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Hi! *Smile* I'll be happy to tell you what I like about your item's content and what emotion it evokes in me. If I see an area or two that need attention by way of improvement, I'll make suggestions for you. I will try to word my reviews in such a way that might garner you more views for the item when seen on the public reviewing page and here, in my reviewing forum. I will always do my best to carry on the Simply Positive motto.
I'm good at...
I am particularly interested in poetry, (romantic poetry is my favorite) though I will review other item types (see below). I have a fondness for love in general, for what greater thing is there? *Heart*
Favorite Genres
Romance, Spiritual, Relationship, Humor, Emotional, Mystery, Detective, Religious
Least Favorite Genres
Fantasy, Historical, Science Fiction, Horror, Western
Favorite Item Types
Poetry, Prose, Novella, Short Story
Least Favorite Item Types
Book (time is an issue)
I will not review...
I do not have the time to read a full book at present. This may change in the future. I will not review science fiction, horror or western, as those genres do not interest me and I would not be able to do them justice. I will not review anything with relation to the occult and I WILL NOT REVIEW ANYTHING HAVING TO DO WITH AGE-INAPPROPRIATE SEXUAL CONTENT.
Public Reviews
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi!

I love this wonderful tribute to our loving God! It brings me a sense of peace and comfort in the knowledge I can rest in the everlasting arms of my heavenly Father.

Your rhyme scheme is excellent. I do read the poetry newsletter but don't usually follow forms. My knowledge of them is weak, but I see you used one here. I like the way it flows. What style/form is it?

Your flair of faith is bright! Never put it under a lampshade!

May He bless you with the best of everything!

Crissy



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Review of The Mirror  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This made me cry.

And I hope I'm interpreting it correctly. Because the other two ways I interpreted it made me cry, too.

Your storytelling, albeit a poem, is magnificent.

With each and every word, line by line, the intensity grows more feverish. In my head I can hear dramatic music to accompany this piece. And I understand this is your heart and soul which nagged at you until, through your quill, you spilled your blood onto the paper. That is what great writers do, and actually it's a Hemingway quote. "Writing is simple. All you have to do is sit down at a typewriter and bleed." -E.H.

I commend you for this very well-written and emotional piece.

Merry Christmas!

Crissy

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Review of mistrial  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi heb..
Interesting...and in all your writing, one might find a character that is a misfit among misfits, an undermined soul only searching for validity and willing only to compromise in order that they may be viewed from That Place. You know the Place I'm talking about, heb? It's a Place that you mentioned herein. It's Authenticity. I mean, if we're not careful, our true and authentic selves may spill out from the very core of us and onto the paper. Oh. You say, "But they are not like that really." But I say, "Absolutely they are." The mouth screams. The soul speaks. But the spirit...the spirit whispers, heb. (See the story of David hiding in a cave from King Saul, who was trying to kill him. David was anointed to be Saul's successor to the throne, but in the meantime David played beautiful music on the harp for Saul, and since David had a heart for God he didn't want to attack Saul. God sent three things to speak to David, but when he heard Him, it was in the whisper of the wind.) And I believe what we read, what happens when we see on paper or screen, is the spirit whispering of goodness, mercy, grace, and peace. It may be only that those things are what we are declaring over our lives as we write our hopes and dreams, fascinations and expectations, but declaring goodness over one's life has the propensity to affect it in a most profound way.

Let us speak with authority the good things He hath prepared for us.

"Out of the mouth the heart speaks." -Proverbs

"As a man thinketh, so is he." -Proverbs

"You can't keep a good man down." -Some song by some artist.

"You can gather whatever evidence you feel is necessary, but if the narrative does not fit the character, if you have the M and the O but not the other M, what good is your character assasination?" -Me

No. You must have all three to make a case and without motive there is no case.

Thoroughly enjoyed. Thank you for sharing.

Best,
Cris~
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
This is beautiful. Saw it in the newsletter this morning and the title and description drew me in.
You've used wonderful juxtapositions in this piece.

