Maryann,
Thank you for sharing this first poem. It surely helped express the loss of dear Penelope. Your love, affection and appreciation for her is evident.
I am grateful you have continued to write all these years and I wish you the best as you celebrate 21 years on WDC!!
Write ON!
Debbie
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> offer. Sometimes I might find a bit of your work I thought that I might express feelings
> about. If it struck a chord etc. If there should be such an entry under 'EMOTIONAL
> CHORD STRUCK' that is just my feelings and not meant to hurt or take liberty with the
> author's work.
>
>
> TITLE: Perfectly tuned to the topic of these two acrostic poems.
>
> IMAGERY: Well done, imagery evoked memories and thoughts of music of various types.
> EMOTIONAL CHORD STRUCK:I love music, and especially piano, or keyboard music, this lifted my heart.
> SPELLING ERRORS: None noted.
>
> FLOW: Fine rhythm and flow in both poems, though I liked the sound on my ear of the rhyming poem best of the two.
>
> OVERALL: Nicely done acrostic poems!
Write On!
Deb
Here is a review for you as a part of our
"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Jubilee Raid! We are celebrating 15 years as a group!
DISCLAIMER: This comes to you as a reader would see your work. I have only my opinion to
> offer. Sometimes I might find a bit of your work I thought that I might express feelings
> about. If it struck a chord etc. If there should be such an entry under 'EMOTIONAL
> CHORD STRUCK' that is just my feelings and not meant to hurt or take liberty with the
> author's work.
>
>
> TITLE: FIts the subject of this poem to a "t" (for toad)
>
> IMAGERY: enthusiastic imagery flowed throughout this poem, I especially liked "her eyes got tall"
> EMOTIONAL CHORD STRUCK: This piece brought memories of joy over toads when I was a child. We caught them and played with them in our sand box, then released them. Happy memories!
>
> TONE: A bit whimsical and out there, this piece has an upbeat tone, suitable to such a discovery as a new species of toad.
> SPELLING ERRORS: none noted.
>
> FLOW: The rhytmn flowed well. Great rhyme and pacing to carry the reader.
>
> OVERALL: Quite an enjoyable poem, I am happy it popped up in read & review.
Write On!
Deb
Thank you, Netty,
This brief piece of encouraging challenge to continue in prayer and lean on the LORD every day of my life is appreciated.
Keep on writing and sharing and praising our God.
Deb
Hi, Dragon online,
I like your play on words in this brief poem.
I agree, it WOULD be nice.
I think you would enjoy the short film "Validated".
I suggest you check it out.
I also believe it would be nice to return to the golden rule, what do you think?
Please, do, Write ON!
Deb
This poem was recommended by WDC as I posted a poem I wrote about my precious grandkids. I am so glad I followed the suggestion and read it!
I am tearing up as I remember the smell and feel of a newborn grandchild!
Joy on earth. Hope in our arms.
Thank you for sharing this lovely poem.
It made me smile.
Write On!
Deb
I noted you had posted this little poem recently and am gratefully returning a review on it after your kind, thoughtful review of my poem.
The title is appropriate to the poem and yet there is a great variety in the poet's descriptions of his time with his love: in the moonlight, in the sun. He describes her power to cast away evil and to pick up his beating heart off the floor.
This "simple" love is powerful and amazing.
Surely it is a gift from God.
Write On!
Deb
Pony Tale, I have never before read a poem about a mare's nose. Therefore, I can't compare it to anything. Which is fine since this one of a kind poem deserves a category all its own. I truly enjoyed the imagery and subject.
Write on!
Deb
I love the idea of this poetry review forum. I hope it is still active. I sent a review request through the review system, it may expire before you can see it. If it does, I'll request the review through here.
Keep up the great work!
DISCLAIMER: This comes to you as a reader would see your work. I have only my opinion to
> offer. Sometimes I might find a bit of your work I thought that I might express feelings
> about. If it struck a chord etc. If there should be such an entry under 'EMOTIONAL
> CHORD STRUCK' that is just my feelings and not meant to hurt or take liberty with the
> author's work.
>
>
> TITLE: This fits the theme and content of the poem beautiful.
>
> IMAGERY: vivid images of agile feet came to mind as I read this piece
> EMOTIONAL CHORD STRUCK: Having a young granddaughter with spirited feet, I appreciated the thought of a grandmother prophesying the young dancers future. I smiled gently.
>
> TONE: straightforward with a touch of flounce, it was suitable to the subject.
> SPELLING ERRORS: none noted
>
> FLOW: smooth cadence to this reader's ear.
