|Hello there! The title and description drew me in, so I had to come and have a read. It was an awkward beginning, to be honest. There were a few issues that meant it didn't flow well and I nearly did not read further. However, I continued on and glad I did, because once it got going, it was interesting and fun. This is a story that could have gone so much farther, and as a reader I expected it to! It stopped short, which is part of the appeal in an ironic way. It left me, as a reader, curious and wondering what the new world was like, but of course the main character in the story wasn't so brave. I can just see the spin offs from this! I like stories that leave that bit of wondering and it worked here really well.
As for the beginning of the story, there are a couple of suggestions for improvement that could make it read a little more smoothly.
"...trying to keep hold of my plastic bags and groceries..." The visual here is that he has plastic bags and plastic groceries. Perhaps this could be reworded to read "plastic bags full of groceries."
"The neighbour was on his way out of his own apartment. Sighing like I was some failed soap opera playing before a soccer game."
I would combine these two thoughts with a comma to avoid the incomplete sentence in the second line. In fact, I'm not even sure it would need a comma; just join the two into one.
After this is picks up a little. I was concerned with the very "talkative" writing style, but it fits the story and character fairly well and in the end it works. Some may disagree, but it is nice to see some variety in writers and their styles.
This was a FUN read. I enjoyed it. It made me smile. It gave me a chuckle. I liked the humor in it.
Thank you for sharing and hope you keep writing!