God bless you. Have a truly wonderful day.

Crissy

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This folder is fantastic from what I've read thus far, Anthony. I love the depth into which you delve to explore levels of heartfelt and emotional longings, revelations, and satisfaction.

Thank you for consistent eloquence.

~Crissy
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Review of Rain Dance  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I found this item as I searched your port for a piece to read/review. The title drew me in. I love to dance in the rain.

This poem is filled with delightful imagery. I especially like the concept you conveyed in your last verse, as its terminology pulls the positive and negative emotions of a situation into the light of day, and gives witness to the depth of you that you offer/give to this person.

I like the form ... what is it? Rhombus, maybe? It's used consistently throughout. *ThumbsUpL*

The tone is laden with expectant love which, when read by a hopeless romantic, lends the reader toward the idealistic conclusion. If this is a true-to-you experience, I really hope you made out like a light shined on you from heaven.

Thank you for sharing this beautiful side of yourself. I truly enjoyed reading your work.

Best always,

~Crissy


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Review of Stars  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey Amy!
I really love this poem. I Like the language you have used to describe those beautiful dabbles of distant reflectors.

My fave part: "Silent captivators."
That's so true. It brings back warm, fuzzy feelings of lying on the trampoline with someone I cared about and staring at the stars, talking about everything. Thanks for that. I miss him!
Your words remind me that we, compared to the vastness of the night sky, are small and God is so great in His infinite wisdom and creation.
Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem!

Crissy
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Review of Iridescent Blue  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, Rick! This is wonderful.

Beautifully written prose that captured my attention and my heart.

It was lovely to read your reflections; this woman seems to be magical. When we meet people of this caliber of mystery and intrigue it's a rare delight and not one with which I'm unfamiliar.

Your vocabulary is perfect for the telling of the encounters, your feelings, and the longing which comes after having been spellbound.

A favorite line: Twenty years have come and gone, leaving me with and education only time can afford. <--- Very uniquely written!

I really love your vague description of this person. It adds to the mystery and power this woman holds within.

I truly enjoyed reading your work. You have made a lasting impression. Thank you for sharing your story with me. *Smile*

Have a Blessed day!

Cris~


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Review of Wealth Untold  
Rated: E | (3.5)
"[He'll] turn bones into armies." -EW
Nice work. Don't give up your faith, even in those "wicked" rich people.
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Review of Love IN Absentia  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Floyd.
So beautifully written, and tells of a forlorn absence of fulfilling physicality and quietness in the spirit of love which must be worn in secret, like the commander of a great army hiding his weakness in the fabric inside his covering.

Wonderful work. *ThumbsUpL*

Cris~
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Review of Coming Home  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Heya.
This piece is a beautiful tapestry woven with will and want, should and should not. The beauty of daydreaming in the midst of night, and the reality of desire turned cold. Home fires burn; the hearth is warm, but to immerse ourselves in hellwater is to earn the price for sleepless nights.

Your diction is quite enchanting. The way you describe this outsider, as though the fulfillment of dreams somehow comes from beyond the beautiful circle around a precious finger is representative of sin we all behold. Not one is without temptation. I have been in this place, too.

Worth mentioning is that there are possibilities within everyone, even those close to us we may have deemed and discarded as flaky or superficial. Promise is for everyone under grace.
๐ŸŒธCris~

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This piece reminds me of someone I am very fond of, wishing those words could come from he to me. Unfortunately, it's a distant theory, and behind it is no reality.

Such a sweetly written poem. And pink font makes it even sweeter.
Your words are well-chosen and perfectly fitting for the topic.

Well done! Keep creating masterpieces!

CrisMiss
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I glanced at this piece the other day but, didn't have time for a review.

I simply love it. And it's so true. There's nothing better than, after a hard day, coming home to a man who knows how to love you the way you you like.

There is a great book about this topic called "The Five Love Languages" by Gary Chapman. Pretty popular book, too.

