I found your poem in the “Read a Newbie” section at WDC. First, let me extend to you a warm welcome. This is a wonderful site in which to showcase your work, and to garner feedback.
I see that this piece was written about 24 years ago. I thought it to be a good example of free verse style. It has a good flow. Your word choice paints a good picture in the reader’s mind. Laughter is a beautiful sound, but sometimes elusive.
Thank you for sharing your talent! I look forward to reading more from you!
Good morning, Zelda, and welcome to WDC! I found your poem in the “Read a Newbie” section of this site.
I am not a learned reviewer, but I do enjoy reading. I thought that your piece was a good read. Your word choice helped to paint a realistic picture in my mind of your fantasy. The flow was smooth.
I love this! I think it’s simplicity and repetition make it a wonderful read. Your faith shines through each stanza! Our God is truly good all the time, and we should praise his magnificent name continually. This piece is a praise for Him, and it has stuck into my head. I will be repeating parts of it all day! LOL!
I found your poem while browsing the Read and Review section here at Writing.com I have to admit, the title drew me in! I think we would all wonder what we would do presented with that dilemma.
I think your free-verse style flowed good. It certainly conveyed your choices of what to do with the time left! I see it was written for a contest. That can be a challenge! I hope you did well.
I found your limerick while browsing the Read and Review Section of Writing.com. What a cute poem that speaks volumes about the state we are in with our immunities to Megabugs!
I thought you were true to form in style. Your word choice was strong, and the flow was smooth.
I came across your poem while browsing the Read a Newbie section of Writing.com. The title piqued my interest, so, I found I had to read and review it.
It appears that you are writing from the heart, about an incident that you experienced. If so, it is a sad tribute to your friend. I have found that people who share the same lifestyles as your late Mr. Brown, often do not listen to the voice of reason. They are hell-bent and headstrong to race down the pathfinder destruction they are on.
Your short free-verse piece tells a powerful story in a concise way. Your word choice is good and lends to your telling of the tale. Good job!
Thank you for sharing your work, and, welcome to WDC!
I found your poem while browsing the Read a Newbie section here on Writing.com. Since I often have trouble with insomnia, it was an intriguing title. I can certainly relate to the situation you describe.
The flow of your piece was smooth. I thought that your word choice was good. You conveyed your point of view to the reader. After all, isn’t that a part of writing?
Thank you for sharing your work! And, welcome to WDC.
I found your poem while browsing the Read a Newbie section here at Writing.com. Your title intrigued me.If you don’t obtain a scar or two on your journey through life, chances are, you haven’t really lived!
Your word choice conveys your emotions in this free-verse piece. Each couplet emphasizes your point of view.
Thank you for sharing your work with us! And, welcome to WDC.
I found your poem while browsing the Read a Newbie section of Writing.com. Being an orchid lover, this caught my attention! They are such lovely specimens of nature.
It looks like this was a contest entry. I hope you fared well in the Writers Cramp.
I thought this to be a good example of the villanelle form. It can be a tricky form. Your words were well chosen. The flow was good.
Thank you for sharing your talent with us! And, welcome to WDC.
This is a lovely free verse poem about a love story! Not just the ordinary traditional love story, but one that encompasses a love for a people, a way of life and ancestors, as well.
Your words paint a lovely picture oh Rose Petal and her chosen one
I found your poem while browsing the Read and Review section at Writing.com. It instantly grabbed my attention! Being on the far side of sixty, myself, I can certainly relate.
Your descriptive words were good. The flow of your piece was easygoing. You made your point (always a good thing when writing!).
I sincerely hope you have many more Springs to enjoy!
I found your piece when browsing through the Read and Review section here at Writing.com.
Your word choices paint a sad picture of sorrow. I think your descriptive language is spot-on in this concise work.
Please check the usage of others rather ”other’s”. This is the only part that might need tweaking. I don’t mean this as criticism, but as a means to improve your prose.
I found your poem while browsing the Read and Review section of WDC. I must admit I found the title intriguing!
Your form was interesting and led the reader along easily down a light-hearted path revealed in the end. I guess we are always looking for another way to prepare the American delicacy Spam!
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Hello! I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Review Group. I am a member here on WDC, much like you. I am certainly not an expert at reviewing. I hope that you will find this review helpful. It is not my intention to criticize your work, but rather to make helpful suggestions that you can either choose to use or discard. Remember that the opinions that I express are mine, as a reader on this site. I am certainly not an authority on reviewing, but I do enjoy reading!
Overall Impression: I think this is a lovely piece telling of a romance that is growing and maturing. It is noted how much you care for her and appreciate the person that she is. You have expressed your feelings quite well. Isn't that what writing is all about? Good job!
Suggestions: None that would serve to improve your work.
Please allow me to encourage you to continue to write and enjoy all that WDC has to offer!
Hello! I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Review Group. I am a member here on WDC, much like you. I am certainly not an expert at reviewing. I hope that you will find this review helpful. It is not my intention to criticize your work, but rather to make helpful suggestions that you can either choose to use or discard. Remember that the opinions that I express are mine, as a reader on this site. I am certainly not an expert, but I do enjoy reading!
Overall Impression: Thank you for sharing this lesson in U.S. History with us. I certainly learned something that I can share with my grandchildren on their next visit. (I may even tell my children, if they will sit and listen long enough). Good job!
Please remember that the opinions that I express are mine, as a reader on this site, not an authority on reviewing.
Suggestions: None that would serve to improve your work.
Please allow me to encourage you to continue to write and enjoy all that WDC has to offer!
Hello! I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Review Group. I am a member here on WDC, much like you. I am certainly not an expert at reviewing. I hope that you will find this review helpful. It is not my intention to criticize your work, but rather to make helpful suggestions that you can either choose to use or discard. Remember that the opinions that I express are mine, as a reader on this site. I am certainly not an expert, but I do enjoy reading!
Overall Impression: in less than 100 words, you have managed to capture the soul of the man. His longing for days gone by is expressed well in your short story. Good job! It creates a tangible character and the emotion that he feels when staring at what has become of his home land.
Please remember that the opinions that I express are mine, as a reader on this site, not an authority on reviewing.
Suggestions: None that would serve to improve your work.
Please allow me to encourage you to continue to write and enjoy all that WDC has to offer!
Hello! I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Review Group. I am a member here on WDC, much like you. I am certainly not an expert at reviewing. I hope that you will find this review helpful. It is not my intention to criticize your work, but rather to make helpful suggestions that you can either choose to use or discard. Remember that the opinions that I express are mine, as a reader on this site. I am certainly not an expert, but I do enjoy reading!
Overall Impression: Acrostics can be such fun to write. Although they may seem difficult, as well, you have created a good example of the form. Good job! Your piece describes fear and the feelings of the man about whom you write. It certainly does invoke emotion. Your word choice is excellent in creating this. Flow is smooth, too.
Please remember that the opinions that I express are mine, as a reader on this site, not an authority on reviewing.
Suggestions: My only suggestion would be to highlight the first letter of each line by putting the letters in "bold". Only a suggestion, though. It does not detract from the quality of the piece.
Please allow me to encourage you to continue to write and enjoy all that WDC has to offer!
Hello! I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Review Group. I am a member here on WDC, much like you. I am certainly not an expert review. I hope that you will find this review helpful. It is not my intention to criticize your work, but rather to make helpful suggestions that you can either choose to use or discard. Remember that the opinions that I express are mine, as a reader on this site. I am certainly not an expert, but I do enjoy reading!
Overall Impression: Sometimes "balance" itself can be overwhelming. You talk about the carefree wishes of one who is a slave to obligation. Your form was good, as was your word choice. It only 23 lines, you have expressed what some people experience in their lifetimes, trying to maintain "balance". Good job!
Please remember that the opinions that I express are mine, as a reader on this site, not an authority on reviewing.
Suggestions: None that would serve to improve your work.
Please allow me to encourage you to continue to write and enjoy all that WDC has to offer!
Regards,
Nani
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