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Review of The Gold Rush  Open in new Window.
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Hi Jeff is Gru in #2343485 I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Gold Rush" Open in new Window. by Jeff is Gru in #2343485

Clarity:A good title for this golden tale.

Writing style:Political folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Nice structure that does make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Good dialog.

My favorite line:---“I don’t have any doubt that if this plan fails, someone will need to be blamed for it. That’s precisely why I didn’t tell you about the plan until it was already in action. If it fails, you can blame it on a First Secretary of a remote province who got a little overly ambitious.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A nice gentle opening that begins to introduce the storyline. A good creative story, I like that you used some history on California's gold rush.

A well written entertaining story. A nice ending that lets the reader use his imagination a bit.

Jeff is Gru in #2343485 thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi G.B.Williams I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"How Do You Measure YOU?" Open in new Window. by G.B.Williams

Clarity: A great title for this inspirational "How to" article.

Writing style:Educational personal advice.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Indeed.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes.

My favorite line: ---I have learned to measure me by being able to just listen to what is being said without being overly critical, but receptive to the possibility. I measure me by my ability to appreciate a rising or setting sun, and by still being able to see, and relate to a tree that stands tall and proud with lifted arms all day.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written inspirational article with a positive flow. A great opening line that makes this reader want more.

Most often it is easy to start measuring ourselves with what we perceive are other people's views. This article makes some wonderful points and has brightened this readers day.

G.B.Williams thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Hi Coyote Clock I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Web Diary Of A Coyote: Sept 11, 2025" Open in new Window. by Coyote Clock

Clarity:The title describes this Coyote diary entry well.

Writing style:Modern biographical diary entry.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is somewhat easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Yes the dialogue is appropriate for the speaker.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good diary entry of what sounds like a wild coyote day.

Coyote Clock thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider more line spacing to make it appear less crowded and easier for the reader.

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Review of Departure  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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My impressions of the poem: "Departure" Open in new Window. by Stick to My Own Beat

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful and humorous poem written in a unique form with every fifth line being a negative quote criticizing Elisa.
To be able to release anger into a humorous poem shows talent. I bet it was a great pressure release.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a teenager who is still treated like a preschooler by her mother. That fact gives her the strength and determination to move out and start a wonderful life in the adult world.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I combined with the grammar spelling on mechanics of this this delightful work.

Stick to My Own Beat thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Merkel Pillow  Open in new Window.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Merkel Pillow" Open in new Window. by Jatog the Green

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful forty line poem emphasizing on the idea of going without sleep.
This well written free verse style poem carries a nice humorous flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a soul suffering from insomnia and walking around like a zombie until the miracle of a new pillar comes to his reality.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I'm can find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this delightful and humorous poem.

Jatog the Green thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again JCosmos I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Trumpian Sophy's Quatern" Open in new Window. by JCosmos

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Written in the form of "Sophy's Quatern"
* Sophy’s Quatern contains four stanzas of four lines each.

* Every line has ten syllables.

* No meter required.

* There is a rhyme scheme:
-- abab, caca, adad, eaea

* Line 1 of the first stanza is repeated
-- as line 2 of second stanza
-- as line 3 of third stanza
-- as line 4 of last stanza.

A unique form for this sixteen line entertaining poem about politics and President Trump.
A good job of meeting the prompt requirements.


JCosmos thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Ra M I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"A Page from My Diary" Open in new Window. by Ra M

Clarity:A nice title that describes the content well.

Writing style: Philosophical experience drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed? Yes by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Yes nicely structured making it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Yes the dialogue is appropriate for the speaker.

My favorite line:---Some moments refuse to be captured. They are like leaves drifting on a wind-swept stream — visible, even memorable, but impossible to hold. They are meant to unsettle you, to remind you that not all rivers run both ways.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A marvelous opening line for this poetic description of a philosopher's diary entry.

This colorful tale carries the reader into this enchanted moment captured in words.



Ra M thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Next page.

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Joseph
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Review of Family History  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi again thereBdragons I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Family History" Open in new Window. by thereBdragons

Clarity:A nice title.

Writing style: Fantasy family drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Smile* Good job, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure, however a bit more line-spacing wouldn't hurt.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Smile*Great job with the dialog.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A creative story-line that I feel most people will relate to.
A nice opening that grabs my attention and makes me want to read on. Realistic dialog that makes it easy for readers to relate with.
Short yet entertaining and straight to the point, just the way the modern readers seems to like things.

I like this family history tale. History always fascinates me.

thereBdragons thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a bit more line spacing to make it a little easier for the reader and more appealing to a browser or would be reader

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Hi again jackson I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"A Sky Full of Stars" Open in new Window. by jackson

Clarity:A beautiful title that catches my attention and persuades me to read on.

