|My dear Summer Wind,
As promised, here is my review of your inspirational short story:
Benny the Homeless Christmas Angel
A fantasy story of a homeless veteran receiving a Christmas miracle from an angel.
Your story is beautiful, inspiring and emotional. I loved each sentence, each paragraph, each word, but especially these parts, Summer Wind:
>>>and fire flickered in his ocean blue eyes covered with gold-rim spectacles;
>>>he commented flashing his heavenly eyes;
>>>radiant gold halos encircling their heads and tiny particles of glistening snow lying on the bottom of it.
>>>Then, snow flakes fluttered down from above like sparkling white powder, covering the group with a blanket of love.
WOW, Summer Wind, you are "showing" not telling, got it? You outgrew yourself - your great!
NO PROBLEMS with commas anymore or quotes. GOOD WORK. You don't need to ask me to read your stories in order to know why people aren't rating. them. The ratings will come, eventually, maybe the persons that read this story didn't quite understand your brilliant message. Do not worry anymore. Well done! I am so proud of you.
My prayers are with you, always, but you know that already.