|Hello Grum of Grums,
I came across this item in your port by way of a link somehow. This is so well written. We see a young boy enjoying his special spot and then as he becomes a teen, eventually as a man. He is entranced by the mermaid And bring the man he is, knows he must turn away. Mainly because he is wedded to another.
Yet time and circumstance and choices don't seem to be set imhbjim well.
This story resonated with other people and so they may empathize and understand their own choices in life, yet say why me? What did I do to deserve this?
It's oddly interesting that upon waking this early morning, this was the first story I read and so appropriate.
I had woken up talking, whispering rather, heartbroken for the love of my past, love of and saying those deepest feelings within my heart, words to him that he need to hear. He stayed there in my mind's existence listening without reaction.
I see an outpouring of deep emotion in your item. Painful as the events are, it's still rooted in such devotion and beauty.
When I read the final paragraph at first I thought he was going to drive off the cliff but he didn't. Such sadness he had.
The story descriptions were rich with imagery.
* Long sentence here yet it's easy to understand it.
He found it difficult to understand how he had become exposed to all the negative consequences of his actions, and sometimes, inactions, asking, as he was not a bad person, why did bad things have to happen to him? Had he explored this in any depth, it is possible he may have recognised how his choices led to his consequences, and thus he was responsible for his own behaviour
The only other thing I noticed which might need editing, is the numbers.
Forty three. I think it needs a hyphen forty-three.
There was one other number words that also needed a hyphen.
Regardless of that,I can't help but give this five stars mainly because of the expressive content.
Thank you so much for sharing.