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Review of Las Vegas Bound  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello J.E. Allen,

I just read your item and am here to do a review.

The title is appropriate to the content.

I liked how we see and hear what Justine is seeing and hearing. It makes it more immediate as if we are there, but then fog sidles in and gets worse. It's so bad that she can't see ahead of her.

Then things get weirder yet and poor Justine is in a panic.

Good imagery there and tension. We wonder what will happen next, but it's over before anything else happens.

And suddenly her car works fine, the fog disappears, and the only evidence of anything threatening happening is the handprints.

And so she got safely away, yet we're not sure what all of that was about.

I might add that I know that stretch of desert and have traveled it often. I especially like the little town where there's a huge outside thermometer standing higher than any building. You can see it from miles away in any direction as it's all flat land out there.

Yet, I don't ever remember seeing fog. Just dry dusty dirt and sporadic desert plants.

But this is a story so anything's possible.

I'd have given her a reason that was g out like that. Maybe a prescription side effect or maybe psychosis of some kind. To be honest,. I thought she'd crashed and people were trying to get in to help her but in her min she thought they were out to get her, but that wasn't it.

Good job overall regardless.

Happy Anniversary!

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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Odessa M,

I found this while browsing through WDC and just had to read it and review.

Oh those dogs. They can be mischievous. Oh what's that? A delicious trkey. Oh yes.

I find this 🏠 ghly amusing as I can remember my little dogs having that looked their ears pinned back, and averted eyes when I said, "Who did this? What did you do? Which if you did that? Tell me."

Of course neither did. The look they had was pretty sad so I left them alone. I just cleaned up the mess.

Later I realized they hadn't even done anything. It was a problem cause by something else. Oops.

Then I really felt bad.i just give them extra loving.

I like how we saw the mess through your words plus the looks on the dogs faces.

I bet they were sorry totally pigging out like that and eating Christmas dinner.

*Idea* The only thing I might have changed would be where you found the next sign of them getting into things and eating them. I would add a line space to separate the different things as it gives a feeling of time padding by.

Thanks for the read and laugh.
Well done.



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Review of Come Unto Me  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Spiritual Dawning,

I happen this see your portfolio while browsing in WDC. I'm here to read and review your item.

After viewing several, I couldn't decide which one, but finally chose this one for your anniversary review.

I'm not that experienced with poetry. I just know what I like when I see it.

In this item, it reveals the reassurance that the poet is strong and will be for someone specia. This means to protect and surround the lived one with thier love.

So sweet it is. This tender caring.

Formatting looks good.
Very expressive.
No spelling errors.

Good job on this. I hope to see more.

Happy Anniversary!
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Review of Is it Just Me?  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Simply Blue,

I'm here to read and review your item I found in your portfolio.

I liked the format of this item, plus the flow. While reading this we visualize what the writer has shared. Yes, that wind blowing through our hair, the feel of the sun's rays on our skin, the cool fresh air at the oceans edge.

But some childhood memories can also give a good feeling. I remember the lightning bugs twinkling like little moving stars. Where I live now has no lightning bugs.

It is simple pleasures that can brighten someone's day.

Thanks for sharing.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

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Review of I Used To Know  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Dream Believer,

I came across this poem in your portfolio. And so I will read and review it.

Title is appropriate to the content.

Format looks good.

Premise is one that so many people experience at some time or another.

These lines express the following for me.

It is a loss of a life partner,whether it be in death or divorce or separation of sine kind.

When things are going well or not at least you had each other, which matters most, but suddenly there's an empty space.

It also tends to question about who you are.
I liked this as it expresses how people do feel.

I used to know just who I was,
I used to know just where I stood,
I used to know just how I felt,
I used to know just what felt good.

Thanks for sharing.

Happy Anniversary!

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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Elby,

I just read Philosophy of Life. I think it's good to have a philosophy of life. It makes us who we are

At a younger age we might not have experienced enough to have a grasp on things in order to find it recognize our own.

