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I provide a detailed review that focuses on flow, storyline, characters and how the story touched me emotionally. I do not focus on grammer or provide extensive line by line edits on longer pieces.
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Character development, emotional content, dialogue, plot.
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Horror, Dark, Action/Adventure, Thrillers, paranormal.
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Vampire, werewolves, stories based on video games, fan-fiction.
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Fiction short stories or chapters.
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Essays
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Erotica or really graphic 'slasher' type horror.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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A very fitting poem for the photo that accompanies it. I liked the rythm and changing images in this piece, together they held my interest well. I also enjoyed the changing mood of the poem as it moved into the middle and end, very well done !
All together, I felt this was an uplifting and happy poem that could effectively lift one's spirits on a weary day.
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Review of Starting Over  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am not familiar enough with this form of poetry to offer constructive advice - however I very much enjoyed the subject matter and philosophy of life portrayed in this piece. I felt the flow and rythm of the poem was smooth and the subject matter well thought out and well presented. An extremely enjoyable read for all ages.
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Review of Autumn  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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I appreciated the addition of an explanation of what a count down form of poetry entails.
The poem itself held my interest through it's clear images of a changing season. The writing is strong and tight throughout, with the correct form for this piece adhered to well. A touching and hauntingly vivid poem to read.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A very helpful article on a subject I myself have pondered many times. I particularlly appreciated the suggestion of donating to a reviewer's contest or charity and the one about sending a C-note. What a great way to brighten someone's day while showing appreciation for a job well done.
I felt that much thought and research went into this article on ways to reward good reviews with gps in various ways. I also felt the part about just sending a simple and heartfelt thank-you was an excellent suggestion, after all, everyone enjoys being reconized for a job well done.
I would highly recommend this article to everyone here at WDC, give it a read, it is a great inspiration for showing appreciation to reviews that you recieve.
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Review of Storm-story  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A strong and humourous opening. I can see this character clearly in my head. One very intense person ! You maintain pov well in this piece, there's no head hopping, we see and hear all the action and experiences through your pov characters eyes and thoughts.
I enjoyed the dramatic burst of action followed by the calm, rather reflective ending. A very entertaining read for such a short piece. It has a great flow to the story that manages to hold readers mezmerized and I'd love to see this character and her story fleshed out into a full length piece.
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Review of Special Delivery  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This story has a strong beginning and one gets a good idea of the main character's temperament and condition. The story has excellent detail that sets the mood and location for it's readers, one feels they are right there on the beach with the POV character.
The opening holds great promise of mystery and intrigue that has both taken place and is yet to come, the middle is interesting in it's detail. However, I found the ending didn't quite tie things together for me, but was actually a starting place for more conflict to arise, I definately feel this story would work well and be highly entertaining as a longer piece.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A very well crafted story. The opening paragraphs capture readers imaginations with a few well chosen words and by the time you read the equally mezmerizing ending, you'll be intrigued. Suspense and mystery pepper this story all the way through.
It is filled with strong details of everchanging and spectacular scenery, vivid and strong characterization. The main character's personality vibrates with life and you'll want to accompany her on her journey. I was instantly drawn to this person.
The middle of this piece is as finely crafted as the beginning, no lagging interest will trouble you here ! As you read along with Sarah in Saffron's amazing shop, your imagination will soar with possibilities. Nicely done !
A wonderful tale of suspense and paranormal that will leave you begging for more.
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Review of The Invisible Man  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This story starts with a wonderfully humourous look into the main character's life. From there, readers get an excellent look at how a child's perceptions and life experiences shape them into the adult they'll become. We also get a look at the importance of role models.
This story is rich in sensual details, touch, smell, sight, etc. and equally rich in it's emotional impact on the reader. The ending is a magnificent twist that brought tears to my eyes and will remain etched in my memory for a long time to come.
I highly recommend reading this story to anyone who is curious as to what ' makes a person who he is.'
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Review of Broken  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Your main character is well crafted and four dimensional. Readers feel they could share a cup of coffee with this character, he is so easy to relate to. The plot of his broken bones chronicling major events and changes in his life is both fresh and entertaining.
Readers get a deep look into Mile's temperament right from the opening paragraph and you maintain the tension well throughout the story with each new mishap. I particularly liked your well played hook at the end of paragraph one !
The mood and atmosphere in this piece is constant throughout as readers wait to see what will happen next in this man's life. Your ending was done with a wonderful touch of humour that let the reader walk away laughing and wondering what lay in store next for poor Miles ! It was very satisfying and tied up the story ends perfectly.