I love the way you have taken the POV from the woman and what she needs, and given sound advice to the lover in their life.

Perfect, as is. I saw no need for improvement.

Blessings,

CrisMiss
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there!

Thank you for the review request.

I have read this about 7 times. Its meaning is sort of coming to me, which is "odd" because I'm usually pretty adept at discerning (a gift from the Spirit, Amen!) the motive or intention behind poetry.

Your poem seems to be about disaster, both inward and outward, and it may be tinged with a wee bit of sarcasm.

I really like the first 2 lines of your 3rd verse. Whatever comes your way, have a coke and a smile, then your reaction will be so peaceful it will give you resurrection power if you are in Christ Jesus. Did I get that correct?

I ran into confusion here and there. Did you mean "cooler" or "color" in last verse? "The horror you sing?" Is that about a negative attitude?

So, in conclusion, you thought you wanted something or someone, but you realized they are a terrible mess, so you skipped out and decided your life is great as it is?

Email me and let me know if I'm even close.

Thank you for the opportunity to review this piece.

Write on!
CrisMiss
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Wow. Fantastic! I love the comparisons! Your very first "A mud puddle wouldn't exist... had me nodding my head in agreement thinking, 'Wow, what a wonderful metaphor for opposites, which when combined create a wonderful splashing medley of their own. Like, light and dark coming together to create His artful masterpiece in the first heaven. Or compliments and gratitude combining to create friends.
I love this piece.
Indeed, He's got the whole world in His hands.

Wonderful work, friend.
Crissy
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Review of Dead Prose  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi.

Wow, just wow.

The thing about this poem is you didn't use a lot of descriptors, but the visual aesthetics are still beautifully dancing.

It is such a sad theme, but the love in your heart surpasses that sadness and brings the piece to heights of intensity. Sad love, often referred to as being "forlorn," can impact your readers on a very personal level, especially since most of us have lost someone.

I enjoyed the layout, too, with connector words between the verses.

As far as punctuation goes, it's not used consistently. You may want to have another look and further enunciate the love story of your heart.

I enjoyed reading this prose. Thank you for inviting me in.

Can you grow from this, from here? Can you turn sadness into tribute? Can you turn pain into gratitude? I'd like to see what could come from your heart regarding the same person when looked at from an angle of the fun you had together on an adventure, or what it felt like standing still together looking at a piece of art. The reason is that you seem to know your heart, your feelings, and yourself pretty well, and you have a great command of the English language. Those are the makings of a Great Poet. And you are on your way!

Blessings to you. Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Anna. G'morning. Thanks for the review request.

I thought your poem was really unique, and I love the title, which is fitting for the piece.

The subject line is meant to describe what the poem is about. You may want to change the info there to read something that will draw attention to your piece. Personally, I would choose "Is Your individuality propelled? Read on to find out how I push myself upwards." That would grab more eyes, I think.

The whole poem embodies my philosophy. I still, at 48!, have my first college dictionary from right after HS. Words are our thing!! Aside from my Bible, that and my thesaurus are my favorite books. So, when you say you look up all those words you don't know, I'm thinking 'friend.' Why? Because knowledge seems to run in clusters. If we are willing to do a little side investigating we will #Rise above, not to be haughty or arrogant, but to store those seeds away for when we need them. I do it with every word I don't know.

There is, I have to add, a lot of wordiness. I read it aloud twice, and at the end of nearly every sentence I was gasping for breath. I don't know what that readability scale takes into account, but maybe not breath-factor. ๐Ÿ˜

Here are a couple of examples of places where you could condense your words while making the same impact:
A) 1st line:
'Being propelled is encouragement.
B) I would completely omit the line beginning "The anticipation of all this... If we tell our readers that we admire ourselves, they are not likely to admire us.
C) "newfangled version of your newer self" is a wee bit redundant and wordy. I would write: "newfangled version of yourself."

