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#4858003

Review of Sickly Spirit

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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2026

Hi again Sumojo I came across this story while random reviewing.

I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of "Sickly Spirit "

by Sumojo

Clarity: A good title for this ghostly tale.

Writing style: Ghostly fantasy drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?

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Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

A great structure that makes it very easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

A great job with the dialogue. I know from experience all dialogue is difficult.

My favorite line:

I’m suffering from afterlife insomnia. There’s just no rest to be had. I’m feeling very wraithlike.

My two cents

is only one opinion. Overall impressions:
A great opening for this entertaining tales. Great dialogue. I like the down under slang.

I like the bold font to distinguish the speaker. A realistic tone that helps the reader to relate with this ghostly tale.

Casper needs a lady ghost friend.

I like the Witch Doctor ending.

Sumojo thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:

SMILE ~ WRITE ON! BE HAPPY ~ KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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#4857912

Review of A vulnerable request

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

2026

Hi SanguineAngel I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "A vulnerable request"

by SanguineAngel

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A sixteen line free verse form poem written in the style of a romance letter. An emotional letter written on paper because it would appear that the words orally did not have meaning to the reciprocate.

Humans are mysterious beings and it is very hard to know what is going on in the mind of another.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find in this entertaining work.

SanguineAngel thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On! Take time to smell the roses

God Bless!

Joseph

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Review of Recycling Plastic Waste for Environment

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

2026

Hi Glabal News I came across this story while random reviewing.

I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of: "Recycling Plastic Waste for Environment "

by Glabal News

Clarity: A good title that describes the content of this article well.

Writing style: Current Events. Environmental News. Article.

Are all 3 genres listed?

Only one listed. by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

Nicely structured and formatted.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: An entertaining and educational article about recycling plastics and what they do to our environment. It sounds like the 63 students are on the right path for the future to try to clean up our environment a little.

Humans do seem to be a selfish species,

and especially on the Earth that supports them. We often take things for granted and more often, just don't think. Our environment has begun to speak to us about that.

Glabal News thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Keep up the good work.

SMILE ~ WRITE ON! BE HAPPY ~ KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of SIRE

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

2026

Hi BUSYBEE I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "SIRE"

by BUSYBEE

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A deep and moving poem, very emotional about losing a father figure.
Eighteen emotional lines in this strong free verse style poem.

Often we never realize how much we depend on someone until it's too late and they have departed. The wheels of time turn and they stay with us. Only they're unable to help us as before and we can't depend on their loyal advice like we once did.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find in this strong and emotional poem.

BUSYBEE thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On! Take time to smell the roses

God Bless!

Joseph

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#4857448

Review of A Choice

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

2026

Hi cheshire I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "A Choice"

by cheshire

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A twenty-one line free verse poem consisting of seven three line stanzas focusing on choices.

Choices are often presented to us, kind of like that old cartoon with an Angel on one shoulder and a devil on the other, each trying to influence your choice.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I think this is my favorite line.

" The shadows relentlessly try to drive a wedge into the caring heart. "

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find in this entertaining poem.

cheshire thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On! Take time to smell the roses

God Bless!

Joseph

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#4856933

Review of More Bang for the buck

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

2026

Hi Sodier_Mike I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"More Bang for the buck" by Sodier_Mike

Clarity: A good title. A good image next to the title that actually describes the contents of this sci-fi adventure better.

Writing style: Sci-fi, adventure, drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?

Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

A great structure that does make it easier for the reader

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

A great job on the dialogue, which does sound specific for its speaker.

My favorite line:---"It takes quite a while to travel eighty-three million miles, you know."---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good casual opening introducing Samuel and the setting for the storyline. Well written in a modern fashion that gives this story a realistic tone.

This entertaining tale is so believable, I'm gonna have to research some of these facts.
A nice mellow ending.

It looks like you met the prompt requirements well, I hope you won.

Sodier_Mike thank you for sharing this entertaining tale, it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider adding some action or unexpected twist into the storyline and maybe a more jagged ending. Just my 2 cents.

SMILE ~ WRITE ON! BE HAPPY ~ KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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#4856871

Review of Where Memory Lives

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

2026

Hi R I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Where Memory Lives" by R

Clarity: A good title that describes the contents of this article well.

Writing style: Personal emotional experience.