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Review of The pain within  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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This poem invokes a deep sense of hopelessness and melancholy in it's readers, one cannot help but empathize with the narrator. Your verses flow together well.
Your writing is strong and crisp, my only suggestions for improvement would be to capitilize the first letter in every word of the tittle and to add punctuation to two, I think two of the sentences could use commas to hold the style and rythm of the overall piece.
A very emotional and well thought out poem.
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Review of Solitude  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Your opening paragraph provides a great sense of location while building tension that hooked my interest immediately. I also enjoyed your use of short, descriptive paragraphs. They work very well to provide the reader maximum information without long, boring narratives. I felt this added immensely to this short stories charm and readability.
You provide a good sense of mood and atmosphere throughout this piece. Readers can relate and empathize with the POV character while using thier own imaginations to fill in blanks as to looks, age, etc. There is also an excellent use of internal dialogue that moves the story foreward.
The ending was both realistic and satisfying, tying up this short story in a most enjoyable manner.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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In general this poem had a smooth, readable flow to it. The subject was an unusual, but delightfully fresh topic for a humourous piece and worked quite well. It certainly held my attention, although I did get slightly confused about whom the narrator was talking to about ' inspecting' the predicament.
I did feel that Lines one and two in the last verse could use a bit of a polish, they read rather abruptly compared to the rest of the piece.
FAVORITE LINE;
" Be still my heart, or still you'll be" *Thumbsup*
FAVORITE VERSE: Hard choice, I have to choose One and Two with equal enthusiasum !
Overall, a delicious and macabre read !
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Review of The Pirate's Love  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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I really enjoyed your choice of subject and the words used to tell the pirate's story. You give an excellent, in-depth look into both the pirate and the woman who loved him. Despite the sad ending, this poem also inspires a sense of hope, that no matter how bad a person seems, somewhere they have qualities within that can inspire love in others.
I would have rated your poem higher, but I felt you needed to break it down into shorter sentences for each verse, perhaps four lines per stanza ? This would give your poem a better overall flow and create a breathing space for readers to gain it's full impact. You also need to do a slight polishing of your punctuation, I saw a couple of places where another comma would improve the rytm of your work.
You have a lovely strong writing voice and choose your words and thoughts to draw maximum responses from your readers, overall this is a poem I would highly recommend to others to read.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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This poem brings a smile to the reader's lips while providing excellent insight into the personality of the person it was written for. I felt it also gave us insight into the person who wrote the poem. One comes away feeling both are good, caring people with a deep, mutual respect and friendship for each other.
The poems verses flow together seamlessly as they tell the story of a caring friend , the bond between two people and give readers insight into Kiya's personality and how she chooses to live her life on a daily basis. An uplifting and joyful read.
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Review of Equilibrium  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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An excellent poem that speaks strongly of the need to balance light and dark - [ good and bad ] within ourselves and our lives. This poem makes one think, ' did I do everything possible to balance the bad with the good I accomplished today ? '
I liked the creativity and thought you put forth in the many different words you used for ' black.'
Although the idea behind your work is serious by nature,the flow and style of the writing makes for a light and enjoyable read.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I enjoyed the depth of emotions you invoke in readers in this poem. It has a nice, easy rythm to it that makes the piece an easy read. The questions and thoughts flow smoothly throughout, combining to take readers on a journey of love lost and it's regrets. There is some excellent imagery in this piece.

Two Favorites;
' And now all you have is memories and tears'
' Replaced by feelings of loneliness in the night'

My only suggestion would be to add some punctuation to give a better sense of pace. Perhaps commas after the first, third, fifth, etc. lines and periods after the second, fourth, sixth line, etc. [ Let question marks stand as is ]
A very enjoyable read.
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Review of A Lost Muse  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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A truly heartfelt poem that I am certain all writers can relate to. Your images and the emotional void this poem describes is well presented in a fresh and creative way.
I liked the use of a rhyming poem to get your message across as I feel it gives your reader time to ponder and feel the words along with you.
I could find no suggestions for improvement and would definately read more of this author's works.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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First, I would suggest capitilization of the first word in each line, and adding some puctuation, perhaps a comma after each line ? [ if this form of poem calls for different rules, my apologies, I'm unfamiliar withall forms. ]
I really liked your use of symbology through imagery that takes us through both a physical and spiritual rebirth of springtime.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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This is a thought provoking piece about how mental illness is often misunderstood.