So this item makes us think about it. To be honest I'm not too fond of the new technology because I think it makes for a lot of mischief because if ease of interaction. There are some people who aren't " user friendly" out there.

But thank God, there's some wonderful ones too.

Happy Anniversary!

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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello again Elby Wordsmith,

I'm here to give you another review because I found another piece I liked. The Meaning of life and Finding Yourself

I didn't see any spelling errors in this.

I liked the titles for each section you spoke about.

Boy, don't I try to change those parts of me I don't like, but it's not easy when other people are involved. I do try though. I find it difficult to forgive harsh people who keep doing rotten things concerning me or mine. I'm not going to be fake and pretend that I don't remember something. Forgiving is one thing, not remembering is another. It kind if makes me think of that movie title called Once bitten Twice Shy.

Thanks for sharing this.

Happy Anniversary.
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Review of Heart?  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Elby Wordsmith,

This poem speaks of a broken heart, yet we aren't sure how that came to be. Still the heart yearns and had hope for the heart to find long lasting love.

Well expressed and appropriate for Valentine's Day too.

Good job. Happy Anniversary.


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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow,

I found this item you wrote quite amusing. I needed a good laugh, especially after shedding tears from a well done sad story. Yes, although I don't know the person, I found my eyes were spilling over while reading it.

Dialogue is done well. We learn a lot from just this one interaction. I wonder how it could be continued. I did a story where I interacted with my thoughts/other voice. We kind of bounced off of each other.

Anyway, I 💕 the humorous interaction between these two people er...umm beings.

I think the robots name should be Mary Lou, as I know someone by that name and it reminds me of her, although the robot does seem more fun, so maybe not.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review of TEN LITTLE WORDS  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello S Spark,

I read your item about your mother. And I must be honest. I too hoped that it wasn't cancer. I believed your mother over her doctor. I think he was harsh but honest.


Still, my eyes misted up, my face felt hot, and I'm still sniffling. That's a sign of reading from a talented writer. One who could get me to tear up over someone I only know through your words.

Excellent presentation and expression.

Well done.

That being said, I will share a little too.

I lost my mother also, many years ago. It's kind of a long story. I might even have it in my port. I'm not sure. I think I did write about what lead up to it.

I guess I always thought she'd be around for longer than she was. I also lose track of time. The years roll by and even my pets lives seem cut way to short.

I can say this though. I was blessed to have them in my life. I can still remember those previous moments we shared and treasure.


I don't know how I found your item, but I'm glad I did. Thank you for sharing this.


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Review of A Taste of Honey  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello again W.D. Wilcox,


I noticed this new item about bees.

Wow, Pudui became their hive basically.

Aside from that, this item was written well. We see mounting tension as each event happens and it draws us closer to the fear, but then a sudden realization of the ultimate.

Good imagery and wording.

This sentence stood out for me.

Now Pudi was the last, and the shadows waited like a gathering of old friends.

How true it was.
Good job on this.


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Review of Strength  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello IE,

I just read your item called Strength.

It's a very interesting story. We see these two people united, then divided, and she deals with the everyday care of the children. It's both an honor and it can become tiresome, yet we still carry on,being the strong one, which maybe sometimes feel weak.

Four years is a long time. For sure.

Ah, the accident, what a horrible time that would be.

The one thing I did notice is tha you had her dialogue with his. In dialogue each person and actions go together. And you separate them from one another by using a line space.

Example here:

There’s my girl.”

Your arms are outstretched as you come around the side of the table. I back away, folding my arms over my chest.

“Am I?”

“Always were and always will be. Come sit.”

* I liked the he is trying. I saw no other errors in this.



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Review of The Suitor  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello AE Wilcox,

I read this slowly as I noticed it was very short, which usually means it's concise and every word draws us in. It says a lot in so few words. Yet they are meaningful ones. There's no doubting what's going on here.

The widow is a bit...what's the word? Fickle? Which makes me wonder. Do male spiders have testosterone? Haha

Either way, the widow is quite capable of being a serial killer for sure.


