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Review by Diana Molino
Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
I liked the allusion to King Arthur but I got lost when you changed to your own story. That needs clarifying. It was an oops! What happened to the story??? If you meant that as a ending it lost me. Some explanation like "This is the end of one story and the beginning of my story." would help. Placed right after "That message rings familiar." and what happened to Sir Lancelot? Diana Molino.
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