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Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*

Greetings, Jesse Madison, and happy 4th 'birthday' on here! Or is it just your 1st, since February 29th only comes around every 4 years! *Laugh*
This isn't bad. Yes, we all have internal monologues with ourselves, whether we're listening to another person or looking at a painting. We're only human and we're going to have opinions, so what can we do?
But should we voice those opinions out loud? I think that depends on the circumstances. I have a LOT of things I want to say on Facebook and Twitter, especially with this being an election year, but I try to not to. People are getting too hateful on those social platforms. But do I want to call them stupid and that I hope they go straight to ___ for not having common sense? Hell yeah!
Like I said, circumstances dictate what should be said and what should be kept private.
But who really knows? I was born in the 60's and raised in the 70's, and back then people pretty much kept their opinions and ideas to themselves. But these days it seems like it's the thing to do speak your mind, no matter what!
I don't want to get into much of a conversations on this, but I thank you for allowing me to share my own opinion on this topic.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my Jesse! Thanks for sharing this, have a great weekend, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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Review of Just Chill Out!  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Patrece!
This is great! I've seen a lot different things done with Turkeys over the holidays, like people putting them on their heads like Monica did in that episode of Friends

https://www.bing.com/videos/search?q=turkey+on+hea...

and a few other things, but having one posing in the sink and 'chillin' is a first for me! And that beer and the remote control was the icing on the turkey cake! *Rolling*
Thanks for the laughs, Patrece! I'm gonna have to remember this come next Thanksgiving!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and have a fantastic weekend!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello there, Jon Faulken!
For your very first piece on here, I thought this was really, really good! These 300 word flash fiction stories aren't easy for most—it's hard enough just to get a plot started—but you seem to have it down pat!
You did an excellent job with that prompt phrase, and it's actually a complete story, with good descriptions of the both the antagonist and protagonist, and a good ending. Not to mention that the spelling and grammar was flawless (thank you!).
Heck, you even managed to make it a little emotional too! *Shock2*
Very well done, my friend! Good luck in the contest, but I honestly don't think you'll need any! I'm willing to bet you have some (or a LOT) of writing in your background, and it shows.
Kee ponw ritin gon, Jon (PLEASE!), and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Greetings, Doctor Wizard!
Saw this title and couldn't resist reading it!
This isn't bad. I like the concept of the little girl asking those questions about clouds, and she does indeed have a good imagination. The dialogue was natural and realistic, and the spelling and punctuation was good. But you went a little overboard with those speech tags. When you have conversation between just two people, there's no need to describe who is doing the speaking after every single sentence. That's simply implied, and the reader can figure that out for themselves. Plus, it gets really redundant really fast and takes a lot away from the story.
And speaking of speech tags, some of those don't need to be capitalized.
Examples:
"Hey, mom," The little girl said tugging on her sleeve. (the)
"Next time it rains, I'll be extra careful and watch it," Said the little girl. (said)
Here's a link to a short article about speech tags if you'd like to check it out:

https://writersbeat.com/speech-tags-t16297.html

Otherwise, good job.
Kee ponw ritin gon, Doctor Wizard, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of Connect  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hi, Lilliy Loidd!
As lover, reader, writer, and judge of horror, I thought this was really good! I really enjoyed the subtleness and the simplicity of it as you tell us of these inner 'demons' (and demons can have many definitions! *Wink*) you're trying to free.
What's more is that you're speaking the truth! We ALL have demons inside, and it is indeed exhausting trying to hold them back!
But that last line summed it up perfectly! It reminds me of horror/comedy movie which I can't think of it at the moment. *Headbang*
Comments and suggestions:
'Shouldn't the monsters be allowed to play occasionally?' (So true, so very true!)
Also, I think you should put this in a larger font, perhaps 4.0. Not all of us on here have 20/20 vision, myself included.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! It was a pleasure to read, and welcome to WdC! If you like to read, then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
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Review of A Haunted Memoir  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hujambo, Ray!
This is pretty good! You did nice job of telling it, and as a strong believer in ghosts and other supernatural events, I have no doubt that this is a true story.
I like how you described the house, and having that dream was freaky. Have you ever wondered if maybe the house (or whoever/whatever ) was ‘calling’ you for a second visit? *Ghost*
I’ll say this: your brothers blowing up that doll and burning the remains probably wasn’t a good idea. That sounds like a bad omen to me!
Personally, I’ve seen and heard some strange things in my 54 years (no voices though—yet!), but if I saw a hand up in a window closing curtains, I’d have been high-tailing it out of there too!
Comments and suggestions:
Your brothers blew up the doll? *Shock2* That sounds like bad omen to me!
‘would creak and moan(,) but for some reason that sound seemed eerie to me.’ (there’s a few other missing commas in this, but I think you could spot where if you went back over this)
‘I screamed at myself as I dropped the bike and walked inside the gloomy entrance.’ (this sounds odd--you said you were being ‘pulled’ earlier, so how about ‘...and was pulled against my will into the house.’ Just a suggestion)
‘...the dull rattle echoed(;) following me as I walked reluctantly.’ (should be a comma)
‘My heart raced as (I) drew nearer.’
‘the corroded grill jutting like teeth.’ (nice simile!)
Otherwise, nice job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Ray! Thanks for sharing this, have a great day, and congratulations on your promotion to Preferred Author!}
BTW, I’ve got a true ghost story of my own if you want to check it out sometime (I was also only 11 years old when this happened!): "Goosebumps, Sonny And Cher, And A Light" 

