|This is a strong piece. Effective use of imagery for the event. I liked the psychological strategizing of the protagonist- the glimpse into his reasoning. The reader gets the horror of an evil act without the writer being over the top.
I do have a suggestion for making this even stronger: in the latter parts of the piece, a more active voice will make the images being presented even clearer if the helping verbs and participles are reduced. Here are some suggestions, and please understand this is just my opinion.
-Her eyes were staring, unblinking into the horizon, the traces of shock and pain still visible on her features.
Her eyes stared, unblinking.... The use of 'were' weakens the image
-He had a book of all of the evil schemes he'd had planned, and now they were useless. He had won, and how he regretted it. He had wanted to win, but at the same time, he didn't. All his meticulous plans were useless now, and the only woman he had ever loved...was killed by his own hand...
He possessed a book.........he planned, and now they were useless. He won, and how(now?) he regretted it. He wanted to win...... All his meticulous plans now useless. The only woman he ever loved... dead by his hand.
Getting rid of the 'has, have, was, were, etc and keeping the subject as close as possible to the action being performed makes the image stronger and improves the flow of the writing.
I really liked this piece, and am glad I came up on it in my search for something to read and review. I hope the suggestions are helpful, and thank you for sharing your work.