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Review of Homecoming  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Salutations, Beholden!
This might not be the scariest story of the bunch, but I thought it was great, and certainly unexpected! It reminds me of something The Addams Family or The Munsters would have done!
I wasn't sure where this was going on when I first started reading it, but then I saw it was for the 'SCREAMS!!!' prompt and I knew it was going to be good!
The idea of this family get-together and party for the troll (Gurglumpa?) was great, and you did an excellent job of showing just how abnormal this family can be! But as I said, that's what I love about it!
Some of those names for the family and the treats that were passed out also reminded me of the Harry Potter movies, and I like the unusual way you used that prompt!
Tea? Bleah! *Sick* *Laugh*
Comments and suggestions:
‘I submitted to her powerful grasp and survived without any broken ribs’ (yeah, bad memories there, my friend! *Laugh*)
‘Even (i) could not stop myself spitting the stuff out’ (I)
‘apologise to Gurglumpa sometime(,) but not right now’
Otherwise, BRAVO!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Have a wonderful New Year, and I hope to see more of you entries in "SCREAMS!!!"  in the future!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Lori!
One word for this: really good. No, that’s two words. How about: good. Nope, that’s not what I want either. How about MAGNIFICENT!
I love stories that are sweet and innocent, yet have their dark side that shows what’s really going on in the real world, and you did a ‘lovely’ job with that contrast in this piece. One moment Frosty’s giggling at the spirited snowball fights of the children, the next he’s feeling the agony as they ground their feet into his ribcage as they clamored up his trunk! *Shock2* *Laugh*
Suggestions and comment for an otherwise excellent story!
‘Left to fend for himself(,) was the decapitated snowman’
‘Frosty spied a group of kids running up the hill towards him(.)’
‘He could feel the agony(,) as they stuffed their toes into his belly.’
‘He closed his coal (eye) and prayed for the best.’
‘he would have swiped the sweat from his brow(,) at such a close call’
‘to behold was this talking snowball(.) that the kids all gathered around.’
Love your descriptions! (the white flaky threat *Laugh*)
The only other thing is I think the ending was a little rushed. Maybe if you drew it out bit more? I don’t know if this was for a contest (‘SCREAMS!!! ?) or if there was a word count, but now that it’s over I think you should edit this. But that’s just own humble opinion, for what that’s worth.
But I really did love this story, Lori!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and thanks for sharing this dark and humorous piece about a legendary snowman who had met his inevitable demise, all thanks to a little girl who forgot all about her ‘best friend’! *Laugh*

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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello there, Elisa.
This is sad piece about what happened on that tragic day, and I like how you told it in your own style. I saw everything you mentioned here on live TV, but I can't imagine what it would have been like to have actually witnessed it first hand. To watch those people jumping to their deaths is probably the most lasting image that I, like you will take with me to my grave. *Cry*
And as for your byline about whether we 'want to see anymore', 9/11 is something we MUST NEVER FORGET, much like Pearl Harbor! It's only by remembering things like this that we insure that they will never happen again!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks of sharing this, and have a wonderful New Year and a most prosperous New Decade!

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Review of A Few Questions  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Salutations, Detective!
This isn't bad. I like the hotel visitor's explanation, and it does offer a somewhat humorous excuse for how he ended up in that situation, but the ending kind of fell a little flat. At least for me, anyway, for what that's worth. It kind felt like you rushed the ending a bit. Don't get me wrong: I know you only had 500 words to use (I'm not sure how many you did use, though), but the way the cop let him off at the end seemed too easy, especially after that supernatural explanation.
I guess maybe I was expecting a more shocking ending...
Good spelling and grammar, but I did spot one tiny niggle:
"... so my in-laws, her parents(,) booked us a stay here..."
Kee ponw ritin gon, Detective! Have a great New Year, and good luck in the contest!