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Review of Go Ahead, Say It  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, C.W. Elliot!
I thought this was f***ing great! I don’t know if you were ever on a debate team, but you did one hell of a job making your point about why people shouldn’t shy away from using expletives in certain circumstances, and they were all perfectly valid reasons!
I’ve never heard of anybody using ‘Sugar, Honey, Iced Tea!’ as an alternative to its acronym, and frankly, it seems like a waste of breath if you ask me. I’m sure it would more appropriate in a church setting of course, but the majority of people are going to use the real word.
Speaking of church, I think it’s hilarious when I catch a sweet little old lady—a god-fearing woman, for Christ’s sake!—use foul language and then quickly cover her mouth in shame, as if she’s just committed one of the seven deadly sins! *Laugh*
Great job, my friend! You have quite an impressive vocabulary, and your grammar and spelling was flawless (thank you!)
Kee ponw ritin gon, C.W.! ‘Twas a pleasure to read, thanks for the laughs (“Oh copulate! Copulate!”), and have a fantastic day/week!

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Review of Attila  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Beholden!
This is kind of wild. Good, but wild. It’s not often I see a story written in the first person POV who winds up as the victim!
You did a nice job with the prompt, and using a leopard as your trained killer was a really unique concept. And being an assassin whose services were requested by a ‘certain well known intelligence agency’ *Smirk2* was also a pretty clever idea.
If anything, I think this is a good example of the student becoming the teacher. And granted, the idea of a leopard learning how to talk might be a tad far-fetched, who knows what’s happening in those secret government laboratories in this fast-paced techno world? Bioscience has come a long way, baby! 75 years ago people would have thought growing human ears on rats was ludicrous, if not totally impossible!
I also enjoyed that subtle, yet deadly ending. Reminds me a little of that evil tiger, Shere Khan, in The Jungle Book!
Great spelling and grammar, and the whole piece read smoothly.
grilled guinea pigs as ‘treats’? *Laugh*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Beholden! ‘Twas a pleasure to read, and I hope to see you entering "SCREAMS!!!"  again soon!

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Review of Complex Numbers  
for entry "Getting It Write" 
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Konnichiwa, Robert!
As a perspiring writer, I love reading anything about this craft. I’ve probably read thousands of stories by thousands of authors, and very few of them have the same style or form of writing. When I first read Joyce Carol Oates, I was dumbfounded. How could such a famous author be so lazy with the use of the simple comma? To this day I’m still blown away, but she’s still an great author, and a great poet.
As for conveying info, I think it can be done in both dialogue and in the writing, provided it’s done well without, as you so eloquently said, giving obvious info. Some writers, Stephen King in particular, have a tendency to mention something (a thing, a place, whatever) in a story of which the reader has no idea what it’s about, or how it’s even relevant to the story. It’s only several pages later that the ‘something’ is explained.
"Don't write what you know; know what you write." I agree 100%! And comma splice be damned! *Laugh*
Well done, my friend! It’s always a pleasure to get a peek inside your mind!
On a side note, I remember reading a quote by a famous author not long ago. I can’t quote it exactly, but it went something like “There are certain rules when it comes to writing. The only problem is nobody knows what they are.”
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a great day!
PS-And I’m NOT a hypocrite! Or maybe I am. *Rolling* But I’ll definitely keep that in mind!

