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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Hi again Emberly Gray I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Still Here, not Finished " Open in new Window. by Emberly Gray


Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A well written, deep emotional poem. A strong thirty four line free verse form poem emphasizing staying strong in the hardest times.

Old Man Time has a funny sense of humor. Low points in our life are trials and tests that we all go through. Those hard times make us stronger, learning from mistakes is how humans evolve. We just hang in there and do the best that we can then in what seems like no time at all, we can look back at those dark times and see how they helped us become stronger. Even laugh at what seemed so devastating at the time.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: Looking over the sea of time, I see the image of a strong struggling artist breaking out of their shell. Learning from their mistakes to becoming master at their art, then becoming a beacon of light for the next generation.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with this deep, entertaining work.

Emberly Gray thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Sex Story  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Hi Charles F. Mckenzie I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Sex Story" Open in new Window. by Charles F. Mckenzie

Clarity: The title seems deceiving for the content.

Writing style: I just don't know how to describe it.



Are all 3 genres listed?*Sad* by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Sad*

My favorite line:---The worst that can happen to a work of art is to have no fault found with it so that its author is not obliged to take up an attitude of opposition. -- Jean Cocteau, Writers at Work---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Seems to me like a random collection of 1 liners. Interesting and different from the norm, to make it a bit entertaining. I like the opening quote.

Charles F. Mckenzie thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Mindblown* *Crayons* *Crazy*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Nature blinks  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi niki.mugs I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Nature blinks" Open in new Window. by niki.mugs



Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A delightful free verse form poem. Written in a unique and original form.

The nature themed modern haikus really get the reader's mind to work. I think this one is my favorite.
'a quiet winter

cold winter snow
memories warm;
minute frozen still'

A delightful and entertaining collection.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Looks good to me.
*Mindblown* *Scroll* *BurstO* *Type* *Ninja* *Lightning3*
niki.mugs thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Caught Out  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again Sumojo I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Caught Out" Open in new Window. by Sumojo

Clarity: Good title that catches the readers curiosity.

Writing style:Family drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*CheckGr* by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*CheckGr*

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? *CheckGr*Great dialog.

My favorite line:--- The old lady tried not to smile before she nodded and said quietly, “You won’t get away with this again, Danny.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: How are things down under?
A very entertaining short story. Realistic and sounds like some of my childhood adventures.

Nicely written. I hope that you won the contest.*Rolling* *Hug* *Kangaroo* *Ornament2G* *WaxSealO*

Sumojo thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Crayons2* Write on!*Audio2*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again Emberly Gray I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Who are you to judge me…" Open in new Window. by Emberly Gray

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A well-written strong 29 line free verse style poem that conveys a deep message that most readers will probably be able to relate to. This entertaining poem has sure got this reader's mind to spinning.

People are truly funny. Many times people build up in their mind conspiracies that are just not true. We might think that someone is watching us and judging us by our appearance. Actually that person may be on serious medication and just trying to make it through their day without even noticing us or that they were staring at us.

Lots of people can get overly paranoid, on the other hand they are those that might be judging us thinking they're better. It is what you know yourself that matters, don't pay no attention to what anyone else thinks they are probably out of their mind on either Pharmaceuticals, street drugs or alcohol or who knows what these days. We never really know what's going on in someone else's mind.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No Problems that I can see.
*Proud* *Blush* *InfoY* *Unicorn* *Badge3*
Emberly Gray thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Glowing Eyes  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again Jeffhans I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Glowing Eyes" Open in new Window. by Jeffhans

Clarity:A good title that grabs the readers attention.

Writing style:Children's folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*CheckO* by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*CheckO*

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? *CheckO*

My favorite line:---young Tilda, a tinkerer with a knack for gears and wires, squinted from the back.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A nice opening describing Redstone and the townsfolk. Good introduction of Zorath 'weaver of miracles.' I think I might of met young Tilda before.
Tilda puts Zorath in his wagon heading out of town.

Jeffhans thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Kare iauu Enga I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "In the midst of silence" Open in new Window. by Kare iauu Enga

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A well-worded deep feeling poem emphasizing the change of seasons from Autumn to Winter.
Well delicately worded to bring the descriptions to life.
This poem paints a beautiful picture with just seventeen lines of free verse poetry.
A beautiful poem. 'it is within the midst of silence
that the soul finds its voice.'


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find in this poetic poem.

Kare iauu Enga thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi John I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:""Oops, how'd that happen?" " Open in new Window. by John

Clarity:Nice title.

Writing style: Comedy drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*CheckP* Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*CheckGr* Nice structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? *CheckO*

My favorite line:---Nothing. My brain remained a desert of originality. That's when the whispers began. Not actual whispers, you understand, but the insidious little suggestions that only desperation can conjure. Graham, what if you... just... moved things around a bit? What if you... accidentally... found something?---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A nice mild opening introduces the main character, Professor Graham Merr.
A humorous and entertaining story. I hope you won the contest.



John thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:The story starts with the font a fairly good size but then it reduces in the first paragraph. Consider keeping the larger font for those of us readers with weak eyes.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Pools of uranium!  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi vapid I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Pools of uranium!" Open in new Window. by vapid

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Artistic Voice and Imagery:An entertaining Kind of humorous Storytelling Style poem with a nice rhyming scheme giving it a poetic flow.

'the mother of all inventions and ills, all thanks to pools of uranium'

Focusing on humans ability to screw something up and then make it sound like we made it better. Indeed the human race has become artist at this phenomenon.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find.

vapid thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Rising Tide  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again Emberly Gray I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Rising Tide" Open in new Window. by Emberly Gray

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A deep and emotional poem describing anxiety from normal everyday routines.
‘To find a shore, a place to land,

Away from the drift of the shifting sand.’

A well written realistic poem that most everyone should relate to.
We are creatures of habit and many of us let everyday routines that were once fun start to stress us out and take all the fun away. The majority of the time most of those pressures we have put on ourselves. Often it is good for us to get away, take a break and get some rest. This helps to clear the mind then come back with a whole new Focus.

*Fox* *StarfishY* *Sly* *CircleRainbow* *Sparkle*
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can see.

Emberly Gray thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Lilystar.com I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Architectural of trust" Open in new Window. by Lilystar.com

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful fifteen line poem with a nice rhyming scheme that adds to this unique flow.

An entertaining poem that leaves plenty of room for the reader to use their imagination to fill in the mystery.
*Footprintl* *Footprints* *Shine*

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find in this delightful poem.

Lilystar.com thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Rojodi I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"October 29 Object Description and Bonus" Open in new Window. byRojodi

Clarity:The title could describe the story better.

Writing style:Folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only one listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Bookshelf* Yes.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Vamp* Yes.

My favorite line:--- The painter Diederik Van Rossum had accompanied his father Joost to the Western outpost of Schenectady, helping the elder Van Rossum trade goods – silver, weapons, and blankets – for furs with the native population.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written, delightful and entertaining tale. Written with great descriptions that help to take the reader into the storyline. A bit of History was a nice touch for this artistic Tale.

Consider changing the title to better describe this tale’s content.


Rojodi thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Penw* Write on!*WDCSurveyForm*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of "Hide"  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Netty I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: ""Hide"" Open in new Window. by Netty

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written free verse style poem with eleven lines focusing on how God's presence is everywhere and you cannot hide from his presence. This simple poem carries a realistic flow and presents a powerful inspirational message.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find.

Netty thank you for sharing your inspirational poem.
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Review of Summer Rain  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi ChristineB I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Summer Rain" Open in new Window. by ChristineB

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Artistic Voice and Imagery: It is almost magical how Mother Nature can change so suddenly from a beautiful day to an apocalyptic storm. This well worded free verse style poem focuses on rain and more rain which turns into floods.

Personally I live near a river where it seems to always be wet, however this past year is the dryest I can ever remember around here.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find.

ChristineB thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Inner Rose  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again The Uplifting Essayist I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"The Inner Rose" Open in new Window. by The Uplifting Essayist

Clarity:A nice title for this uplifting tale.

Writing style:Realistic folktale drama.

Image #2337040 over display limit. -?-

Are all 3 genres listed?Only one listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*StarY* A good structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*StarY* Yes.

My favorite line:--- And the love with which she distributed food to the needy was beyond compare.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:‘The Inner Rose’ is a well-written and entertaining story about Mala who is preparing to go to a wedding reception with her snooty crowd. On her way there she spies a nun with a peaceful aura of Serenity about her. This manages to change Mala's attitude and perception of things. She returns home and changes out of all her expensive things and dresses more simply and goes on a simple mission to help people.

An inspirational tale.

The Uplifting Essayist thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Write On!*Highlighter* *Highlighter*
*Highlighter**Highlighter*
WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Construct  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi SanguineAngel I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Construct" Open in new Window. by SanguineAngel

Clarity:An interesting title.

Writing style:Philosophical fantasy drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only one listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*StarBr* Good structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*StarBr*Yes.

My favorite line:--- I wake to the dark. To the blind valley in which I have always existed. ---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written and entertaining Alice fell into the rabbit hole type adventure tale.

A good opening that slowly pulls the reader right into the adventure with you. Detailed descriptions.
You got to wonder about those mushrooms. That blind valley sounds very familiar.


SanguineAngel thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Write On!*Crayons*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Joey's Ready for the Giving I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Of Friends and Keyboards on WdC" Open in new Window. by Joey's Ready for the Giving

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A great image of the keyboard to begin with.
A well worded modern greeting to all of Writing.com's members, readers and future artists. A nice modern flow to this inspirational message that surely inspires anyone that reads it.
"Here's to the words unwritten, to the stories yet untold"

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems to be found.

