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Rated: E | (3.5)
This poem has a fun, conversational tone with a clever bowling metaphor to explore hope, pride, and generational contrast. The rhyme and rhythm work well overall, giving it a nice flow.

Highlights:

Great imagery, especially with the "veteran players" vs. younger folks.

Lines like "laugh at the strike they stole!" are witty and vivid.


Suggestions:

The opening lines are a bit unclear—consider rewording for clarity.

The final line with "economize" feels slightly out of place; maybe swap for a word that fits the theme more closely.


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