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I try to go as in-depth as I possibly can in my reviews, and I am forever tweaking my style.
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I'm definitely good at spotting grammar, usage, and spelling issues. But I am also very good at giving constructive criticism and not just criticism. I like to point out all the things that are good about an item, while also giving advice on how to improve it.
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Non-Fiction, Technology, War
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Poetry, Short Stories, Flash Fiction
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Review of Severed Strings  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the comparison to mannequins. Excellent choice. Overall I liked it. Using the choice of paths has obviously been done before but I like what you did with it. While it was a good poem, I am only giving four stars because it didn't really grip me to the core.
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Review of Yours  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (3.0)
First, let me state that I love your subject matter. It is definitely a wonderful tribute to your God. That being said, the first thing that immediately jumps out to me is the fact that you have used the words "you", "your" or "yours" 19 times in this somewhat short song. Perhaps you might want to tweak up those parts just a bit. Otherwise, it is definitely a good start.
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Review of Special Place  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really liked this poem. It had a decent rhyme and measure to it. The second line tripped me up a bit with all the words ended in an "s" sound, but other than that I really can't find anything critical to say about this poem. I enjoyed it quite a bit.
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Review by Angela Death
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really like this poem. It has a wonderful rhythm and flow to it. My favorite line is "Life's good, if not commenced in a hurry." I found no spelling or grammar errors. I loved the moral of the poem about not growing up too fast. Excellent job and I can't wait to read more by you.
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Review of And She Must Play  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
As usual, I absolutely love your story! It's great that you made her a witch.
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Review of Burning Hearts  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your description says that this is about people who claim to be friends but remain distant. I must admit that I didn't get that at all from the poem. What I took away from it is that it is about the all-consuming destructive power of desire. Regardless, it was an excellent poem. I didn't find anything wrong with it in a technical sense and I quite enjoyed reading it. My only suggestion would be to maybe remove your description and allow the reader to take away from it what they will.
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Review of Fields  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (4.0)
For your second poem, it is quite excellent. I really liked the flow of this poem. My favorite line is "So I may escape, These fields that plague." Well done.
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Review of Prom Night  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem is very nice. It brought visions of the prom to mind and dancing and beautiful gowns. Excellent job.
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Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is an excellent poem. My favorite line is: "But they carved up our eyes, so all we do is count our scars." Excellent job. I look forward to reading more by you.
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Review of The Shadow  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem is interesting. It is designed to make one think. I liked it. However, it feels like there could be more. Almost like it could become a story. I'd love to see more from you. Welcome to the WDC community! I'm new here too, but if you need help, let me know and I will try to offer whatever assistance I can.
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Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was excellent! I absolutely love the last two lines!
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Review of Be Safe Hun  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Excellent poem! I loved the flow and rhythm. It kept my attention the entire way through the poem. Good job!
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Review of Suffocate Me  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful song. My only complaint might be that it appears to be too short, but I'm sure once it is set to music, this could easily change. I could almost hear a beat of music while I was reading it. You have a talent here. I'd love to read more song lyrics by you.
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Review of The Day I Left  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (4.5)
The concept of this poem is brilliant! The title fits it well, but doesn't even remotely hint at the wonder within. There is one small typo that I noticed in the line "My tears drowned you truth." I believe you meant "your". Other than that, it's quite excellent.
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Review of How 'Bout That  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Excellent job. I'm not sure if the title fits precisely, but I guess it works. Your spacing is a little messed up. That happens to me all the time when I copy and paste things on here. Great story though. I liked the way it ended. I'd love to see more from you.
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Review of Break The Chains  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a wonderful and very inspiring poem. You have done an excellent job. The only suggestion I can make is to go back and proofread it a few times. I found several typos/misspellings/grammatical errors. But these can be easily fixed. I hope to read more from you in the future. Beautiful!
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Review by Angela Death
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Subject: The subject of depression in poetry is definitely not a new concept by any means. However, I feel that you managed to convey your thoughts very well overall. You may not have been able to offer new insight into the subject, per se, but you did manage to hold my interest.

Title: Your title “Is There Light Out There?” definitely conveys the emotions of this poem. It fits the poem on every level. Excellent choice!

