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Hi! *Smile* I'll be happy to tell you what I like about your item's content and what emotion it evokes in me. If I see an area or two that need attention by way of improvement, I'll make suggestions for you. I will try to word my reviews in such a way that might garner you more views for the item when seen on the public reviewing page and here, in my reviewing forum. I will always do my best to carry on the Simply Positive motto.
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I am particularly interested in poetry, (romantic poetry is my favorite) though I will review other item types (see below). I have a fondness for love in general, for what greater thing is there? *Heart*
Favorite Genres
Romance, Spiritual, Relationship, Humor, Emotional, Mystery, Detective, Religious
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Fantasy, Historical, Science Fiction, Horror, Western
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Poetry, Prose, Novella, Short Story
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Book (time is an issue)
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I do not have the time to read a full book at present. This may change in the future. I will not review science fiction, horror or western, as those genres do not interest me and I would not be able to do them justice. I will not review anything with relation to the occult and I WILL NOT REVIEW ANYTHING HAVING TO DO WITH AGE-INAPPROPRIATE SEXUAL CONTENT.
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Review of Son.  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Amen to that.
This is a wonderful dedication to your child. It shows the pride you take in being a father and the hope you have for your son as he grows into a man.
I can really appreciate the last line, as my own son, who's 21, just told me he's going to start going to church. Woohoo.

A terrific piece indeed.

Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy
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Review of Walking South.  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful piece. I love the reminiscence of moments like this. Remembering these times is what gets us through the difficult days. Your wording is perfect for the topic. I enjoyed this poem very much.

Have a blessed day.

Crissy

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Review of Listen to My Eyes  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
This piece is beautifully written, describing, I feel, the pain of being left behind. I love your word choices and sentence structures. The lines sort of envelope the reader and draw them in to the pain. That is what poetry is supposed to do. Excellent job at conveying those emotions. So much can be said through the eyes, and here you have captured a story. Beautiful.

Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy
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Review of A Glimpse of You  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Your love shines through in this piece. Beautifully written with a touch of forlorn hope. Your narrative at the end was helpful to understand the whole scenario. I'm so sorry you lost your love. I loved the line "Upon awakening...and soul." Great poem. Only believe and you will meet again.

Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy
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Review of Mister  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi! G'morning.
Thanks for the review request. After reading through your piece, I am curious. Was this the fashion in which your friends met, the ones for which you wrote it? If so, how romantic!

I see that you are kind of new here, so *Candy6* WELCOME! *Candy6* If you have any questions about how to navigate the site, please do not hesitate to ask. There are quite a lot of aspects to this wonderful place (my online home) and I am more than willing to help you around.

When you select the item types and subcategories, it's sort of important to 'call it what it is.' Here, you have selected "Adult" and "Drama." The Adult category is more for content that should not be seen by eyes under the age of 18. You know, like graphic war scenes and romance that goes beyond the bedroom door. Drama pieces tend to have scenes that build to a screaming climax, and put the reader on the edge of their seats. Think "The Silence of the Lambs" or "The Cherry Orchard." (Well, we all aspire to be good writers and hope to be that skilled some day. LOL)

As for the mechanics of your piece, I did find a typo in your 3rd verse. "He say" should read "He says..."

One more itty bitty thing. See about adding an emotional element, or an action that is affectionate, even opening a door. That is really what grabs your readers and garners you fans. When you connect your writing to the human spirit, your readers really identify with your heart and the piece. Sometimes we have to dig deep. Let me give an example of a piece I wrote that shows rather than tells. "Invalid Item"   by A Guest Visitor That's one of my more recent pieces, looking back to my teenage years.

This was a great read for me because I'm a little shy, and meeting people in the street is hard for me. I have no problem smiling and saying hello, but from there I wither. Thank you for opening my mind.

Be Blessed with radiance and joy! Have a wonderful day!