Are all 3 genres listed?

Great, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

The structure and format is fairly easy for the reader. A bit more line spacing and blank lines between longer paragraphs would make it easier for those of us with weak eyes.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

The dialogue does seem appropriate for the speaker.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:
A well written, strong and emotional article describing the grief of a lost loved one.

The memories of lost friends and loved ones that passed before us stay with us through our lives and make us in to the person we become.

We can use those memories to help us build strong, realistic characters in our writing. It helps with the mourning process to try and bring these memories and characters to life on paper.

R thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Use these memories and emotions in future works of writing.

SMILE ~ WRITE ON! BE HAPPY ~ KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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#4856376

Review of Finding Whom

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

2026

Hi again Jay O'Toole I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Finding Whom" by Jay O'Toole

Clarity: A nice title. However, it could describe the contents of this chapter better.

Writing style: Children's fantasy drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?

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Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

Nicely structured, making it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

A good job with the dialogue that does seem to be specific for the speaker.

My favorite line:---"What gave you the idea that making a proposal to a perfect stranger was even slightly acceptable?"---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A nice opening that introduced the characters and give hints to the storyline. Quest and Lady are both described well, building a realistic picture of them for the reader.

A new job lifts Quest's spirits and builds his confidence. Quest keeps his focus on persuading Lady to marry him. A delightful tale, however it seems to get a bit long winded in the middle.

A nice happy ending. Quest and Lady live happily forever.

Jay O'Toole thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a good edit, keeping in mind that the modern audience in this fast paced world are programmed to hurry and prefer short, straight to the point stories.

SMILE ~ WRITE ON! BE HAPPY ~ KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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#4856336

Review of Re tv after Yectas return(28)

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

2026

Hi azrael2915 I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Re tv after Yectas return(28)" by azrael2915

Clarity: An interesting title.

Writing style: Screenplay, fantasy, Drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? Only one given.

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Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

The structure and format are easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

The dialogue does seem appropriate for the speaker.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: An interesting opening that does catch the reader's attention making him want to know more.

A creative idea for this different style of tale.

azrael2915 thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: A good proofreading and edit never hurts.

SMILE ~ WRITE ON! BE HAPPY ~ KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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#4856076

Review of The Dunbroch Stoorworm

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

2026

Hi Spud I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"The Dunbroch Stoorworm" by Spud

Clarity:A creative title.

Writing style:Folklore, Fanfiction, Fantasy. Drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?

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Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

A nice structure that does make it easy on the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

A good job on the dialogue that is appropriate for the speaker.

My favorite line:---"Aw, bless," the wood carver said. "I'm afraid it's not that simple, princess, Stoorworms are big, hungry sea serpents. Your best bet is to sacrifice seven girls to the beast once a week."---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good opening that introduced the storyline and setting well.

A creative story with a wonderful cast of characters that I really like. I like the old style names.
A nice happy ending.

Spud thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:

SMILE ~ WRITE ON! BE HAPPY ~ KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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#4855945

Review of The Academy of Twisted Topiaries

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

2026

Hi IceSkatingSugarCube I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"The Academy of Twisted Topiaries" by IceSkatingSugarCube

Clarity: A nice title for this Academy recruiting tale.

Writing style: Horror, fantasy, Drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?

Indeed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

Nice structure that does make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

The dialogue does seem appropriate for the speaker.

My favorite line:--- Soon he was a human topiary, his body perfectly shaped. A masterpiece of greenery greatness.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good strong opening line that introduces this storyline well.

A well written and entertaining tale that paints the story well with only 499 words.

IceSkatingSugarCube thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:

SMILE ~ WRITE ON! BE HAPPY ~ KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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#4855902

Review of Why All the Secrecy

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

2026

Hi Emberly Gray I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Why All the Secrecy"

by Emberly Gray

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: An entertaining thirty five line free verse style poem emphasizing secrecy in romance.
Truly a tricky subject. Remember in romance the secrecy could be a awesome Valentine's present being prepared for you.
With time, most secrets eventually reveal there concepts.

On the other hand, the conspiracy demon can't slip into your mind and cause havoc, making you question every aspect of your reality.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with this delightful work.

Emberly Gray thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On! Take time to smell the roses
God Bless!

