Doris's (datanner) Reviews

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#2280607

Review of Thank You.

Review by Doris

Rated: E | (4.0)

Very good story. I'm proud for you.

ArkMom Doris

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#2272628

Review of The Word

Review by Doris

Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

Another good poem. I write very little poetry and cannot critique it intelligently,i.e. rhyming meter etc. It is a cute poem, and one I'm sure you will treasue.

ArkMom

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#2272624

This is too cute. I love it when people can write stories and not reveal the character til the end.
And to have it in a poem is even greater.

Some places didn't seem to rhyme and it almost lost its flow. But keep up the good work.

ArkMom

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#2269057

Review of Running

Review by Doris

Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

I write very little poetry, so I struggle to understand the type of poetry you write. Understand I am impressed at anyone who writes any other way but rhyme I guess I keep looking for a story with an ending, and even though I know you have a story in there, I fail to see it. Remember again, I can't write your style I only try try to interpret.

Keep up the good work and welcome to WDC.

ArkMom

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#2265397

Review of And then there were none...

Review by Doris

Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

Guess I was almost lost since there was no rhyming to the poem. Your comment about Agatha Christie led me to believe there had been something similar to her writings. I would be interested to know what your grade was on this and how the teacher viewed it. I love poetry, but this lacked something. Keep writing.

ArkMom

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#2066646

Review of Leaving

Review by Doris

Rated: E | (4.0)

This is a great story. I probably need to read it a second time to find errors, but all in all it does speak volumns for the restless one. I don't know why, but I found myself reading it fast. Maybe the flow of sentences - I'm not sure. I don't usually read as tho I only have a few minutes to get to the end. So I'm sure I can't tell you why I felt like rushing. Something to think about on my part for sure. Others may not see it, - so again "one man's (woman in this case) opinion. Keep up the good work.

ARK MOM
DA Tanner

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#2057403

Review of Who's to Say

Review by Doris

Rated: E | (4.0)

Heart warming for sure. It would not take away from the poem content to correct the spelling of a few
words.

fany ( fancy) clothes they do not wear

Lord plase (please) hear my prayers and help me understand.

Would love to know the whole story. Very emotional.

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#2049022

Review of the way out

Review by Doris

Rated: 13+ | (1.0)

This is very difficult to read. You may want to take a better look at your grammer as well as spelling. Maybe it is type errors, but your piece is filled with gramatical errors.
You do have a good idea going, but like I say, needs some work.

ARK MOM

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#2045334

Review of Food, Fireworks, and Freedom

Review by Doris

Rated: E | (5.0)

I needed this tonight. It is wonderful to be free, and the story that you intertwined is precious. I more than an child, but I can relate to a boy who would look forward to meeting his hero. I'll check out your other links another time. Keep up the good work.

datanner
ARK MOM

Doris's (datanner) Reviews

Review of Thank You.

Review of The Word

Review of I Remember

Review of Running

Review of And then there were none...

Review of Leaving

Review of Who's to Say

Review of the way out

Review of Food, Fireworks, and Freedom