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I think the idea is great! I'd like to participate in your 500 Words Contest very much with a shorter version of one of my static short stories from my portfolio, that I wrote especially for this contest today. It has 500 words, only dialogue, no he/she said and I'm sure that it fits all your rules. It's called: The Reincarnation of a Stubborn Soul. I would like you to please let me know where and how do I enter the story as I have never participated in a contest before. I know about the b-item format but not where to enter it as my entry for your contest. Thank you! Christina Daltro (Chrisdaltro)
Hi,
I liked the idea very much! This is the first time that I participate in a contest so I hope that I'm doing it right. Please tell me if this is the place to enter my short story "with a twist" in your Twisted Tales Contest for November. Here is the bitem link: {bitem: 714906} for my short story called The Wall - 2095 words. I think it's what you want for the contest. Please take a look. I'm not sure I'm doing it in the right place so please help me out here! Thank you! Christina Daltro
I was looking for something interesting to read and I found your story Fist Things First. I really enjoyed it and laughed in the end. I liked your style and the way you nicely managed to tell a story in 300 words. You won the contest, didn't you? It's great. I have to give you a 5 star rating and I'd like to say thar this story was entertaining and fun. Christina Daltro
My Safe Harbor touched me deeply. I liked it very much even though I'd rather read a short story or novella than a poem. But, the words and sentences you used - You call to me from seas. I sail to ride your waves. - made me go on reading and brought me pleasure and, maybe some kind of recognition. I feel the same way about somebody, the same thoughts, the same way. Nice!
Write on! Christina Daltro
What a heartful, hurtful and beautiful story. It touched me deeply. I thought of an occasion like that with my... mother. Your story made me go back in time and pain. Nice, very nice. I especially liked this part: " Pain, after all, is just another sensation. Accept it and it’s not so bad." Christina Daltro
Kathie Stehr, What a beautifil, heartful poem. I made me cry. I guess I wasn't prepared for its depth and for your words; the way you use them in your poem. I especially liked this part, my eyes were immediately wet: "Then varnish, stain and seal what remains." And the last paragraph, soo nice. I'm not that fond of poems you know but I really liked yours. Christina Daltro
I read your story The Matchstick boy. It was really interesting. I sincerely liked it. Mysterious and real. Was it? I was curious until the very end. As for Tommy, I guess this is how an arsonist starts his career... with an aunt like Hilda (even the name reminds me of a mean, German housefrau). I liked this: "It was still lifeless and hopeless." As for the note with the mysterious message "N-1-2", please help me out here --- what does it mean? A mathematical sequence? From the Bible? I need to know! Maybe it's more an American thing (I'm Brazilian and sometimes I have a hard time with some expressions). Good story! Christina Daltro
Very nice. It is short and full of meaning. I wish I could write poems like you; I write short stories and sometimes I don't know what I'm doing. I liked your I wish, especially this part:
"But wishes are for children and we are grown now,
so you must find your own way,"
You make it look so simple and meaningful but I know it isn't.
Christina Daltro
This was powerful. What a story. Man-creature, man and God and, the machine. Time. I liked this: "That is the secret of forever." And this: "I have been here for so long that time no longer holds any secrets." Also this: "They are here for only a moment in time." Very nice. I liked the ending... it's like the beginning but seen from a different perpective. It made me think and wonder about life, fate, hidden doors in the future. A bit scary, isn't it? See what you did to me? It was a good read, for sure. Christina Daltro
The eternal mother's love and forgiveness. Lovely. I really liked it and the way you used the words. Nice. I liked this: "that sweet water of forgiveness". Christina Daltro
Very nice. I liked the way you started your story and, especially this:... "his gaze fixed upon the shimmering dust particles suspended within a shaft of sunlight— like billions of stars of a micro-Cosmos." I liked this, too: "How is Alvarez any different than the ‘stupid prophetic butts’ he sent scurrying down his driveway?" Your story had reason and logic and... so much truth. Christina Daltro
Ohh my, dear friend, that was spooky, creepy, scary and weird. I was looking behind me when I read it. I heard a noise and looked right behind me, it was nothing... but it scared med or was it you with your story of demons and monsters and a man monster. Poor Jenny. Poor man. I liked the Wendigo... as he knew exactly what it wanted. I though that Josh was the Wendigo and the Wendigo was Josh... but Josh was weaker. Probably, wiser. I liked this: "Condensation on the window, the fingerprint of hot breath in the cold air. It formed an oval of ghostly white splattered against the darkness." I liked it. I don't think I'll think my dark short stories are creepy after this. Do you wake up at night (as I do) to write this? Good work. Again, I like your usage of words. I can't do this. I wish I could. I won't be able to sleep well tonight if I hear... noises. Christina Daltro
Maybe it's my Portuguese Brazilian mind interfering or maybe something else but apart from being puzzled and intrigued by the words you used and their meaning I understood Wormwood and I liked it very, very much. Christina Daltro
It puzzled me. I liked it but it really puzzled me. Maybe it's the Brazilian inside of me that stops me from completely grasping the meaning of your words; still, I liked it. This is what I had to say. I hope you don't mind. Christina Daltro
This was so nice... yet a bit sad. Am I wrong? I liked it but I felt a conflict. Maybe it's me and my feelings today. It's short but strong and full of meaning and, meaningfyl to me. I wish I could write poetry. I can only write in prose. You did good.
Christina Daltro
Ohh so beautiful. It touched my heart deeply. How do you find the words to express feeling in a poem? I can only write in prose. This was lovely, really. It meand to you in one way and it meant to me in another but the words you used and the way you put them altogether... it was so nice to read. Christina Daltro
Very nice, really. It touched my heart. This was my first exoerience with poetry, this way, from the dark... yet with light! My favorite part:
Is my soul not to sell
To get serenity through Hell?
I write in prose. I can't write like you do, so difficult, as if... I had to think twice as much. You do a great job. Naturally.
Christina Daltro
This was really a different and enchanting experience to have... reading The Tree Sap. I usually like to read prose and short stories but suddenly I came your poem. I enjoyed it and felt that I was taken inside it. Where will iy lead me to? Nice work and usage of words. Christina Daltro
Wow! That was good and different. I liked the way you used your words and grabbed my attention. I like dark, supernatural stories and your The Tempter in the Night --- it was the first poem that I've read in this genre. Nice, creative work. Christina Daltro
This was beautiful. Really. In my country, Brazil, there are many, many battered and abused women suffering daily torments and not being able to a anything about it --- there aren't even shelters to run to and if you go to the Delegacia da Mulher (Women's Police Headquarters) there are policemen there to help you - not policewomen. It's a sad reality and still - even in our modern times - it's a world that belongs mostly to men (especially in South America and Brazil). Nice work. Christina Daltro
It is a sad poem yet it depicts a sadness that is within you and me and people everywhere. I was touched by it. I like the way you use your imagination and words. My favorite part: "They look at me through closed eyes Shallow pools of deep despair". Nice. Christina Daltro
What a different, beautiful and deep story. You grabbed my attention since the very beginning. I like the way you use words --- especially the adverbs, as Brazilians do - we like describing colors and images and we speak with deep emotion. As you did. I could practically see Denise walking along the long lane to the road. I felt what she felt. Nice work. I enjoyed it. Christina Daltro
I thought this was different and interesting; a wonderful way of using words. I could never do this. I can only write stories not write poems and I wish I could. I enjoyed the structure and flow of ideas. Nice work. Christina Daltro
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