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Review of Change is Scary!  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Melisscious!
For you first piece on here, this isn't bad. It's a little different, but it's still interesting!
I've never been to Canada, although having been born in Alaska and lived a good portion of my life in California, I guess I've been all around it! *Laugh* But father was born in Saskatchewan, so I understand I might have dual citizenship with Canada.
Anyway, I'm so glad your friends convinced you to 'spread your wings', so to speak, and encouraged to you try something you might never have thought yourself capable of! I totally agree that change is scary, but sometimes it's also necessary! I left my home town in California 9 years ago more or less on a whim with barely the clothes on my back and moved here to Texas. I swore I'd never live in Texas, but I kind of didn't have a choice at that time. Am I glad I moved here? Not really, since my children and grandchildren are still back in Oregon (right across the border from my home in CA.) But at least I proved I could do it! But I'm going home this summer come hell or high water!
Sorry, I digress.
As I said, I'm glad everything worked out for you! Not a lot of people would take that chance, and you even managed to proved something to yourself!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Melisscious, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Slam!
This isn’t bad. I like your sense of humor, but I’m not too sure your hypothesis is quite accurate when it comes to ‘infinite wolf steaks’. Mainly, you didn’t take into account the aging process.
I know a family of werewolves who live just across the street, and they do indeed age. In fact, they have several generations living together, from a great, great grandfather to a great, great granddaughter. The oldest one, mind you, is not something you’d want a slab of meat from! His muscles, or what’s left of them, are wrinkled and useless, and any protein or vitamins there might have been when he was young are long gone now!
Don’t get me wrong, Slam! It’s a good concept, and maybe one day if we can ever learn how to live longer, maybe this idea might actually work.
OK. Seriously, I thought this was pretty good. I like how you thought outside of the box, even though as a lover of werewolves and all living (and dead) creatures I’m against killing them for whatever reasons! *Laugh*
One tiny niggle:
“...Isn't that cannibalism?"(.) (don’t need that period)
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Review of Epiphanies  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Whiskerface!
This is a neat little item about epiphanies and insight into ourselves, and just by reading this I had an epiphany of my own! Literally that one you mentioned about when we sometimes write, we fall into a groove! That says it perfectly for me!
I know you said you had fear (or reservations), at least at first, but once you got started getting those words out, things sort of took on a life of their own. I'm the same way! But sadly, it's not so much when I'm writing my stories, but writing other things (like this review!). You did a great job of showing that part about your ex's insight into himself and how much he had changed from your ex to this new adult, and I'm glad that you can see the 'power' you're capable of having with this new found wisdom and strength!
If we don't travel down these tunnels, regardless of how dark they might seem, then we might never experience the light at the end!
I know, that's pretty cliché, but it's the best I got at the moment. Hopefully got the gist of it, anyway.
Well said, my friend!
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Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings, Nicola, and happy belated 13th 'birthday' on here!
This is really good, and I like how you used the 'turkey talk' contest prompt for it! Having Thomas try to trade place with Stan was a cool idea, even though Stan could see right through his nefarious trick. And that ending was also pretty good, but what stood out to me was the dialogue. It sounded so real and natural!
Bravo, my friend! I don't know how this'll do in the contest, but it sure looks like a winner to me!
PS-When I was younger, I had a lot of people who called me 'dude'! I couldn't stand it (it got to the point that I wouldn't even respond to them until they called me by my name!), so I know all too well what Stan was going through!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!


