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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love both the message of this poem, and the way you expressed it! "Thank you" is not often heard, or rather, not heard often enough in our rush to get things done, and get through our busy days and "to-do" lists. If only we each took the time to consider our words before we spoke them.

I especially like the way you ended:
"..For someone to hear that they did well.
Will bring a smile to someone’s face,
And in the end you get more, much more,
From friends you praise,
Than those you hurt."

Wonderfully done!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! What an experience you had! Your descripotions were so vivid, I felt I was there, pulling for you, watching the fear on your wife's face, and the concern on the doctors' faces.

Your conversation with Jesus is truly beautiful, and I admire your willingness to endure the pain for your family's benefit.

Excellent job!
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Review of Jonathan Michael  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is SO beautifully written! Your love for Jonathan is evident through out, as is his generous and gentle soul.

It reminds of my own son. He recently bought a condo and i am suffering from the dreaded EMpty Nester's Syndrome, so this was pleasing for me to read.
Beautifully done!

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Review of Relationships  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I like this piece a lot; I think ywou brougaht out some very good points--especially about every relationship ending in tears. Excellent point!

I also like the quote at the end.


One typo, though:
"Believe me when I say that I’ve been [in] good, bad, long, short..."

Other than that, nicely done!

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Review of A Christmas Fable  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A well -written story, cleverly told, although I must admit I was saddened/horrified at Claire's demise. But your sense of humor is evident throughout, and you kept me interested.

Great job!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wondeffully thought out, opresented, and written! I enjoyed each part of your essay; each time you included yet another way to access happiness, I thought, 'THIS is my favorite part!'

You have so eloquently stated my personal belief: that only you (generally speaking) can contol your moods.

Great job!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a well-written piece that packs a lot of emotion at an emotionsl time of year. You wrote is af you lived it.

Well done!

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Review of Postcards  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I absolutely LOVE this poem! You captured the emotions of a love lost but captured in old postcard pictures and messages!

I especially love:
"Nothing more is left my love
but the postcards in my hand.
I can barely look at them,
I hope you'll understand."

I know and understand that stanza so well.

Wonderfully done!

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Review of The Chicken Story  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is a great story that I enjoyed very much. I think you were very skillful in developing the story line up to the punch line!

There were two places where you forgot to punctuate..other than that, it was great!

"...you are never going to get any eggs from those chickens"

... I will have it for breakfast tomorrow morning"

Wonderfully done!

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Review of SPOT THE FAKE  
Rated: E | (4.5)
You wrote so convincingly about each item, that I'm still not sure which is the true story, and which is the fictional one.

Either way, they provided interesting reading, and could be the subjects of longer stories!

Nicely done!

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Review of Old One Ear  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a terrific story;, beautifully written, with wit, charm and humor. It is a clever story and I enjoyed every minute of it!

Thank you!

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Review of My name is Jabez  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like the story as you wrote it! I was introduced to the Prayer of jabez by a friend, several years ago, and I repeat it throughout the day.

You wrote this just as a Bible story and I likd the humor that you managed to insert into the story:
“ You’re back, my young friend. Did you forget another cold harsh answer you wanted to give me, or have you found the deed to the spot?”

Well done!

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Review of Sick Day  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a great piece! I enjoyed reading it, probably a lot more than you did when you experienced it firsthand!

My only suggestion is that if you are going to make a moral statement about never calling in sick unless you really are, I would remove the last statement as it takes away from the lesson learned.

Nicely done!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
It always stuns me how quickly things can change in life. You have captured that so very well here. I was brought in with your title, and was riveted by your story and the way you presented it.

I, too, have a disability. I had two spinal cord surgeries in 24 hours, which left me paralyzed from the shoulders down afterwards. That was a little more than 20 years ago. After many years of physical therapy, I can now walk with a walker.

I am proud of your accomplishments, and I am proud to know you!

Wonderfully done!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
As someone who has lived through comparable cirsumstances during Christmas, I can both empathize with your family's plight, as well as celebrate your happiness as a family together!

This is well written and heartfelt--just the kind of story that I find so inspirational!

Thank you!

Wonderfully done!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love poems and stories centered around Christmas and its message of hope, peace and goodwill. You prayer/poem covers all of these messages so wonderfully well!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is very helpful! I am planning on sending one of my stories in to a publisher. I have submitted stories online, but have been hesitant about sending it in to a publisher becuase of the query letter.

This covers all the issues that have prevented me from going forward.

Thank you for tackling this for me and others like me!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is so well written! I enjoyed every minute of it!

The characters are loveable and you describe them vividly!

Well done!

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Review of Beauty  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I enjoyed this story very much! I liked your description. in very short order, you brought the old woman to life for me. Nicely done!

Just one small omission:

"The grandchildren used [to] cringe and hide.."

Other than that, great job!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh, how I agree with you! I especially love your last sentence. Twenty years ago, spinal cord surgery left me with deficits in my hand function and walking ability. it took me many years and many tears to learn that it is we who control how we feel, nobody can do that for us.

Congratulations a lesson learned, and on a wonderful job of writing about it!
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Review of Bless This Land  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a wonderful tribute to our wonderful country! I like the way you blended prayer and poetry together; this was a unique and creative way to present your thoughtsd and feelings!

One small, typo (I make them all the time!):
count[r]y

Wonderfully done!

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Review of Every Single Day  
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonmderfully written poem; it reflects your faith in all you do. It is very powerful!

I especially like:
"
I need You every single day, as I work and as I play,
I'll keep His praises on my lips, forgetting not His blood that dripped,
And gushed, spilled and flowed, for all His people and world it showed,
A Divine, consuming, Passionate Love, that comes from God Almighty above."

Great!

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Review of Soften His Heart  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is SO beautifully written! It seems as though your friend's uncle can use all the love and forgiveness he can get..and he is getting every bit of it!

I think my favorite lines are:
We'll forgive the stinging words & hold our arms out wide,
We'll forget all the nastiness & all the times he lied."

Perfectly done!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is great! I've never tried to write an acrostic poem, but this one has me interested in at least trying! I also never seen one that is done on either end of the lines--terrific!

Beautiful sentiments, beautifully done!

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Review of Bob  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I LOVED this story! I love the concept of the story and your humor. It is quite funny to think that legal technicalities prevailed in olden times, too!

I especially like:
"Stephen shook his head in disbelief. "You’ve not heard of Excalibur, of King Arthur, of the Knights of the Round Table, of my cousin Merlin? Were you raised in a barn?"

Wonderful!

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