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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Hi Ken, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.


My impressions of the poem: "To Begin Again ... by HuntersMoon

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautifully formed 64 line poem. A great job with the rhyming pattern to give this poem a rhythmic flow.
Wouldn't it be awesome to be able to travel in time with the ability to fix mistakes that occurred.
A new Garden of Eden. What a sight that would be.


Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a craft lost in the dimensions of time, is painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:All looks great.

Ken, thank you for sharing this awesome time traveling poem.
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi again FixTheLizard, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Echoes of the Lost Expedition (ep3) by FixTheLizard,

Clarity: A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Adventure fantasy drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written adventure in the dark wilderness, I am glad they made it to the morning.
I like the reference to the eerie carved symbols in the trees.

This story gets the readers attention and leaves him wanting more.


FixTheLizard, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Keep writing.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi RabiaJ, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"The Environmental Escapade by RabiaJ

Clarity:A good title that describes the content of this article well.

Writing style: Environmental impact article.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A very informative article. Sad but true humans are the worst for the environment of good old mother earth.

A good well spaced and structured layout full of valuable information about the environment of our planet.

Even with the best intentions humans don't seem to really appreciate anything until it's to late. When its gone and we can't have it then we miss it.
I sincerely hope that we can somehow begin to repair some of the damage that we have caused for our planet.

We need more articles like this to make people more aware and begin to work toward repair for the environment.

Environmentalist is certainly a proud field to be in and I'm sure there will be plenty of demand for articles like this in the near future.


RabiaJ, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Ayla, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"El chico del juego by Ayla

Clarity:A good title for this gaming tale.

Writing style:Relationship drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written story with strong character and an ere of mystery. This reader is a bit confused with the story repeating itself. I don't know if that is intentional it appears to be a draft of a work in progress, maybe.

Good descriptions that help the reader to visualize the setting.


Ayla,thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:A good proof read and edit never hurts.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Angel, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Love me or hate me by Angel

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:We are who we are, couldn't change that even if we wanted to.
This poem is short yet the point comes across strong. I like that each line starts the same. That helps the strong rhythmite flow.


Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see an individual standing strong like a statue.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see. I am who I am.

Angel, thank you for sharing your lovely poem.
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Mary, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "To An Absent Friend by Mary Pavey

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautiful poem with a random rhyming pattern that adds to give its unique flow. I understand, strong words indeed.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a young person remembering an absent older family member is painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can see.

Mary Pavey, thank you for sharing your poem.
So you are 120 years old? :)
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Review of UTOPIA  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi InterGalacticDonkey, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.


My impressions of the poem: "UTOPIA by InterGalacticDonkey

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Human nature can be both a blessing and a curse.
A deep poem about human nature and how easily swayed we can be.


Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a child growing up on life's path way is painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Looks fine to this reader.

InterGalacticDonkey, thank you for sharing your story. Write On!


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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi FixTheLizzard, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Echoes of the Lost Expedition by FixTheLizzard

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style: Action adventure drama.

My favorite line:--- Sitting around a crackling fire, they marveled at the vastness of the rainforest, its ancient trees whispering secrets in the breeze.----

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good idea for this adventure tale. Well written story with good characters and realistic dialogue. Good descriptions that help the reader to visualize the setting.

A good structured story that appears inviting and easy for the reader.

FixTheLizzard, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider making the opening lines stronger to get the readers attention from the start.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi StoryMaster, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"Read This; It's FREE! by The StoryMaster

Clarity:A great title that describes the content of this article well.

Writing style:Personal opinion

My favorite line:---The desire to receive everything for free is understandable, but you must step back from that and realize it is a selfish desire.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: How can you renew your membership with gift points? I had heard that and I read it again in this article yet I can find no path to do it that way.

A very informative article about WDC and many of the free benefits. It is true that there are many web sites that get your attention with the word free yet when you go there you find that they are slowly reeling you in to ask for a fee. Nothing is free especially today. Well that is business, of course if everything was free it wouldn't work. Profit is the reward for work so naturally all businesses need to make profit to survive.

WDC is indeed a great website with numerous free activities. Also for free you get to associate with some of the top writers in the field. Not to count you get to associate with the top writers of the future.