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Review of Bus Stop  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there, Normajean!
This is kind of weird, but in a good sense. Besides, I'm sure 'weird' was what you were aiming for! *Laugh*
I've said this hundred times before, but I love reading this 300 word FF pieces because it always amazes me how people use the prompt words and phrases, and this one did just that. Just the idea of a dog getting on a bus by itself is odd enough, but dropping a token in the driver's hand? And THEN only on the 3rd Tuesday in January so he could visit his vet?
Yeah, there's some simple humor in there, alright!
I wonder if the dog talks, and if so, will he let you know what his vet said afterward? *Laugh*
Very creative, my friend! I'm a little surprise this didn't win!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a wonderful 2020!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Ahoy, J Dennis!
This is really neat and informational piece about what it is to be a good writer, and you make some excellent and very valid points!
It's true that if a person who dreams of becoming of a writer spends all of his time dreaming of becoming a writer, instead of using those dreams to conjure something 'unimaginable' to write about (if they're fiction writers, of course) and then putting that story to into a manuscript, then they're going nowhere.
You said it perfectly here:
'These results often occur when ambition becomes more important than creating'
Something else you touched on was enjoying the craft, whether they're successful or not. If you don't love to write and you only do it for fame and fortune, then there's really no sense it, at least in my opinion.
I'll be honest: I've always be wanted to be a writer, and I always wanted to have something published. As I say in my portfolio intro, even my teachers and friends told me I should write, but I never sat down long enough to put anything down on paper. It was only after I joined WdC in 2011 that I promised myself I would start submitting stories and do my damnedest to get something published (this was actually at the start of 2012), and by the time the year ended I had 3 or 4 short stories accepted and published!
Blew my mind! Why had I wasted all those years dreaming and not doing? *Headbang*
It's kind of odd that I should stumble on this particular piece of yours in your port, since you just told me that you were finally going to start submitting yourself (thanks to my advice?). I applaud you on that, sir! As I finally learned, the hard way, there's no time like the present to MAKE your dreams come true!
And I can guarantee you, J Dennis, that everything WILL fall into place, and you WILL have fun doing it!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a Fantastic New Year and most prosperous New Decade!
PS-You now have a new fan! *Bigsmile*

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Review of Overexposed  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Ahoy, Daniel!
This is good. Almost too good, because it sounds like a real experience! I'm not inferring it was a personal experience of your own (was it?), I'm just sayin'...
The dialogue between your character and the cop was too real, even at the end. That's good though, and I'm sure it was rather awkward for both of them. I also enjoyed those little humorous comments between them. After all, what else could you do in that situation?
Well done, Daniel!
Kee ponw ritin gon, good luck in the contest, and have a wonderful New Year and a prosperous New Decade!

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Review of Chelsea, Maine  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
G'day, Lou!
I wasn't quite sure what this was about at first, but it didn't take long to figure it out. And I thought it was pretty darn good!
I like how concise you wrote it, or perhaps I should say how 'simple' you wrote it. The short dialogue between you and your daughter as you travel up and down the east coast (or thereabouts, anyway-I've never east of Texas) was nice, and the reader can see the innocence and curiosity in Emily's talking.
But the best part about this was how she made you realize what you take for granted since you run this particular journey so often. You've seen it all many times, but you've never actually looked at it, for lack of a better word. I'm sure you know what I mean; after all, you're the one who wrote this! *Laugh*
That last paragraph says it all right there in a nutshell. Kudos on that, my friend!
I'm really surprised that this piece wasn't ever accepted for publication! Have you tried Trucking publications? If I were you, I'd keep submitting to more places, because I'm sure somebody would pick this up!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this (and the little lessons about towns being named after names!), and have a wonderful and prosperous New Year!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there, Itchy!
This is a nice, heartwarming tale for the Christmas season, and I apologize for not reviewing this sooner. It really was on my list!
I like how you wrote this in the first person as the kitten, James, and the idea of them plotting to see Sonta — sorry, SANTA! *Laugh* — only to find out that he wanted to take them all over the world delivering presents was a great concept!
For a children's story, I thought it was very well told. You did a good job with describing each one of the kittens, even going into detail about their character and personalities (shy, black with big, round eyes, mysterious). The spelling and grammar were also good, and it's very deserving of that award.
My only suggestion would be to double space the paragraphs. The way it is now makes it look all 'scrunched up', if you know what I mean.
Otherwise, BRAVO!
Keep on writing on, Itchy! Thanks for sharing this, and I hope you and your family have a wonderful New Year and a phenomenal New Decade!

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Review of Superman No More  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Aloha, Norman!
As a 2 time father first to two beautiful daughters, and now a Grandanna to four Grandannachildren, I can totally relate to this, although since I never thought of it in this way, I'm a little sad to read it.
Yes, we certainly were their 'Supermen', weren't we?
I like how you wrote this poetic style, and the simplicity of it says a lot more than just those few words do.
They grow up so fast, and then...'The want to be set free'. *Sad* We knew it was going to happen one day, but so darn soon?
The nice part about it is that we can now be 'Supermen' to our grandchildren, at least to a degree. And in that we can relive our memories!
That ending was a nice touch, although also a little sad. It's so true that one day they will be our 'Supermen'.
Oh well. Cae sera sera, eh?
Kee ponw ritin gon, Norman! Thanks for sharing this, and have a fantastic New Year and New Decade!