God, I hope I don't dream about this tonight. Hopefully, nothing crawls on me. Now you r inspired me to write a short true story.

I had that happen in a car. My fiance and I were traveling through some hills. He was driving this time.

It was a beautiful summer day. And we were enjoying the view of the terrain.

Something tickled my inner thigh. I screamed and started jumping around in my seat.

"What is it?" My driver asked. He pulled over, came around the car to help me.

I jerked the door open and jumped out, flipped my skirt several times, slapped my legs, and watched for anything crawling around. "A bee. I think it's a bee!"


Nothing, but dirt was at my feet.
"He must be in my top!." I yanked it off and twirled it around.

Thankfully, we were where there was rarely any drivers. No free strip tease show.


I looked toward the car. My son curiously watched through the window. If anyone laughed, I wouldn't have heard them with all my screaming and jumping around. All was well and I replaced my top, and got back in, and we were on our way.

Well done on this item. I didn't see any errors.

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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello JA Studio,

In your first paragraph, a story question arises. And that is: why is this place familiar to hi? As we read in we find outa little more.

The woman in the window longs for him and remembers. It is rather bittersweet for her.

I liked especially that one line where it says: rested her head gently against the crown glass, and let her fingers trail down to her side creating fresh streaks in the frost.


It's almost similar to her feelings. Sad, teary. Wet like rain. (good imagery)

And for him, he has a woman and child now so he only hesitates slightly.

Little does she know the depth of his feelings. I soppose that it might give her hope, possibly false hope.

Yet she will watch for him again aanyway. And wonder when her lol going will be sated, if at all.

So very sad.

Done well. And I saw no errors.

Thanks for sharing.

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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Jeff,

I saw this item in your portfolio and enjoyed reading this article about snail mail. You brought up some very good points in it.

In your first paragraph, the words "Where are you?" And "Why aren't you calling me back?" resonate with me. I have had experience with that. I will explain shortly.

The formatting in your item looks good. Nice line spacing and paragraphing

The thought process is explained well as we see the options we have concerning using this new technology versus the old fashioned way of communicating.

I created an item as a bit more of my response became long.

"Cell Phones, IMs and Snail Mail." 

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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Bren,

I'm here to wish you a blessed WDC Anniversary, but also to review your item.

This certainly feels real. The falling asleep, only to dream, which turns to a nightmare. Yet it's not quite the nightmarish situation when the woman wakes up to reality. She's alone.

Unfortunately, this happens way too often. It's bad enough that the husband died, but worse as she daily realises he's not coming back.

I hope this isn't real but if so realise that you are stronger than you realize and you will move through this in time and find some sense if peace again.

Thanks for sharing this.
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Review of Lockdown!  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Scott,

I'm here to review your item. I found this one and it looks interesting.

Right away we see the action and where this takes place. It has tension. It feels immediate and that's a good thing.

* The dialogue looks good.
* Events seem to happen in a logical order.
* Formatting looks okay too.

*Pencil*

Here it needs italics for his thoughts.

{I}He is really going to shoot me,{/I}John thought.

Here you changed the tense.
* but he heard it go off and felt excruciating pain in his shoulder.

*Idea*

The gun fired. Excruciating pain shot through his shoulder.

This was a good action scene but we need more toake it a story.
Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Innocence's Blood  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Dahlia Noir,

Hello. I dropped by to wish you a happy anniversary. Plus I wanted to review this item.

Goodness, poor Sarah was bullyed and shanmed by her own relatives. Her only ones.
That's bad because apparently so did her schoolmates.

The dialogue in this looks good except for the line spacing. Each person talking needs to be separated by a line space.

There's a sadness in this as it has ended someone's life.

I hope this didn't really happen.

Thanks for sharing
I hope you are well.

Happy 17th Anniversary!

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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Winn Storm,

This little piece is revealing as the verses show us an interaction and a promise of sorts, yet an untruth.

It's an almost perfect interaction, yet tainted by old wounds. There's a feeling of sadness.