StoryMaster, thank you for sharing this work for free, it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi use 'Iam', I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"the journey of hope by use 'I am'

Clarity: A nice title for this tale.

Writing style: Fantasy friendship drama.

My favorite line: ---Through the valleys of despair and the peaks of triumph, Aiden learned that the true measure of life lay not in the destination, but in the beauty of the journey itself.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well told journey of hope. Nicely structured story that is easy for the reader.

By listing all three genres your work will be available to more potential readers.

This story carries a familiar flow. Faith in the promise of tomorrow. Well said.


Use 'I am', thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider experimenting with adding a little action.

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Review of Fear of Flying  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Sinbad, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"Fear of Flying by Sinbad

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style: Personal biographical drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Nicely written story that expresses your feelings on flying very good. If humans were meant to fly wouldn't they have been born with wings?

They say your chances of crashing in a plane are very slim compared to automobile accidents. My wife has the same fear, that's what I tell her.

Although your feelings can be felt through this story it is written in an entertaining, even a bit humorous way. Well done.



Sinbad, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review of A Frank Letter  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Jay, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.


My impressions of the poem: "A Frank Letter by Jay O'Toole

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A delightful poem with a bit of humor to boot.

A great job with the rhyming pattern that adds to this poems unique flow.


Artistic Voice and Imagery: The portrait is painted for this reader of two people, one of which is trying to talk the other one into going on a diet.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can see with the grammar spelling or mechanics.

Jay O'Toole, thank you for sharing this delightful poem.
Write On!


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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Amethyst Angel, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.


My impressions of the poem: "Ode to the Emerald Isle by Amethyst Angel

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written acrostic poem for St Patrick's Day.

A nice rhyming pattern that gives this poem an easy going flow.


Artistic Voice and Imagery: A portrait of the Highlands of Ireland are painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this beautiful poem.

Amethyst Angel, thank you for sharing your story. Write On!


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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Weirdone, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"Our Wicked Cool Teacher by Weirdone-Back in the games

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style: Modern horror drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written tale of school-teacher horror.

A good structured story that is easy for the reader.

Strong characters with good dialog. Good descriptions that make it easy to picture the setting.

A good ending. This was the cute style horror not the dark gloomy horror.



Weirdone-Back in the games, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review of Ode to New Love  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi Drake, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.


My impressions of the poem: "Ode to New Love by Drake

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded romance poem with a random rhyming pattern. This poem carries A rhythmic flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the portrait a young couple fussing over nothing, then threatening breakup.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Curious why you did not start the poem with a capital letter.

Drake, thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!


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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Maria Mize, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"WHEN DARE + DOUBLE-DARE = FIRE by Maria Mize

Clarity:A good title that describes the contents of this story well.

Writing style: Biographical drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Well written biographical tale. As youngsters most all of us go through phases and make mistakes sometimes worse than others.

Written in a nice structure, very informative with good details. A good strong opening which quickly draws the reader in to the story keeping his attention all throughout to find out how it ends.


Maria Mize, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi W.D. Wilcox, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"The Stuff Screams Are Made Of by W.D. Wilcox

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Fantasy folklore drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Well written adventure horror tale.
Nice structure, I like the large font. That makes easier to read for those of us with weak eyes.

Strong characters with great descriptions that bring the demons to life for the reader. A lot of screaming indeed.

A great entertaining horror story, I think most people will like this tale as I do.


W.D. Wilcox, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Review of Swallowed  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi Ton, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"Swallowed by Ton

Clarity:The title's for each chapter seem good, Not sure about the main title.

Writing style:Mythological fantasy friendship drama.

My favorite line:--- Seeing his strong, comforting presence brought a glimmer of hope to Elias's heart.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written tale with strong realistic characters that are likable. To bad about Elias.

A good opening that draws the reader into the story.

Nicely structured story. This makes it easier for the reader and more inviting for a browser or potential reader.

--The deed was in minutes.-- I think you may have left a word out and this sentence.



Ton, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: a good proofread and edit to catch any typo's or left out words, never hurts. Consider putting the chapters title in bold and then skipping a line before the content. This will make it appear better to the reader. This reader didn't quite get the title.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Jeff, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"The Eternal Optimist by Jeff

Clarity: The title fits the story well.

Writing style:Family adventure drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Yes it sounds like your dad is the eternal optimist. I hope he don't have to get the kayaks out of the attic.
Very well written and entertaining adventure tale that I think most people will relate to.

Well done using the prompt and for daily flash fiction. I know it is hard to complete a story in a day. This one is awesome.


Jeff, thank you for sharing this entertaining work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None.

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Review of Is it only me?  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Moyo Kamlin, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Is it only me? by Moto kamlin

Clarity: A good title for this work.

Writing style: Personal opinions.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written piece asking questions that most all of us ask at a young age. Everyone is wired differently, throughout life we often learn that what we thought were our shortcomings or actually actually some of our strong points. Different is good nobody wants to be normal.
Surrounded with a shroud of mystery is extremely strong nobody wants to be an open book. Listening and taking it all in is like an art form. Especially these days you don't find many listeners everyone is too busy talking about themselves. You speak with more authority and intelligence by listening weighing out the information so that your response is more meaningful in an intelligent way.

You often learn that those people you were worried about what they think of you we're actually more worried about what you think of them.

Your commitment to self improvement and seeking guidance is a strong trait that a lot of people never master.

This is a very strong piece of writing that shows you have a gift for expressing your thoughts on paper. Well done.


Moto kamlin, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None.

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Review of Today's Child  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Kenzie I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Today's Child
by Kenzie


Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: Beautifully written poem. Well worded short stanzas that make their point well. I like the large colored fonts, this is easy to read plus it make this poem stand out.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This cyber age is full of mystery especially for some of us dinosaurs. We always tried to avoid chat rooms and social media groups, then suddenly we're told we're behind if we are not a member of this and that and got XXXX number of followers.

Well obviously this is a very strong poem, it has caused the philosopher to show up. Well done.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: There are no problems with the mechanics that this reader sees.

Kenzie, thank you for sharing this inspirational poem.
Write On!


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Review of The Journey  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi MJones, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.


My impressions of the poem: "The Journey
by MJones


Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A strong free verse poem, in a few words you have said a lot. Indeed it is about the journey not the destination.

I really like express it in 8, when I first heard of it I thought that was not enough lines now it seems to be just about right.


Artistic Voice and Imagery: This Reader see's the portrait of a soul on life's pathway.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see.

MJones, thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!


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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jackiesmuse, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Rachel Howard Live WC 296 by Jackiesmuse

Clarity:The title works well for this apocalyptic drama.

Writing style:Modern fantasy drama.

My favorite line:---I snorted. I’m admitting live, on the air, that I snort when I’m scared---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good idea for this story. I like it.

A well written strong storyline in a few words, you got your point across good.

A very realistic story. I can picture this happening on several of the news show's. Well written with strong characters that are very realistic.I Feel that most people will be able to relate to this story.

Nicely structured this makes it easy for the reader.

I like the way you added humor to this otherwise serious story, well done.


Jackiesmuse, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review of Hide and go seek  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ritzy Vampi, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Hide and go seek by Ritzy Vampi

Clarity: Good title for this tale.

Writing style:Adventure drama.

My favorite line:--- She explained how to bark a squirrel off a tree limb with only a slingshot and then confessed she hadn’t been able to kill more than one---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written story with a good structure. This makes it easy for the reader while inviting for a browser.

Good characters with good dialog. A good narrative.

Great descriptions that help the reader visualize the setting.

A sudden ending that leaves the reader wanting to know more.


Ritzy Vampi, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider working on the ending to give the reader closure or a hint to another chapter.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Max Griffin, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"A Twist in Time--Chapter 1 by Max Griffin

Clarity:Great title for this time travel tale.

Writing style:Sci-fi drama.

My favorite line:--- The more important question is when we are.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written sci-fi mystery adventure. This story is written with a very realistic tone that it carries through out.

Good characters with realistic dialog. Great descriptions that take the reader into the story right beside Justin.

A good job with the action, this keeps the reader toward the edge of his seat.

The story holds a realistic flow. A good ending that leaves the reader wanting to turn the page.


Max, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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