The reason I suggest not being overly flowery in your text is because Editors hate it. I don't know your intentions with your work, but if your aim is to become a published author, please take these tidbits into consideration. It's these tips from other WdC writers that helped me to publish, not a book, but 2 essays and 2 poems.

Overall, I think this is a really important factor to consider for anyone in life, so your audience is everyone. (Don't forget to keep your audience in mind when you use vocab. because words should be age-appropriate. )

Sending you positive Vibes and Light for your path. Blessings on your journey today!
Keep creating masterpieces!
Crissy

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Review of Crazy Faith  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Excellent. I love this piece. I am radically in love with Him, but there are days I forget to put on The Armor.
Well-executed, and in logical order. Thought-provoking and sincere.
Great job!
Keep creating masterpieces!
Crissy


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Review of Words  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Indeed Words are the Creators. "In the beginning was the Word and the Word was with God and the Word was God..." John 1:1

I love the phrases you use as description in this poem. You say you're no poet but this is fine poetry, although I can't really think of how hearing "I hate you" could ever ring out without a flinch. Those aren't just words. There is extreme emotion behind them.

As Mama Joyce says, words are containers for power. We can use them to lift or to defeat.

Great poem. I especially like: "Phrases like weapons lashing at our souls..."

Very creative piece!

Have a blessed day.

Crissy
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Review of wisdom  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! Long time no speakie. *Smile*

Your point is made in no subtle tones. In fact, it screams, "You fool!" For wisdom is etched into our souls as our experiences aid us in either climbing or descending the proverbial ladder of success in business and/or society.

I'm wondering about the form you have used here. It contains 17 syllables, yes, like a haiku but different. But it's a powerful message.

Thank you for sharing.

Write on!!

Crissy
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Review of He's Gone  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi. Thank you for the review request.
So many will be able to relate to this poem. We've all been betrayed.

The mood, however, is subtle for such a hurtful thought and this reader believes the poet must be in a stable place of faith to have accomplished this peace. Lackadaisical feelings toward an ex are a definite sign of growth.

The overall tone of your piece is one of dissociation and acceptance, which in this case are excellent occurrences.

Loved the line "Suddenly a lone thought made my heart swirl."

Have a great day, and keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy
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In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi! Good afternoon. Thank you for the review request

After reading through your story, I'm reminded of the 'Silent Sermons' that Steven Furtick recently preached. It was about telling yourself good news about yourself. You can find it on YouTube.

The grammar, punctuation, and spelling are very good! If there were mistakes, none jumped out at me. *Thumbsup*

The main character is pretty well fleshed out and believable. I was able to identify.

The storyline is more of a self-taught lesson. Seems like it should be categorized as an essay rather than a short.

Your word choices are good. Flow is good, and sentence structure and placement is logical.

The takeaway is a valuable lesson we all need to hear.

Thank you for sharing! Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy

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Review of Jesus Christ.  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Amen!

This is a great testimony of His love for us and and what He has accomplished on this earth in the short 3 years He was in ministry. If we call on His name, and believe in our hearts and confess with our mouths, He will never leave us.

Great work, and just as I finished watching Joyce Meyer and Steven Furtick this morning. *ThumbsUpL*

Have a wonderful day!

Crissy
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! G'morning.

This piece is excellent. I love your word choices; they bring the prose to heights of brilliance, and actually leave the reader feeling a little whimsical. Maybe it's nostalgia. "Ride on a carpet of rich imaginings..." What a superb concoction of words!

I noticed no spelling or grammatical errors. *ThumbsUpL*

Your work never ceases to inspire and light a fire under me.

Have a wonderful day.

Crissy
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Amy!

This was a great piece, with sound advice, for creating believable characters. I recommend people-watching as well. Another tool I've found for characterization is following @PsychToday on Twitter. The articles they publish tell a lot about personality types.

This is written with the perfect length and in logical order. The only tiny error I noticed was the missing "t" in your second to last line, last paragraph. (I think you meant 'it' and not 'I.'

Overall, a wonderful essay that benefits the reader/writer.

Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy
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