Writing style: Mythological folklore drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Smile* Great job, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Smile* Wonderful structure and format with larger font that does make it so much easier for us readers with weak eye's.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? *Smile* Yes the dialog is appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:--- Here, where two figures presently sat, warming their hands over a fire, on the bank of the Tug Fork of The Big Sandy River, was the only viewing point.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written and entertaining short story. Very well structured with a large font size that makes it easy for the reader. This short story carries a nice rhythmic flow.
I really like the opening that introduces the the mythological viewing point of this delightful tale.

jackson thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: *Smile*Write on!

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Ground Control  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Jatog the Green I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Ground Control" Open in new Window. by Jatog the Green

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful 32 line poem written for Writers Cramp, emphasizing on Punxsultawney Phil. Phil is the Groundhog in Pennsylvania that comes out every groundhog's day and tells us if we're gonna have six more weeks of winter or not depending on whether he sees his shadow.

As far as I see you met all the Writer's Cramp requirements. I hope you won the contest.

Written in the Anapestic Tetrameter form.
Anapestic Tetrameter is a poetic meter that has four anapastic metrical feet per line. Each foot has two unstressed syllables followed by a stressed syllable. It is sometimes referred to as "reverse dactyl", and shares the rapid driving pace of the dactyl.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with this delightful read.

Jatog the Green thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of cycle of life  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My impressions of the poem: "cycle of life" Open in new Window. by Charlie V.C.

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A free verse style poem focusing on interpreting the cycle of life.
"Life is always changing, and everything changes with it."
I think I like this first line the best as its words are so true.


Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of the future in a world where they are trying to uncover their past. They are putting together the pieces from a passed civilization that once existed, called humanity.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this strong poem.

Charlie V.C. thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of I testify  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Theactual Treasure I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "I testify " Open in new Window. by Theactual Treasure

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:"I Testify" is a well worded strong testament to faith in the almighty. A lovely free verse poem that emphasizes on praising the Lord.

Free verse poetry is a form of poetry that does not adhere to a regular, fixed rhyme scheme or metrical pattern, instead allowing for a more flexible, natural rhythm and form.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful testament.

Theactual Treasure thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Flower Power  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi thereBdragons I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"Flower Power" Open in new Window. by thereBdragons

Clarity: I love the title.

Writing style: Fantasy family drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*BigSmile*Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*BigSmile* *BigSmile* A wonderful structure that indeed makes it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*BigSmile*Indeed the dialog is appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:--- “I wish my mother could see me now. I’m a sixties character actress and extra for retro television and movies. I think she would be so proud!”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A nice opening that introduces the character and the storyline well. Great descriptions that helped reader get into the story.

A most delightful entertaining realistic story written well, short and to the point exactly like the modern reader likes things.

thereBdragons thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*BigSmile* Keep writing.

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Joseph
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Review of Wings of sorrow  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi Miya I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Wings of sorrow" Open in new Window. by Miya

Clarity: A beautiful and intriguing title that captures my attention and makes me more to read more.

Writing style: Fantasy adventure drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed? Only two are given, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Well structured.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem to be appropriate to its speaker.

My favorite line:

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A good opening that introduce the characters and prepare us to go dragon hunting.

Good descriptions that helped to take the reader right into this dragon hunt. A little confused about brother Drew and why he's even mentioned since he don't do nothing.

Well written and a very creative storyline that describes this dragon adventure well. A mild ending that seems to be more in the middle of the story.

Miya thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: A good re read and edit never hurts. The pronoun I is inconsistent. Consider a larger font size and maybe breaking up the longer sections with more banks lines. This will make it a little easier for the reader and more inviting to a browser or potential reader.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of I remember  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Jim I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "I remember" Open in new Window. by Jim

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: "I remember" is a well worded free verse poem with short emotional stanzas that I feel most readers will relate to. Strong stanzas yet shorter enough that the reader can use their imagination.

Traditional reverse is a somewhat paradoxical phrase, as free verse is non-traditional poetry that abandons strict rules like meter and rhyme to follow the natural rhythm of speech. Instead of rigid structure, free verse relies on intentional line breaks, imaginary, and repetitive to create its form and meaning, allowing for flexibility and experimental expression while retaining poetic identity through its use of devices like enjambment and parallelism.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a mother like figure that has recently passed on to another reality.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find nothing at all wrong with the mechanics of this traditional free verse work.

Jim thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of October Haikus  Open in new Window.
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Hi WakeUpAndLive I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "October Haikus" Open in new Window. by WakeUpAndLive

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: Well written and entertaining haikus. I think I like the first one the best. --- "The October sun –
rays of white light on green leaves,
autumn winds linger."---

Haiku definition - a Japanese poem of 17 syllables, in three lines of five, 7, and five, traditionally evoking images of the natural world.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with these well written haikus

WakeUpAndLive thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Rearranged  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again (Ken) HuntersMoon I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Rearranged" Open in new Window. by HuntersMoon

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful Rearranged form twenty-eight line poem.

