythm was forced, but then again, I kind of like things that change up once in a while.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I can see the writer standing at the door, hoping and praying for a completed thought, feeling all the frustrations that go with an unfinished anything. I can so see the relief on the writer’s countenance as the muse arrives and unleashes inspiration in abundance.
Thank you for sharing your gift with us. You have an immense amount of talent.
Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: I chose this story because I love your writing. Gothic? Comedy? I’m in and expecting fabulous things. Rating is appropriate.
Character and Scene Development: I have such compassion for the musician. The other part of me is thinking he got what he deserved for playing with the devil and thinking he could win. I’m glad you focused on the characters and left a majority of the scene to be interpreted by the reader. I think my brain can interpret 12-dollar flat and all the goes with it without going into great detail.
What needs your attention: z in Twighlight Zone should be capitalized. Not a big thing.
What part I liked best: No. I am not insane - I had myself tested. [That is the best line. It fit so perfectly and made me giggle.]
Overall impression: Funny stories are a good fit for the unique ideas that flow through your brain. I’ve been a fan for a while now – you’ve never let me down. This story deserves all the stars I am giving.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: I had to read a detective story about 1930s Chicago. The avatar is perfect for this genre and this story. With the genre and rating, I was able to mentally prepare for anything you threw at me.
Characters/Scenery: I do like the way you presented each character, with all the quirks that make them unique and fit seamlessly into the story. I am happy that you went with preserving the characters and left most of the scenic interpretations to the reader.
What needs your attention: There was nothing that I could see. It has a thousand different directions it can go if you want to make it a longer piece.
What part I liked best: This had that Untouchables vibe to it that I absolutely love (the Robert Stack version, not the Costner version)
Overall impression: I can see that you are skilled at editing, it must have been a torturous process to cut out words to make word count. Working with a strict word count and still getting the story told, that’s amazing.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: Well I was merrily scrolling through the comedy genre looking for something to set me to giggles – which you did. Yes!
First Impression: I was so into the pity party for the old geezer. But the editor was right. If it had to happen, it’s good that it happened to someone at the tail-end of a brilliant career. What a way to go. What a memorable way to go. Reminds me of a TV show in my neck of the woods. The Day 1 newscaster got caught on live mike. He got the boot too – even though everybody was laughing about his live mike tirade.
What needs your attention: If there was anything, I was giggling too much to see it. Nice call on the rating and genres selected. Experience? Yours? Someone you know?
What part I liked best: Yeah, I can see the editor chewing someone out and then secretly stifling a laugh about it. Both characters were so wonderful, and the punchline is priceless. Overall impression: Congratulations on the win!
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: I was merrily scrolling through the detective genre and this title was the first one to grab my attention. Comedy and detective as genres, how can I go wrong?
Big Surprise: Oh, no! You didn’t! How can you kill somebody off in a comedy? How can you make a junior detective be such a ditz? How can you make a sergeant so boneheaded? Where’s the alka seltzer?
What needs your attention: I didn’t get to see any bumbling, only the title character get his face (or chest) blown off. Good thing it’s a comedy, otherwise the junior detective would be spending the rest of her career on parking meter patrol.
What part I liked best: If I had to pick, maybe that you have a female cop who can shoot straight.
Overall impression: My head is still screaming WHAT? Aiyiyiyi, at least you have original thoughts. All that you needed was a squirrel to distract a dog.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
What does the Fox say?????
Cheri
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: The first draw is always the Awardicon. I know for sure it has to be most excellent. Since I don’t see too many ghost stories with an E rating, I am hoping for great things.
First Impression: The third draw is that I am drawn to stories that can deliver a message in a very short space. I still want a complete story, just not a lot of flowery meaningless language. So this story left me wondering what great thing this ghost had done to spend so much time looking for his name chiseled in stone.
What needs your attention: I see this was written a while ago, and I don’t see anything overtly wrong or missing.
What part I liked best: It is kind of interesting that time only has meaning when you are alive. The memorial points this out so very clearly.
Overall impression: I found myself hoping that his sigh and disappearance meant that he finally figured it out and will no longer terry on this earth waiting for something. Maybe it does not matter, a good cliffhanger is always a good thing in my opinion.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
INTEREST GENERATING STUFF:
I was leafing through your port and stumbled on this little gem. Of course the title and the teaser were an instant draw. I don’t think there is a person who has not had something like this happen. It helped that the rating and genre choices were reader friendly.
IMAGERY:
This poem is beautifully laid out to show how a once strong friendship gets knocked down through silence of unspoken hurts. There are no negatives at all for this work.
RHYMING & RHYTHM:
The rhythmic cadence and perfect word selection really helped to convey the movement from confusion to acceptance that you were trying to convey in this piece.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Thank you for sharing your artistry. I look at all of this and there is nothing that sounds clumsy or out of place. All of the ideas come together perfectly to convey a sentiment that we all have experienced.
I, like most, had something similar happen. I, like most, still do not know what went wrong so fast to have the cold shoulder be the end result. You deserve all the stars given.
Hello: Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen again. This time a poem ==
INTEREST GENERATING STUFF:
The title and teaser were an instant draw. Those are the first words out of everyone’s mouth when trying to comfort someone going through a loss.
I commend you on building a thoughtful poem that states the simple truth that when a loved one passes, there are no words, acts, or things that make it better. Empathy cannot be bought or sold. I can only be given from one to one another.
IMAGERY:
I got that this poem is your attempt to go into that gray area where you don’t know what to say and there are no words to express what is really going on in your heart.
RHYMING & RHYTHM:
It is a beautiful gift that you have to find the words that fit in the cadence and measure that you seek. This is almost like a song, it flows so seamlessly and effortlessly.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I don’t have to tell you how beautiful this sentiment is. I don’t have to tell you how perfect it is in meter and measure.
Thank you for sharing your gift and talent with us.
What does the Fox say?????
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Welcome to the Game of Thrones reviews. You are chosen. My name is Cheri, I am one of the sly foxes.
Attention Grabbers: I, too, have experienced a lot of loss of people close to me or in the love sphere of those close to me. The title and teaser told me this would be a tribute to someone quite special.
First Impression: I knew there would be no happy ending to this story, but I needed to read about your love for your brother.
What needs your attention: but like most Newports [not sure what is wrong with this line, maybe a comma or a word. Something reads a bit clumsy.]
hell bent on making all of us plumber. [a plumber or plumbers. Just does not sound right as written]
These are just my insights. It's your story, do what you know to be right.
What part I liked best: I know that you had to skip some of the harsher details to keep this an E rating. I think that was a good idea. And very respectful of those who cannot speak for themselves anymore.
Overall impression: This was a very loving tribute to your brother. He is so blessed to have you in his life. And it tells me a lot about his character that he did not point a finger or assess blame. He took responsibility. He must have been a very dynamic and incredible person.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
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