I did think an adoption agency would have at least made an effort to make the girl's problem clear... did the mother simply choose to ignore or disbelieve thier advice ?
Your writing is very good in terms of pace and punctuation and has enough questions to hold reader interest. I did feel it would have a wider audience appeal if ' fleshed out' in parts. Examples;
I cannot truly ' see' the mother to relate strongly with her. What was the hole in her life ?
What were her husband's feelings on adopting this child? Eager ? Indifferent, did he try to warn it might be a mistake ?
I found this to be a compelling start to a novel that I would definately enjoy reading. Your last line was an excellent hook to make readers desire to turn the page to the next chapter.
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Review of The Snow Globe  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Your first line is a true attention grabber and I enjoyed the detail in the opening paragraphs. You've done a great job of setting time and location in a very few words. Same thing applies with your characters - they become immediately known to the reader in a three dimensional perspective. One can easily relate to Harry's plight !
Dialogue throughout this story is believable, enjoyable and your action tags move the story ahead well, while still showing the reader the relationship and personalities of your characters.
I like the detailed medical terminology, adds authenticity in spades, great research !
I did feel the words,' right now.' after ' dejavu thing.' were a bit redundant and could be deleted. Also, it's not quite clear why the doctor feels those particular patients and his dream are so strongly related ? [ that could just be me though.]
I like the use of short and long sentences in such an even mix to hold a quick tempo to this story. It allows readers to ponder and savor the story very well.
Your ending is well written and because of the frequent foreshadowing you've done through the piece, it ties it all together in a most satisfying manner. Your repeating use of what becomes the last sentence is particularly strong in it's impact.
I found this to be a vivid and compelling story with strong themes of hope and consequences. I definately recommend this story to others and will certainly be reading more of this author's work.
A Great Read ! cheers, dejavu
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Review of Traveling  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I found the imagery in this poem very vivid, the main character both normal, yet a trifle scary.
There is a strong, underlying theme of desire to break free from societies expectations and be a unigue individual with unlimited freedom of choice in life.
Punctuation and pace was well- maintained throughout the poem, however, I did feel it left the reader slightly breathless at the end of the read.
Your closing line was excellent, speaking of new possibilities and a hope for change.
Overall, an enjoyable, entertaining read.
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Review of The Glory Of War  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A poem rich in both imagery and wisdom. I found it so easy to relate to and get caught up in the message of frustration and sorrow this poem invoked, especially towards the end. [ I think it should be enforced reading for all politicians *Smile* ]
Punctuation and grammer appeared correct, the pace and flow of the poem were constant and evenly maintained throughout.
I would definately read more of this author's work.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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A very good poem that asks the question we all wonder when someone we love passes over. I liked the way this poem told the story of a young person growing up and thier life becoming too busy to connect as closely with family as was possible in thier youth, although the truth in this piece creates a deep sadness in the reader that it must be so.
I did feel that this poem would benefit from a little more punctuation, such as commas after the first few lines per verse and a period at the end of each verse. In my opinion, this would help to even out the flow and give more strength and impact to the piece overall by creating natural ' breathing' spaces for readers to pause and ponder the words.
I also felt your last line was a little long in comparison to the rythm of the overall piece and could possibly be edited into a slightly shorter line that used diferrent words to convey the same idea.
You have a strong writers voice and I enjoyed this poem very much.
dejavu
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Review of Mon Mari  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Inclusion of the note regarding the prompt that led to this poem was of great help in reviewing it. You did quite well in including two of the five senses, touch and smell. Your choice of imagery invoked both joy and sadness in this reader. A sense of renewal and triumph at the end was clearly displayed.
Your subject matter works perfectly with the chosen imagery. Lost love can feel very much like a winter of the soul. I felt readers of all types could easily and keenly relate to the images of winter and your ending portrayal of new love eqating with spring, bringing up feelings of renewal, freshness, release from darkness/ pain, to light/joy.
I truly enjoyed this poem and it's message of how important love is to a person's outlook on life.
Stay Creative ! dejavu
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Review of Who Me???  
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Rated: E | (4.0)


An interesting and entertaining poem that provides good insight into the person through the authors eyes. It has a nice, soothing flow to the entire piece. I am not familiar enough with the requirements of the proper structure of this type of poem to offer any helpful suggestions on improvement in it's style, however, from a general reader's point of view I found this poem enjoyable and easy to relate to.

Write On !
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