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Review of Truth  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Jacky!
You know I'm a sucker for twisted/surprise endings, and you seem to the Queen of them! Especially as a FF professional!
I realize the main character in this is a little dinosaur, but this makes me wonder just how smart cave men really were. Could they have had just an inkling of how the universe worked/works, or did they even care?
Sorry, I digress. It did make me think though.
You did a great job of personifying little Pen, and to be honest, I really did think it would be a cave man who figured it out in the end! So you got me there!
I also like the happy and simple ending you gave to it. It even made ME happy! Not for my whole long life, but for a little bit, anyway!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a marvelous New Year and New Decade!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Bon jour, Blue Jay!
This isn't bad, and at one time I could totally relate to it. That 'one time' was when I was married! *Laugh*
Seriously though, I can actually understand both sides of this discussion. Marta's craft room has been demolished by this storm and because Luke wasn't tending to her immediate needs, whilst Luke was trying to enjoy himself in his man cave after a very hard a laborious week at work, only to find a very costly and tiresome job ahead of repairing said craft room.
Both sides have their points, but ironically, in the end they both lost!
Well done, Blue Jay! The spelling and grammar were flawless (thank you!), you did a great job with the prompt words, and the dialogue was perfect!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a fantabulous new year and decade!

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Review of Complex Numbers  
for entry "Beer for Breakfast" 
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings, Robert!
Dang! I'm a bit flabbergasted at this! Not only was the subject very interesting (at least to me since I'm a beer connoisseur myself to a degree), but I didn't realize that you had inserted all those words into this!
Really, really well done, my friend! *ThumbsUpL*
When I lived in CA I was lucky to enough to go to a few small breweries in Mendocino county, and some of them had some great beers! I never got to taste any honey or blackberry ones, but the ones I did taste were of a professional status.
I also want to thank you for giving us this challenge with the random words, as well as that link. I've woke up with a beer for breakfast more times that I want (or can *Laugh*) to remember, so it wasn't too hard to relate to that!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Robert! Thanks for sharing this, and have a fantastic new decade!

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Review of Words do hurt  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Miss Rena!
This is a sad, although well-written piece, and it says a lot about how much just a few simple words can hurt. I remember something when I was in grade school when one of my classmates was always being verbally abused because of his weight. I wasn't then, nor have I ever teased anybody. Mind you, this was all the way back in the 70s. But one year he didn't return to school after our Christmas vacation. Turns out he found his father's pistol and took his own life. *Sad* I'll never forget that, or his name, Milton.
I'm no expert on poetry, but I think the meter was a little bit off in a couple of lines. But the rhyming was excellent.
One tiny niggle:
Hearing them replay as i fall asleep (I)
I read your bio, and I'm so sorry for the loneliness you've experienced. Hopefully you're a little older now and things have gotten better. After all, you've got two beautiful daughters to look after, right? *Smile*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Miss Rena, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of Noise Pollution  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi again, Normajean!
I think most of us can relate to this. I was listening to 'sonic booms' from 6 in the evening (seriously!) until 2 in the morning, and then a few more the next morning! The latter ones were mainly just small firecrackers though, but still...
You did a nice job of telling us about your character's suffering, as well as that poor dog, and I can only hope this wasn't based on a true story of yours.
But at least it was sweet of your mother to call and wish you a happy new year after all that torment! NOT! *Laugh* Oh well. I'm sure she meant well.
Maybe next time buy some head phones to go with those ear plugs?
Kee ponw ritin gon, Normajean! Thanks again for sharing your stories with us, and have a fabulous 2020!

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Review of All Cracked Up  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Howdy, Normajean!
I like this. I've been through my share of earthquakes, so I know all about those 'cracks'. Usually they're pretty obvious, but I guess John was either too near sighted or he just didn't WANT to see the crack.
You did a great job with the dialogue; I could actually believe that John wasn't seeing it, and George was right all along, even though John had the final say in it.
And even in a sort of humorous way! As in, "Oh, yeah. That crack." *Laugh*
Well done, my friend! Nice use of the prompt words, good luck in the contest, and have a wonderful New Year and Decade!

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Review of Cat vs Dog  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there, Normajean!
I thought this was great! I'm more of a dog person, so I can totally understand Butch's contempt for his 'roommate', especially since she's a cat and she keeps teasing him with her tail! *Angry*
There should be a law against that, but at least Butch managed to get the best of Misty in the end.
Who's the evil one now, Kitty Kat? *Laugh*
The imagery really stood out in this, and I can just picture Misty chasing that little red dot all over the kitchen!
I'm really surprised this didn't win the contest! It would have if I was the judge!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Normajean! Thanks for the chuckles, and...

