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Review of WHERE DRAGONS FLY  
Review by ChuChuRocker
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Nonsense is sometimes the best kind of sense. I enjoyed this. It made me smile. Thank you for sharing it! (small review because it's not very helpful)
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Review of Your Angel  
Review by ChuChuRocker
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (4.0)
When you read this review:

If I somehow offend you, I'm very sorry. Most of the time I'm the one getting advice reviews, so I'm not very good at giving advice to someone else.

My reviews tend to be composed of praise/thoughts on the item and not what you could do to fix it.


If I tried to give you pointers, it would probably look something like this:
"Well... um. Uh, it's... I like the way it looks..."
So please don't be unhappy with me if I don't really provide much advice. (Please?)

Here goes:


This was very nice. It echos the feeling parents have when their kids are bullied at school. It makes me think of my own rough childhood, but it also leaves me with a sense of peace knowing that a parent could go through the same amount of pain watching their child tear themselves down just because kids are cruel.
I did find it a bit frustrating to read with the spacing you're using. I kept skipping lines and coming back to reread things. Aside from that, it was very lovely and I enjoyed it very much.
Thank you for sharing this!
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Review by ChuChuRocker
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Wonderful! I'm excited for the next chapter! There were a few places that could use a comma (although I'm known to use too many...)But aside from that, it was awesome. I'll definatly keep reading your story! Welcome to Writing.com, and have fun posting your stories! If you need anything or have questions (I can answer a few of them...) you know how to contact me. Keep writing and keep posting, and I'll keep reading!
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Review of Too Much Fun  
Review by ChuChuRocker
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
It didn't flow as well as I'm used to, but that's alright. I'm sorry the military has been such a pain for you, but hopefully you can leave and do something you really enjoy soon. Keep in mind that it isn't forever, and that your wife and sons love you no matter what happens.
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Review of Hospice Heart  
Review by ChuChuRocker
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
This review is meant to give you: tips, praise, and let you know someone IS reading your work. I give tips to help you, not to make you feel bad. Thank you for posting, and keep writing!!


I'm mildly confused, but I think I understand it. You're very philosophical here, and it's refreshing. Obviouly, there are a few grammatical errors, such as capitalizing "I". Some of the lines that pose a question are hard to process without a question mark (although you don't really NEED to worry about punctuation in a poem. I did enjoy your reflections on the situation, though. If you're ever interested in having it (or anything) rewritten with punctuation, you can ask me. (not to change anything, just to add punctuation)

Keep writing and improving!
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Review by ChuChuRocker
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Your views intrigue me! It is refreshing to see that you have such a firm belief, yet you want to expand on it rather than insist others learn and follow it. I had originally thought that I would read this and find myself greatly annoyed, but I was pleasantly surprised at how open minded you are. I also like that you gave the readers a choice as to whether they should continue on if they think they may be offended. It's wonderful that you could become friends with people of a different view and want to spend time with them.
I greatly agree with your views on what has become of Christmas for Americans. Even though I am not really a religious person, I have always believed that the moral system set in place by the commandments should at least be used as a basis for what most of us believe is right.
Thank you for sharing this, and showing care for other's ideas as well as your own.
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Review of Decaying Trees  
Review by ChuChuRocker
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Smooth and creepy. I'm not as disturbed by the trees as I feel sorry for them. Your rhyme scheme was wonderful, and it flowed together well enough that I could read it aloud with little complication.
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Review by ChuChuRocker
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is beautiful. At first I got the feeling that this was a painting. Where do you live with such wonderful surroundings? I would love to be able to find something so clean, green, and refreshingly beautiful with my own lens. Amazing. Thank you for sharing this with everyone. I love nature photography.
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Review of A Dozen Roses  
Review by ChuChuRocker
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I laughed! My husband did as well. I love being surprised with humor in a poem. I have to admit, it would have been impossible for me to keep a straight face. It flows wonderfully, and keeps me interested until the joke. I'm going to have to keep reading the poems in this folder, they're wonderful.
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Review of Snow White  
Review by ChuChuRocker
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really enjoyed reading this. It's interesting how the human mind can warp things when the body is in true peril. I've always loved fairy tales, and the description of your Snow White was beautiful and fierce at the same time. Nature can be wonderfully terrifying. Now for the humor: If I had to get frostbite, I'd want it to be wrapped in such a pretty package.
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