Joseph

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#4855540

Review of Grace

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

2026

Hi again Sumojo I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Grace"

by Sumojo

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A graceful poem indeed. Well written with just eight lines of realistic graceful thoughts.

'I wish I was a swan, serene and graceful on the lake.'
A deep and powerful line that I think most everyone can relate to.

I really appreciate your comments about living down under in our last exchange. It is extraordinary in this modern age that people living on different sides of the globe can agree and share certain points of view. I suppose that is one of the modern perks that is seldom acknowledged about this modern cyber age with the Internet and no borders. People are able to share the same views like close neighbors, even when separated by thousands of miles.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with this delightful and entertaining poem.

Sumojo thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On! Take time to smell the roses
God Bless!

Joseph

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#4855479

Review of The Necromancer

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

2026

Hi Bearclaw I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "The Necromancer"

by Bearclaw

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: An interesting 24 line poem that leaves plenty of room for the reader to interpret in their own ways.

'A puff of smoke,
Colors red, green and blue.
The hardest part of waiting,
for your spell to brew.'

I think this is my favorite stanza.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a poet awakened from a dream and then writing that dream on paper for later interpretation.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find.

Bearclaw thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On! Take time to smell the roses
God Bless!

Joseph

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#4855286

Review of Sylar's Recipe - 1/12 - 282 Words

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

2026

Hi again John, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Sylar's Recipe - 1/12 - 282 Words" by John

Clarity: An entertaining title for this spirit repellent recipe.

Writing style: Supernatural comedy. Drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?

Yea, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

A great structure that is indeed easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

Good dialogue that is realistic for its speaker.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good humorous opening that sets the tune for this entertaining tale. You've always got to be cautious when trying someone else's recipe.

A well written and very funny tale written in less than 300 words. Great job.

John thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:

SMILE ~ WRITE ON! BE HAPPY ~ KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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#4855127

Review of A conversation with George Washington

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

2026

Hi Beck Firing back up! I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"A conversation with George Washington" by Beck Firing back up!

Clarity: A good title that makes the content of the story known.

Writing style: Folklore, fiction, Drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?

Only two are given. by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

A great job with the dialogue, as all dialogue is difficult on the writer.

My favorite line: ---“We simply wanted something better.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:
An entertaining conversation with George Washington. It makes one wonder what he would truly have to say today.

In this great country, any person can run for office. The only problem is once they get elected, they are transformed into politicians.

A well written story, as I know for a fact all dialogue is very difficult.

Beck Firing back up! thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:

SMILE ~ WRITE ON! BE HAPPY ~ KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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#4855021

Review of Joe's Tie

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

2026

Hi again Prosperous Snow celebrating I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Joe's Tie"

by Prosperous Snow celebrating

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A delightful poem of 16 lines, 4 stanzas. A consistent rhyming scheme that adds to the great flow of this entertaining poem. I particularly like the title 'Joe's Tie'. That caught my eye. A most humorous tone, and I'm quite sure I've met Joe.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems to be found.

Prosperous Snow celebrating thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On! Take time to smell the roses
God Bless!

Joseph

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#4854709

Review of This is the Best Trap, Yet!

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

2026

Hi WebWitch I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"This is the Best Trap, Yet!" by WebWitch

Clarity: A good title that catches the reader's attention well.

Writing style: Fantasy, horror, drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?

Indeed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

A nice structure that does make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

My favorite line:--- Dark fairies prey on the souls of the lowest form of human existence, thus, we actually do society a favor.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good mysterious image that goes well with this tale.

A wonderful opening line that grabs the reader's attention and persuades him to read on. Great introduction of Tara and her world with descriptions that takes the reader right into the tale.

Good modern day descriptions of the setting that helps make this tale seem more realistic.

A nice twist at the end that caught this reader totally off guard.

WebWitch thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider writing the next chapter, possibly 'Tara-Rizer's Revenge'.

SMILE ~ WRITE ON! BE HAPPY ~ KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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#4854677

Review of Honeydew Suits Me…

Review by Joseph

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

2026

Hi again Emberly Gray I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Honeydew Suits Me… "

by Emberly Gray

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A unique and delightful free verse style poem emphasizing the difference between watermelon and honeydews'. Describing honeydews' as modest, but much more rewarding in the end. A great idea for this poem, comparing the two with human characteristics.

