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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, Pernell!
This is different. Different, but simple, which is what I like about it. Not all horror has to be complex, and sometimes one simple line can be enough to shock the reader. I like how you showed Sara’s apprehension after she let the silent stranger into her house, even though she was just trying to be thoughtful and kind.
Yes, the story does leave the reader with more questions than answers, but some endings are best left to the reader’s imaginations. Plus, me thinks you might have a word limit perhaps?
Kee ponw ritin gon, Pernell! Stay safe and healthy, and have a great day!

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Review of The Big Catch  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Ahoy, Miles, and happy early 3rd ‘birthday’ on here!
As a fan and writer of flash fiction, I thought this was pretty good. Unfortunately though, I can relate to it.
This is a perfect example of that old adage, ‘Be careful what you wish for, because you just might get it.’ It also reminds me of an old Twilight Zone episode where a store owner didn’t specify exactly what he wanted, and his three wishes from a Genie turned into nightmares!
You did a great job of telling this, and using the mermaid as the wish ‘donor’ was perfect. I also like that small jibe she gave Jim about him being ‘another one’ and rolling her eyes! *Laugh*
On a side note, my first (and only) wife was a red head, and Bill’s line about a snake being a snake no matter how pretty it’s dressed up fits her perfectly! *Laugh*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Miles! Stay safe and healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review of The Semicolon  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, flyfishercacher!
Saw this on the hub and it really caught my interest.
I like this informative piece. I’ve always been in a funk on just how to use the semi-colon, and I consider myself rather well-educated when it comes to grammar and English. You’ve made some excellent points and examples in your defense of it, and I couldn’t agree more.
I’ve reviewed a few pieces on here where the author was using ONLY a semi-colon in his story. They were simply substituting it as a comma.
When I was younger, I rarely used it, but not I find myself using it a little bit more. Maybe that’s because I’m writing a lot more, but even when I DO use it I find myself questioning whether it’s appropriate or correct for that situation.
Strangely enough, I’ve found a few single sentences in some of Stephen King’s books (and at least one in Dean Kootz’s) that were a PAGE AND A HALF LONG, and to the best of my knowledge I’m pretty sure none of them contained a semi-colon! Then again, I guess when you have the status of King or Koontz or especially Joyce Carol Oates (who has her own grammar rules with punctuation! *Laugh*), you have complete ‘poetic license’ with your writing.
I like your ‘intuitive guide’ on punctuation. Simple and to the point.
“All bad sentences are long, but all long sentences are not bad.” (so true!)
I’m also going to check out that book, ‘How to Write A Sentence’. And that website, Project Semicolon! Whoduthunk they’d have a website about it? *Shock2*
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, stay safe and healthy, and have a great weekend!

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Review of PATSY Chapt one  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Aloha again, Loti, and happy early 18th ‘birthday’ on here! Again! *Bigsmile*
As a children’s story, or ANY story for that matter, I thought this was nice so far. The idea of Patsy taking up Brady’s dare to sneak in that yard just for a carrot was a good concept. And with her being a rabbit, I can see why she agreed to it.
What stood out to me was the action and fear of Patsy running for her life. I could feel how scared she was (I’ve been in a few hairy predicaments myself!) as she ran through that briar patch without caring about being scratched up, only to find herself falling off that cliff and eventually being found by those humans.
I think this next ‘ordeal’/adventure will be a lot safer than this one was! *Bigsmile*
Flawless spelling and grammar, and I think you should continue this and even write some more of Patsy’s escapades!
Sorry to be so picky, but I did spot a couple of tiny niggles:
‘then it was back to the trees.’ (Then)
"Oh look(.)" (s)he heard a voice nearby. (“Oh look,” she...’ or “Oh look.” She...’)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Loti! Thanks for sharing this, stay safe and healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi there, Loti, and happy early 18th *Shock2* ‘birthday’ on here!
This isn’t bad. I’ve entered the Daily FF Contest a few times, and I know how difficult it can be to get a complete story done with such a limited word count, but you did a good job here. The ending was a little sudden, but at least it was realistic. What else could your character do/say?
Nice job with the descriptions, but I’m not sure why the hat was tossed in the fire. Wouldn’t that be proof that your character did indeed ‘stumble’ on this little old chap? Yeah, I know Joe saw it, but still... (You don’t need to answer that; I’ve written enough short pieces like this to know that some questions just don’t deserve an answer! *Laugh*)
One tiny niggle:
‘The woods I knew so well was back.’ (were)
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Stay safe and healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!
PS-Expect another review from me on your story "PATSY Chapt one"  soon!

