Thank you for requesting my review of your Poem, an Experience, created on August 14, 2018, .
At first, I had difficulty in reading your poem because there is no rhyme, and longer stanzas. I tried to capture your meaning and expression. After the third read, I did, but still with difficulty because stanzas were too long. Yet, your way of expressing it and the meaning in the end made me understand that not always things in our world and in the world are correct and the way we want it to be. In other words, if we attempt to change this and we are not successful, we try again and once more but if not granted our efforts, just walk away and let it be. That is what I understood and please let me know if I am right.
I would suggest to break your poem into 6 lines, the second/third line end with a comma, and the fifth/sixth line end with a period. I hope you can try and do this. It will be easier to read and follow your feelings in your poem.
My favorite part:
"To let its imperfections build up
until it crumbles to dust?
Do I keep trying to save it only
to turn into the cause
of its new damage?"
Thank you for letting me review your poem. Write on!
All my best,