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Review of Fallen Angel  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: | (4.5)
This poem has a really great message. We do see weakness in tears and truthfully it shouldn't be that way. Just because we let our feelings be known, we aren't weak. The images that this piece illicts are wonderful. It has a very strong and clean picture.
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Review of Punishment  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: XGC | (5.0)
I love the heat in this piece too. the idea of pleasure being an exquisite form of torture has been used throughout literature. you accomplished this extremely well. The chemistry between these two characters drives the story along. your descritiveness was perfect as well. i would not change anything
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Review of Secret Admirer  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: XGC | (5.0)
this piece is utterly breathtaking. the descriptiveness of it really pulls the reader into the piece. The heat of it poured out of every words. the backround was extremely natural and life-like and the characters are very well developed. you feel their passion and hunger for more
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Review by Christieavon
Rated: XGC | (3.5)
This piece does need work but it does show promise. this could be a sex act in a longer story. It has the potential. For what it is now you can tell that this is written in a stream of consciousness style so to speak. I would love to see this expanded. I think it would be worth it
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Review by Christieavon
Rated: XGC | (5.0)
This piece is fabulous. The sex is actually secondary to its true meaning pure freedom. Alicia fulfilled her fantasies, releasing that part of herself and got rid of Marcus in one blow. it was the ultimate escape, and one that I truly enjoyed reading.
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Review by Christieavon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is definitely a story that makes me smile. It i a true happy ending. It was extrememly informative to read. I really did not know that all of that went into a kidney transplant since I know three people that have had one. it is a true miracle that we have this gift to give now. Everyone should sign their donor card.
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Review of Sam  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: XGC | (5.0)
This piece is truly something that you would never expect. the sexual tension within this piece of work is phenomenal. This piece is strong almost to the point of overpowering. The ending though is the kicker to me. You never expect that ending at all. It makes you take notice and definitely want more
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Review by Christieavon
Rated: GC | (4.5)
this piece shows the true horror of sexual abuse. you wonder really how many abuse victims fantasize to some degree about torturing there perpretrator to some degree. This piece was also about control, one person completely controlling another. This story made it very easy to see that
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Review by Christieavon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is a great piece of writing. the flow and style of the writing work very well. The dialogue seems to be very natural and realistic. The setting of the story is very natural and very well developed. it is very well put together in general. I really cant find anything wrong with it at all
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Review of A real shin-dig  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: E | (5.0)
You just echoed really what alot of us feel at one time or another. i do see the humor in it and you are right about. We all really do need to see the humor in our problems and especially in our sorrows. Your humor is very clear and I do see it. You handled it wonderfully. You should be proud.
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Review by Christieavon
Rated: E | (4.5)
this is an extremely informative piece of writing. It actually helped me clarify my questions on google's capabilities. I learned a few things that I needed to actually. it was a very clear, concise and informative piece to read. with the exception of the few minor errors it's a good piece
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Review of The Dragon Rises  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I finally have gotten the entire piece read. This is a piece that is truly worthy of being published. It is very strong in all areas. The dialogue is very natural and life like. The scenery comes across very clearly and accents the story nicely. it is absolutely perfect and really should be published
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Review by Christieavon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
You can definitely see that this is one solid piece of literature. There is not anything that I could say differently about this piece that I have not already said in the other two sections. In genereal this is a very strong work. All of the needed pieces fit together very well.
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Review by Christieavon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is a very strong piece of work as well. It really fits well with the first section of this story. You can really tell that this is supposed to be one continuous piece of work. The dialogue and the characters are still strong and work well. I can't wait to read more
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Review by Christieavon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a truly wonderful piece of work. The characters are very strong, well developed, and extremely realistic. The plot flows through this section nicely and is very evident. The scenery is also very well developed. I thought I was actually there. The dialogue was also very good as well. All in all this is a solid piece
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Review by Christieavon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really do love this piece and I am not a huge fan of poetry. I especially love the image of death as a beautiful woman. I find that passage to be very true. You really brought your theme across very strongly. The fow and rhythm work very well as does the pattern that you used. I look forward to reading more.
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Review of How Many Times  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like this poem. The rhythm you used in it really added to the overall feel of it. It does rhyme well also. The only problem that I do see that is really minor is the spelling errors in a couple of places whether they were just typos or spelling errors. Otherwise this is a very strong piece
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Review of Take a Chance  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
In this poem, you clearly illustrate what we have to do to take a chance. It's the risks that we all take that makes us human. The rhythm pattern and the rhyme sceme work very well and add to the overall strength of this poem. It is a great piece of work in general that really cannot be improved on.
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Review by Christieavon
Rated: E | (4.5)
You are correct in the statement that you make in this piece. Pride is an entity created by the way that we are raised, but that it is that pride that does bring about any changes. Selfishness is the one thing that is key in all of this. Selfishness is destructive. It damages everything it touches
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Review by Christieavon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this very much. It is an unusual way to say happy holidays, but you did bring up a very good point. We as a society have forgotten how to share with our fellow man. Society as a rule is extremely selfish. We work to get what we want then we are afraid to let it go. You have given me food for thought
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Review of Evil Wind  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This piece is absolutely perfect. I would not change a thing. The scenery is very visually developed. The plot is very solid throughout the piece. The dialogue is very lifelike and believable. To me though the best part is the ending where he is remembering his Father. You should be very proud
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Review of My Prayer  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is utter perfection. The rhythm pattern is perfect. The statement you are trying to make is crystal clear. It in general is a wonderful poem worthy of someone with a great talent. This really sound like a prayer that you would find in a church. You should be very proud
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Review of Open and True  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: E | (4.0)
You can see in this poem the true meaning of being an artist whether it be a writer or anything else. You want and need the responses of your peers and readers. The only change I might make is to smooth the rhythm of the first section a little. The first couple of lines are a little rough. Otherwise it is a very good poem
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Review of Stealing Breaths  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love this piece. You clearly illustrate the child's terror of their mother returning every night. It is very imaginative and creative. You can see that the knowledge of what is going to happen scares the child. The fear is very lifelike. You can feel that this really does come out of a child's mind. I would consider expanding it further.
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Review of Help Please!  
Review by Christieavon
Rated: E | (5.0)
You have a very hard situation to deal with. You have a Brady Bunch like family. I commend you for realizing that you need help because that is the first step in the road to recovery. I do not where to send you for help that I wish I could give you myself. All I can really say is pray and hope that things get better
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