I enjoyed the read about Snorty. What I feel is the most lacking in here is the questions unanswered. Why was Snorty depressed and not snorting? This issue was never resolved as to what caused it. Also, unanswered was if Snorty was perhaps female. You mentioned a Snorty junior. Was it possible the farmer had misidentified the gender of the pig for so long? I also have a hard time believing the farmer would just shoot a pig that was more pet than produce. If he continued to act listless, or refused food and lost weight, or even became hostile, I could believe that he may have been forced to shoot him. This goes back to my initial question of what illness or situation caused Snorty to disassociate from the Farmer?
I loved the three snorts. To me, it represented a daily greeting, an emotional contact and friendship between the two of them. Thank you for writing something refreshing to read.
I had a hard time following this piece and staying attracted to the material. We don't really know who he is talking to, or what their reactions or response is. Just his over and over. The vulgar language being tossed about was also off putting. I mean a little vulgarity goes along way, but the way it was in every other line or so, cheapened the shock value of it. It was quite distracting and I couldn't follow the bit with his mom with some Doctor, his doctor? Was the point to show he had feelings for the sounds his mom makes when she is with another man? I think the piece has something for a one sided conversation, I think toning down the vulgarity of it and perhaps giving us some facial expressions from him as he talks. Is he on a phone, is he in a shrink session, show us how he feels or we have no reason to connect with him. Is he angry, sad, confused, I had no idea because the language covered all of it. He is impassioned about what he is saying, but it doesn't come across well what you want us to feel or understand about this conversation.
This was a really cool piece. I liked the last few moments of a termite's life. How brave they were until the end. It brings to mind that someday something may decide that we need to be exterminated. There was a lot of thought put into this. This is good work. Keep up the writing!
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