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Review of A Simple Home  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Zarek, and happy belated 6th ‘birthday’ on here!
As a lover of dark stories, I saw this in your port and had to check it out. Glad I did!
It wasn’t quite what I was expecting since I didn’t see the occult part in it, but I still thought it was good. The subtle hints you gave that Henryn was more physically disabled than was possible (i.e. Henryn’s gold teeth scattered around the room, he hadn’t eaten for so long, and his dog hadn’t gotten up in years) were well done, and having the stranger come into his cabin to steal his stuff right under his nose was a nice touch, as well as a good lead up to that ‘simple’ ending.
Great spelling and grammar, but I do have a couple of suggestions:
‘But then(;) his dog had not gotten up in years. (‘I think this would better without that, or perhaps rephrase it? Maybe, ‘But then again, his dog had not...')
‘...was a nice change of pace(,) all things considered.’
Otherwise, nice job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Zarek! Stay safe and healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review of The Tower  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi there, Queen Normajean!
I thought this was really good, and I can see why it won the contest! Congratulations!
I don't often see stories like this in this contest, but I love the way you answered your own question to your story! Well, maybe not answered it, per se, but at least your character came up with a perfect idea to advertise his business! That was certainly thinking outside of the box, and I'll bet his business received a lot more interest! *Laugh*
Well done, my friend, and great use of the prompt words!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a wonderful week!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there, DB Cooper.
I happened to catch this on The Hub on here, and I’m glad I did. To be honest, you’ve said everything I wanted to say, so I’m just going to be adding my two cents to this.
Even though I’ve always voted, I was never really ‘political’ until a few years ago, and since this last election, I don’t think I could be any MORE political! My father, though, was always into politics, and was a hard core Republican his whole life. But I know that he’s screaming in his grave after seeing what this clown has done to his party!
This so-called ‘president’ hasn’t just destroyed democracy for this country, but the Republican party as well! And I seriously think it will be years before they get back he full respect they once had!
This is also the self-proclaimed ‘genius’ who doesn’t know how to pronounce the plural of Yosemite and the country of Thailand, and didn’t even know Finland was a country by itself, thinking it was part of Russia! He also claims to be a big sports fan, however he congratulated the “great state of Kansas” earlier this year when the Chiefs won the Superbowl. Wrong state, Einstein! The Kansas City Chiefs are from Missouri!
I also like how you mentioned the far right is so hypocritical with their lies about the Democrats! They absolutely don’t want to talk about the headlines or what’s going on in their OWN party, but rather accuse the Left of falsehoods and giving misleading information to keep the American public from seeing their own distorted agenda. And rump has these Republican congressman so scared for their own political livelihoods that they’re too scared to stand up to him! That’s B.S.!
Don’t even get me started on fox news! That whole network and all their lying commentators should be banished to Hell!
OK. I could go on and on about this for weeks, but I’ll leave it at that.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, thanks for letting me get that off my chest, and have a fantastic week!