Descriptive, emotional expression.
Thanks for sharing.

silvermoon

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Review of Jack's Beanstalk  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jeannie,


I just read your item called Jack's Beanstalk and I'm here to review it.

I liked how you were able to rhyme and also move to storeom forward.

Jack was worried that he did a bad thing when he traded the cow for some magic beans. I worried too

It created a little tension, but this added to the poem. Later we see he had made a good choice, but I still wondered about the cow, which I'll call Bessie for no real reason, although it seems like a good name for a cow.

;*)

Thanks for sharing this poem where things turn out good.

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Review of Living Haiku  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello My Shadow,

I'm here to review your item.

This piece is simple in both wording and design, and therefore easy to get nderstand.

It also has logical and useful advice. Basically it's a reminder, yet actually a positive affirmation that people should look at each day.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review of Eggplant  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Schnujo,

Since I'm currently kind of--I don't know, a bit "something". I can't think of the word. Maybe it's unsettled. Kind of a generalized lull in activity,and a tad sad. You know that uneasy feeling. Yet, you can't pinpoint any one particular thing that caused it.

I put in a DVD and then can't seem to pay attention. I pick up a book, and it's kind of like trying to eat something, but you're not really hungry.

Speaking of which your piece was done well and informative. I saw no errors.

I do like eggplant sometimes. Last thing I made was eggplant rollatimi. It was my first time. I guess I didn't let the salt settle in long enough on the eggplant I couldn't get those slices to roll up. I ended up layierig them flat like lasagna style with the ricotta and mozzarella. And topped with homemade, chunky, seasoned tomato sauce.
It turned out okay,guess. Especially the sauce. I do t think I'll be making that again anytime soon though, not unless someone will eat it with me.

Hopefully I won have to pay them to eat it and nothing bad happens.


I better dig some ditches in the back yard just in case anything wierd happens. Gotta hide the evidence. Hahaha

I think I'm safe, but you never know.



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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Schnujo,

I saw your item and decided to look closer.

I like how it's formatted and soon we are into this storeom. The piece moves along as we see this disharmony continue.

I totally get that part about how they'll laugh and cheer you on just so they can present themselves.


Yet when they don't need you, they will abruptly move on or show thier true colors. It's all fun and entertaining until they get bored.

Sometimes I think that being friends with them means they want something that you seem to have like say a shoulder to cry on, or common sense advice when they are troubled. I'm a good listener and empathetic, but too much of the same thing tends to get a person down. Worse yet is the one who is your friend only because you easily give free car rides. Soon as there's a car problem they disappear.

Well, even if we don't realise it, they've given us a gift. The gift is that now we see more clearly and don't have to put up with any of it, unless we want to. Except it's really a waste of time if people don't appreciate our time and efforts. But mostly they don't value our comraderie.

This last line says much--
But forgive them we must, for it’s our way
And when they need us, we too cannot stay

Thanks for the read.


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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Richard,

I'm here to read and review your item.

Ah, the scent of bread or cookies baking.

I like how you organized this to asy to understand recipe.

It's all done with preheating instructions and step by step and easy to follow.



I'm going to have to try these and hope mine come out looking like face like yours did in the pucture.

The only malted milk I know and sometimes can get is Ovaltine. It use to be popular years ago but I don't see it sold very often.

I think my oldest son would love these, but I really am not sure that he can have them. I never get to seeor hear from him. Rather than say more, I'll just leave it at that.

Thanks for this recipe.




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Review of Inside or Outside  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hey Max,

I told you I'd be haunting your port. Haha. I found this jewel.

I'm happily discovering and rediscovering the information you've provided in it.

This is excellent. Now I want to print it out and add it to my collection as a reminder.

Funny that when I read the part examples hat starts with: 'John hesitated in the hall for a tremulous breath, and his nose tingled with astringent...,

all I kept noticing was the sentence rhythm, and so I was glad when I later saw the edited version. Whew!

Regardless, you really showed the difference with imagery and action too.

Thanks for sharing.

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