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Review of Snow Business  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, Odessa!
This is interesting, and I can totally relate to poor Ruby's situation. I've seen more than my share of people standing (or sitting) around while everyone else has to pull their share for them.
You did a nice job with the imagery here: I can just picture Ruby on her hands and knees brushing and gritting (never heard that term for it before!) that snow away while this lazy scum smoked his cig and propped himself up with his shovel.
'Tis no wonder Ruby gave him one of her special 'salutes'! If I would have been her, I'd given him a lot more than that!
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for entry "Doolittle Residence" 
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings, Carly!
I like this, and I can see why it won the contest! Congratulations!
You did a nice job with the misdirection, making us think you were a human when you were actually a dog who had enough smarts to answer that phone, and I like how you used those prompt words.
But who's to say that animals can't take messages? *Rolling*
Great spelling and telling, but I do have a comment and suggestion:
'Whoever invented cordless phones certainly did not live in squalor.' (so true! *Laugh*)
"Hello(.)" I said in an attempt to communicate. (comma)
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Review of Hello Kitty  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello there, Zatykhan!
This isn't bad for one of your first pieces on here, and I totally agree with you about our 'last bit of innocence' when it comes to cartoons and our childhood. We are only children for a very small part of our lives, and in that time we're happy and we don't have to care about all the other 'big' problems of the world!
It's in a child's eyes that we see our own innocence, and if we can't do that, then there's something wrong with the world!
You did a nice of telling this, although your English seemed a little broken in a few spots. But it wasn't so bad that we didn't understand what you meant.
Keep on writing on, my friend, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-I'm 54, but I'll always be a kid at heart! One of my favorite cartoons will always be the old Bugs Bunny and Roadrunner ones!
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Review of Poor Muppett  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello there, Greg M!
This is a pretty good, albeit sad, piece, and you did a nice job of telling it. I also like how you used the prompt phrase.
I've done these 300 word FFs quite a bit, so I know how hard it is just to get a plot started, let alone a whole story with so few words to use. But you pulled this off quite well.
What's odd about this is just the other night I had a similar escapade with a possum of my own (only the 3rd time I've ever seen a possum in my life!), and it was also in the middle of the night. Fortunately, it was too lazy to go after my neighbor's cats though.
The spelling and grammar was flawless, and the whole piece read smoothly and naturally.
Kee ponw ritin gon, Greg, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of Diagnosis  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Happy New Year, Sue!
This isn't bad. I like the concept you used for this prompt phrase (mainly because I can relate to it so much! *Blush*), and you did a nice job of giving us some background on why Brian and Mary went to see the Doc. But the ending didn't seem complete, if you know what I mean. What WAS everything?
Don't get me wrong; you did a nice job with the dialogue and the spelling and grammar was flawless (thank you!), but that ambiguous ending left me wondering.
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a wonderful New Year!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there, Don Two!
As lifelong fan of Rocky and Bullwinkle, I thought this was pretty neat! I'm not sure what the prompt was for the contest, but this was definitely worthy of the co-victory! Congratulations!
I like how you used that famous comment of Rocky's, “Now here’s something you might really like!” But I never knew he was an only child! *Laugh*
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and...

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell

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Review of Foiled  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Season's greetings, Jim!
This isn't bad for a FF piece, although I was a little worried when I saw that it involved a TSA agent and a guy named Akmed!
I like how you did the dialogue, and the dialect you used for Akmed was perfect. Fortunately, I've only had to deal with TSA agents once or twice since 9/11, but I've seen some things on the news that show how much they can let slip through. I know it's a tough job with everything they have to deal with, so an oversized tube of toothpaste should indeed be cause for concern!
I'm just glad they were able to put their heads together and do that Vulcan mind meld! Spock must have been watching over them! *Laugh*
So I guess everybody got to 'live long and prosper' at the end, right? *Rolling*
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and...
PS-You've been MIA around here since July! I hope everything's OK!

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Review of My First Deer  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello there, Upper2!
This is a very well written piece about hunting and bagging your first deer, and it really is kind of bizarre.
I've only got one deer in my time, and that was also kind of bizarre. But it didn't compare to yours. The idea that after you went stomping through the woods the way you did, any deer within a 1/2 mile (I'd bet a MILE!) would still be around doesn't seem likely. But you somehow waited it out, only to end up shooting your brother's deer! *Shock* and *Laugh*
I've never hunted from a tree stand, and being from California we usually hunt with rifles, but the experience doesn't seem to be all that much different.
As I said, you did a great job of telling this! Heck, I was getting 'buck fever' just reading it!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, I hope to see you back here soon, and...

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