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Review of The Bar  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings, Paradoxical, and happy 11th ‘birthday’ on here!
As a lover/reader/writer and judge of horror on here, I happened to stumble across your ‘dark’ folder this morning, and I’m glad I did!
I thought this was good for a short FF piece! I like how you set it up with your apprehension to approach this fellow at the bar, and your descriptions were great. But what stood out to me was how you ‘showed’ his thoughts in italics while at the same time letting us know he was trying to verbally relate them to you, even with the language disparity. It gives the reader the sense that you were reading his mind in way, and maybe that’s what you intended. If so, nice job!
And the ending, although sudden and a bit subtle, was also good. From what I understood of it, it’s hard to offer answers to a test that you’ve failed yourself, right?
Comments and suggestions:
‘He was like a half-melted action figure, clinging on to the last threads of coherence that life had still failed to crush.’ (Great simile!)
‘grasp the glass and snap it up to his mouth, head tilted back like a pez dispenser’ (Another one! Perfect! *Laugh*)
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Paradoxical! Stay safe, stay healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!
PS-I was also impressed with the voice in the guy’s head. I just won the 2019 Quill Award for Best Dark Story if you’d like to check it out: "The V-V-Voice" 

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, Paul!
I like this. I became a fan of John Steinbeck right after I read Of Mice and Men, and this short conversation reminds me of the two main characters in that book, with Pete being the smart one (George) and Floyd being the slow one (Lennie). I can just picture Floyd bugging Pete over that steak and shake, not to mention what he did at poor Pete’s wedding! *Laugh*
Funny thing: after reading this again and seeing that prompt phrase, I think that’s exactly what you gave the idea to write this about Steinbeck’s characters, if that’s what you did! Seems to me I also remember an old cartoon with a couple of dogs on Bugs Bunny with the line, “Which way did it go, George, which way did it go?” *Laugh*
Regardless, nice job, especially for using only dialogue!
A few tiny niggles:
“No, Floyd, we can(’)t.”
“Remember the new job we(’)re checking out?”
“I(’)ll eat really fast.”
Kee ponw ritin gon, Paul! Stay safe and healthy, and have a fantastic weekend!

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Review of Yet Again.  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Xarthin, and happy belated 2nd ‘birthday’ on here!
I like this. Whenever I read a futuristic piece like this it reminds me of that old cartoon, The Jetsons, and I could just picture your character as George as he stretched his legs out on his desk and let Nadeshiko do his bidding for him! *Laugh*
I was born in 1965 when black and white television was still around and microwave ovens had yet to invade family kitchens, so I’ve seen technology advance at an alarming rate in my 55 years. Notice I said ‘alarming’? That’s because I think we’re getting too smart for our own good and technology will eventually be the downfall of civilization as we know it!
But that’s just my opinion. *Bigsmile*
I like how you wrote this from a businessman’s perspective. The irony of it though is that most white collar workers don’t really do much physical labor anyway. I think your comment about artificial intelligence might be stronger if you described a day of a blue collar worker. But even as it is, you still got your point across!
Comments and suggestions (sorry to be so picky!):
‘I knew Jenny would always look stunning as the they she came to my home.’ (day)
'...and always ended up clugging the city's arteries’ (clogging?)
"Have a good day, Sir(,)" said Alfred.
"Oh. And what's the great old man's will(,) this time?" (don’t need that)
“...as it seems you didn't attend his birthday(,) last night.” (same here)
‘A task executed in just seven seconds(,) still saved my own neck’ (and here)
Otherwise, nice job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Xarthin! Thanks for sharing this, stay safe and healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review of Piles  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Lori, and happy belated 3rd ‘birthday’ on here!
This is cool! I’ve read (and written) more than my share of cannibalism stories in my day, and I always enjoy reading somebody else’s take on them!
What I liked about this was that I DID not see that ending coming! I know I read it quite a while ago, but I just never got around to reviewing it, and I obviously forgot about that twist!
Well done, my friend, but I do have some comments and suggestions:
‘It was just a fact of life(.) for the short-armed woman.’
‘For God sakes, it was grass clippings that she was depositing, not gold nuggets.’ (There’s nothing really wrong with this, but I think ‘nuclear waste’ might sound better)
‘the man who had preceded her entry(,) was nowhere in sight’
‘grumble toes’ *Laugh*
‘Sarah locked her door and floored the gas pedal(,) causing the man...’
‘with bits of bone and gristle covering his beard’ (Nice! *Smirk2*)
Also there’s a lot of sentences starting with ‘she wanted’, ‘she rolled’, ‘she cursed’, ‘she looked’, ‘she ran’ all in one paragraph. As I’m sure you know, that gets old really fast, but I think you wrote this long before you took things like that (and the comma niggles) into consideration. So knowing what you I think you do now, I can’t hold you at fault for that!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Lori! Stay safe, stay healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!
PS-If you don't mind, I’m going to feature this in Wednesday’s Horror/Scary Newsletter!
PSS-I know you’ve got a busy schedule (probably a helluva lot more busier with this damn pandemic!), but we all miss you at "SCREAMS!!!"  *Heart*