Crissy

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Review of Deep In Her Eyes.  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey!
This poem has lovely reflections of heartfelt longing. My favorite line: Deep in her eyes, is a place to live.
Your description is fantastic. I love the image I have after reading this piece. Nice narrative!
Have a Blessed day!
Keep creating masterpieces!
Crissy
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Review of Solitude.  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!
I found this poem to be quite interesting. The first verse sets the mood and tone for the whole poem. Finding solitude is not as hard as some peeps think, and some of us could do with less of it.
Great work! Write On!
Crissy
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Review of My Heart  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! G'morning!
This poem is very well-written. Your word placement, choices, and rhyme scheme are quite perfect, actually. I love, love your writing style.
My favorite verses are the final two.
To love, lose love, and love again is sometimes scary. But opening our hearts again after hurting is vital for personal growth. Willingly or not, you have softened my heart with this tender love poem. It makes me long for those days of snuggling and evening river walks. You are Blessed to have what you have.
Thanks for the invitation to read this piece. It really has changed my perspective.
Keep creating masterpieces!
Crissy
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Review of My Fire Burns On  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey EOI.
Wow, this is a truly lovely poem. When someone's spirit lives on in happy memories after their candle has been extinguished, one knows they were a special person. What a joyful way to view them.
I did encounter a little tongue-stumbling on the line beginning with "Your dress..." Perhaps add a comma after 'dress,' or add a verb to the line to make it a complete sentence so that it flows a little more fluently.
Other than that one issue, the poem was beautiful. I especially liked your 3rd and 4th lines. Thank you for sharing!

Crissy
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Review of Author bio  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi T.L.

I saw your review request on my Hub page and thought I would have a peek.

The line "tens of readers" did make me giggle. That's very cute. 😊 It would also be appropriate for your Bioblock here on WdC. Humor is an admirable quality, and it will bring readers further into your port.

A jack-of-all-trades is a person, so I think it's redundant to use the word "person."

Congratulations on your publications! Since you have already published two books, perhaps reconsider the words "trying to" in that first line and leave it as "fulfilling." (Any editor will tell you to use as few words as possible to get your point across.)

Oops! I think you meant anxiety-ridden, and not "riddled."

I did think this was clever.
If you take any corrective measures, email me and I will change my rating.

Best Always,
Crissy
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Rated: E | (4.5)
☺ Hi Magoo.
This piece so reminds me of my son when he was small. A stick is never just a stick. I love the imaginations of children. Your poem took me back to a time when everything was good.
Your rhyming and flow are great. I can't help but to wonder, though, to which age group is this poem targeted? The reason I ask is that some of the words chosen are a wee bit sophisticated, like "distracted," "disguise," and "stroll." If it is intended for younger than ten or so, you may take that into consideration when choosing vocab.
I took a correspondence course with a school called 'The Institute of Children's Literature.' It's a go-at-your-own-pace program where they assign published author instructors to each student. That was about 15 years ago. They may still be around. You definitely have talent. They may help to bring your writing to new levels.
Have a Blessed day.
Keep creating masterpieces!
Crissy
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Review of " The Ceiling "  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi T.L.
This is quite beautiful. I love the lyrical quality, and the way the verses soothe me into a quiet warmth.
Your words were cleverly chosen to set the mood for this piece. It's as if solace were meeting opportunity in your last verse. Very nicely written!
I saw nothing that needed improvement as far as mechanics. *ThumbsUpL*
Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy
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Review of Twilight's Fall  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!
This poem really touched me, which is kind of hard to do with a short piece.

The words you chose were quite perfect in getting into the heart of this reader. I particularly liked the line "...in this breast...it's all." Masterful way of conveying your dedication to each and every person, job, and obstacle. *ThumbsUpL* (Did you mean breast or chest?)

The meter is good. Spelling, punctuation, and grammar are spot on. I noticed no obvious mistakes.

You took me on a journey to the ocean side with your piece. Thank you.

Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Temujin! This is fantastic! LOVE the country accents. You absolutely did them justice. I grew up in the country and I'm very familiar with the terminology. Everything is slow paced in the middle of nowhere. Especially speech, and you nailed it.

Your description is terrific. I could smell the burgers, hear them sizzling on the grill. The little details you included, like the straw, and the chicken feathers were icing on the cake.

What a splendid twist to the ending! You had me laughing out loud with those last few lines! *ThumbsUpL*

I noticed no unintentional spelling or grammar errors. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your creativity with me!

Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi again.

I could take this poem very personally, if I chose to look deep within your words. And I did look very deep. I suppose if we read poetry with the expectation of gleaning something valuable, then we will always be able to personify the literature. And as such, the whole poem would be applicable except the very last line. But it's not about me. It's about your experiences, and your culture, and your environment. That's what makes you a good writer. You can transcend boundaries, cultures, seas, and still hit home with someone like me.

I see now that your last verse being a different meter is your style. I will not try to correct that again.

There is one thing I saw that you might like to think about, though. Your first and second verses are somewhat opposites. I'm not sure if that was intended or not but in the first, the ghosts are reminiscent of dark times, and in the second their spirits are clean and wanting to play games. It's a little confusing.

That said, you made me think, and whether my thinking was good or bad doesn't matter. The emotional element was definitely there. *ThumbsUpL*

Thank you for sharing this poem with me.

Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy

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Review of Another Morning.  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi. G'morning.

Sorry I'm a little late. I was tired last evening. Busy day.

I really like the description herein. Your piece has a little bit of an eerie feel, with the moss and moors and electric mist. While reading, I was sort of transposed into a setting whereby I expected ghosts and goblins to arise, while at the same time, you juxtaposed a caring heart. It was as if sin met sainthood at dawn. Does the sun, or daylight, cover us from the inevitable wrongs we do in the night? I believe we all like to think so, but we're really only fooling ourselves.

Your structure in the first verse is different than that of your second. I read the second with the ABAB rhyme scheme rather than the AABB, same as the first verse, and it worked. You might like to use the same metering throughout the piece.

Spelling and grammar were spot on. Excellent!

I am honored that you were inspired by something I wrote. Not sure exactly what it was, but honored nonetheless.

Hope you have a wonderful Sunday.

Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy

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Review of Broken  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow!
You used such great language (and the metaphors are fabulous) to describe a brokenness that we all feel from time to time. Anyone would be able to identify with this piece, therefore you've hit the nail on the head, so to speak, in that you've included everyone as your reader. A broad audience means more likely to be published. Keep creating pieces like this and they sky's the limit.
Emotionally, my heart hurt when I read this. That means you are capable of reaching your readers on a deep, reflective level. Don't stop.
I do have to question the line, "There is no end for the dead." Actually, there is an end. I don't know where you are on your spiritual journey, but please know that death ends in either heaven or hell, and you get to decide which. I'll leave it at that. If you have any questions, please do not hesitate to ask.
I'm very proud of you for this piece. Your work is amazing.
Crissy
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Rated: E | (5.0)
To give the highest honor to those having fought for my freedom is vital. Your poem is a significant reminder that a soldier's duty is to his country, and more specifically to his countrymen.
My favorite line: "Standing shoulder to shoulder, beside our souls exposed..." The mind, will, and emotions of a soldier are set aside in the name of obedience and service, and when all is said and done, it will have been for the betterment of the people. Such "valor cannot be disguised" as I wrote in my poem, One American. Thank you for your service, Sir.
Crissy
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Review of Everything To Me.  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi.
This is a lovely poem, and I like that you have combined the literal with the philosophical.
The thing about death is it's part of life. It's finality to one stage of life, and the moving on to a better one (if we know Christ.) Being mad at God for something that is natural, and happens to everyone, may not be the healthiest of views. God is love and that's all He knows how to do. We may never while we're on this earth know why good people leave us. But if we will just put our faith, hope, and trust in Him, all will be revealed in due time.
Journaling is so healthy and helpful. I, myself, just bought a new "Dear God" journal for my prayers, going out and being answered. It helps to write it out, and it lets your friends off the hook. 😅
I did notice a typo. Re-read the first line in your 3rd verse. You may try something like, "I often ponder of the heavens which seem to be aplenty."
I enjoyed this very much. Keep creating masterpieces!
Crissy
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Review of Not in His name!  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello. Good morning.
I saw this piece on my hub page and the description drew me in.
To answer the question in your subject line, and coupled with your very astute perspective, no. Evil can never be justified.
A sin nature was handed down to us, but that does not mean we have to use it to hurt people. Free will was also handed down to us and we can choose right over wrong. God has many names, a couple of which mean "With Us" and "Provider." God is our vindicator. That is clearly written in His word. So, whether we think we are justified or not doesn't matter. Taking matters into one's own hands is defiant. Those who don't believe will be in for a rude awakening. I like what Joyce Meyer says: "If I spend my whole life believing and hoping and I am wrong, then what have I lost? But if you don't believe and you come to the end of your life and find out God is real, you have lost everything."