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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Greetings, Tehuti!
This was an extremely informative, educational, and inspiring article, and I can’t thank you enough for sharing it with us! You’ve done an excellent job of showing us these ten ‘easy’ steps on writing a novel, and although some of them might still seem a bit daunting, you really have made the process sound a lot easier! Maybe because you broke it down the way you have and supplied us with some great examples, and using your own experience with your first completed novel didn’t hurt either!
It’s nice to know we’re reading something from somebody who’s walked in our shoes at one time!
I’ve started 4 or 5 novels in my 54 years, and sadly didn’t finish a single one. I usually write as a pantser, but after writing myself into a corner with my first attempt at a novel (where I had to get rid of 150 pages of the 250 manuscript pages I’d already wrote), I learned a valuable lesson about having an outline!
Am I still a pantser? I’ll admit that I am for the most part, but I’ve learned to at least outline to a small degree. I’m seriously going to take your advice about steps 4, 5 and 6 into consideration!*
But what I enjoyed most about this article is that it inspired me to get back to the novel I am/was currently working on! Hell, it even got me excited to work on it again! My problem is motivation. I know where I’m going, I just have a problem taking that next step. Maybe it’s from fear that I’ll go in the wrong direction. So many little forks in the road I’m worried I write my story right off a cliff, if you know what I mean. But I know there has to be that dreaded (or as you call it, ‘dirty’) word ‘revision’ that’s going to have be done, no matter how much I won’t like it. I still kick myself in the head for giving up on that first novel. I think it had potential, but unfortunately those surviving 100 pages ended up in the trash. Maybe one day I’ll try it again with what I remember of it (which is actually quite a bit).
As for this current novel of mine, I had big plans to write at least 150 words a day. I know that doesn’t sound like much, but after a year that adds up to 54,750 words—a short novel, but a novel nonetheless.
And then there’s all these folks doing (and completing) NaNoWriMo right now! I don’t know if I’m jealous of them or envious of them or both, but I wish I could bring myself to do it. I almost tried it this year, but of course I found plenty of excuses not to. *Headbang*
But here’s a real kicker: I’ve written about 150 flash fiction pieces, the majority of them 1,000 words or so (12 of which have already been published in small online magazines, paperback collections, one hard cover—The 2016 WdC Anthology—and one magazine). That’s 150,000 words right there, but it’s not a novel. I’ve thought about putting them all into a couple of collections of 75,000 words apiece and self-publishing them through Amazon, but...well, I’ll just leave it there for now. I really need to get that damn word ‘but’ out of my vocabulary!
Anyway, I just wanted you to know how grateful I am to you for sharing this with us, Tehuti! And if you don’t mind, I’m going to make a copy of this and tack it up in my office, which really just consists of a couch, a coffee table, and my laptop *Laugh*. But hey, it works for me!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks again, and have a fantastic Thanksgiving!
*I’m pretty sure I read in one of Stephen King’s books that he’s a total pantser. He said he starts with the first sentence and lets the story take him where it wants to go, instead of the other way around.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi there, Shaara, and happy belated 17th *Shock2* 'birthday' on here!
I love this! I know you have to deal with some sad times, but as you say, as long as you can hold to the good and funny times for a little longer, then it's well worth it!
Some of these are hilarious! 'From out of the mouths of babes...'. You should think about expanding on this piece because I'm sure have a thousand more of these little sayings. And heck, you could probably it! Seriously!
I think little Tommy and I had the same idea about that Golden Rule and doing unto others before they do unto you! *Rolling*
I can't say I ever thought about daylight savings have an affect kids, but I was raised up in Alaska where it was dark when we got to school and dark by the time we got out! 7 hours of daylight in the winter isn't really too bad, though, especially when you have 23 and a 1/2 hours of daylight in the summer! And even then the sun's barely over the horizon!
"Don't run on the asphalt!" *Shock* (How dare you use the 'a' word in front of my child!) *Laugh*
Thank you so much for sharing this, Shaara! You're lucky to be a teacher, and I think you should be paid a million times more than they're probably paying you now! My daughter taught 2nd graders for a few years, and she was always having to use her own money to buy supplies and decorate her classroom! *Angry*
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! It was a pleasure to read this, thanks for the laughs, may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC, and have a fantastic Thanksgiving!


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Review of Tommy the Drummer  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Howdy, OOT, and happy early 7th 'birthday' on here!
This is quite an entertaining and interesting piece, and I commend you on your overactive imagination for coming up with such a strange subject to write about!
A toy drummer, eh? *Laugh*
And not just any toy drummer, but a toy drummer that is working ridiculously long hours, slave labor probably, and most likely not being paid overtime!
Don't those toys have a union?!?
Yeah, so he only works for one month and gets a 11 off. But he probably has to go into hibernation and sleep for those 11 months! Either that or he's in the hospital getting physical therapy for his aching muscles and joints!
I have a half a mind to call the Better Business Bureau over this Santa dude! Or maybe AFL/CIO! *Rolling*
OK. I had my fun. This really is a great piece, OOT! And somehow you did validate Tommy's working hours there at the end, even though I totally disagree with it! *Laugh*
'Have you ever tried to beat cookie dough into shape with a plastic drumstick?' *Laugh*
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, thanks for the chuckles, and have a very merry Thanksgiving!