Rearranged is a most entertaining 'coming of age' classic work of art. ---" Don't worry 'bout your mind – you're not deranged.
Nothing is new – it's just rearranged!"---

Each stanza is worded in stone, while telling its on stand alone tale. A great entry for the "Grumpy's Short-Lived Poetry Contest" with the prompt being 'humor'. Surely this classic poem won the contest.

The definition for quatrain is - a stanza of four lines, especially one having alternate rhymes. This had this reviewer's mind in a spin for quite a while.


Artistic Voice and Imagery: Gazing at Time's mighty river I see the image of a soul surfing threw the waves while being tossed back and forth between future past and present.

HuntersMoon thank you for sharing this awesome poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Starmix I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Why is silence dangerous? " Open in new Window. by Starmix

Clarity:A good title that describes the content of thhis article well.

Writing style:Safety opinion article.

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My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well laid out and written safety oriented style of article.
This article reminds me of the safety articles that many times are mandatory at certain workplaces. To my recollection they are mostly early in the morning when ever one is half asleep, they're quick and then you have to sign a paper saying that you know how to climb a ladder safely now.

Well laid out covering several different subjects in a short descriptive businesslike safety oriented manner.

Starmix thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Write on!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hi cassierobbins I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Love Beyond The Sunset: Chapter 2 Isabel" Open in new Window. by cassierobbins

Clarity:Seems like a good title for this realistic tale.

Writing style:Folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Smile* Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Smile* Nicely structured.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Smile* The dialog does seem appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:---Sunrises and sunsets were my favorite times on the ranch. Nature’s vivid depictions of fire and ether in the sky.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good descriptive opening that describes the scene for the reader well. It could be made stronger to better capture the reader's attention.
A nice touch with 'bad weather is coming' this captures the reader's attention well and makes him want to read on.
Great descriptions that help the reader to visualize the scene while relating with the character.
A well told emotional disaster tale that I feel most readers will relate to.

cassierobbinsthank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a stronger opening line for this chapter. A good edit never hurts.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi again elizjohn I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "It Ain't Gonna Be the Death of Me" Open in new Window. by elizjohn

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: I really like this delightful free verse poem written in an entertaining style giving it a fairy tale flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This poem brings back memories. As a child raking leaves was a chore that I never understood because more would always fall the next day. It was a no-win situation.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I could see with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining fairy tale

elizjohn thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Ethan Wolverton I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Ode to the Blossom's Dance" Open in new Window. by Ethan Wolverton

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful twelve line poem with a consistent rhyming scheme that adds to the colorful flow.

Poems written for no particular reason are often the most entertaining and enjoyable to read.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of that great summer day that we all can remember. A young child lays under a shade tree being astonished from all the miracles of nature that he discovers.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this enchanted poem.

Ethan Wolverton thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Grandma's garden  Open in new Window.
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Hi Charlie V.C. I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Grandma's garden" Open in new Window. by Charlie V.C.

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A beautiful simple realistic free verse style poem emphasizing on Grandma and her garden. No doubt when it comes to gardening Grandma is definitely the master.

Well written in a entertaining fashion with simple yet realistic text that take this reader right back to Grandma's garden. I was pretty much raised by my Grandma and Grandpa. I remember so well among my earliest memories working with Grandma in her strawberry patch. They would be the first to ripen before moving on too later fruits, vegetables and flowers.

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Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I cannot find any problems with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful poem that has taken me back.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi OdetaRose I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Man in Apartment 43 by Odeta Rose" Open in new Window. by OdetaRose

Clarity:A good title for this tale although I don't recall that it was a man ever described in apt.43.

Writing style:Fantasy folktale drama.

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Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is fairly easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem appropriate for its speaker.
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good opening line that introduces the storyline well. Good descriptions that lead the reader deeper into this tale.

A mysterious yet entertaining tale very well told.

OdetaRose thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider more blank lines between text at the beginning to make it more appealing for the reader.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again dogpack saving 4premium+ I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "AUTUMN FALLS/word count:54" Open in new Window. by dogpack saving 4premium+

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: Autumn is coming and this short poem is a great reminder of the sensations that come with the change of season's that we so easily forget from one season to the other.

'God’s coloring book
Autumn Falls
nature is His art work.'

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful poem.

dogpack saving 4premium+ thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Zeroth World  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Tani lives I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Zeroth World" Open in new Window. byTani lives

Clarity:A great title for this philosophical mystery.

Writing style:Philosophical mystery drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Smile* Yes by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Smile*A nice structure that does make it easy on the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Smile*

My favorite line:--- I live. I have lived like this before — once, long ago, so long ago that memory kept no trace of it — and now I have returned.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: The Zeroth World touches on memories and emotions that are buried in the deepest parts of our subconscious minds. That very part between real and dream that hides our previous lives from our current memories in our mind.

A powerful story that just begins to scratch the surface of the deepest part of our minds that is forbidden for us to search or remember. The human mind has deep confused memories that only a few dare to try opening up.

Tani lives thank you for sharing this work it has caused this reader's mind to dive deep into the unknown.

Suggestions: Write on!

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