I only noticed one typo, and that was in your 5th verse. "Thinks" should be "think" as the word "men" is plural.

Wonderful, fine piece of poetry. I commend you for your talent.

Have a Blessed day.

Crissy
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Review of A Choice  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi. Thank you for the review request.

Your poem resonates with me. I can easily identify with the voice here. That's the unfortunate truth. I really like the words you have chosen to represent a depression that feels as if it will never go away. But, it will go away. Things get better with time and adjustment to circumstance. Life is about perspective. We get to choose what to focus on.

Taking a look at the mechanics of your poem, the first thing I noticed is you chose not to use punctuation. I believe your readers will benefit from pause marks, i.e. commas and periods. Without them, when read aloud, the words jam together and require another reading to gather the gist of the message.

In your third verse, second line, I believe you meant "spat" on, rather than "spot" on.

This being a seemingly autobiographical poem, the word "futures" in your second to last verse should be singular.

Overall, I found this poem to be touching, yet sad. I see it was written some time ago. I hope things have improved.

Best Always,
Crissy
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Review of Ocean's Waves.  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi.
I found this poem to be beautiful, very descriptive, imaginative. You painted a very visual picture for me. I love the line, "I see you blend into the sea's air."

I noted one tiny typo in your second to last line, second to last verse. The words "salts" and "rests" do not accompany one another. You may want to use "salts rest" or "salt rests."

Overall a lovely piece of art.

Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy
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Review of Random Precision  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello.
I could very much relate to this piece. Once you are hurt five, six, nineteen, twenty times, it seems those positive emotions get on a plane and head to Timbuktu.

My fave line: "so I paralyze my senses, and sentence them to die" That line is quite unique and one that grasps the emotions in an attempt to reel them in.

I like your word choices. Great work!
Keep creating masterpieces!

Crissy~
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Review of The Distant Song  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi.
How beautiful your words, and spirit- filled your message! This is a lovely poem, and I think you will do well in your contest.

There is a place that could use a second glance as far as mechanics are concerned.
When quoting several lines from the same person, or in this case entity, it is not necessary to end each line with an end quote- only at the beginning of each line and the end of the "speaker's" turn. (I'm referencing the words whispered on the wind.)

Otherwise, I enjoyed this very much.

Good luck.

Crissy
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ethan!
Thank you for the review request.
This piece was a beautiful expression of love and longing. The words you chose to express your grief were quite delicate and stand on a merit far beyond any I have read here. Your unique approach to emotion is refreshing.

My fave line: ...leaving the sweet kiss of your kindness upon my exhausted mind.

I also like the relation to Elisha. Your lines paint a visually appealing picture for this Christian reader.

My heart is stuck somewhere between the memories of a grand love and a promise for a better tomorrow. Wonderful work that really touched me deeply.

Keep creating masterpieces!
Crissy

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