Form / Structure / Rhyme / Metre: I’m not exactly an expert at form, structure, rhyme and metre of poetry. I write a lot of poetry, but I’m not an expert of it, so I will leave this part of the critique to someone who knows more than I. I can say, however, that I did like the way your poem flowed'

Layout / Line Breaks: I believe this poem has a layout that works rather well with the subject. I don’t believe there is anything that I would change in this area.

Sound: This poem sounds very good while being read aloud. I believe that your edits made this piece work on a whole new level.

Overall, I loved your poem. Keep up the excellent writing. I hope to read more from you in the future.


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Review by Angela Death
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Subject: The subject of depression in poetry is definitely not a new concept by any means. However, I feel that you managed to convey your thoughts very well overall. You may not have been able to offer new insight into the subject, per se, but you did manage to hold my interest.

Title: Your title “In the Throws of Depression” definitely conveys your intention with this poem. It suits the poem from a technical level, but not necessarily a poetic level. Your poem itself describes the throws of depression. The title is redundant. You want a title that you capture your readers’ interest and pull them in. I don’t believe your title does that here.

Form / Structure / Rhyme / Metre: I’m not exactly an expert at form, structure, rhyme and metre of poetry. I write a lot of poetry, but I’m not an expert of it, so I will leave this part of the critique to someone who knows more than I. I can say, however, that I did like the way your poem flowed, with the exception of the last line. It seem a little unnecessary to me. But that is just my humble opinion.

Layout / Line Breaks: I believe this poem has a layout that works rather well with the subject. I don’t believe there is anything that I would change in this area.

Sound: Except for the last line, this poem sounds very good while being read aloud. Like I said before, the last line seems to be a little unnecessary and out of place.

Overall, I loved your poem. With a few minor changes, I believe this poem would be quite excellent. Keep up the excellent writing. I hope to read more from you in the future.


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Review of My Home  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (3.0)
I absolutely love the concept of this poem. However, it seems like you were trying way too hard to rhyme. Not all poetry needs rhyme, so I would suggest maybe trying some of those instead. I hope this helps. I would love to read more by you. And, if you ever edit this poem, please let me know so I can read it. Thanks!
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Review of Sensationalism  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
You did an excellent job with the acrostic. I'm definitely not very good at those. I'm hoping to get better with some practice. The only problem I have the poem is the last line. It just doesn't flow very well. Everything else is perfect. I love and agree with your theme wholeheartedly. It flows wonderfully. I hope to read more.
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Review of Son  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (5.0)
I can tell this is a very emotional piece. It is well-written and well-received. You have definite talent in portraying emotions. I can't find anything technically wrong with the poem. I hope to read more from you in the future.
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Review of Drowning in Ink  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Very interesting description of the passion for writing! I really like it. I believe there is a typo in the fourth verse. I believe you meant "while" not "why" in the third line of that verse. Excellent job. I look forward to reading more from you.
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Review of Beginnings  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very well written. I felt like I was there with you. I love the last line "This is my beginning." I'd love to read more from you. Keep them coming. It would even be interesting if you continue to write about life in high school. Good luck! Can't wait to see more!
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Review of Cliffs Edge  
Review by Angela Death
Rated: E | (3.0)
First Impression/Thoughts:
My first impression with this poem is that it needs something more. Not that it isn't good, just that it seems like it needs something extra to make me feel something about the person.

Creativity/Impact:
There are tons of poems about suicide out there, so it is necessary to make yours stick out among the rest. At this point, I don't feel it does, but I definitely believe it has potential. I would work on expanding on what the person has done that is so wrong that resulted in them jumping off a cliff.

Technique/Technical Notes:
I didn't find any technical errors, grammatical errors or typos of the sort. It works well as a poem.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
I am only giving this 3 stars at the moment because I believe that more work can be done to improve it. I will be more than happy to change my review and rating should you ever decide to edit this poem.

Thank you for allowing me to read your poetry. I hope to see more from you in the future!
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Review by Angela Death
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Excellent poem! There was a typo that I was able to find, but otherwise nothing major. I think, if it were me, I would change the title to "A Cowardly Pandora". I think it fits your poem better. But that's just me. There is absolutely nothing wrong with the title that you have chosen. Good job! I hope to read more of your work.
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