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Review of Oh  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello there, IE!
I'm no expert on poetry, but I thought this was a beautiful free verse(?) piece about a lost loved one (right?), and you did a nice job of showing just how much this person meant to you. That part about how you've become a better woman for having known this person says a lot, and I totally agree; I believe that we take a little bit from everyone we meet in life who we get close to.
The reader can feel the love you had/have for him, as well as the pain of reaching out for him and knowing he's no longer there.
I was a tad confused with the 3rd stanza about it being 'just practice'. I know it makes sense to you, though, and that's all that counts.
Very well done, and very deserving of that ribbon!
Kee ponw ritin gon, IE! Thanks for sharing this, have a wonderful day, and congratulations on your promotion to Preferred Author!

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Review of Hound Dog Hero  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*

Hello there, Jatog, and happy belated 8th 'birthday' on here!
This is pretty cool. I'm a major dog lover, and even though I've read and heard about things like this happening, it's still neat to read another account of it.
I don't know if this is a style of poetry or not, so I won't comment on that, although I wonder if the shape is supposed to signify something.
Regardless, I can just hear Daisy Mae howling away (as all Basset Hounds are known to do!) in order to save her family, and she was very deserving of that 'Golden Fire Hydrant' Award! *Rolling*
One tiny niggle:
'a burned had been left on.' (burner)
Otherwise, well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Jatog, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on wdC!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Greetings, Greg M!
This is pretty good for a flash fiction piece! You did a great job with the description of the jail cell, as well as showing us how upset was about what friends would think of her *Shock2*. But the best part was the last two paragraphs. Not only did you give us her defense, but you also solved the 'mystery' as well!
Bravo! I knew it was Professor Plum all the time! *Laugh*
Great spelling and grammar, but I did see one tiny comma niggle (twice):
“What on Earth would the others be thinking?”(,) she contemplated' (don't need that comma)
“It’s all poppycock!”(,) she told herself' (same here — the question mark and the exclamation mark already signify the end of the 'sentence', so the comma isn't necessary)
Otherwise, nice job, my dear Watson. *Rolling*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Greg M, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-And good luck in the contest! *Wink*

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Review of MATCHBOX UNDIES  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Bon jour, Sandra Lynn!
First off, I love the friendly and humorous way you told this! I was either smiling, laughing, or both from practically the 1st word to the last!
You're not much older than I am, and I also went through somewhat of a similar 'doll' stage with my G.I. Joes. We went into a lot of battles together, shooting the bad guys and making our way through the jungles as we dodged enemy bullets, and just generally being tough dudes. Which is what I like about your story. It's kind of a story inside of a story as you tell about your own adventures with Barbie. Luckily for us guys, we didn't much care about our wardrobe, unless of course it came with a bazooka or a machete or a machine gun. *Laugh*
But I think it's great that your Grandma B., the one you never would have suspected, would go to all that trouble to make those homespun outfits for your Barbie. That in itself was neat, but then to make undies for her too? *Shock2* I don't have to tell you that Joe always 'ventured forth commando style', but Barbie?
It's a shame that they got lost in the wrapping, but I'm wondering if you've ever thought about marketing your Grandma B.'s idea? You gotta admit, it's pretty original! But you might have to get her permission, lest she sue you for copyright infringement! *Rolling*
Great job, Sandra Lynn!
Comments and suggestions:
'I did not relish spearing my vulnerable fingers on the sharp and bobbing needle.' (Here, here! *Shock2* My grandmother, who raised me for the most part, spent a lot of time on her old manual sewing machine, and I wouldn't go near that darn thing!)
'Off with her head applies to an uncooperative Barbie.' *Laugh*
'enough footgear to rival Imelda Marcos herself' *Laugh*
My only suggestion would be to put this in a larger font and possibly double space the paragraphs (just to make it look a little more polished. A really nice piece like this should have some 'flare', so to speak.)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Sandra Lynn! It was a pleasure to read, and congratulations on your promotion to Preferred Author!
BTW, you're only 6 years and 10 days older than I am! Geminis rule! *Bigsmile*

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Greetings, Odessa!
For such a short piece (I know it was for the NF Challenge), this isn't bad. Granted, it begs to be expanded, but you managed to give the reader a quick glimpse into what one of those poor survivors might have felt on that day so long ago. I'm not sure just how far out from the epicenter anyone did survive, but that doesn't really matter. The nice part about it, if there can even BE a nice part, is that not only did both Hiroshima and Nagasaki rebuild, but so did the entire country of Japan, as well as ironically becoming one of our greatest allies!
Whodathunkit?
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and have a great day!