Joey's Ready for the Giving thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Parents Love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi ShristiChand I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Parents Love" Open in new Window. by ShristiChand

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded eight line poem that carries an emotional flow. Focusing on the love of parents and how much they can be missed when living a distance away. Indeed it's some of the little things like this that makes one appreciate what they have.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find.

ShristiChand thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Hen Pecked  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi LenJenD' I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Hen Pecked" Open in new Window. by LenJenD'

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A simple and delightful eight line poem about chickens. Poetry about simple things is most delightful to read. I love ‘express it and eight’, it's amazing how much you can say in eight short lines of poem. A nice ABCD rhyming scheme for a Charming flow.
*Chicken*
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems.

LenJenD' thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!*Chicken*

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Beck Firing back up! I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"Something in the Air BNB" Open in new Window. by Beck Firing back up!

Clarity:Great title for this Air BNB ghost tale.

Writing style:Folktale mystery drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*CheckP* by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? *CheckP*

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*CheckP*

My favorite line:---“What the shit show is wrong with you?”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written entertaining tale. Straight to the point in a few words like the modern reader likes.
“Don’t touch the art”
Penny and Marsha's Air BNB vacation turns into a night in the haunted house.
*HauntedHouse*

Beck Firing back up!thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*HighlighterG* Write on! *HighlighterG*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Revealing  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Snowone Knows I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Revealing" Open in new Window. by Snowone Knows

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:'Revealing' A Christmas message - Poem using the Alouette form.
A creative Christmas poem written in a different style that challenges the readers imagination.

Interesting twenty four line poem of six line stanza's.

A beautiful poetic work that carries a angelic flow.

Alouette form with a 5,5,7,5,5,7 Meter.
Rhyme scheme a,a,b,c,c,b.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:*CheckO*

Snowone Knows thank you for sharing your poem. *Smile*
Write On!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi John I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"The Perfect Road trip" Open in new Window. by John

Clarity:Great title for this afventure .

Writing style:Family adventure drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*CheckGr* Yes by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*CheckGr* Nice structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*CheckGr*Good dialog.

My favorite line:--- "Darling! The paper dispenser was empty! Empty! Do they not understand the fundamental necessities of a civilized society? One cannot endure such an oversight!" She gestured wildly towards the restroom door, as if inviting the entire state of Iowa to witness her indignity.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:'The perfect road trip' an appropriate title for this Jeep Cherokee Adventure in the heartland. A well told entertaining story that quickly transports the reader into that Cherokee right between Bella and Spot. I think I did that corn maze and met that proud farmer.

John thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Adventure typo under the title. *Crayons* *PoseyY* *Penw* Write on!

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi tophatfiddle, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Archie Teegardin put the Clear...." Open in new Window. by tophatfiddle

Clarity:An interesting title however it could describe this smoking sci-fi tale better.

Writing style:Sci-fi drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*GlassesY* Only see one, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*FacePalm* A good structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*AsteriskO* The dialog is appropriate for it's speaker.

My favorite line:---Then he blew out the match with the stream of first smoke that the cigarette had generated—and coughed loudly.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A Entertaining sci-fi Adventure with the characters seeming to have the same everyday problems that we find ourselves in all the time.

A mild opening that introduces Archie Teegardin and begins to paint a pretty good picture of Archie's nature.
I guess smoking is not allowed in sci-fi either.

Hopefully Archie can stop stealing.*Smirk2*


tophatfiddlethank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Crayons* Writey-O *Crayons*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi again stuckintheend I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "I feel so dirty now." Open in new Window. by stuckintheend

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A nineteen line Free verse form poem emphasizing on one from a past relationship that has begun a new one with another. By leaving that past on paper you can now move on to your Future and learn from the mistakes of the past. In the blink of an eye time has a way of changing today's drama to a distant memory.

The grass always looks greener on the other side of the pasture.
What we think we can't have can be the most desirable.
We cannot change yesterday however for tomorrow we can learn from yesterday.
The greatest Thrill Is In The Chase, the conquest ends the hunt.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can see.

stuckintheend thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Pernell Rogers I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Home For Sale" Open in new Window. by Pernell Rogers

Clarity:A mild title for this twisted treehouse tale.

Writing style:Folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Check* Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Shine* Nice structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*StarV* Appropriate.

My favorite line:---"It probably needs a little work. I don't think anyone has been up there in years. It could be something nice to have whenever you get married," the realtor answered.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A delightful and entertaining story about Lewis's Adventures buying a new house. Well described story that paints a great picture for the reader. Ending with an unexpected time twist paradox which puts the house back up for sale.

Pernell Rogers thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Crayons* Write on!

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