OMG! What a wonderful statement,story and letter. How could you know exactly what I think and how I would say these things? This is what I would say myself, it is as if you have known me all my life and truly know the real me. Bless your kind, sweet spirit! You are such a treasure and a joy to know and have within our family here at WDC and NAI group.
May you be blessed ten times ten, up to the great spirit and back again dear one. May you, and generations to come of your family always know love, happiness, great health and fortune a plenty always. I am in awe of your awesome writing talent, and honored that you would dedicate this precious piece to me. You are most kind Oldwarrior, and your generousity will not go unnoticed. Write On!
Merry Christmas and a joyous New Year to you and yours.
Your friend
Cissy WhiteWolf
This is an excellent Halloween poem. You have it discribed in such a way as to entertain the reader. This poem reminds me of the true essence of the word Halloween ~ All Hallows Eve. Simply Wonderful! Writie On!
Sincerely
Cissy
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Now I have just got to say that I really love this Halloween poem! It is simply AWESOME!!!! You do have a way with words and you are a great Author that is plain to see. I am so pleased that I came by to take a look, you have such an array of wonderful writings here that a person could spend all day here and never want to leave to read another! Excellent writing!
Write On!
Love ya!
Cissy
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WoW Michelle I had no idea that you could write Erotica! What an awesome piece of work that will get the reader heated up so fast and leave them wanting more! Excellent piece of writing! Write on!
Be well my dear friend I shall return for another heated read soon!
Cissy
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Excellent recount of the 9-11 tragity. What a moving piece and very good free verse poem. Thank you for entering it into the 9-11 contest Nila.
Be well my dear friend and sis.
Cissy
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This is another emotional read of how two people can love each other and then it go all wrong and all they have left for one another is a very strong dislike and contempt.
third and sixth stanza, last line of each a little long but I wouldn't change it, to me it would take away from the meaning and the story that you were telling in this piece of poetry.
Be well my dear friend.
Cissy
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This is such a sad write as a couple stays together out of convience after the sparks and it seems love has gone out of their lives for each other.
My suggestion... first stanza, third line is a little long, but I still wouldn't change a thing in this very emotional read. The message is there in every word. Write On!
Excellent! in my humble opinion.
Cissy
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I must state that I always look into the poem to find a story there within it. This piece of poetry was hard for me to find exactly what kind of story you were telling except that you had lost a love in your life of someone.
If this is not the story that you were telling then I am most certainly lost in translation. I mean really! I am not the brightest of ALL that exsist here. So who am I to say?
Keep writing!
Cissy
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Please remember that this is only my opinion. I am not in the position to give advice on anything except if I see grammical errors or if it doesn't flow easy as I read only. For after all, my writings are full of errors.
I only give my opinion of how the piece of writing affects me personally .
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This is a nice free verse poem which has depth to it if you only look within the few lines that are here.
After reading this I get the feeling that this is a person not willing to give up on a love that she has grown to have for a seemingly cold person but who she thinks has more depth than what meets the eyes.
Someone she hopes to share a bond of love with.
My opinion of errors.
as a free verse none, if anything other? first line could be shortened up a tad.
As I have stated, just my opinion.
I enjoyed this read.
Be well
Cissy
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You've got quiet a few images here and I love them ALL!!! I really laughed when I saw Daph, bending down to help " Fix it! ", and the one about guessing what was in the cup your Mother was holding, lol, good one!
I love how your mind works.
Yeah you got a mess here in this image folder, lol, very good for a weird contest!
Love ALL of your images... some are very funny and that was a nice change!
This contest will go until the end of this month so when it is over I will email you if you won.
love you lil sis,
Cissy
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You go girl! These are awesome images for your group sigs. It is so cool that so many gave you sigs for your group, and yours are simply brilliant!!!! Great Work Goobs!
Love ya!
Cissy
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James, this gave me chill bumps! My what a poem of which I have never ead before. So much emotion and strong pride of your country. I am Native American and I watched that day when the towers came crumbling down... I was outraged and scared at the same time. It was men like you that we ALL have to thank for saving our freedom and fighting for us ALL! I have a poetry contest to honor people such as you of the 9-11. It is dedicated to ALL of the lost AND survivors of 9-11. I will never forget!
Love and blessings to you dear friend, I saw this in the Authors news letter. Excellent!
your friend
Cissy
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Adore, you drawed me right into this piece of poetry and took me back to a few yaers ago when I was still having nightmares about my childhood. I'm sure that this would affect others in so many different ways each in their own way... But for me, it made me realize that I am not the only one who experiences or have experience the darkness of past ghosts. Thank you for sharing this with us ALL here at WDC. I am reviewing for the moment because you won the items I put up for bid in Open Door to Grace Auction.
I'm sure that you know that you do not need me to say that this is an excellent piece of writing. Straigth to the point, and covers a wide range for all. As you must know already, there are no grammical errors, great sentence structure, excellent rhyming and rhythme.
Write On! From an admirer of your writing.
Cissy
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This was an excellent Mystery story. and I do so love Myserties. I like to read Dean Koontz, Marry Higgins Clark, along with other myserty writiers, and you my dear friend had me stumpd until the end... that's pretty good because I'm a very god puzzle solver and mysery solver for the most part. Great Story!!!
Can't wait to read another one of your stories, this was very enjoyable. No errors as far as I could see, but I guess I stopped looking for any when you drawed me ever so gently into your story like a fish on a fishing line. LOL. Love and Blessings, Be well my friend.
Write On!
Your friend
Cissy
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I love your story of your precious Princess. It it absolutly wonderful! I too am a great cat lover. I have three that adopted me one at a time.... well two that adopted me and one that I adopted. They allow me to live with them and we respect each others space for the most part. I am a frim believer that no one can " own " an animal... but we exsist " with " them. I never thought about it before until I read your story on your own cat that I could write volums on my own. Some pretty funny ones and some tenderhearted as well.
I must give this a though... thank you for getting my brain working in that area.
I see no errors and Write On!
Cissy
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Your poem of a race that has thinned out over the years has touched my heart. I am a Alabama/Tenn. Cherokee, and I would be honored if you would check out our new group, NAI group. If you would like to join, I will post your poem in our Story Book of our group. We are Native Americans AND adoptee's of NON-NA's... It would be an honor to have you as a member. Keep Writing! If you decide to join please email me, I am the founder and leader of the group. And post in the welcome center of the group page a hello to the other members. Be Well my friend.
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I have to say that this touched my heart greatly. I am Cherokee. I would be honored if you would consider joining my group NAI = Native American (Indian), if you choose to join please post a hello (O siyo) to everyone, we are a new group that are growning each day... and we accept adoptee's as well of non- NA back ground. Here is the link to our group and welcome center if you choose to join, check it out at your leisure.
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I am so sorry that you experienced abuse too. I hope the ones who did will pay greatly for what they did.
Now if I am reading this wrong then I got the wrong message from it. but that is what it sounded like to me.
Especially the part about that said..." Staring before me on my foled bloody knees, I shiver as robed servants play with me..."
Very well written and great free verse poem. Tragic, but I hope the healing has begun.
Keep Wrotong!
This was a very moving story, and so very true! I know of this story and you told it very well, you were right on target with every thing that you said here. Thank you for sharing this story with a fellow Native American. A lot of heart and hard work went into this story and it shows, at least to me. I have just recently started a NAI Group here on WDC, ( Native American Indian Group). I would be honored and pleased if you would join our little group that is growing every day. I ask that you look over our welcome center first and read what is written there first, and if you have no problem of what I have said, please post in the welcome center that you would like to join. This group is a place in which everyone's NA writings can and will be seen, while we continue to support many groups and WDC.
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Love and blessings to you dear friend,
Be well
Cissy WhiteWolf ~ Leader and founder of NAI Group
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Excellent contest you have going here! This was an eye opener. Thank you for making it up for ALL of us. I did enter to win, because I know that their are others that review better than I ever will, I simply reviewed because I wanted to review some others that I was not used to reviewing and this gave me a great oppertunity to do just that.
Be well SM & SMs, Have a very Happy Birthday, Eight years old, Writing.com!!!
Your friend,
Cissy
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This my dear Sweetly is a very moving piece. I can see that you were hurt very badly and that the pain is still there. I hope that one day you will begin to heal sweetie, I have been there myself and if you ever need to talk just email me and we will talk for hours if you need to okay? Now about your emotional poem.
These are just ' my ' views and how I see it and my opinions only. take whatever you like or disreguard everything I say... because after all YOU are the poet here.
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This is a very ggod piece, it allows the reader to come into your world and experience it with you.
If you could pull in a sentence of the ones that are longer than the others it would have a better flow to it and better rhythm.
But like I said, this is only my opinion.
Overall
Very emotional poem and brings the reader into the writing of this piece so that the reader will experience it with you. Excellent
I always look at what the poem says, if it tells a story in the rhyme and rhythm of it.
You have succeeded in doing just that. A story within a poem.
what I liked the most?
" I kept your secret for too long, and even the darkness couldn't take it."
Very true of this kind of abusive pain. So emotional, Keep Writing!!!
Can't wait to read more of your writings, keep up the great work sweetie.
Your friend,
Cissy
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Short but very sweet to the reader. This was very deep and if someone didn't get this before then they just did'nt read close enough! What a great explaination of the Author of Poet and pianist coming together in rhythm on flowing of the music of this poem. And it did have that musical flow to it that made this little piece a great piece.
Overall?
No grammical errors
Excellent rhyme
great rhythm
sentence structure was excellent
I would change Nothing!
{e:note:6}Part I liked the best?
" Poet and pianist, to art, giving birth."
Excellent! But I was a musican at one time back when... and I love it when words and music flows so well together. Great example of this indeed! Keep Writing!
Your friend
Cissy
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This is outragious!!! I'm still laughing my head off! Oops! Maybe I shouldn't have said that about the " laughing my head off " part. Especially after this woman got killed so brutally. I'm sorry okay? It just struck me as funny, sorry if it wasn't meant to be. The woman shouldn't have washed her hair in the stench that caused you to douse her with lysol, and she most certinly should not have said " Our love is dead "... man what a wrong move on her part. Overall?
No grammical errors.
No corrections needed
Perfect rhyme of AAA
excellent rhythm
Great sentence structure.
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