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Review of Perfect Goodbye  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hujambo, Ken!
This is a great, albeit sad, piece, but it certainly tells the truth of what we've done to this planet. And what's worse is that it's gotten even worse since you wrote this a year ago! And what's worser (my new word!) still is that we have a dictator for a so-called president who doesn't even believe in climate change or climate warming! *Angry*
This has the flavor of an old Twilight Zone episode, and I have to admit that I did see that ending coming. But that doesn't take anything away from this, because the main subject, at least to me, is not just pollution or little donna rump, but what technology is doing to our society! You're so right with that question at the end: how DO we meet REAL people anymore? People are just voices on our cell phones or letters in our text messages. People don't talk to face to face anymore like we did 30 or so years ago. That's what I don't like about Facebook: they said it would bring us closer, but I see it doing just the opposite!
Great piece, Ken! And I too long for those days of eating a chocolate ice cream cone (with fudge ribbon *Laugh*) on a beautiful, sunny summer day...
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, thanks for sharing this, and have a wonderful Turkey Day! Gobble gobble!


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Review of Complex Numbers  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi there, Chill!
I like this. It brought back some good (and bad) memories of my pre-Algebra college class, which I somehow managed to pull out B+ in!
Numbers are indeed interesting, and you gave some great examples. Prime numbers always interested me. I've even tried to see how far I could count them, but after a while I either get too confused or I fall asleep (and counting them WILL put you to sleep, trust me!).
One number I remember from my Algebra class wasn't a number at all, but rather a symbol of a number, since it doesn't actually exist. If my memory serves me correctly (I took that class 20 years ago!), I think it was the symbol for the answer to the square root of a negative 1. Now I'm not sure about this, so if anyone out there does know for sure what the heck I'm trying to say, please let me know! I remember it did actually have a place in solving mathematical equations, so I don't think I'm too far off.
Anyway, I agree with you that pi is a 'universal' number (no pun intended), and pi is itself a paradox!
Great piece, Chill!
Kee pon writin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this (and that link to the video), and have a wonderful Thanksgiving!
Now to go try to figure out if I'm right or wrong on the square root of a negative one thing!


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Review of Afterlife  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
G’day, Beholden!
This is pretty wild. It’s certainly horror, but horror in a new or different light.
The idea of watching your own body, or vehicle if you will, being dissected would be alarming, but it would be downright terrifying if you were feeling it! Even if I knew I wasn’t going to feel it, the sound of that saw alone coming near my skull would be enough to make me soil my ethereal chinos!
Nice job with the descriptions, and the sound of the bullet hitting the bowl was a cool way to end this. And writing it in the first person was perfect. Makes it more ‘personal’.
Flawless spelling and grammar (thank you!).
Kee ponw ritin gon, Beholden! Good luck in the contest (I haven’t checked who won yet), and I hope to see more of your entries "SCREAMS!!!


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Guten tag, Bill!
Have you no couth, man? Displaying a poem about one of your sexual encounters during the Christmas season?
Seriously though, you know I love your writing, no matter what it is, but I think this is the first poem of yours I’ve read. I totally understand you wanting to try something a little different (I wonder how the Eskimos do it?), and I commend you on your valiant attempt, but maybe you should have been more prepared for this polar tryst.
Viagra, perhaps? *Laugh*
The rhyming was excellent, as was the meter. But that ending was what made this shine!
Like I said, I still give you three thumbs up for trying! *Thumbsupl* *Thumbsupl* *Thumbsupl*
Kee ponw riting on, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, thanks for the laughs, and have a wonderful Thanksgiving!


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Review of Chewy,s Story  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi there, Wishful!
As an animal lover, I really loved this little story! Granted, there's quite a few grammar problems and misspellings in it, but as a story-teller, you did a great job with this. I don't if it was the kindness this Bacon guy had or the happy ending or both, but it truly was heart-warming. And the even neater thing is I once owned a Pit Bull! OK, he was 1/2 Pit, but he looked like a full blooded Pit. A 'friend' left 'Bru' with me and said he'd be back in a couple of weeks. Turns out he didn't show back up for TWO YEARS!
Here's the kicker though: I was scared to death of Pits when I first took him. I even kept him outside on a leash. But it was starting to get cold outside so I finally let come in at night. And then we just started bonding! He used to 'smile' by curling his lips up-that scared the daylights out of people-but I knew it just meant he was happy!
Anyway, Bru ended being the best dog I ever had, and by that time in my life (I think I was in my mid 30s) I'd had a LOT of dogs! Mostly Great Danes, which I still love. But there was just something about Bru that was really special!
But getting back to your story, I also like the idea of Bacon and Zoey being homeless, but still nice enough to take this Pit under their wing and find a home for her.
Well done, Wishful!
Kee ponw ritin gon (that's my way of saying 'keep on writing on'), and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here! (And I'm glad you're 'trying your hand' at writing when you're bored! I'd love to read some more of your stories!)
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Hi, Sophie.
This is a really beautiful piece written by a very beautiful person, and I can't thank you enough for sharing it with us! Yes, it's a little sad that this happened to you, but as you said, it has made you who are today.
I'm not as religious as I once was, but I do believe to a point. And I believe that some higher power puts us through ordeals like this to make us stronger and to teach us that there are people in this world who have it a lot rougher than we do, and why we should just be happy to have what we have.
I'm a pretty tough-skinned old gargoyle, Sophie, but just between you and me, this did a bring a tear to my eye. But it was tear of joy, because you are one strong and beautiful person!
'I didn't say that, though, because if I hadn't gone through what I went through, all of it, every bit of it, I wouldn't be the person I am today. I wouldn't know the things I know, and I wouldn't have the gifts I have because of those life experiences.'
That says it all right there.
You truly are an inspiration and a Godsend to others, Sophie! *Heart*
My only regret is that I can only put 5 stars on this, because it deserves at least a hundred!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! PLEASE! And thank you for sharing this with us!