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Review of What You Wish For  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi, Lady Phoenix, and happy belated 13th ‘birthday’ on here!
As a lover/reader/writer, and judge of horror, I thought this was pretty good. Your prose seems professional, and I like how you told it.
I’m also a big fan of twisted/surprise endings, and having that ‘God of War’ come alive as Marcus tried to leave his vault was perfect.
And it even has sort of moral to it, as the mask informed him there at the end: "Be careful what you wish for." *Shock2*
After all, isn’t greed (or something close to it) one of the 7 deadly sins?
Sorry to be so picky, but I did see a few tiny niggles:
‘He raised his paddle without considering of the consequences.’ (don’t need that)
‘Excitement made Marcus(’s) palms sweaty’
‘The overhead lights went out(,) blanking the vault...’
Otherwise, BRAVO!
And congratulations on that ribbon!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Lady Phoenix! Thanks for sharing this, stay safe and healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Ahoy, Webber, and happy belated 13th ‘birthday’ on here!
I’ve visited ♪ the city by the bay ♫ a few times, even rode the cable cars, walked down some of the major streets, and went there for my 8th grade class trip, and it is indeed a beautiful city! Fortunately though, I never experienced the nerve racking ‘excitement’ that you did!
I love the humorous way you told this! Your description of the father’s panic as he went racing after the daughter was great (‘the screaming man on the brink of an aneurysm’), as was the mother-in-law’s relief of not losing a granddaughter to the dreaded ‘tourist trap’! *Laugh*
Thankfully though, the daughter was ‘retrieved’ and everyone lived happily ever after!
Comments and suggestions:
‘Ahh, the picturesque beauty(,) and flamboyant frills’
‘Nikons strung to the necks of jubilant Japanese tourists’ *Laugh*
Great job, WW! Thanks for sharing this, stay safe and healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review of A Mortal Memoir  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings, April, and happy early 11th ‘birthday’ on here!
First off, let me apologize. When I first started reading this I was thinking of Ed Ginn, the original and real life ‘psycho’ who was the inspiration for the book and the movie, and who dug up graves in his little hometown!
Could these be his thoughts? *Laugh*
OK. This is a little weird, but I thought it was also pretty good! You definitely threw me a good curve ball as I got to the end! I had to read that part about it being YOUR coffin three times to be sure you hadn’t made a mistake!
But to be honest, it was a little confusing to me. Or maybe ambiguous since I’m not too sure how it ended. Digging up one’s own grave is kind of disturbing (in a strange way), but if there’s some deeper meaning here, I can understand. I guess we all have a Dr. Jeckyll and Mr. Hyde side to us, right? Or split personalities?
Anywho, I’m glad you found yourself, and alive, and hopefully you both can get that work done! *Bigsmile*
Kee ponw ritin gon, April! ‘Twas a pleasure to read, stay safe and healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!
PS-if there was a deeper meaning in this, perhaps you could explain it to me?

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Review of The Ambush  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Xarthin, and happy early 2nd ‘birthday’ on here!
I don’t read many personification stories, but I thought this one was pretty good.
What stood out to me was your humorous descriptions of the humans and all their strange contraptions, from the ‘metal beast’ *Laugh* that ate them in the morning and then spit them back out at the end of the day, to the ‘annoying box making that ticktock’ noise.
I also enjoyed how you personified the cat with its ‘better than thou’ attitude. I’ve had a few cats in my day, and that seems to be their stereotypical outlook on life.
Great spelling, but I do have some comments and suggestions:
‘She went on the road(,) one day, and she never came back.’
‘then when the sun goes down they threw them up’ (throw)
‘Not(,) after all(,) I went through to catch you!’ (there’s a few other spots in this where you have extra commas, but I think if you went back over it you could spot them)
You also switch from ‘him’ to ‘her’ when mentioning your owner a few times.
Otherwise, nice job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Xarthin! Stay safe, stay healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review of Homecoming  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi there, Super Sleuth (E C Weshce?), and happy belated 16th *Shock2* ’birthday’ on here!
I thought this was pretty neat! I can’t say it’s entirely original (I’ve seen a few stories done with emoticons before), but I still enjoyed the way you did it in poetry form. Which now that I think about it, might be original after all, since it’s a poem! *Bigsmile*
I’m no poetry expert, but the meter and rhyming seemed to work well, and I like the concept of you looking for your husband, only to find out that you were in the wrong house! I don’t think I’ve ever gone into the wrong house, although I know it’s possible with some condos and other houses looking so similar, but I have walked out of a store and got in the wrong car before! (I was with a friend in their car, and the other car was the exact same make and model!).
Anyway, great job, my friend!
One niggle:
‘Homecomming’ should be ‘Homecoming’
Kee ponw ritin gon, Super Sleuth! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review of The Loss  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Ahoy, Jim and happy belated 10th ‘birthday’ on here!
Damn. This is pretty emotional piece, and it certainly wasn’t what I was expecting!
I like how you wrote this, though. Having Ryan convince his dad to take him to fortune teller was a keen plot idea. I was wondering why you described him as so frail at first, but you wrapped that all together perfectly at the end with him being and ‘Indigo Child’, sad as it was.
As for the Indigo Children themselves, I can see that they’re special and our future. I don’t know if you had a word limit, but I think you should go into a little more detail about them. Maybe a bit more history and/or background? And the relevancy of the sound? To me it felt like a 21 gun salute kind of thing. Or maybe angels blowing their horns?
Other than that though, I thought this was a really good concept! And those last four words really hit home. *Sad*
Comments and suggestions:
‘He wanted, no needed, his fortune read’ (‘He wanted—no, needed—his fortune read’)
‘Kezia’s face became serene, her eyes fixated on (a) distant point in the room. She reach(ed) around the crystal ball for Ryan’s thin hands.’
Kee ponw ritin gon, Jim! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Greetings, Brom, and happy belated 10th ‘birthday’ on here!
This isn’t bad. It’s definitely different!
Giving a son a two-headed dragon for his birthday, intentionally or not, is a pretty wild plot idea, but I like it! I’m just not sure what genre this story this falls under. Comedy? Horror? Fantasy? Family? All four, I guess.
Regardless, I can certainly understand your anger at the little ‘scoundrel’ for ripping up your $700 couch! *Laugh* But at least in the end, all’s well that ends well!
The sentence structure seemed a bit bumpy, and there was more showing than telling. I think if you’d added some similes and metaphors it would help it flow a little more smoothly, but that’s just my opinion, for what it’s worth.
A few tiny niggles (sorry to be so picky):
‘John(,) saw small statues,’ (don’t need that)
‘He was just as exited as Ben was.’ (excited)
“Why are they making that sound(,) dad?”
“We’ll bate it with some meat...” (bait)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Brom! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review of Oubliette  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Osiyo, Beholden!
I like this! I don’t know if it’s so much of a story as it is the introspection of this poor man’s situation as he sits imprisoned in that dungeon and slowly loses his mind, but you did a great job of telling it!
Those parts about what he ‘sees’ and feels while he’s down there were very well done; unless a person were actually in that situation, who knows what would/could go through somebody’s mind? Makes me think of the Dark Ages (and even now!) where people are put in solitary confinement, sometime for years!
Not to be biased, but another reason I enjoyed this is that it kind of mirrors a short piece I wrote a few years ago. It’s "Free?"  if you want to check it out, and it was even published in the e-mag Carnage Conservatory. If you do check it out, click on the link at the bottom and see what they did with it!
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, stay safe, stay healthy, congratulations on this being the co-Weekly Winner, and have a marvelous day!