A much more entertaining poem than the typical 'somebody done somebody wrong' or 'lost a love' style romance poem.

Emberly Gray thank you for sharing your poem.

Write On! Take time to smell the roses
God Bless!

Joseph

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#4854657

Review of Muttonheads, third draft

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

2026

Hi again Whiskerfacebythefireplace I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Muttonheads, third draft" by Whiskerfacebythefireplace

Clarity: A good title. However, for this as a stand alone chapter, you might consider describing the content of this chapter better.

Writing style: Comedy, fan fiction. Drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?

Indeed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

Nicely structured, making it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

A great job with the dialogue as this is practically 100% dialogue.

My favorite lines:---Two skinny blondes with blue eyes, so similar that Hiccup could only tell them apart by their hairstyles. Ruffnut and Tuffnut were bizarre, one moment brilliant, the next absurd. They were violent masochists who banged their heads together and beat each other up as a hobby. The tribe thought of them as a plague on the island, and the only explanation anyone could offer for their antics was “It’s them.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good opening line, however, again as a stand alone chapter, you might consider making it a bit stronger to capture the reader's attention better.

A creative, well written and entertaining storyline. Good character and background descriptions to help the reader to visualize the setting. This helps to bring the reader into the story.

Although all dialog can be most difficult for the writer, it does make a more realistic storyline for the reader.

A well written and enjoyable dragon tale story.

Whiskerfacebythefireplace thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a good edit with some subtle changes to make this a standalone story.

SMILE ~ WRITE ON! BE HAPPY ~ KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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#4854495

Review of The Fallen Chair

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

2026

Hi Melody I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Fallen Chair"

by Melody

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A simple children's story. Written emphasizing the fact that things just don't last forever. Everything eventually runs its course and breaks down. Mostly when we least expect it.

Often the weather does play a part in things breaking down. They seem to do it more when it's extremely cold or extremely hot.
It is extremely cold where I am with about a foot of snow fresh covering the ground.

Melody thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On! Take time to smell the roses
God Bless!

Joseph

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#4854266

Review of Coming of the Travel Gods

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Kermit I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Coming of the Travel Gods" by Kermit

Clarity: A good title that catches the reader's attention.

Writing style: Folktale, fantasy, Drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?

Only one listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?

A nice structure and format. Personally, I prefer to see a few more blank lines to break up and make appear less intimidating.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?

The dialogue does seem to be appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line: ---“Oh, dear. Is Carl trapped at your house with Mom?”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A nice casual opening line. Consider moving some of the action from the third paragraph to the opening line to catch the reader's attention from the beginning.

A well described and creative storyline. The ending leaves the reader guessing.

Kermit thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: A good reread and edit never hurts. Consider some blank lines to break up and look less intimidating to the reader or a browser. Maybe experiment with the opening line? Less characters would be easier for the reader to keep up with.
Just my 2 cents worth sitting in the snow.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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#4853997

Review of Looking for a worldbuilder!

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hi octulas I came across this work while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the article: "Looking for a worldbuilder!"

by octulas

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A request from what seems like an alien or possibly an AI chatbot.

I'm pretty sure 7 years is a long time for anyone to be searching for a world builder without any results. Ain't we all world builders?

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of an alien intelligence, studying us and our world while trying to learn how to socialize without Revealing their alien origin.

octulas thank you for sharing your work.
Write On!

Joseph

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#4853571

Review of New Life

Review by Joseph

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Xander Riley I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "New Life"

by Xander Riley

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A short poem about life. Time sure does fly, indeed. A slap, a cry. Then in the blink an eye. A slap, a cry.

3 delightful 4 line stanza's with a nice rhyming scheme and structure. Describing the short story of life.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: A child is born. Next thing you know, grown up. Before you know it, married. A child is born.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with this classic work.

Xander Riley thank you for sharing your poem.
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Joseph

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Review of Drums

Review by Joseph

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Samm I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Drums"

by Samm

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:'Drums' is a most delightful poem with a humorous yet catchy tone that stays with the reader.

The unique handwritten font goes well with this delightful poem.

Five meticulously worded stanzas with a unique rhyming scheme.

It is nice to read a poem that is not another somebody done, somebody wrong kind of song.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of the Little Drummer boy marching in front of the troops into battle.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with this entertaining work.

Samm thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

Joseph

"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP"