A really good write - You might want to go in and edit your entry, as the header for your entry reads "Rom to Breathe" and I'm sure you wanted "Room..."
Other than that, it was a enjoyable read, I can relate to it...
Good luck in Lexi's contest!
Countrymom
A beautiful poem about a sad subject - Cancer has claimed the lives of some of my friends and family members, and I know the pain. I do believe there is a better place - but its still really hard to see them go.
Very well written - congratulations on winning the contest and getting that awardicon. Richly deserved -
and a great tribute to your friend -
I would love to have heard this sung at the convention - I'm sure it was a HIT! It is a great site, and Story Master and Story Mistress both have done an outstanding job of providing us with a place to write, get reviews, and they keep improving it -
Ive been here awhile (3 or 4 years) and plan on staying until I get too old to type anymore!
All in all, you've hit the nail on the head with your lyrics, and show great originality!
Great Job, keep up the good work -
Countrymom
As a mother and grandmother, I've answered the "why" questions endless times. Not sure that all my answers were correct - "Because I said so, that's why" could be an answer - but I do agree with you, that no one has really been able to answer all the "whys" - and probably never will.
It definitely makes one stop and think. Thanks for sharing this!
Countrymom
A really well-written story - and I don't usually read stories but this one grabbed my attention with both hands, and kept me glued until the end.
I'll be back to read more of your writing - and yes, I do believe that life should have background music -
my choices may be a little difference, depending on day and mood, but the music swells and I enjoy -
Keep writing, you've a talent there!
Countrymom
A delightful collection of verse - very original! I spotted one small typo in the last verse you may want to correct (majesty) instead of majusty - You could run a spell check on your verses, I may have missed a couple more
Other than that - I love it! Keep up the good work, and write on!
Countrymom
Such a well-written story I have not seen for a long time! Makes me realize that every moment is precious, and people are worth so much more than fame and fortune... sad that she was alone in her last years,
but good that she had her memories...
I turn 69 tomorrow (the 7th) and already I look for my children to come home - or to spend a little time - but I do try to keep busy, and make a lot more memories to think about when I'm old (I used to think 40 was old..)
Thanks for steering me to this one. I really enjoyed the read! Keep up the good work!
Countrymom
Love this one! You've written a great free verse and opened my eyes to the beauty that lies beneath the waters! Thanks for your entry and good luck in the Animal Kingdom contest at the Senior Center!
Countrymom
The stages of loss - well described here - denial, and finally acceptance - I think it's a great poem, and I'm glad you entered the contest! GOOD LUCK!
I really like this one! What a great thought - and of course, God is big enough to watch us all and keep the earth together anyway! A good write! Thanks for sharing on writing.com. Keep up the good work!
Countrymom
Well done - and sad, I hope that things work out for the best for you. A lot of emotion in this poem!
Take care, and keep looking to a happy future!
God bless!
Countrymom
Storymistress! What a wonderful idea! Well done, and so many wonderful prizes and members who donated so much! Sending more gps for the Raffle -
A beautiful way to say "thank you" to my friends -
God bless!
Countrymom
I hope the 20 lines doesn't disqualify you - it is a beautiful work - I love the part where the animals gather at the church at night. And Thank God that the church still stands, and not another Mall!
You've done well - good luck in the contest!
Countrymom
Well written, and while I side more with your brother, I must say you have spoken your piece with clarity and are just one of many who have solid opinions on the past election.
Well, we are all Americans, and thank God for that.
We have the freedom and the right to say what we feel.
For that - you can thank a soldier!
God bless!
Countrymom
A beautiful story! Welcome to Writing.com and enjoy your stay! I will mark you as a favorite author and come back to read more of your work! What a lesson in this story, and how true that we tend to judge people before we really know anything about them - "a book by its cover!" You've done a suberb job with this, keep up the good work!
Countrymom
A poem written from the heart, and with such words of wisdom. When you read it back, it needs a little touch-up here and there - but - the emotion behind the words comes through.
I am sorry for your loss - may God bless and keep you!
May you reach out and love those around you, and keep the memory of your little boy safe in your heart.
Take care - and keep writing - it helps!
Countrymom
A very good write - kind of sad at the end - There are many who will share some of themselves, but many others keep their innermost feelings to themselves -
I think we all do, to a degree.
Best of luck on your goal to become a teacher! It's a worthy career and much needed!
Keep up the good work -
Countrymom
That is quite a story! Scarey - "When you are in trouble, nobody cares" - tells it all, and the sense of aloneness is frightening. There is always someone who cares - you just have to reach out to them.
Don't let the wolf get you!
Take care, and God bless!
Countrymom
Sounds mighty good to me - how lovely, to portray a romance between a rock and a storm. This promises to be an excellent workshop; the prompts give my tired old brain a jolt and I might just have to try it myself! Keep up the outstanding writing! It is always an inspiration!
Countrymom
Perfect, of course - although I normally do not read vampire (or any monster stories!) - Sure to be a winner! I am just too much of a chicken and prefer lighter fare
I could be a Sun Goddess Now, there's a thought!
Good luck with the contest!
Countrymom
I love the story! It flows beautifully, and holds interest all the way through. It's the kind of story I would enjoy reading to my children, who no doubt, would be searching for their House Elf at the end!
You are one of the best story-tellers I've read, bringing light and a smile with each story!
God bless!
Countrymom
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