>
> OVERALL: well written and very appropriate to the assigned topic.
Write On!
Deb
Ned,
Just discovered your blog and find it newsy and bright in a friendly sort of way.
I appreciated your blog today about your cover photo.
It brought to mind "Gifts from the Sea" by Anne Morrow Lindbergh.
If you have not read it, I highly recommend it.
Write ON!
Deb
Hi, I am digesting my response to this poem...
"exquisite cuisine" holds some appeal to me, however,
I am confused by "intl" in the third line of this poem and it has caused me to
stop and ruminate as I chew my cud over what it may mean.
Overall, this poem develops a vivid image, and is apropos to the title.
Write on!
Deb
DISCLAIMER: This comes to you as a reader would see your work. I have only my opinion to
> offer. Sometimes I might find a bit of your work I thought that I might express feelings
> about. If it struck a chord etc. If there should be such an entry under 'EMOTIONAL
> CHORD STRUCK' that is just my feelings and not meant to hurt or take liberty with the
> author's work.
>
>
> TITLE: Spot on!
>
> IMAGERY: Very good, I see this precious pup and fall in love, too.
> EMOTIONAL CHORD STRUCK: I am moved by acts of kindness and compassion. Thank you for sharing this moment in time with the readers.
>
> TONE: Upbeat, hopeful.
> SPELLING ERRORS: I believe scrounge should be scroungy...?
>
> OVERALL: Well done, and
Write On!
Deb
Carol,
This is a lovely poem about Georgia and her smiles.
I especially liked the second stanza and her insistence that she is the first to find...
Childlike faith, awe, delight.
I relived it as I read this poem.
Thank you,
Write On!
Deb
I resonate with the poet, so the message has been felt by this reader:
No, it's not weird, this world is a different, unprecedented terrain.
Thank you for sharing and expressing what we are experiencing, and what, I hope, will one day be a memory which we no longer experience.
Write On!
Deb
Personal Impression: I feel the yearning to be in Maui to feel the air smell the waves see the beauty. You've taken me there. Tone & Mood: Gentle, flowing the words and images painting a serenity. Is there an undercurrent of sad? I can't quite tell. Rhyme, Form & Flow: Free verse, this piece flows with images and description, less rhyme. Emotional Impact: I feel the need of a deep breath and a pause as I read this piece. And it feels welcome. Grammar/Punctuation: No suggestions.
Reading this is painful. Painful like driving past the people begging on so many exit ramps. You have expressed the sad truth of poverty.
What do we do?
You have shone a light on lives trapped.
Now what?
The question echoes in my mind.
Bryan,
Thank you for sharing this brief sci-fi story. I was engrossed in the storyline and saddened by the ending. It is not unrealistic, though. We don't trust what we don't understand.
This piece could use a human proof-reader, do you mind a run through by me?
If you're ok with it, I can give you suggestions. If not, that's fine, too.
Keep sharing your stories. Creativity is evident in your writing.
Write On!
Deb
Jaiam, You've condensed to a fine point the message of Christmas: it is The Gift.
Thank you for sharing this short poem. I appreciated finding it and reading it as all around images of Christmas pop up, yet they lack the real meaning.
Thank you, and
Write On!
Deb
I appreciated your concise points about deeper writing. I must start with reading good writing.
I have been reading James Herriott for recreation, but find that his writing is deep, too, in that it points to the simpler aspects of life which are most important: hard work, relationships, relishing each day as the gift that it is.
Thank you for sharing this brief piece, I will be perusing further on your port.
Write on!
Deb
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This comes to you as a reader would see your work. I have only my opinion to
TITLE: Perfectly tuned to the topic of these two acrostic poems.
IMAGERY: Well done, imagery evoked memories and thoughts of music of various types.
EMOTIONAL CHORD STRUCK:I love music, and especially piano, or keyboard music, this lifted my heart.
SPELLING ERRORS: None noted.
FLOW: Fine rhythm and flow in both poems, though I liked the sound on my ear of the rhyming poem best of the two.
We are celebrating 15 years as a group!
TONE: A bit whimsical and out there, this piece has an upbeat tone, suitable to such a discovery as a new species of toad.
Personal Impression: I feel the yearning to be in Maui to feel the air smell the waves see the beauty. You've taken me there.
Tone & Mood: Gentle, flowing the words and images painting a serenity. Is there an undercurrent of sad? I can't quite tell.
Rhyme, Form & Flow: Free verse, this piece flows with images and description, less rhyme.
Emotional Impact: I feel the need of a deep breath and a pause as I read this piece. And it feels welcome.