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Review of FIRST MEETING  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello there, SandraLynn!
I like this! And it wouldn't surprise me if something like this really happened!
For a FF piece, you did a great job of telling us about Sherry's honest mistake, and the imagery was perfect. I can just see her sitting there and pulling out that cupcake from her purse, only to be quickly 'overtaken' and escorted out of the classroom by those two 'very large women'! *Laugh*
I also liked your descriptions of the desks! That brought back a lot of memories, both good and bad! *Laugh*
Great job, SandraLynn!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for the chuckles, and have a wonderful weekend!


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Review of Why?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Guten tag, Sheila!
This is neat! I didn’t even realize there were so many odd sayings about the human body, but I think you got most of them in this cool little poem. I like the humorous style you wrote it in, and since you have it under ‘children’s’, I can just see myself asking my 2 year-old Grandannadaughter some of these questions!
Well done, my friend! I love your sense of humor!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Sheila! Thanks for sharing this, and have a fantastic weekend!
PS-I remember my mother telling me as a kid that she had eyes in the back of her head—and I actually believed her! *Shock* *Laugh*


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Hi there, Sunflower!
I totally agree!
I was just 10 years old when SNL started airing in November of 1975, and even though the humor was kind of strange to me, it was still simple enough that I could understand most of it. Some of my fondest memories were of skits were Rosanne Rosannadanna and Belushi and Akroyd behind the counter calling out 'Cheeseburger!', 'Pepsi!'
Now I'm 54 and I've tried to follow SNL as much as I could, but they went through some pretty dry spells for a while there. But that's understandable-nobody can hit a homerun every time they come up to the plate.
But the best SNL I ever watched was when they and most other comedians returned after 9/11. SNL opened the show with the stage full of the first responders to the Towers, the NYPD and the FDNY, and asked 'Can we be funny now?'
Anyway, great piece, Sunflower!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and LIVE...FROM NEW YORK! IT'S SATURDAY NIGHT! *Laugh*


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Greetings, OOT, and happy early 8th 'birthday' on here!
For such a short FF piece, this is pretty good. The idea of Tyler's mother having to pay with her life for being so nosy about her son's whereabouts was cool, and the real irony of it is that she herself asked for it when she mentioned the Murphy place! The man Tyler tried to speak of, but was so rudely interrupted, obviously didn't want anybody else knowing about him, and so the whole family had to die.
So sad...*Sad*
Or maybe the father managed to escape the man's wrath? Hey! Maybe that's for another chapter, eh? *Laugh*
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, OOT! Now I'm off to read another of your wicked pieces! *Smirk2* Or maybe a humorous one!
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Review of Visions  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi again, Lisa!
This isn't bad. You did a nice job of building up the suspense with Sarah having that frightening dream about the car crash and her anxiety and fear of it actually coming true, but the ending was a little anticlimactic. And also ambiguous, since there really wasn't an ending at all.
Don't get me wrong. I like where you were going with it, but it felt like you rushed the ending.
Comments and suggestions:
One thing that stood out was how you started out a lot of those sentences with 'Sarah', as in 'Sarah woke', 'Sarah searched', 'Sarah refused'. That gets a little too repetitious.
'at the base of an strong, tall tree' (a)
'Sarah awoke in (a) hospital.'
Otherwise, good job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and like said before, I hope to see back here soon!


