Hi there.
I must say, some of the things which you have written here really took me by surprise. I, by the way, have a personal relationship with Jesus Christ. I am not a holy roller, and not a "religious freak," but do have a high level of spirituality. I do believe there is a difference. I have been to several different denominations of churches, and do not agree with the teachings, traditions, and man-made laws (or rules, if you will) in some.
I find your second line to be very interesting. Does this mean that if you have faith, you know nothing? Or if you believe scientific facts, then you are not entitled to have faith? Honestly, I don't mean to sound crass, and I do apologize if this comes across that way. I am just a little shaken by this piece. I am sorry that you feel God is one to be feared to the point of disbelief.
Religious faith is blind. The very definition of faith is: belief not based on logical proof or material evidence. Therefore, faith in anything is blind. i.e. Faith in love is a blind faith, or faith in truth, or trust. See what I mean? Why concentrate on an issue (in this case, God) that brings so many people happiness, peace, and fulfillment?
Why are people fools for wanting perfect happiness? Isn't that something to strive for in life? I'd much rather be happy than sad, angry, or bitter. "Doing sacrifices" is something that makes the heart feel good. Nevermind that it says in the Bible that God will give you double for your trouble. And yes, I do believe the Good Book.
I do agree with you on the issue of repeated prayers. In fact, one is supposed to pray about a matter, then give it to God to handle. In other words, let it go, or "cast your cares."
I also agree that children should be given the chance to make their own decisions about religion. But they should be given the right to learn about God at an early age in an effort to instill values in them.
Prayer is part of my daily life. Here is an example of how He helped me: My car broke, and I use it for work. I had no money for another one. My father and I barely ever speak. I prayed daily, thanking God for what he was doing in my life, and praising him for having a plan for me. Two weeks went by, and my father called to say he had bought me a car and for me to get a ride to come pick it up. That was not just the goodness of his heart. That was God working in him.
I do believe that praying and asking for forgiveness means you need to change your behavior.
This was very interesting to read. Here are a few suggestions for improvement:
a)there are several places where commas are needed. Reread it, and you will note that when you come to a pause in your sentences, usually one is needed.
b)you moved from first to second to third person in this piece. Editors will look for mistakes like that, so try to keep with one point of view.
c)several of your lines begin with the word "And." Try writing them without that word, or making the sentence a conjunction by using a comma, then the word "and."
I think this is the longest review I've ever given! I enjoyed reading your viewpoint.
Crissy
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I don't see anything I would change. Excellent work!