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Hello there, Words!
I like this. I don’t read many stories about mermaids, but I have heard tales of their deception.
You did a nice job of telling this. Your sentence structure, grammar and spelling, and the words you used were excellent, if not professional. And although the ending wasn’t quite what I was expecting, it was still good. I was actually expecting the mermaid to do something terrible to Paddy, considering how you described her ‘sharply pointed teeth’ and her ‘coy’ nature! And being a horror writer, I could think of PLENTY of things she could have done to him! *Smirk2*
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, WWR! Thanks for sharing this, stay safe and healthy, and have a wonderful day!
PS-Norman Rockwell was/is an American icon!

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Greetings, Petra, and happy 4th ‘birthday’ on here!
For such a short piece, this is pretty wild, not to mention ‘ghastly’! But it’s also good, and I can see why it won Weekly Winner of ‘SCREAMS!!!’
You didn’t go into too much detail, but you didn’t really need to. You set it up fine with the opening exchange of $ between Enriqueta and her customer, and from there the story flowed smoothly to that macabre and bizarre ending.
Grinding children’s bones into powder for her ‘potions’? *Shock2*
I wonder if this was based on a true story? Let me know if it is!
One niggle:
“One”(,) he said reluctantly...” (the comma should be inside the quotation marks-there’s a few other comma niggles like this, but I think if you went back over it you’ll see them)
Well done, my friend! And congratulations on those other contests as well!
Kee ponw ritin gon, stay safe, stay healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Hi there, Joy, and happy early 19th *Shock2* ‘birthday’ on here!
As somewhat of a history and trivia buff, I thought this was pretty good. And interesting. I don’t know how much of this is taught in schools anymore (I’m 55), but I hope it is. Sadly, certain parts of history seem to go in one ear and out the other, not to mention that some people just don’t care; they just think of Thanksgiving as a 4 day weekend, filling up their gut, and watching football.
You did some nice, in-depth research for this, and I appreciate that. What interested me was how earlier civilizations were already giving thanks for their bountiful crops. I probably should have known that, but the connection to the first Thanksgiving didn’t click. Duh!
I also liked that part about Sarah Josepha Buell Hale campaigning for the holiday. Whodathunkit?
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Aloha, Jatog!
Other than making toast and cold cereal, I never really learned how to cook, so I can totally relate to this! I’m getting a little better in my old age, but I sometimes still burn water.
I thought this was pretty good! I like how you used the present tense and put us ‘in the moment’ as you attempted to prepare your Mama’s meal while using her directions. But why don’t they put those notes about pre-heating instructions in BIG BOLD CAPITAL LETTERS at the top of the recipe? *Laugh*
‘Not so hard...I like
the Pillsbury dough rolls,
just whack the cylinder
on the side of the sink
and wall-ah! It pops
open and white dough
a-burstin’!’
I love this stanza! Reminds me of being a kid and watching the Jiffy Pop Popcorn ‘balloon’ fill up for some reason! At least that was ONE THING I could cook, only because my eyes were glued to watching it rise! *Rolling*
Great job, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for the laughs, and have a wonderful day!

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Greetings, Jim, and happy early 10th ‘birthday’ on here!
I’m hardly an expert on poetry, but I like me a good limerick, and you delivered with this one!
This certainly does sound like quite the feast, and I’m happy to see that your family has such diversified tastes! Marshmallow stuffed chicken? *Laugh* Can’t say I’ve ever had that, but I have had ‘beer chicken’ (with an open beer stuffed in it as it cooked! Seriously!)
I like that stanza about Cousin’s Mary wavy gravy from the Navy, as well as the one about how you paid so dearly for that bread from the bakery! *Shock2*
The limerick might have been a bit nonsensical, but at least the feast had a purpose. Personally, when I go, I want my family to have a ‘kegger’ to remember me!
Nice job, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, stay safe and healthy, thanks for the chuckles, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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