|This story is beautiful and very bitter sweet. I love the voice you use. Its so full of forced wisdom, sorrow, and hope. Its sucked me right in.
Bethany seems like a very bright and sweet kid, who desperately wants freedom. I like how she fears the overseer, and despite that is still willing to take that risk just so she won't have to live like she does.
I admit, I wanted her to escape when she saw that door--but the ending, despite it being heartbreaking, was great. There was even a bit of hope, that maybe, just maybe she would try again. I hope she would.