|I had a hard time following this piece and staying attracted to the material. We don't really know who he is talking to, or what their reactions or response is. Just his over and over. The vulgar language being tossed about was also off putting. I mean a little vulgarity goes along way, but the way it was in every other line or so, cheapened the shock value of it. It was quite distracting and I couldn't follow the bit with his mom with some Doctor, his doctor? Was the point to show he had feelings for the sounds his mom makes when she is with another man? I think the piece has something for a one sided conversation, I think toning down the vulgarity of it and perhaps giving us some facial expressions from him as he talks. Is he on a phone, is he in a shrink session, show us how he feels or we have no reason to connect with him. Is he angry, sad, confused, I had no idea because the language covered all of it. He is impassioned about what he is saying, but it doesn't come across well what you want us to feel or understand about this conversation.