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Greetings, L.S. May (Lisa?)!
I really needed a pick-me-up laugh and smile this morning, and this piece did just that! Thank you!
I don’t know how you came up with this idea, but I thought it was hilarious! I love how you thought so far outside of the box, and your character, The New Ideas, was the perfect one to invent this new concept.
I also enjoyed his idea about trying to bring the light into the hut and taking the darkness out of it, but both kept slipping out of his hands!
But it was how the ‘wind-oh’ got its name that really made this shine! It’s just a shame that The New Ideas never got the recognition he deserved!
Your imagination obviously holds no bounds, because this piece, as bizarre as it is, actually makes sense to me!
Great piece, L.S.! My only regret is that I can only give this 5 stars, because it deserves at least a hundred!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! PLEASE! Have a wonderful day, and I hope to see you back here ASAP!
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Hello there, Tim Chiu!
Found this on a Read & Review, and glad I did! That byline said it all! *Laugh*
I don't know if this is based on a real experience or not, but it sure sounds possible! The fact that the simple act of a tomato could result in such an odd, but neat, conversation like that and bring two close friends even closer is great.
It just goes to show how and why we should appreciate the simple things in life!
Nice job, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Tim! Thanks for sharing this, and have a wonderful evening/tomorrow/week!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon! *BalloonR*

Hello there, Carolyn Stone!
For a such short piece, this isn't bad. The idea of a potentially beautiful relationship being blown away by a man's poor brewing of a simple cup of coffee might be hard for some to swallow, since it was such a minor flaw in this man's character. But I guess that just goes to show what good taste you have!
HA! Get it? Hard to swallow? Good taste?
Sorry. I just had to say that.
Anyway, I did enjoy this, mainly for that short and simple 4 word ending. Maybe that really is how some folks judge a potential suitor.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-Love that line about the houseplant in your port intro!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there, L.S. May!
As a lover/reader/writer and judge of horror, I thought this was pretty neat!
I like the simple way you described the creature's eyes and Lucy's fear of being in the dark, even though it wasn't so much the dark that she was scared of, but rather what came with it!
You also did a great job building up the suspense as she finally goes to sleep, and then throwing us for a quick loop when she wakes up and everything's fine.
Ah, but all is not as it seems...
It was that ending that made this shine (no pun intended-mainly because 'shining' is exactly what wasn't happening beyond her bedroom door! *Smirk2*). Having all those green eyes staring at her as the bedroom door 'dissolved' and left her there in 'nothingness' was excellent!
Flawless spelling and grammar (thank you!), but I did spot one tiny niggle:
"I'll come for you..." It always said.' (it)
Otherwise, bravo!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and I hope to see back here on WdC soon! We miss ya!


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Bon jour, Ruth!
For a short FF piece, I thought this was pretty darn good!
Your 'Crooner' apparently thought he was some modern day Don Juan to think he could come into your apartment just because the weather outside was frightful and the fire was so delightful, even though you had central heating! *Laugh*
For some reason I'm having visions of this guy being Dean Martin singing at your door step, and I just realized why! I just googled it and Let It Snow was one of his hit songs!
Anyway, great job with this, Ruth!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for the chuckles, and may your holidays be merry!


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*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon! *BalloonR*

Greetings, Zelda Zonk!
For a beginning to a story, I think you've got something here, even if it is rather brief and we don't know what it's going to be about.
BUT...that's entirely up to you to decide. It's your 'baby', so let's see how you 'raise' him! *Bigsmile*
You don't have your bio up yet so I don't know anything about you, but as a somewhat experienced writer myself, allow me to tell you that once you get an idea in your head, you should at least get the plot down. You've done a great job here of setting a 'hook', so I think you should continue with it. But don't just set it aside and forget about it! Fresh ideas aren't easy to come by, so perhaps you should add some more to this while it's still in your fresh in your mind!
Of course, that's just my opinion and a suggestion, but I'm just trying to help you out!
Oh, and don't worry about it being perfect! That's why we have 1st and 2nd drafts, so we can polish our stories up!
So far, so good, though! The spelling and grammar was flawless, and I'd like to see how 'they' get out of this situation!
Kee ponw ritin gon, ZZ, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Hi, Carol!
Stumbled on this in the Ghost category, and glad I did!
Of all poetry styles I like best, it's limericks. So to find this little gem about a cold grave was a treat!
Yes, I know you have it under 'nonsense', but it still has a lot of merit! At least maybe some of them rumrunners and moonshiners will take heed of this next time they try to hide from the fuzz! *Laugh*
Well done, my friend! And I can certainly understand how this took 1st place in that contest!
Congratulations!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a great day!


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