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Review by Don Two
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
"We Three Walking Sticks" is a free-verse poem with a terrific title, it drew me in. It is 21 lines total, without any stanza break, which seems apropos. The scene is the Mississippi River and the memory is a trekking experience. There is fine image, like "golden greens", "quarry bluff", and a "leaf strewn path." "Schools of May apples lapped at our feet" is a great line. The adventurousness and environment is admirably captured in this fine poem. Write on.
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Review of True Love  
Review by Don Two
Rated: E | (4.0)
"True Love" is a poem relating love and love through life, and makes a pointed statement at the end, which which is thoughtful and creative. It is 16 lines total with consecutive rhyme. The first two lines are quite good and rhythmic, and impressionable due to the reference to stars. These two lines are SR (8), whereas other lines deviate in syllable rhythm, some (9) ["True love it seems but lasting, never'], and some (7) ["Love once shared ends in divorce"]. The ending line is SR (11). Love's perspective ranges from that of teens to that of the seeking to, "...gain his name." The poet points out that older women, "...play their own game." Divorce is of course mentioned, and also the wondering, "...Will there be another?" In line (3) I would add a comma after "born", and in a few other places, like after "Still" (no to be too technical, but for clarity), and in line (6) I would amend "With teens" to "In teens", respectfully submitted. The concept is very good. Thanks for sharing, write on.
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Review of A dream  
Review by Don Two
Rated: E | (4.0)
"A dream" is a short 12 line poem expressing love. It is broken up into six 2-line stanzas. It begins wondering if beauty were a picture, then wondering if it would, "...hang upon my wall." Other tangibles things it is likens to are a glance, laughter and touch. The poet conveys sincerity. A very good part is, "One touch is like a goddess / that love is so entwined." Mostly the rhythm is SR 7 and 6, with a deviation in the next to last line, which is 8. However, it woks okay and doesn't take away from the sincerity.
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Review by Don Two
Rated: E | (4.5)
"A Slippery Wet Disaster" is a poem to which we can all relate, as motorists. It is 18 lines total, 3 stanzas, the first 2 stanzas are 5 lines and then the last is 8 lines. This poem describes the dangers that can crop up on the road, the commute home, especially in poor driving conditions, like rain and sloshy conditions. Word choice is good, with sharp phrasing like, "fluid-like traction", "onerous conditions," and, "plaguing the tiresome." We are informed how a distraction, "can lead to much damage." This poem is informative and matter-of-fact, written well and is an interesting read. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Flaming Hearts  
Review by Don Two
Rated: E | (4.5)
"Flaming Hearts", is a gentle, well-constructed poem about lost love. It is 16 lines total, broken into 4 equal stanzas. The tone is apropos, word choice is good as is the construction. There is uniform consistency in the beginning lines, using, "Like", "They", "Like" and "Two" for each stanza; this is a good device. So there is reliance on simile, which adds to this piece's charm. The gamut of the seasons is run, from spring to summer, reflecting the bloom of love to the eventual coldness of the loss, since the winter winds, "...numb the body, and chill the soul." In the end, the flaming hearts now lie, unfortunately, frozen. The application here, of love to the seasons creates an admirable poem, most enjoyable. Write to dawn.
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Review by Don Two
Rated: E | (4.5)
"The Groundhog Overslept" is a cute poem with good flow about the groundhog that overslept ("a dozen days away") but then is shot by cupid; "A lady groundhog was nearby." This poem uses the eight syllable rhythm very well, and tells a cute story. This is a pleasant poem and fun to read. At first he doesn't see his shadow, then he finds loves, and in the end "He hoped and wished the clouds away / to see his shadow every day." This is nice.
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