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Review of Lights Out  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Bon jour, Black Adder!
I don't read sci/fi as much as I used to, but I thought this pretty good.
I like the idea of this city-wide blackout causing all that turmoil and upheaval (which could happen even in this present day!) and you and your friend Rohan coming to the rescue. You had to face some formidable enemies and obstacles to be successful, but you managed to save the town, although you couldn't save every one in it, including your I.T. roommate. *Sad*
You did a nice job with the descriptions, and your prose was natural and smooth. I also enjoyed how you started this out with a quick comment about how things used to be 'back then'.
The ending seemed just a bit rushed, but since I see this was for a contest, I'm guessing that was because you had word limit. If so, I can't fault you there! Been there, done that!
Excellent spelling and grammar, but I do have a few comments and suggestions:
'The station was near a mile a way (away)
'Rohan and I walked the nearby hill, and climbed the fence, then stalked towards the dark gatehouse.'
'...and then I grabbed a rock(,) and threw it through the window, ignoring...'
Otherwise, good job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Black Adder! Thanks for sharing this, and congratulations on your promotion to Preferred Author!

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Review of She  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Pen!
For your first piece on here, this isn't bad. It's certainly dark though, and it sounds like the troubled thoughts of somebody who's trying to find their way in life. I'm hoping it's not you, but if it is, please know that we all go through rough patches sometimes, but we/you will eventually find our way.
Your descriptions were pretty vivid, and the way you started this was really gloomy with that gun to the character's head. I'm glad it was just an analogy of how the character was feeling.
I'm not sure how the train works into this, unless that was another analogy for the 'trip' through life. But I like how you ended it, knowing that as long as you keep putting 'one foot in front of the other, you/your character will find what they're looking for.
A few tiny niggles:
'Looking at the nature.' (I think this would sound better without that word, but that's just my opinion)
'Another mile(,) another end.'
'One foot infront of the other.' (in front)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Pen, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of Martian Olympics  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Howdy, Don Two, and happy belated 8th 'birthday' on here!
I like this! I don't how you came up with the idea for it, but it's certainly original, and the way you described this futuristic event was great! I like how you touched on so many different athletic events, and using those real locations and objects was an extra bonus!
I'm not sure how the contestants would be able to do this in an atmosphere without oxygen though. Yeah, I know they'd probably be wearing spacesuits, but they'd have to be pretty modified for them to show their physical abilities. Of course, with the speed technology is advancing these days, who knows what could happen in 100 years, provided we ever do get somebody on Mars to begin with!
Very well done, my friend! I'm no expert on poetry, but the meter and rhyming seemed good, and those notes at the end with the explanations were helpful! Thank you!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Don Two, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Steven!
This isn't bad for one of your first pieces on here. I'm no expert on poetry, so I won't get into the technical part, but I like the subject.
This world is indeed ruled by rich and greedy politicians, and it's a sad comment for our posterity who will inherit this planet if things don't start changing soon! What bothers me more than anything is one certain president (who I despise!) refuses to believe in climate change, and he continues to promote fossil fuels and endanger our ecosystem and the very welfare of this planet! *Angry*
Sorry, I digress.
You did a nice job of showing what this PCUSA 'party' is all about. I've never heard about it, so I have to ask: is it real?
Anyway, well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Steven, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "February 17, 2020" 
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, P. Boutilier!
This is kind of freaky, and definitely dark. But as a lover of dark stories, I thought it was pretty good!
I’m impressed that you managed to write this with so few words and still get your idea across to the reader. The descriptions were nice and vivid *Smirk2*, and that ending with the Tarot cards, which are kind of spooky themselves, was perfect. And writing it in the first person was a good choice; it makes it more personal, and what could be more personal than suicide?
Granted it’s kind of sad that she was all alone and even her children didn’t attend her birthday party, but at least she had her birthday cake all to herself! *Laugh*
The spelling and grammar was excellent (my self should be one word, though), and you did a good job using the prompt words. My only ‘concern’ is how much blood there was. I think if somebody cut their wrists (which I’m assuming she did), there would be more than a half glass of blood after 15 minutes.
Otherwise, BRAVO! All the more reason I’ll never play with Tarot cards!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Ridinghood!

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Review of Eighteen Years  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I like this. I think most people reflect on their lives at some point and think of the time they might have wasted. I know I sure do! I'm at that point now where I have more days behind me that I do ahead of me, and sadly, going downhill is a lot faster than it was going uphill!
I'm no expert on poetry so I won't comment on the poetry part of this, other than I think it's good. But as I said, it's the subject that stood out to me.
My only suggestion would be to expand on this. I would have like to seen this done in decades, or at least more gradually, if you know what I mean. It starts great, but then you suddenly jumped from 20 + 4 to 70 + 10. I think that left a lot of things out that you could have shown you regretted doing.
But that's just my humble opinion.
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this! May you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC, and congratulations on your promotion to Preferred Author!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Paul!
This is good. Different, but good. You certainly thought outside of the box using that prompt phrase this way, but it worked out well.
It also got me to wondering just how do animals communicate other than giving body signals? I guess they make certain noises, but is that really talking, per se?
Something to think about, anyway!
I like how did this all in dialogue, which is kind of strange since it deals with these not having any dialogue! *Laugh*
One tiny niggle:
"You are my partner. let’s eat!” (Let's)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Paul! Thanks for sharing this, good luck in the contest, and congratulations on your promotion to Preferred Author!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi there, Dana!
This is great! I loved it, and I was laughing from the first word to the last!
I like how did this in a form rejection letter from Mr. Otis Dull, and it's a perfect example of what NOT to send this publishing company! I did a bit of research on Peter Mark Roget and found out he wasn't just a lexicographer, but also a physician and a natural theologian! The dude was pretty dang smart, so I'm glad he didn't quit submitting his thesaurus after receiving this letter! *Laugh*
The whole letter was excellent, but what stood out was the company's best-selling titles about nitrous oxide and phrenologists! Too funny!
Great jop, my friend! My only regret is that I can only give this 5 stars, because it's worthy of a hundred!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Dana! Please! Thanks for sharing this, and congratulations on your promotion to Preferred Author!

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Review of Night walking  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there, Odessa!
This is good. Hearing something, or someone, running around outside your house in the middle of the night would definitely be a cause for alarm.
I like how did this in dialogue, and the spelling and grammar were good. But I think you could have used those extra 78 words to let us know just who this 'Nick' dude was. I'm assuming he has mental problems. Was he actually streaking, like with no clothes on, like in the Ray Stevens song:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XtzoUu7w-YM

One tiny niggle:
"Maybe she wants to go pee(.)" Bob suggested. (comma)
Otherwise, nice job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and have a magnificent day!

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello there, KnightScribe.
This pretty heavy. I'm not as religious as I used to be, and I know you didn't mean this to sound as though you were preaching, but I understand your point. I think everyone, even priests, have at one time or another wondered how such a loving God could let something like what you described happen. That's only natural, but by asking yourself that question you came to a quick conclusion, or reason per se, and writing it down like this and expressing yourself was the perfect choice. Writing can be very cathartic for a lot things, especially emotional ones!
I've also seen things on TV or the news that makes my blood boil. I even have a piece about texting and driving and the states that don't have laws against it that angered me so much I wrote a short piece and put it at the top of my portfolio. I wrote it on June 7th, 2102, and I vowed I wouldn't take it down until all 50 states outlawed texting and driving completely.
Sadly, that piece is still at the top of my portfolio...*Cry* If you'd care to read it and leave a message, you're welcome to. "Texting And Driving." 
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, have a wonderful day/evening, and congratulations on your promotion to Preferred Author!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello there, Seisa, and happy 13th *Shock2* 'birthday' on here!
I'm probably going to review another of your items soon, but this one caught my eye right off!
Yes, I'm a little interested in self-publishing, and I'm doing a lot of looking around these days. I've got a few (OK, like more than a hundred!) short stories I'm thinking about putting into a collection of sorts. I tried to go to your website, but the links you gave show them as 'PAGE NOT FOUND'.
If you could email a little information or perhaps get those links working, it would be appreciated!
As I said, I'm still shopping around, and I'm not even sure if self-publishing is the way I want to go yet. But I'm keeping an open mind so far.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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